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Review of New Things  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Artemis

My Thoughts: This is a very interesting look at the afterlife. It's well done.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is when he tells her he saved her. I like that he included that he loved her.

My Suggestions: I would love to hear about his powers of resirection. That would be interesting. How did he do it?

I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello JC

My Thoughts: This is a good piece from a writing prompt. You included more than what the prompt stated. That's great.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the descriptions you include about the fish slapping against your side.

My Suggestions: Why can't you help decide if there will be marshmallaws?

I enjoyed reading this piece. Welcome to WdC and thanks for sharing.

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Review of REMEMBER  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Jada

My Thoughts: This is an interesting way to look at key moments in a life. It's very revealing.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the ending giving a look at the past and into the future to see where you're going.

My Suggestions: Maybe there could be more memories in the list. Maybe there could be ones about other people in life, so it doesn't feel so lonely. Best friend or first crush could work.

I enjoyed reading this. Welcome to WdC and thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Moarzjasac

My Thoughts: This is a lovely poem about storms and the clearing.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is opening the curtain of clouds. I've never heard it termed that way. It gives a nice picture in the poem.

My Suggestions: I didn't understand the sphere reference. What are the spheres?

I enjoyed the poem very much. Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Once for real  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello Lady

My Thoughts: This feels like a strong explanation of true love, with mention of the dream of perfect love and false love that is here one day and gone the next.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was explaining that people can't tell true love until they've experienced it. It makes it difficult for the dreamy girl ideas, but that's just the way it is.

My Suggestions: You used mold when I think you meant molded when you spoke of the cookie cutter.

Thank you for sharing this piece. I enjoyed it.

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Review of Exasper  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Dan

My Thoughts: This was an interesting poem about boat travel on a river.

My Favorite Part: I liked the realization that a boat was going to hit him and he should be alert.

My Suggestions: I didn't like the mystery of how the boat could catch up to his boat while tied to the anchor. It's like there is something pulling the anchor. It would be nice for more description of how it happened.

Thank you for sharing this piece.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello Dustin

My Thoughts: This is a grisly tale about kidnapping and murder.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the dried blood showing the passing of time.

My Suggestions: It would be nice if there was more of an explanation about the man pulling her across the floor by the rope. I wonder if he could speak.

This was an interesting read. Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Green With Envy  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello Elisa

My Thoughts: The thought of clorophil being a performance enhancing drug is intetesting. Making people turn green from it is very odd.

My Favorite Part: I liked how the coach pointed out the competition he had from a new comer.

My Suggestions: I would have wanted to see a little more explanation of how this new drug worked and turned people green.

I enjoyed reading this piece. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello MoonMoth

My Thoughts: This was a very interesting story about other worldly happenings.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the thought of the book being bound with human skin. That was an eerie detail to add.

My Suggestions: I would have liked to know how he was going to type up his report about the call. Does he write about Mary and the flaming curtain?

I enjoyed reading this piece. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hello Sugaree

My Thoughts: This is an interesting look into the life of a handicapped person with assistance.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is how she looks around at the items she does and doesn't recognize. It gives a unique look into the happenings she can't remember

My Suggestions: I think the name of the main character got changed by accident in the last paragraph.

I enjoyed reading this piece. Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Once upon a time  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Suraj

My Thoughts: This is a cute poem for children. I enjoyed the rhyming.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was that the witch's house had no tag. This seemed like an important fact. I guess the mailman didn't deliver anything to this witch.

My Suggestions: Perhaps mention some of the good things this witch did with her powers to demonstrate how good she was, other than only green grew around her house.

Thank you for the lovely poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello GE210

My Thoughts: This is a lovely story. It's interesting how she had trouble remembering the elements required.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was that she was dressed in pink. I think that added a nice touch to the story.

My Suggestions: I think there was a word missing somewhere in the middle, but I forgot to write it down.

I enjoyed the story in green. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Paige

My Thoughts: This is a lovely tribute to a special person in your life.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the very end where you say giving him a name fulfills your purpose in life. That's a very strong statement.

My Suggestions: Maybe you could give information about this person to more fully describe him as more than a person who was picked on because of his name.

I enjoyed reading this piece. Thanks for sharing your love for him.

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Review of Above The Clouds  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Harry

My Thoughts: This is a really great way to explain flight to someone who hasn't experienced it yet.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the description of the clouds looking like cotton candy. I also liked the description of the storm from above.

My Suggestions: It might be nice to put in some blank lines to break it up into chunks by topic. It's just an idea to emphasize the different segments.

This is a great topic. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of The Gift  
Review by Janine
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
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Hello Smith

My Thoughts: The ending sticks with me. It seems the power comes and goes now.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the kids deciding to play spin the bottle. That was a good add.

My Suggestions: It has some places where the phrasing could be changed. Try reading it out loud to see if you can hear the awkward places where changes can be made.

This was a unique storyline I haven't heard of before. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of The Briefcase  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Tom

My Thoughts: This is a good story with an interesting twist. Nice work.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was when he saw his reflection and started to realize who he was. That changed the story quite a bit and things started to be more clear.

My Suggestions: ...silently as whisper - I think it's missing an a, as in silently as a whisper. ...police hasn't arrived yet - I think you would expect more than one, so I would use haven't arrived yet. .
.the change was to much - This should be the change was too much.

I enjoyed reading this story. It's too bad it ended so tragically. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Introduction  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Midnight Wisteria

My Thoughts: This is a great idea for a story. I think you should write it.

My Favorite Part: I like that you mention Isis. It gives people a source of stories to think about and add your story into the mythology world.

My Suggestions: I struggled a little trying to figure out what was going on in thenmiddle, but I was back on track by the end.

It's fun to write about mythical beings. Enjoy writing this coming of age story. It sounds fun.

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Review of Comfort levels  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Flcomeau

My Thoughts: It's good to engage in self-refection and explore your writing life.

My Favorite Part: I liked the purple socks. Donny Osmond used to wear purple socks.

My Suggestions: I don't think you should use 2. I think it's better to use two. Have the larger numbers, but the small ones should be spelled out.

I enjoyed reading about your comfort level for writing and that you content yourself to make people smile. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Cloud Computing  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Hello Kapha

My Thoughts: This is an important concept to explain to people because it is so important. This is an excellent and current topic for writing.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was when you explained losing a computet doesn't mean losing data because it's backed up over the intetnet in cloud storage on othet servers. This is a key selling point, but companies do have their own network servers that allow for this type of storage on networked servers.

My Suggestions: The phrasing is awkward. It sounds like an English as a second language problem. I suggest reading it out loud in the hopes of hearing the awkward places in this piece of writing.

I enjoyed reading this piece of computer information. There are many people who would see advantages in this option. I'm not sure all companies will move to it because they want to keep their data in house behind.corporate firewalls. Thank you for sharing this.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Howler

My Thoughts: This is pretty good for an 8th grader. It sticks with me.

My Favorite Part: I like the noticing of items along the way, including things that can get under foot while running.

My Suggestions: Why would he be happy after seeing the sick birds overfilled with the algae?

Thanks for bringing me back to a younger age. I enjoyed reading this.

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Review of Skillful Writer  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Big Buzzard

My Thoughts: I like how you portray yourself as an uplifting and supportive person in your words and deeds.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was how you went through a list of different ways to write with tongue or pen. It made it fun.

My Suggestions: Cause should be 'Cause near the end of the poem to show the word because, rather than a cause to fight for.

I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing and for joining the review group. It's fun.

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Review of A Godly Affair  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Gaurav

My Thoughts: I am guessing you are from India. This is an interesting piece with concepts of worshipping frauds. I find this very interesting.

My Favorite Part: It's very sad, but having the Lord not know how to stop an epidemic of lies is very shocking.

My Suggestions: There are several places where the wording is awkward, but it could be due to English being a second language. I was able to understand the meaning and was able to finish the story.

The story line kept my attention throughout. I wanted to know how the story ended. Thank you for sharing this story.

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Review of Adelaide Oval  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello bubblegrum

My Thoughts: This is a great photo of part of Australia.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part of this is it changed my idea of Australia. I imagined much less greenery and not as high of a concentration of people. I expected more sparsely habitated areas.

My Suggestions: what city in Southrtn Australia is this? You're making me want to visit.

I enjoyed this photograph. Thanks for widening my idea of Australia. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of The Artist  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hello New Premium Member

My Thoughts: I love this story. It's wonderful how much power there is in this magical world that he brings to the rest of the people to see.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the ending when he runs to his love and his son in that other world he lives in.

My Suggestions: ...take my paintings to another galley - I think this should be gallery, instead of galley of a kitchen. ...but was more than that - I think you are missing an it for but it was more than that.

This was a very fun story to read because the pay off at the end of the story was so great. I love that he lives a double life. Thank you for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hello Prosperous Snow

My Thoughts: I really like this style of poem with the repeating lines in key positions. It helps the feel of the poem.

My Favorite Part: I like how the person seems frantic about their writing and their life. It seeps into the reader's subconsciousness.

My Suggestions: I think facet is a misspelling. I think it's supposed to be faucet. But spelling is not my strong point.

I truly enjoyed reading your poem about writing. It was fun. Thanks for sharing.

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