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Review of Green  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Connieann

My Thoughts: This is a lovely slice of nature. How fun?

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the mention of buttercups, which are yellow in this green poem
I thought that was a nice add.

My Suggestions: I want more. Can't there be another stanza about the animal life playing in the green?

I enjoyed reading this piece. I found it by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello Spiritguide

My Thoughts: This is quite a tangled web. The next chapters should be very intetesting.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is that the journal might be contraband.

My Suggestions: The explosion in her head was strange. I wish there was more explanation. Did he drug her or did she have a stroke?

I enjoyed reading this piece. I found it by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Life of Regret  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Ramon

My Thoughts: I like the happy ending to this tale. It's wonderful.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was him not being alone anymore. I'm a sucker for romance.

My Suggestions: ...could ever met should be could ever meet.

I didn't undetstand why he shouldn't be respected since he ended up actually being a person.

...booked up a flight should be booked a flight. Booked up sounds like slang.

...said that woman goodbye should be said goodbye to that woman.

The changes are up to you. I enjoyed reading this piece. I found it by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of HER  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Stuart

My Thoughts: This is a cute gag story. It was well played.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the smelling of her perfume, so he started running.

My Suggestions: Try adding a blank like between paragraphs and make a new paragraph for each new speaker.

...dude should be capitalized.

...people thought I loved her should be people thought, I loved her, because without the comma, it has a different meaning and it's confusing.

I enjoyed reading this tiny story. I found it by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Creature..  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello Tommy

My Thoughts: This is a cute gag story. It is very creative.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the gag line. It's great.

My Suggestions: I have a few suggestions. You should have a new paragraph when you change speakers.

David face should be David's face.

The creatures words should be The creature's words.

His Father said should be His father said, because capitalizing father here makes it sound like you're referring to God.

...and mind starting to go should be and his mind started to go.

The creature opened it's mouth should be The creature opened its mouth.

I enjoyed reading this tiny story with its great ending. I found this by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello Crystal

My Thoughts: What a story of cruelty. This is an awful thing to happen.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the netvousness going away.

My Suggestions: This story needs a little cleaning up. Try adding a blank line between paragraphs and start a new paragraph for every new speaker.

...principle should be principal - I was taught the principal is your pal to help with this word.

...nervously enter should be nervously entered.

...burst in laughter should be burst into laughter.

...every since that day should be ever since that day.

...and when home should be and went home.

...everybody starting throwing should be everybody started throwing.

"What you thought should be "What, you thought, with a comma after the what.

I enjoyed reading this story, even though it's a story of hatred. It's important to discuss things like this, so people will learn to be better people. I found this by using the random review tool. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Unexpected Lover  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Qwashiaa

My Thoughts: This is such an interesting look at a one sided break up.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the expectation of sex, not caring what was being said.

My Suggestions: ...I was to late should be I was too late, with the double o's.
..stated.My should have a space after the period. It would be nice if there was a blank line added between the paragraphs to make it easier to read.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Sardar

My Thoughts: This is a positive outlook packed into a poem.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is about the universe being round. It's like a reminder that things come around again.

My Suggestions: YOu should be You. I believe A through z.should be A through Z. I was heart broken when the stanza pattern was broken in the end with the two couplets.

I enjoyed reading this forward looking piece. I found it by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello Moarzjasac

My Thoughts: This is an intetesting look at the innocence of childhood.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the rainbow colors of the soap bubbles.

My Suggestions: You seem to struggle with seeing as a child sees, but don't you look with wonder at something new? Weren't computers and cell phones wonderous?

I enjoyed reading this poem. I'm hoping those kids don't grow up to be filled with hatred. I found this by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Princess Megan Rose

My Thoughts: This is a touching conversation with a cherished member of your family.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the great grandma knowing about the house and the grown son. I thought that was sweet.

My Suggestions: I wish there were more memories to share with the great grandma.

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Review of Enemy Territory  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello Carly

My Thoughts: The war zone concept came through loud and clear.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was when his guys recognized him. His prayers were answered.

My Suggestions: I wanted to know how he got separated from his unit.

I enjoyed reading this piece. I found it by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Ants Creasey

My Thoughts: This is very intetesting. It has nice images in it.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the first stanza discussing the pier. I like the worn wood.

My Suggestions: I know you said this is a rough draft. I'm wondering what he's planning to do and what he did to cause this situation. I'm just curious.

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Review by Janine
Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello War Machine Rocks

How well does "April Fool's Day" fit into the story? It was added appropriately and used well.

What's my favorite part? My favorite part is the shape of the poem. That took a lot of work.

How entertaining is the story? This poem/story had a fun aspect to it that made it entertaining.

Comments or suggestions: I think it says how when it should say who.

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Review of Be a Mud Buddy  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Leasha

My Thoughts: This is a very cute piece. I like it.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is when he goes over to the kids to join in on the fun. That's a big step for a kid.

My Suggestions: The word guy in the first line should be guys.

I enjoyed reading this. I found it by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Hello N M Barnes

My Thoughts: This is a powerful statement and does discuss a very real issue in today's society. Youare justified in your concern over the issue.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was how you mentioned the Washington area statistics. They are shocking and add to the strength of the piece.

My Suggestions: I have several issues with this piece of work.

It would be better if the quotes had separate paragraphs. The first paragraph buries the quote.

...and was informed should be were informed because it goes with you in the sentence.

Emotion in the first paragraph should be emotions since so many emotions were mentioned.

In the second paragraph, the an should be a since it refers to a plural noun following it.

Gun shoot it the third paragraph would sound better as gun shot.

Circumstances are, instead of is at the end of the third paragraph.

...some many should be so many. I believe this is in the fifth paragraph.

It almost unbearable should be it's almost unbearable.

...same simply terms doesn't make sense to me. I don't know what it should say.

...and them consuming should be and then consuming with an n.

...of15 needs a space between of and 15.

...pray (for) that day, (when) we


I did enjoy reading this piece of writing. It's an important topic to discuss. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Ruben's Retreat  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
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Hello DB1

My Thoughts: This is an interesting historical piece that shows how bad things can get.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the drunk inmates causing the ruckus.

My Suggestions: I found several issues in this piece.

Please add a blank line between paragraphs to make it easier to read.

Please make each person's speech be in its own paragraph.

There is an appostrophe after the word fire in the beginning of the story.

Streets and Streets should have the secon streets be lower case.

...raging City should be raging city with the lower case c.

The sentence about the fire in the city looking like a serpent needs to be rewritten. It's hard to understand the sentence the way it is. Try reading it outloud to see if you can hear what I'm saying.


I did enjoy reading this story. I'm glad you're working on your writing here. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Rakibul

My Thoughts: This is a look at another culture. It leads me to believe only certain people are allowed to take the test that leads to heaven on earth.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the fact that there are mistakes on the test itself. That's very interesting.

My Suggestions: ...if they get succeed this time would be better as if they have success this time. For those who are unfamiliar with this process of taking a test to get money, it would be nice to have some explanation of this concept.

I enjoyed reading this piece. Thank you for sharing.

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Review of CACODEMON  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello C. Spies

My Thoughts: This is a harsh look at cowards. It's intetesting that a helping hand is offered at the end.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the idea of the coward being scared of the monsteta, yet finding refuge by hiding behind them. It's such an odd image.

My Suggestions: It would be nice if there were an explanation of how the cowards hide behind the monsters.

I enjoyed reading this poem. Strong feelings came right through and are easy to read. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of bright lights  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hello War Machine Rocks

My Thoughts: This is an interesting poem about dealing with difficult situations.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the joy of how fun the game is.

My Suggestions: It would be nice if the title was capatalized. The word I should be capitalized. I think it would be nice if the first word of each line were capitalized. The word dought should be doubt.

I enjoyed reading this poem. Keep working on it to make it easier to understand.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Hello Daphne

My Thoughts: This story contained interesting images.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the disgust of animal furs, but I've never heard of squirrels being used for this purpose.

My Suggestions: I actually found this story very confusing in the beginning. I think I needed to understand the setting better and who this person speaking really is.

Thanks for sharing this. Keep writing.

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Review of Sense  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Brian

My Thoughts: This is an interesting look at the senses.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the sight section with all of the descriptions.

My Suggestions: Maybe the groupings of descriptions of each of the senses could each have the same number of lines. It's just a thought.

I enjoyed reading your story. Thanks for sharing.

Maybe you would like to enter a contest.

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Review of Prankster  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello D. NuMont

My Thoughts: This is an interesting April Fool's Day story. It's an interesting way to celebrate the day.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was helping the grandparents after a surgery.

My Suggestions: It's gruesome that the grandpa died in the end from a joke pen. Isn't there a better way to end it?

I did enjoy reading the story. Thanks for sharing.

Maybe you would like to enter into a contest.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Jessie

My Thoughts: This is a very raw thing to write. It carries a power with the weight of the words.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is realizing that you have come to the right place. You seem to want to write and you want friends and you feel left out.

My Suggestions: It seems like the end was cut off. It looks like a d and a period were left off of the ending.

You might want to join some groups to feel more included. You could also enter some contests for fun and great writing experience. Reviewing other people's writing also helps you feel more connected.

I found this by using the random review option. There is a link to the WDC Power Reviewers group listed below if you want to join that group. Thanks for sharing.

If you want to enter my contest, it might be fun.

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Review of Good-Bye  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Prosperous Snow

My Thoughts: This is a powerful poem done in very few words.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was how friendly the poem started sounding and how sour it ended. It was like taking a journey through the poem.

My Suggestions: There doesn't seem to be much room for it, but I wished for a hint at the reason for the breakup.

I enjoyed reading this very much and the introduction to this type of poem is also interesting. I like it. I found this with the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Blink once  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello D. NuMont

My Thoughts: This is a really scary story. The scariest part is the lie at the end.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was him figuring out what happened, so he was a little coherent.

My Suggestions: I think the guy lying was just awful. I would have liked a happier ending.

I did enjoy reading the story. I found it by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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