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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello QueenOwl

My Thoughts: This is a culture I'm not familiar with. I was amazed the children would play in the street in the nude. And then to find out they played sports games barefoot and in the nude was even more amazing. Pardon my shock.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was how interested the husband was in the wife's thoughts. It gave me a good feeling.

My Suggestions: I'm sorry, but I couldn't figure out the game. It might be that it's just difficult to explain or that I lost concentration. I think the offense and defense got tangled at some point and I didn't understand where they were and were not allowed to go.

Thanks for sharing this culture. It's very intetesting to learn about things so different.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (2.5)
Hello Konata

My Thoughts: My thoughts on this piece are all over the place. I get the scary yellow slit eyes being the focus, but I'm lost on the rest of the story.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the older brother being there for the younger brother. That was sweet.

My Suggestions: Maybe you could read it again and possibly modify or add more. I didn't see how the note made sense with the story other than for the age. I had trouble following the story because it sounded like an adult, so I thought maybe it was a flash back. It's your story and you can do as you wish. Maybe I'm not the average reader and someone else would get more put of it.

Thank you for sharing. I found this story by using the random review option.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Quiet Crusader

My Thoughts: This is a nice tribute to a caregiver from your youth. It's good to collect important memories in writing. Maybe it will help make you feel better to write out the loneliness.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is that you had a kind person to help raise you.

My Suggestions: I got confused by the beaming you up part and the description of the city hall. Maybe I missed the sci fi part to the story.

I enjoyed reading this memory in writing. I found this piece by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Pissed  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello Sandra Lynn

My Thoughts: I thought this piece took courage to write and it also felt like some of your anger might have been left on the page. This is my hope for you. I hope writing helps you deal with this very difficult time.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is that you finally found a doctor who cared. I'm happy you have an answer, but I'm sad about the answer.

My Suggestions: You're missing blank lines between some of your paragraphs, but they are there between others. It's inconsistent.

Thank you for sharing this part of your life. I'm so sorry you have this burdon in your life. I hope you can find peace, so you're not so angry, but I understand the anger. I hope things will somehow get better for you.

I found this piece of writing by using the random review option.

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Review of My Story  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello Leigh

My Thoughts: This is an interesting look at depression and working to move past it. I think it's an important topic to cover.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the light at the end of the tunnel that gives hope to people who suffer from depression.

My Suggestions: There are some issues I found with wrong word choices.

...its in the first line should be it's.

The sentences in the first paragraph need work. You have broken up one sentence and joined it to another sentence. Try reading it out loud to see if you can catch it.

...its is misused again in the first paragraph and should be it's for it is instead of showing possession.

...your in the second paragraph should be you're for you are.

...were in the fourth paragraph should be where.

Here goes feels better as Here it goes... It's up to you.

I did enjoy reading this piece of writing. It did make me want to read more. I found this by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Egg Man

My Thoughts: This is an interesting poem about loneliness, if I'm correct.

My Favorite Part: I like the listing of places visited in the day. It made this life sound a little exciting and cheered up the poem.

My Suggestions: I guess I missed it... What mistakes were made? Looking unappealing?

I enjoyed reading this poem. I found it by looking to read something by a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Just In  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Lauryn Rose

My Thoughts: I felt like this poem was a series of news items because of the repeating lines of Just in. It sounded like what a news anchor would say.

My Favorite Part: I liked the part about the bird being urged to fly away from the hunter cat. That was good.

My Suggestions: It looked like there was a blank line missing to separate two of the stanzas near the top, but you will have to be the judge.

I enjoyed reading this poem. I found it by looking to read something by a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Dale

My Thoughts: I thought this was a good dramatization of dealing with exercise for an overweight man.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the wifely encouragement with promises of treats to be bestowed upon you for your efforts. That seemed to do the trick.

My Suggestions: There's some punctuation missing here and there with a missing quotation mark and a missing period inside a quote. I think the word feel near the end was meant to be fell, but you'll have to check it out yourself.

I enjoyed reading this story. I found it by looking for something to read by a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello DBMacks

My Thoughts: This is a really fun piece of writing about how the Writer's Brain is completely different from everyone else's brains.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the explanation of what happens when a writer gets an idea and wants to start writing down. The twitching fingers is a great add.

My Suggestions: I think this would be easier to read if there was a blank line between paragraphs.

I really enjoyed reading this piece. It's now one of my favorite pieces on WDC. I found it because it was recommended on a newsletter that just came out. I think it was the newbie newsletter. Try my contest: "Invalid Item" 

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Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello Ethan

Use of prompt: The prompt was used throughout the story. It was supposedly all a bad idea.

Overall impression: I enjoyed the closeness of the couple and the older brother. It made things seem special.

Favorite part: My favorite part was the excitement of them having their first time together.

Comment or suggestion: Maybe there could have been more of a hint about what the possibilities were for this visitor from the city.

I enjoyed reading the trio of stories and I liked this one best. Thanks for sharing with me.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello Ethan

Use of prompt: The prompt was well used as a line of the story.

Overall impression: This was a difficult reveal of a hidden identity in front of long time friends.

Favorite part: My favorite part was that Ri accepted Lexi in his newly revealed identity as the petson he loved. That was touching.

Comment or suggestion: This is an interesting trio of stories that fit into a larger story. I jad wished Ri had been supportive throughout, bit I guess he felt betrayed that Lex had not been honest with him.

I enjoyed reading the story. It was well done.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello Ethan

Use of prompt: The prompt was well used.

Overall impression: This made for a good good-bye scene, but turned into a moving forward together theme that was very nice.

Favorite part: My favorite part was that they got married and began their new life together with the trip to the city.

Comment or suggestion: It was a little uncomfortable when Lex didn't even think about bringing Ri with him. It's good Ri proposed.

I enjoyed reading this story. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of lunar tutelage  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello Kristoff

My Thoughts: This was a very interesting look at a cult event and its effects on you.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was that you were okay at the end of it, since it seemed so bad during the ceremony.

My Suggestions: There was a blank line missing between two of the paragraphs and some other issues.

...a email should be an email.

...has if I had been should be as if I had been.

...wondered around should be wandered around.

...unspeakable old should probably be unspeakably old.

...a odd brownish should be an old brownish.

...where formations should be were formations.

...with out should be without.

...one if higher should probably be one of higher.

...vase night sky should be vast night sky.

I don't know what you meant by using the word bots.

I enjoyed reading this story. I found it by looking for something written by a newbie. Welcome to WDC. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of SEDUCTION  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello D I Harrison

My Thoughts: It's an interesting look at friends with benefits in a poem.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the magic of making those moans happen. That sounds like good magic.

My Suggestions: Maybe the stanzas could be the same length and maybe there could be a hint at a deeper relationship in the future.

I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it by looking for something written by a newbie. Welcome to WDC. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Time-Zoned!!  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Uday Kanth

My Thoughts: This is an intetesting story about how computing is supported world-wide these days.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the explanation of how customer service is what runs companies. It seemed to be a new concept for the scheduler.

My Suggestions: It would have been great if the scheduler had a contact in Great Britain to make sure of the time schedules.

I enjoyed reading this story. I found it by looking to read something from a newbie. Welcome to WDC. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of The Window  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Alison

My Thoughts: This is an interesting piece of writing based on a writing prompt.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the person looking out of the window as the bus left.

My Suggestions: Maybe there could be more description of the scene, instead of it having nothing remarkable.

I enjoyed reading this piece of writing. I found it by looking to read something written by a newbie. Welcome to WDC. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of A Good Day  
Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Charleen

My Thoughts: This poem is an interesting tribute to someone loved.

My Favorite Part: I liked how finding the penny and picking it up made your day because of an old memory.

My Suggestions: There's an extra space between the quotation mark and the word Sure.

I enjoyed reading this poem. I found it by looking for something to read by a newbie. Welcome to WDC. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Hello Corvo

My Thoughts: This is an interesting look at the world of religion.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the warning at the top, so no one can say they weren't warned.

My Suggestions: You referred to the Adam, but not the Eve. I think it has to be with or without the word the, not both. It seems inconsistent.

I enjoyed reading this piece. I found it by looking for something to read by a newbie. Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy yourself here.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Kawika

My Thoughts: This is an interesting poem aboit yhe struggles of what to write.

My Favorite Part: I like the idea of getting up an hour early so you have time to write. That's a great idea. Othets do the same.

My Suggestions: I'm not used to the use of the word doff, so it threw me out of the moment. I guess you're going to fight writer's block by writing about your dreams.

I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it by looking for something written by a newbie. Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy yourself here.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Winter

My Thoughts: This is an interesting look at different kinds of damage to a person and what causes it.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the concept that emotional pain is worse than physical pain. Many people agree with this thought.

My Suggestions: Maybe the stanzas could be of the same length, unless the irregularity was what you were going for.

I enjoyed reading this emotional poem. I found it by looking to read something from a newbie. Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy yourself here.

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Review of Master's assault.  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
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Hello Poppy

My Thoughts: This is an intetesting story about a master slave relationship.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the use of the safe word when needed and how it had worked well.

My Suggestions: This is going to take as long as it needs to for Master, instead of what you have. There are other ways to modify the sentence so it makes sense.

...whispered, instead of whipered.

...allowed the privelege, instead of allowed he privelege.

I enjoyed reading your story. I found it by looking for something written by a newbie. Welcome to WDC. I hope you enjoy yourself here. There's lots to do.

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Review of The Magic Place  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello Ethan

Use of prompt: The prompt was very well used in this murder/abduction mystery.

Overall impression: This was a well-written story that could fill an entire book. This could be the teaser for the book. It's that good.

Favorite part: My favorite part is how generations are involved with this adventure. I love how this place is called real life.

Comment or suggestion: Near the beginning you wrote years when I think you meant tears.

I enjoyed reading this very much. Please enter the contest again. "Invalid Item" 

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello A W

Use of prompt: This was a very good use of the prompt. Good job.

Overall impression: This is such a sad story. It's important to bring things like this to light.

Favorite part: My favorite part was that he forgot about everything for a while to feel the feeling of being in love.

Comment or suggestion: There must have been a way to make it work out... I'm a hopeless romantic.

Thank you for entering the contest. I enjoyed reading this very much.

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Review by Janine
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello Mew Mew

My Thoughts: This is an interesting look at the life of a mistress.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the repeating lines underscoring the frustration.

My Suggestions: I wish the mistress would just see things as they are and just enjoy the moments she has instead of wishing for things that aren't going to happen.

I enjoyed reading this poem. This review is part of a WDC Power Reviewer Raid. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Holding His Hand  
Review by Janine
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello Chels

My Thoughts: This is an interesting story about the end of a life.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the passionate kiss. It's too bad it came so late in the relationship.

My Suggestions: It almost sounded like a repeated cry out after the kiss. Maybe the wording could be done in a different way so it doesn't seem repetative.

I enjoyed reading this story. This review is part of a WDC Power Reviewets Raid. Thanks for sharing.

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