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Review of No Time To Scream  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello Angus

My Thoughts: This is very gruesome. It gives a feel of what's going on from different perspectives.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was that the person who called the cops was targeted. He should have known better.

My Suggestions: I wished there was more of an explanation of why he was in such a bad condition and had to have more fat. I didn't understand the situation, unless maybe he's homeless.

Final Thoughts: Thanks for sharing this different piece of writing.

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Review of My Master  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
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Hello Sinbad

My Thoughts: This is an interesting look at a way to live a life. It sounds good.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is liberty leading to love. I really like that freedom brings love. It just feels good.

My Suggestions: I don't understand our us right near the beginning. I can't tell if it's a typo or just a phrase I don't understand.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed the thoughts this piece of writing evokes. Keep working on it and possibly add to it to flesh it out. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of High anxiety  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Drifter

My Thoughts: I was interested to read about the stress of preparing a sermon, as I know nothing about it.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the micro managing check list of to-do items. I agree this is something that works well in many situations.

My Suggestions: There were a few spots that felt like they needed rewording, lile where you mention micro managing. But I felt the overall intent was to write the anxiety out of you, so this was probably not your main focus.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading what you had to say about the preparation needed for your speaking engagement, which could be another way to describe your event. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Our Welcome Mat  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Marylou4

My Thoughts: What a warm and friendly poem this is. Great job.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was leaving the troubles of the outside outside.

My Suggestions: I think it would be great to break it into stanzas, but that's your choice.

Final Thoughts: I liked reading this poem of open welcoming. It says a lot about you. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of The lighten path  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello W.M.R.

My Thoughts: This is a nice poem. I got more out of it the second time through. I believe the light refers to a spiritual path. Feel free to tell me I'm off base.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the caution that perhaps it was the wrong lighted path.

My Suggestions: I like it when each line is capitalized, but that is a matter of personal choice.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this cautionary and hopeful poem. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Greed  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

Hello John

My Thoughts: This was an interesting story about greed and karma.

My Favorite Part: I liked that the old man got to have the last laugh.

My Suggestions: The very end talking about the rocket going on forever seemed odd because it would run out of fuel, but maybe it's supposed to continue on after the fuel is gone.

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story. I found it by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hello Amay

My Thoughts: This is beautiful. It fills me with happiness to read about your amazing wedding adventure.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was having the wedding in the butterfly garden. It just sounds so romantic.

My Suggestions: I would love to see some kind of comments about what the groom said about everything, but it's also great from just your perspective.

Final Thoughts: I'm happy I found this with the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this a lot. I just wanted to let you know how sweet it is. Thanks for sharing.
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Review of identity  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This is very interesting. I think you have an issue with copying and pasting into the item. I'm reading this on a smartphone and there are line breaks all over the place. It might be hard for you to see on a regular computer screen. Are you pressing return at the end of each line? Let the text flow from one line to the next on its own if you are. Keep on bringing your writing here.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello J.R.

My Thoughts: You have my attention. This is like a tease and it works. I bet the rest of the story is very interesting.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the reference to Astrology being from a far off time in the past. It totally changed my thoughts about the story to think of a time when people don't know about lions as the king of the jungle.

My Suggestions: I think couple quick should be couple of quick.

I wanted to see a better description of the booths in the room. I first thought they were facing outside windows, but then I thought they might be in the center of the room, possibly in a circle facing each other with the windows for the booths in the center. Could you describe how they are arranged?

Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this piece. I found it by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Science Be Damned  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Mfsalminen

My Thoughts: This is a very interesting look at mental illnesses. It takes a lot to share these thoughts.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is that you seem to be headed in a different direction now and seem to feel better than before when you were jailed and wanted to kill yourself.

My Suggestions: My understanding is being psychotic is a dangerous srate of being and could be dangerous to others. It seems like more than one mental illness is being discussed as a single illness. So this was confusing to me.

I enjoyed reading this piece of writing. It was nice that it included personal experiences and research material. I found this by looking to read a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of first story  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Hello Double Team

My Thoughts: This is adorable. I'm so happy the two of you are working on posting your writing for reviews.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is that you figured out how to get your writing publicly posted on Wrinting.com. Welcome to the writing community.

My Suggestions: My suggestion is for you to make up a story between the two of you and post it for review. You also might want to think about each of you getting accounts to post your writing on its own, unless you only write as a team.

I enjoyed reading this snippet of writing. I found it by looking for something to read by a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of My dog  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Aleesha

My Thoughts: This is a cute poem and it's impressive that it was written at age seven.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the dogs like treats and meat.

My Suggestions: You did such a good job with the rhymes. Maybe there could be more added to this poem to help us get to know the dogs better.

I enjoyed reading this poem. I found it by looking for something to read by a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of FLYING BLIND  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello O'Donovan

My Thoughts: This appears to be a poem celebrating life and encouraging people to live a good life filled with love.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the rhyme you pulled together. I like how each stanza is it's own world with its own rhyme. That added a real punch to the poem.

My Suggestions: I guess I wanted another stanza to show why we should like our time here on Earth so much. What does this world have to offer?

I enjoyed reading this poem. It made me smile. I found it by looking to read a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Janine Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Pratheek

My Thoughts: This is an interesting comment on a mathemetician who had mental health issues.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is that you challenge the reader to use his or her intelect well, rather to let it go to waste. That's good advice.

My Suggestions: It would be great if you could add a blank space between paragraphs to make this easier to read. Its in the last paragraph should be it's. It is used several times in that paragraph.

I enjoyed reading this. It reminded me of the movie A Beautiful Mind. I don't remember if it was about the same person or not, but it was a stunning movie that stuck with me. I found this piece of writing by wanting to read a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of La Bella Rosa  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Twin Martiana

My Thoughts: This feels like a tribute to someone many people knew.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is that the woman who died was the one who continues to smile.

My Suggestions: I struggle to understand parts of this poem. I became unclear on whether she was well-liked or not. It does show how people can be rude and less than respectable at times.

I enjoyed reading this piece. I found it by wanting to read a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello WriteToExpress

My Thoughts: This is a cute poem about memories and dreams.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the memorial marker at the end of the poem.

My Suggestions: I would like to see the poem broken into stanzas, but that is a matter of personal choics.

I enjoyed reading this poem. I think it's a great idea to think of the lost memories. I found this poem by looking to read a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Lost  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello TrulyJenna

My Thoughts: This is an interesting poem about lost love. It's very sad.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the beginning when you spoke about how wonderful it was.

My Suggestions: I think it might be nice for each line of the poem to be capitalized, but that's a matter of preference.

I feel like the poem ended abruptly, like it was missing a word.

I enjoyed reading this poem very much. I found this by looking to read a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Dark Night  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Hello Freak

My Thoughts: This is a very interesting dreamscape. It feels very real to life.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the black figure was you and that prompted the question about being afraid of yourself.

My Suggestions: Silence instead of silent near the beginning.

Began instead of begon in several places


Sotpped should be stopped


Noone should be no one in two words.

An other should be another in one word.

Finaly should be finally.

There are several wording issues that make it a rough read. Try reading it out loud to hear these issues.

Try leaving a blank line between paragraphs to make it easier to read.

You don't need a space between the words and the question marks and the exclamation points

The punctuation and missing words near the quotations need work.

I did like the story. It just needs to be cleaned up a bit. I found this story by looking to read a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Hello Cookiebaby

My Thoughts: It's so wonderful that you have such a bond with your pet cat. I was raised with the thought that pets are people and they are a part of the family.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part is that the cat missed being with you so much that she cried. My mom told me that brred sound like a baby crying when they meow.

My Suggestions: The word as at the beginning of the paragraph needs to be capitalized. There is a period missing at the end of a paragraph and there are some mistakes with words, such as using grown instead of grow out of it.

I enjoyed reading this very much. I found it by looking to read a newbie. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Age and Wisdom  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello HuntersMoon

My Thoughts: This is an interesting poem about trying to understand life.

My Favorite Part: I thought the repeating lines worked well to add to the emphasis of it in the poem.

My Suggestions: I have no suggestions.

I enjoyed reading this poem searching for meaning. It made me feel good to read it. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Why?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Lynda

My Thoughts: This is a very moving account of what can happen in an overdose situation.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the mom hugging her daughter to try to bring her back to her.

My Suggestions: I don't have any suggestions.

I very much enjoyed reading this because it felt like you invited people into a personal moment in life. Thanks for sharing.

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hello Rendelgrisn

My Thoughts: This is a good lok at college life from the perspective of a geek who struggles to fit in with others.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the attempts to meet and greet people on the first day of class, hoping for the best. That shows she really wants to fit in with others.

My Suggestions: I wished the ending wasn't so glum. I had hoped she would find another geek to be friends with at college.

I enjoyed reading this story. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Thank You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Shana

My Thoughts: This is a very difficult thing to write. It shows inner strength.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the need to say thank you as a way to have some sort of closure.

My Suggestions: It would be nice if there were some more positive memories shown as a balance.

I enjoyed reading this piece of writing. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Chapter 2  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello Shana

My Thoughts: This is an interesting look at school life for a newly disabled student. It makes me wonder what she'll do once she graduates.

My Favorite Part: My favorite part was that she learned how to carry hwr own cafeteria tray to the table.

My Suggestions: I just wish that she did still have friends. The story seems so sad.

I enjoyed reading this story. Thanks for sharing.

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