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I believe in constructive criticism and honesty. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., developmental suggestions, fine-tuning, proofreading, etc.), but will always try to be as encouraging and helpful as possible.
I'm good at...
Plotting, characterization, dialogue, structure/pacing, and professional considerations. I can also do serviceable technical editing/proofreading, but I'm much better with developmental/creative feedback.
Favorite Genres
I read almost everything. I particularly love genre fiction (mystery/thriller and science fiction/fantasy especially) and nonfiction of all kinds.
Public Reviews
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Review of The Stranger  
Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there,

I found this item while browsing through the mystery genre on Writing.Com. It would be my pleasure to feature this in the next upcoming issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe
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Review of The Kingdom  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there,

I found this item while browsing through the mystery genre on Writing.Com. It would be my pleasure to feature this in the next upcoming issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe
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Review of Scooby-Doo Sequel  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there,

I noticed your request to have this item featured in the Official Mystery Newsletter. It would be my pleasure to feature this in next week's newsletter. I hope it brings you the publicity, feedback and participation that you're looking for.

Happy holidays,


SoCalScribe
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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Legerdemain -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Beautiful imagery. Your anthropomorphic snowflakes were a joy to read. The writing was elegant and sophisticated, and you created a vivid, grand scene with your words. Excellent!


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* I wish I had something to suggest for improvement, but I loved this piece just the way it is. *Smile*


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Great item! I'm so glad it was featured in this week's Simply Positive weekly reviews. It was a joy to read.


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi fyn -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration as part of the "The Official Mod Review Blitz!" . Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Check* Very informative. I learned a whole lot about salt that I never knew before. *Smile*

*Check* Well structured. This essay was easy to follow, clear and concise. It was very well written and convincing.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*X* The only slight suggestion I had would be to - if possible - have the title be a more direct phrase (or play on a phrase) related to salt.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, this was an excellent piece of writing. Thoroughly enjoyable, educational, and entertaining. Great job!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)

Hi Davy Kraken -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration as part of the "The Official Mod Review Blitz!" . Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Check* An excellent overview of science fiction and fantasy. I particularly like the fact that you differentiated the two genres, but also highlighted their similarities. It can be difficult to define so broad a genre, but you did a great job.

*Check* Great structure. This essay was particularly well presented. It flowed easily from one paragraph to the next, and you made your point eloquently and concisely.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*X* While the example of Swift's classic Gulliver's Travels was well reasoned and well presented, I was hoping for a few more examples... the fantasy genre - especially when considering science fiction as a part of the genre - is such an extensive source of classic stories and famous works, I was hoping for a few more examples of successful genre works that comment upon our daily lives.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really enjoyed this essay. As a fan of the fantasy genre (in all its forms), I thought you did a great job explaining it and presenting it to an audience who can appreciate the information and insights whether they're longtime fans of the genre or just now starting to delve into it. *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of WAITING FOR LEFTY  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)

Hi David J IS Death & Taxes -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration as part of the "The Official Mod Review Blitz!" . Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Check* Great use of detail. The specific details included in this piece were engaging and enjoyable.

*Check* Fluid, natural style. Your writing has a natural cadence and easiness to it that makes your work a pleasure to read.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*X* Nothing comes to mind.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

I thought this was an interesting piece. Prior to reading it, I didn't have any idea what neatsfoot oil was, so it's always nice when a piece of writing can teach you something. Overall, nice work. *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

Hi Maulpartin -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Talent Pond review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

Good use of the prompt.

Compelling characters.

Engaging story.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

The story felt a little rushed in the execution, but otherwise it was a very enjoyable tale. *Smile*


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I enjoyed reading this item and thought you did a great job with the prompt. Unfortunately, there aren't enough entries to warrant a prize this round, so I'm enclosing 2,000 GPs with this review as a consolation prize, in recognition of your efforts in creating an entry. Thank you for your support of this contest! *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

Hi TheSpirit -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Talent Pond review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

Good use of genre elements.

Interesting characters.

Great ending.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

Can't think of anything.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really enjoyed this story. I thought it was well written and was a good take on the prompt. Unfortunately, there aren't enough entries to award a prize for this round, so I'm enclosing 2,000 GPs to this review as a consolation prize and in thanks for taking the time to enter the contest this round. Your support is greatly appreciated!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Mirrors Lie  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

Hi Than Pence -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Talent Pond review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

Well-written, engaging tale.

Excellent use of genre elements.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

Nothing comes to mind.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I thought your story was very good. I really enjoyed your take on the prompt and thought you did a good job with all the elements. Unfortunately, there aren't enough entries to award any places, so a consolation prize of 2,000 GPs is included with this review as a thank you for entering this round of the contest. Thanks for your patronage! *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Revelation  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Unofficial Erotica Newsletter ...  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

Hi percy goodfellow -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Unofficial Erotica Newsletter Group review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkv* Good use of eroticism. There was a good amount of heat and excitement in the grand finale of your story. *Smile*


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xv* You still have a tendency of writing either dialogue OR action. Really try to combine the two, and mix your action/description with and between your dialogue. Your story will be stronger for it. *Smile*


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, this was a satisfying, appropriate ending to your story. I enjoyed it very much. Nice work!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Still Loving You  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi jaya -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Sophisticated writing.

*Checkb* Excellent imagery and emotion.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* The structure didn't flow well in my head as I read it. Was this a structured poem or free verse? Perhaps it was just my own lack of any poetry skill whatsoever. *Wink*


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really enjoyed this item. It was well written and engaging. Very well done! *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Imperfection  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Elisa: Middle Aged Stik -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Great message. The idea of people having imperfections and not having an "ideal" person in mind were resonant and effective.

*Checkb* Good conversational tone. The letter felt realistic; a good compromise between formal letter-writing and casual correspondence.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* The letter felt a little abrupt in starting and finishing, but that's a relatively minor issue in an otherwise excellent piece.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, this was an enjoyable, intelligent and thought-provoking letter. Well written and well done! *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Reconciliation  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Unofficial Erotica Newsletter ...  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This is an official review of your "HSP: Sustaining The Sizzle"  class assignment.



Hi percy goodfellow -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Unofficial Erotica Newsletter Group review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkv* Great job reconciling the conflict presented in the last installment. You captured Maria's pain and reservations and resolved them in a natural, believable way. It wasn't too easy, but wasn't drawn out either... good timing and pacing.

*Checkv* The second half of the story had a good mix of dialogue and action, interspersing the two so that the dialogue and action could move forward simultaneously. Well done! *Thumbsup*


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xv* The first half of the story had too much dialogue and not enough action in it. As discussed last week, some action would be useful to break up the dialogue in this section a little, rather than strictly being a back and forth between speaking parts only.

*Xv* I would have liked a little more detail and description for the actual erotic encounter... really push yourself to describe and engage rather than relay the erotic elements.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Your story is getting better and better. You're really hitting your stride and the pieces are all falling into place now that you've taken the relationship along a path that's brought them to the verge of separation and then reconciled them again. Good pacing, good flow, and great job of continuing to make this an engaging and interesting story! *Bigsmile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Decaying Beauty  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Winnie Kay -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Wonderful imagery.

*Checkb* Excellent structure and style.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* Nothing at all.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

I loved this poem. I thought you did a great job writing a poem inspired by the image, and really captured the emotion and visuals of a changing Earth as the seasons move from summer into winter. Outstanding work. *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Through the Storm  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi intheventofire -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Great use of elements from the original Wizard of Oz. The last line was, of course, the clincher, but making an anagram of Toto's name into Otto, and Autie M becoming Uncle M were inspired changes.

*Checkb* Good pacing and structure.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* Nothing that I could find.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really enjoyed the imagination and the creativity that went into this work, creating a parody of the Wizard of Oz by taking familiar elements and spinning on them on their ear. Nicely done! *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review of Conflict  
Review by Jeff
In affiliation with Unofficial Erotica Newsletter ...  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)

Hi percy goodfellow -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Unofficial Erotica Newsletter Group review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkv* Effective dialogue.

*Checkv* Good characterization.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xv* I felt that the "monkey wrench" was a little superficial, in that it seemed a momentary problem that was quickly forgotten about in the next scene, and I was hoping for a little more resonance. Additionally, the problem was resolved (or at least overlooked) in the last scene of the story, and I was hoping to see the assignment followed a little more closely (i.e. a serious conflict left unresolved at the end of the story).

*Xv* I've noticed that your stories, while they employ effective and persuasive dialogue, tend to have scenes that are either almost entirely all dialogue or all description. I like the fact that you feel comfortable enough with dialogue to make it a natural part of a story, but I would challenge you to mix the two together a little more. Intersperse your conversational elements (which are just alternating speaking parts) with description and action. It's far more effective to have your characters doing something while they're also speaking, than to have them standing there merely bantering back and forth. *Smile*


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I thought this was a good story with a lot of potential. You've got a clear understanding and sense of your characters, and their story is an interesting one that engages the reader quickly and easily. I would recommend focusing on the two issues above to make the story a little more active (by interspersing action with the dialogue) and focusing on really enhancing the conflict. This is a critical moment in your story; really take your characters to the brink and make the audience wonder if it's possible they'll recover from this dramatic turn of events. *Bigsmile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am reviewing your story as a judge for the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" .
Thanks for entering!


Hello, this is Jeff and I'll be one of your judges for the October 2010 round of the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Please keep in mind that the following review is merely my personal opinion. While that opinion contributes to determining the contest winners, you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


This was an outstanding story. Your characters were well developed and complex, and the situation in which they find themselves was heartbreaking, frightening, touching, and thought-provoking, all at the same time. I wish I had some constructive criticism to offer you, but this story was - in my opinion - perfect just the way it is. Very impressive writing! *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your item.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

- S o C a l S c r i b e
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Review by Jeff
Rated: E | (4.5)
I am reviewing your story as a judge for the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" .
Thanks for entering!


Hello, this is Jeff and I'll be one of your judges for the October 2010 round of the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Please keep in mind that the following review is merely my personal opinion. While that opinion contributes to determining the contest winners, you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


I really enjoyed this story. I thought you did a great job with the characterization in particular, and the way your protagonist originally saw the tire swing as something to be embarrassed and humiliated about - because it wasn't bright and shiny and new - and then learned later what kind of caring, giving father he truly was. Well done!


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your item.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

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Review of The Library Lady  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I am reviewing your story as a judge for the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" .
Thanks for entering!


Hello, this is Jeff and I'll be one of your judges for the October 2010 round of the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Please keep in mind that the following review is merely my personal opinion. While that opinion contributes to determining the contest winners, you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


Great use of detail and good character development. I liked the fact that the story incorporated so many elements that are associated with the fall season - Halloween costumes, apple cider, etc. Overall, this was an engaging story with a compelling narrative and interesting characters. Nicely done! *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your item.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

- S o C a l S c r i b e
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Review of My Dearest Son  
Review by Jeff
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I am reviewing your story as a judge for the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" .
Thanks for entering!


Hello, this is Jeff and I'll be one of your judges for the October 2010 round of the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Please keep in mind that the following review is merely my personal opinion. While that opinion contributes to determining the contest winners, you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


Your story had a really compelling protagonist, and I love the fact that the letters bookended a very engaging tale about Tighe as he grew up and thought about being a father in his own right. Good use of detail, well structured and well told. Nicely done. *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your item.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

- S o C a l S c r i b e
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Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I am reviewing your story as a judge for the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" .
Thanks for entering!


Hello, this is Jeff and I'll be one of your judges for the October 2010 round of the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Please keep in mind that the following review is merely my personal opinion. While that opinion contributes to determining the contest winners, you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


What I liked best about this story was the balance between all the elements. Just the right amount of dialogue set against just the right amount of detail and description. There was humor and drama, and the blend of everything together made for a satisfying, enjoyable story. Thanks for sharing. *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your item.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

- S o C a l S c r i b e
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Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I am reviewing your story as a judge for the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" .
Thanks for entering!


Hello, this is Jeff and I'll be one of your judges for the October 2010 round of the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Please keep in mind that the following review is merely my personal opinion. While that opinion contributes to determining the contest winners, you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


Great use of setting, detail and description to tell your story. Your characters were engaging and realistic, and I liked the way you worked the prompt naturally into the story without making it a story about a tire swing. An altogether satisfying, engaging story. Well done! *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your item.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

- S o C a l S c r i b e
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Review of Bad Tires  
Review by Jeff
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I am reviewing your story as a judge for the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" .
Thanks for entering!


Hello, this is Jeff and I'll be one of your judges for the October 2010 round of the "Short Shots: Official WDC Contest" . Please keep in mind that the following review is merely my personal opinion. While that opinion contributes to determining the contest winners, you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


I thought this was a great use of the prompt; clever and very creative. Your characters were engaging, the story was entertaining, and the overall effect was a well-structured, enjoyable story. Good use of detail and description. Nicely done! *Smile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your item.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

- S o C a l S c r i b e
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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Hi EarlyHours-A Vigilante Ranger -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.


WHAT WORKED

*Checkb* Excellent story structure with a complete, full-circle ending.

*Checkb* Superb sci-fi elements.


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Xb* Nothing at all.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

To me, this story encompasses everything that science fiction should be. It approaches a real world problem or situation and infuses it with a thoughtful, complex, and entirely believable aura of sci-fi genre elements. I honestly try not to give too many 5.0 ratings (I'm one of those people who stubbornly believes that there's always room for improvement *Wink*), but I have no choice with this story. It's a flawless, exceptional example of what is possible with the science fiction genre. Wonderful, wonderful story. *Bigsmile*


I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,


- S o C a l S c r i b e

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