First of all, congratulations for being in the poetry newsletter. I loved your poem! It was really fun to read and a great way to celebrate a day I love celebrating. I had never heard of a forensic poem before, and I loved the way you brought both sides of the debate into play. Keep up the good work. Best Wishes, Cynaemon
Hi, creature,
This is a cute little poem about summer, and I enjoyed the images you created. However, I am not sure I would call this an alliterative poem. It is really a bit short, although I am not sure there is any lower limit on this style of poetry. Good attempt though. Keep up the good work. Best Wishes, Cynaemon
What an interesting little poem. I don't think I have ever run across one that contains elements from a song and a movie. I am not quite sure it is an alliterative poem though. I do like the sentiment of the poem though. Keep up the good work. Best Wishes, Cynaemon
This is an interesting first attempt at an alliterative poem. You have done a good job with the style, but I think you may have been trying too hard. You have used a lot of unfamiliar words, and no one wants to sit with a dictionary by their side. Also the word in line ten should be "otiose". Perhaps just a typo. Best wishes, Cynaemon
This is an nice little alliterative poem. You have done a good job with the style. I think it is interesting the way you leave the reader wondering just what the scent is. Keep up the good job. I am not sure why you call it an imposter in the end though.
This review is for your alliterative poem. It is cute and kind of interesting. I think you have done a good job with this style of poetry. Mostly I think this poem would appeal to children, and as you say, that is the audience it was written for. Keep up the good work. Cynaemon
I loved your poem. It really captures the essence of the sea. I must assume you live near an ocean. I live on the West Coast of the US in California, so I too love the sea. You have done an excellent job with this style of poem. I liked the rhythm and flow of your piece. The only change I would make is in the second line. I would change whining to whispering. I don't think the surf whines. Keep up the good work. Best wishes, Cynaemon
I really enjoyed reading your poem, and like your alliteration a lot. You have done a nice job with this style. In the first verse the last line doesn't make sense to me. It seems like you just threw it in there, but maybe that is just my interpretation of it. Keep up the good work. Best Wishes, Cynaemon
I loved your little poem about the Fire Fairy. You have done a great job with your alliteration, and crafted a piece which gives us a clear picture of your subject. I think I would have chosen a different look on the page for the poem, as the way it is now makes it a bit hard to read. Keep up the good work.
This is an interesting little alliterative poem. I think you need to change "ran" to "run" in the first line. Otherwise the tenses do not match. Your alliteration really good, but I found it a bit hard to understand, but maybe that was just me. I did enjoy reading it, and your images are very clear. Keep up the good work.
This is a nice little alliterative poem, and you have done a good job with the type. The first verse flows really well. In the second verse line three, I would say:
Just
Sip your soda...
I think it would flow better that way. Keep up the good work. Cynaemon
This is a nice little haiku. You have done a good job in keeping with the format, and it is about nature. I don't think that the second line really fits in. Maybe "sweet flowers", or "sweet blossoms" would work better. By using the word "florals" I feel that you are trying too hard to make the poem seem "grand", or wonderful. I think that a haiku should have a more calm or sedate feeling.
I really enjoyed your little quinzaine. This is one of the best in this format that I have read so far. I have just recently disovered this form myself, and I love the fun and the challenge of writing such a short poem.
I don't really think you need the comma in line too. Other than that, Great Job.
You have written an interesting little quinzaine, and I really admire you for trying new forms of poetry. I just recently discovered these myself, and am having fun exploring them.
I find your quinzaine a bit confusing. I am not sure who the "they" in line one are. I liked your question. In some instances I think loss and hate could be the same thing. These are not easy to write, and you have done a good job with the format.
This is a great little quinzaine. You have done a super job with this format, and this poem really speaks to me.
Congratulations on trying a new poem style/format. These are such fun to write. I just discovered them recently, and am having great fun with them. I love all these short forms like this, haiku, drabbles and 55-word stories. Anything that makes me really think about the words I am writing. They require such preciseness.
This is a cute little quinzaine you have written. Congratulations on trying a new type/format of poem. I think you have done a good job with the format. Obviously there are no spelling or grammatical errors.
I am reviewing this poem for your Five Star Poetry Contest. This is an interesting poem about nature. There are spots where it does not flow that well for me, but I can see that trying to have 14 syllables per line would make it a real challenge to do. Is that a certain kind of poem? I am not familiar with that format. This is kind of like a mini-sostena, since the last verse only has two lines. I hope you did well in the contest.
The bees get attracted by the fragrance and pollinate. - In this line, I think "The bees *are* attracted" would sound better than "get attracated.
Also, I do not think the title fits the poem that well, since the subject is more "nature" than just a sunrise. Something like "Nature's Beauty" might be better. But that is just my opinion. You as the author can call it anything you wish. :)
This is a nice little quinzaine you have writtten. I have just recently discovered this format, and I really love it. You have done a good job with it. I love the way these make you think about what you really want to say.
This is a nice little senryu, rather than a haiku, but that is really kind of splitting hairs. You have done a good job with the format, 5-7-5, and it is about nature, as a haiku most usually is. I would like to see the last line changed to something like "Winter sings its song." Then it would truly feel more like a haiku.
This is a pretty good little haiku. You have followed the format of 5-7-5 and it is about nature. I liked the picture, but was wondering if it was your own original work or not. Just curious. I would remove the commas. I don't think they are needed, and they are not usually present in a haiku.
This is a cute little three-line poem, but it is not really a haiku. If anything, it would be considered a senryu, as it is about a personal subject rather than about nature. Even though you have followed the format of a haiku, 5-7-5, this is really just a statement.
I agree that haikus are hard to write though. don't give up.
This is an interesting little poem. I guess you are calling it an acrostic since it uses part of your name. However, it is not really a haiku, as it does not follow that format at all. If anything, you might consider it a senryu, as it deals with a personal subject. But to be a haiku or a senryu it should follow the format of 5-7-5 syllables.
This is a really nice haiku. You have done a pretty good job. You have stuck with the format. I think it would benefit from a few changes. I think saying "Dawn *is* a fresh start" would be more effecctive than saying "Dawn of a fresh start." Just a suggestion.
I loved your little 55-word story. You have done a great job with this format, and have crafted an awesome story. Truthfully, it could have ended with "You Smile." But then, I guess you needed two more words to make it 55. LOL. Your story really touched me.
No grammatical or spelling errors. Keep up the good work.
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