Hi, StephB, This is an interesting diamante poem. You have done a good job of following the form for this kind of poem. I can also really feel the emotions in it.
I am not sure that using the word "haunting" in two different lines is effiective..
Hi, Leger, I love the image you have created with your little diamante poem. I could really feel someone loving and tending the little seedling until it became a beautiful flower.
You have done a great job with this poetry form. Certainly there were no grammatical or spelling errors.
Hi, Jenn, I enjoyed reading your diamante poem. This is one of my favorite styles of poetry. You have done a good job conveying your feelings of day passing into night. I especially liked the way you described the night as "still, dark night," which can be interpreted in several different ways.
Hi, Lorilady, This is an excellent diamante poem. You have chosen the perfect words to convey your idea. I especially liked the middle line: respect, adrenaline, adrenaline, contempt. It was great using the same word describe both sides of the coin.
I love writing these kinds of poems myself.
I didn't see any kind of grammatical or spelling errors here.
I really enjoyed reading your poem 'More Than Song.' How unusual to tell of Christ's birth from a crickets point of view. I thought it very effective. This poem has a lovely and heartfelt sentiment.
Your poem has a good rhythm and flow. Only one small grammatical error.
that night the star shined bright. - I think it should be "shone".
I enjoyed your little poem about winter. You have painted some very nice and compelling images.
Your poem has a nice rhythm and flow to it. It has a nice theme and sentiment which is easy for the reader to relate to. I found not grammatical errors.
I enjoyed your little gogyohka poem on what life means to you. It has an interesting sentiment.
You have done a good job with this form. I think I would have placed a comma after both the first and second lines. That would have made the poem flow better for me.
I enjoyed reading your most excellent peom about poetry, and what poetry is. You have answered the question well. Congratulations on winning the "Little Bit of Poetry" for this round.
Well, definitely no complaints. No errors of any kind. Nice free form poem with good rhythm and flow.
I enjoyed reading your poem. It has a nice theme and sentiment.
Your couplets have nice rhymes, and the poem has a good rhythm and flow.
Just a few minor things:
The hope of years surrounding me - comma or semi-colon after this line
Children with their mischief smiles - comma after this line
Crayola portraits stacked in piles - comma after this line
Ages different, spirits wild - comma after this line
Unique is every single child - semi-colon after this line
With love or hate; They matter much. - They should not be capitalized
We can't know now whom they will save - comma after this line
I look around and smile through tears - comma after this line
I enjoyed reading your very interesting essay. I thought it was interesting the way you seemed to skip from one idea to another, but still had the seem theme throughout.
I am glad you broke the piece up like you did, otherwise it might have been hard to follow.
I really enjoyed your haiku/acrostic poem "Bonsai." I am impressed with the way you combined these two so different forms into such a nice little poem.
You have obviously followed the forms of both well. Your haiku are really nice. Your little poem has a good rhythm and flow, and a pleasant theme.
I enjoyed reading your poem "Troubador." It has a good theme and sentiment, and one which I can relate to as a musician myself. People are always telling me I should play here or there, or this or that. I play what I love, and make no apologies for it. I know I am good at what I do. But if I were to change a lifetime of that, where would it lead?
I am rambling, so on to the mechanics.
You have well-constructed verses and good rhymes. Your poem has a good rhythm and flow. No grammatical or spelling errors. Good job.
I really enjoyed your micro fiction story about love. It has an interesting theme and a good sentiment. I think you have said a lot in this short piece, and you have said it beautifully and with respect.
On to the mechanics. Although not a poem, the piece does have a nice flow. An interesting plot, as I have said, and good development of characters in such a short story.
I really enjoyed reading your poem "birds fly". Good theme.
You have done a great job with the English Tanka form. Don't know that you can really say it has much of a rhythm in such a short poem, but it does flow nicely.
I really enjoyed reading your poem "If I weren't afraid". It has a good theme and a sentiment with which I am sure your readers can connect. I especially liked the last line: I would be able to let others shine their light upon me. How often we limit ourselves and miss out on the beauty and blessings of the life around us.
This is a good free form poem. It has a nice rhythm and flow. No grammatical or spelling errors.
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