Ohhh...how respectful toward Women!! I liked the dreativity, the fishing(yet, I have already unlocked that bit) and the men spending money to get a girl! Is this the way they teach you? Is this fair to you? Dont you feel these Women are people, and not just animals? I think not. I really enjoyed the free verse and the great flow, and the contents were educating, yet not to me. Amusing, is more how I would categorize this! You did a wonderful job proclaiming Women as Fish! Hahah! Reel em in, and see what cuts you get! If you know about the fisherman in New England, (based on fact, not cunning entertainment)
Then you will understand the fisherman with the most greed, end up in a boat thats capsized, and no lil fishies in sight to save you! Better save those dollars, boy! Entertaining, nonetheless, to each his own, and to each learn from it!
Favorite part?
"I think that it’s clear, no need to pretend,
We never wish for this party or great night to end.
Amid all the sorrow and heartache in our lives,
Our friendship gives us strength, our hope survives;
And if the girl we really like should like one of us tonight,
Congrats’ are in order, there’s no need to fight."
Shouldnt be any reason to fight over the fish that only want your bait and money!! Thats a prostitute, not a woman nor a fish. So, there you are wise in this to say, only two wrongs dont ever make a right!
Please take this as solid advice, and if youd like, then obliterate my poetry, if it makes you feel better. I am only trying to help you see what message of hatred you are spreading and that will only become harder in time when the fish outsmart you and your buddies! Womans point of view, for ya. I know you will appreciate it. Or shall I say a "Ladies" point for you! Good luck with your literature and keep writing! Just know if you are inrentionally palying games, the games will get you!! That is my reality and opinion and take it as you may.
Blessings,
Anna
Shouldnt you look in a more constructive place for the prime pickings? Hmmmmmm....maybe the library or School and I dont mean a school of fishies..hehe.
Only trying to help, you can love it or leave it, doesnt matter to me! If I can change a desolute outlook, I will! If not, then good luck!
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