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for entry "Mist
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Summary:
Your opening line pulled me right into this free-form poem about Mist. You have great imagery as you devise differing ways to describe the mist. I keep returning to that first line because I love the idea of mist being a tryst of water vapor. I find that very clever. Dancing over Daisies is another line that speaks volumes, and it really made me smile as I read your poem.


Critique:
You packed a lot into this twelve-line poem. I liked how the water settled onto the grass, sleeping as dew. It reminded me of being outside during the summer as the sun rises and the temperature gets ready to climb from a cool night. You do a really great job with your word choices.

This would be my name.

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for entry "My emotional map
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Style
The author has a nice, easy-to-follow flow in their writing. The short piece also includes good descriptions, such as stormy weather relating to emotional turmoil, and they back up their subject with reasons why they think an emotional road map would be helpful.

Mechanics
You used the chosen words well and put them in bold so the reader could easily find them without thinking about it.

Personal Response
I liked this interesting take on your chosen map. It's honestly a great idea. I would love to know the emotional roadblocks that lie ahead of me. Carefully averting such disasters would be a phenomenal thing. I like the idea of parallel lines that would indicate a better choice in the road up ahead, and to avoid certain areas that look like they would be rather bumpy and take an emotional toll.


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Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (5.0)

SETTING -
I loved how you detailed what you hoped wouldn't be a rebound relationship. The nervousness, you being clumsy, wondering where it would all lead, and if there was even a chance at a second date. And the fact that you said this in a letter to Jeanette made it such a heartwarming read. I really like your equating apprehension and anxiety to twin emotions. That was very telling.

CHARACTERS -
Jace, you, being up before dawn, your mind consumed with thoughts of Jeanette. That was easy to envision as you carried on, going about your day and anticipating the impending date. I could picture you sitting in your car and watching her from the rearview mirror, taking in that moment as she arrived. Again, when you describe your mouth engaging before your brain, How many times have we all been there?


THOUGHTS -
Great job retelling this remarkable time of your life, starting over and being almost like a teenager filled with fear and anticipation of this first date. You covered a range of emotions throughout and made it a quick read as I rushed to see how it would all play out, even knowing that you two were together. This was a really enjoyable read that gave much insight into you, Jace. Great job and thanks for sharing this one.

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for entry "Missing 411
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Information:
When it comes to missing people, the strange occurrences that follow their discovery are truly intriguing. Take, for instance, the case of the boy in North Carolina. His story is a remarkable account of the unexpected. It's a reminder that in this world, stranger things can happen. Children, in their innocence and trust, often find themselves in the midst of these mysteries. One can't help but wonder, do animals sense this trust, mingled with fear, and react?

The other stories raise a lot of questions. Finding the shoe, feet below, not a mark or stain on it. I'd think that even if there were storms during that timeline, there would be something left behind.


Overall Impression:
I liked that you included a link to YouTube, where these stories are being told. If someone wants to dig deeper and become more invested, they know exactly where to go. You included a lot of information about the disappearances, the strange-shaped items belonging to them magically reappeared, and the actual searches that began after they were reported missing. It truly is a mystery. Your blog entry had an appropriate title as well, as the reader knew exaclty what your post was all about.



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Review by Purple Princess
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Thank you for entering "Write from the Heart Poetry Contest"   by Purple Princess

Following the Prompt: *Checkg*
Line Count: *Checkv*

Rhyme/Rhythm/Flow:
Good job with the rhyme scheme. The sonnet flowed well too.

Emotions/Imagery:
This is where you really shine in your writing. From the very first line, I was hooked.
But my favorite line:
No better words will capture what I feel.--this spoke to me in so many ways.

From beauty's hollow, running amok in fields and falling through pockets free, everything worked in tandem and painted a picture in the mind's eye.

Impressions:

You really captured the subject of love well and how words sometimes cannot measure up to the depth of what one truly feels--try as we might.

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Review of Remembering You  
Review by Purple Princess
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for entering "Write from the Heart Poetry Contest"   by Purple Princess

Following the Prompt: *Checkg*
Line Count: *Checkv*

Rhyme/Rhythm/Flow:
Your sonnet had a good flow throughout.

Emotions/Imagery:
This poem was packed with emotions following the death of a loved one. It was easy to feel the love you have for your grandson, as well as the profound loss. My favorite line would have to be the last one, as there is such warmth in sensing someone in an ordinary occurrence, such as the moonlight. You spoke of his laughter and smile, which have lived on in your heart and memory.

Impressions:

I'm truly sorry for your loss. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt piece. I hope you find comfort in writing for him.

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Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Rhythm/Rhyme:
This is more of a free-form poem. I detected a certain rhythm in the sentences or created one. It moved well.

Summary:
I liked your take on life itself. Understanding that life gets messy is probably smart, in my opinion. So many things can and do wrong throughout one's life. Knowing that and being able to go with the flow or figure a way out of those chaotic moments is the key.


Critique:
Good imagery. I especially liked the idea of finding that single thread to pull on. It's like a puzzle. Once you start and put the missing piece in place, you will find what you're looking for, and things will get straightened out. You had really good word choices in this eight-line poem. Messy and jumbled were great descriptors of life. You also end the poem with some hope, as there is a clearing in the haze of distress. Nicely done!

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Review of Trap  
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
PLOT -
Jane and Buntie have an argument that causes Jane to run away. She winds up in the Netherworld talking to an Imp.

CHARACTERS -
Jane doesn't realize what she's done that made her girlfriend so angry with her. And the Imp, who is bored, doesn't really care about her but is interested enough to find out what the fight is about.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
What was the argument was about?" I would remove the second 'was'

THOUGHTS -
I believe the words in bold are part of the prompt. With this being micro flash fiction, there is much to get in here to tell a quick story. The last paragraph was a bit confusing as I was trying to make the connection between it and Jane. I am assuming that this pertains to the fight she had with Buntie, but I'm not one-hundred percent sure of that.

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Review of Future Looks Good  
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
PLOT -
Ryan does his best to stay strong while his wife battles Alzheimer's. He is now a single father to a teenage son, as his wife lives in a care facility.

SETTING -
I appreciated the fact that you jumped around a little bit. We get to see Ryan now, reminding his son that they are visiting his mom and that he has to stay strong for the rare moments when memory aligns, and those suffering know what is going on and who they are. The pictures on the wall were a great addition to showcasing who Genevieve used to be, including her love of pictures.

CHARACTERS -
Copeland, growing up fast from a teenager to graduate, honored his mother during his graduation speech. At fifteen, he is confused about why this is happening to his mom. Ryan, who is now in a routine, gets up, looks at the pictures on the wall surrounding him, gets Copeland moving, and starts another day.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
No issues

THOUGHTS -
This was a tough one for me. My mother has Alzheimer's, and it's a daily struggle to watch her be so confused. I'm in my mid-fifties, and I cannot imagine what it would be like for a teenager to cope with this devastating disease. You captured all of that anguish well, bringing me to tears. I liked the song choice and how Copeland is the future. That was a good tie-in and brought about a little hope. Thank you for sharing this one.

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Review of Top of the Pile  
Review by Purple Princess
Rated: E | (4.5)
PLOT -
Ava created a vaccine that will help many people but finds it difficult to celebrate her big achievement. In her society, everyone's worth is ranked from the highest to the lowest, and she finds the practice wrong, though others in her inner circle do not necessarily agree with her.

SETTING -
You showed Ava's exhaustion as the vaccine came into existence, her long hours paying off. Her assistant cannot wait for the accolades, yet Ava shows no excitement. Liam, an artist, works hard but hardly makes money by sticking with his passion. The character of Zara felt almost desperate to see some form on


GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
The dialog felt natural, especially between Zara and Liam, as they discussed his career and how they live when artists make next to nothing and are ranked very low on the totem pole. Good job showing Ava's disdain for the practice of ranking society by their accomplishments, and how she uses her accolade to shine a light on this harmful practice.

I did not find any issues with spelling or grammar. For consistency, the last paragraph needs a space from the previous one.

THOUGHTS -
I liked that you took this prompt and set it far enough in the future that it isn't a stretch of the imagination. With AI, and everything going hand-in-hand in a similar direction, it was easy to see that things could head there. Ava is a strong female character who is intelligent, driven, compassionate, and has a great sense of understanding and fairness. You drove that point home as the story wrapped up with Ava going to bat for people like Liam, who may not contribute like she does to society.

I really hope that this is not what the future will look like, where everyone is judged by what they contribute, and those contributions are put on a scale if you will.

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Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: The story starts with Jay lost in thought, walking on campus, trying to figure things out when he bumps into another student. At first, Edward is pissed and yells some profanity, but once the two get a good look at one another, things change.

Spelling/Grammar Issues:
shoved y my way,

The only thing I'd point out is to watch the use of repetitive words. I am constantly using my Thesaurus to avoid this pitfall in my writing.

Description/emotion: You describe what Edward looks like physically, enough to get a picture of him in the reader's mind. You have room to add emotional aspects to this short story. For instance, when Jay knows he will be sitting next to the guy he'd just run into, how does he feel about that? Aside from avoiding eye contact, you could elaborate here. Is it because he's shy, or nervous? Is he playing hard to get? Your audience wants to know their main characters; these moments are an opportunity to do just that.

Overall Impression: You have a solid beginning here. Adding more description and the emotional connection between the characters and your audience will pull the reader into the story and have us rooting for Jay as the story evolves.




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Review of You and I  
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review

Subject: This feels like a budding relationship as one stays guarded, and the other tries to convey how they feel, hoping their love interest will let their guard down and let him in.

Flow: The poem moved well from beginning to end as this tale of love unfolded.

Description: The first line pulls the reader in, thoughts of not being able to get lost in another, when they actually already are, to be so connected and giving themselves to the other as a gift, almost like an open book for discovery laid bare.

Overall Impression: There seems to be a struggle here as if the main person is experiencing some sort of restraint in letting their feelings out, almost as if their love interest is not accepting what they have to offer, yet they somehow manage to bring out the best of them. Bringing out the best in someone is never a bad thing in my opinion. When that kind of insight hits, it brings about profound understanding. When those feelings are reciprocated, it brings about experiences no one wants to let go of. The dream of being together forever, of sharing eternity with the one you love is something most of us hope to find. I am still rereading this one, hoping I truly did understand the message not miss the mark entirely.






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Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (4.5)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: Hello fellow GoT-er! I meant to read and review some of these right out-of-the-gate Door One stories, but yours is the first! I like how you used the prompt at the very end of the story attached to the note at the bookstore cafe. I found it creative the way you tied up the story of Susie out to do something her mother disapproves of, but taking this opportunity to do something for herself.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None

Description/emotion: Susie is headstrong, a good character trait. She is nonplussed by the fact that her mother thinks the trip isn't a good idea, and she is used to being told that throughout her life. There was no fear in taking the less traveled route to her hotel. She seemed quite confident as she chose it, and then walked on, taking the turns from her map app. The impulse to go into the bookstore cafe turned out to be good.

Overall Impression: I love this idea of getting coffee, something to eat, a good book, and a note of inspiration. This should be a thing! Like a fortune cookie gives you some glimpse of a well-known saying, the bookstore cafe takes that to new lengths with solid advice everyone would love to have. I enjoyed your take on the song and the prompt.




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Review of The Portrait  
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: A haunting tale about a close-knit father and son who share a love for art and paintings in particular. John is heartbroken to see his son go off to war, but Sam makes a promise to his father. He swears he will paint a self-portrait and bring it back as soon as possible for his father to hang up with the rest of their art collection. John holds onto a letter from Sam, staring at the art collection, hoping that his son will return soon.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None

Description/emotion: John's heartache was spot-on. And although I knew this story would come to a tragic end, I was shocked by how it all came about. During the visit of Sam bringing the painting at Christmas, John is thrilled to see him and accepting of Sam's friend orphan friend, Ralph when the war is over. That grandfather clock that continually kept time, chiming little reminders that time moves forward.

Overall Impression: I was surprised to learn that Sam was a ghost once Ralph arrived to tell John of the fire. Even more shocked to learn that Sam saved Ralph's life and all of his artwork was destroyed. I enjoy these stories of mystery, and how the universe somehow manages to leave little gifts behind that seem almost impossible.




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Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: Mary works for a newspaper and really wants to be a reporter, but her boss only puts her in the position of taking dictator for his less-than-exciting stories. She is bored with the mundane of this job. Mr. Livingston is sick on this particular day and cannot come into the office. When the phone rings, the caller mistakes her for her boss and gives her a tip. She runs outside to investigate and gets the story herself.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None

Description/emotion: I identified with what Mary felt in her job and with a husband who thinks she should consider herself lucky that he allows her to work in this field. The timeline is 1968, but even still. I loved that she jumped right in and went after that story when it fell into her lap. Her surprise at seeing the enormity of the situation, with a dozen cows hanging out on the street was great.

Overall Impression: Great job with this short story. It was good that you showed how grateful Mary was submitting that story, and having her name in print. She realizes that it may be the only article she gets to write, but that is enough for her. The cows grazing down Main Street had a great comedy to it since that's not something that happens every day.




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Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: Flash fiction about two people sitting beside one another at a work conference, listening to the motivational speaker. Sam and Carl strike up a conversation, and he gives her some advice about surviving her new environment.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None.

Description/emotion: I enjoyed the interaction between Carl and Sam and the added elements of humor you managed to get into this piece. I like female characters who aren't afraid to speak up, and Sam asking for some advice about her new job showed strength. Carl's three pieces of advice were great, especially repeating the words from the opening of the story for added humor, giving Sam some insight into Carl's personality. Comparing inauthenticity to a stinking perfume I have to say had me turning my nose up as I continued reading.

Overall Impression: You got the prompt words into the story smoothly. That's not always an easy task. I liked that Carl mentioned that there were free drinks when it was over and then followed that up a minute later, offering to buy Sam a drink. He definitely showed off his marketing skills with that one. Their interaction was smooth and felt real. Great job with this three-hundred-word story!




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Review of Date Night  
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: The task for this assignment was to evoke emotions on a date night.There were moments when you excelled at that task, and other portions of the writing where the story was more told than shown, and it didn't hit the mark.

Spelling/Grammar Issues:
next to wall on the -- to the wall at the booth - think this will make it clearer

There were a few more issues, mostly typos with added letters, etc.

Description/emotion: Longing to wrap his arms around her showed what he wanted most on this night. Even this could be taken a bit further by describing how she felt in his arms, the warmth of her body, or that she was soft against, things of that nature. Even hitting in what she smells like. The food, her flowery perfume, or a vanilla soap. All these little details really help connect the reader to the characters.

Overall Impression: I know what your assignment was, and I believe you were trying to portray the newness of the relationship. I think the added information of what they do in school, what they agree upon and how aligned they are took away from the scene itself. When writing these kind of assignments, it's not necessary to give the background information on your characters. Stay in the scene itself. Where they are, the weather, what they're doing, secret smiles to each other, bumping of hands or feet if they are lying on a blanket at the park. Just some things to think about.




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Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (3.5)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: Tom and Helen are heading to Las Vegas by car to elope. Both feel they are ready to take on this new journey and want to get out from under their parents so they can control their own destinies. They are excited as they talk on the drive, but sudden revelations of how they each see their future together start to conflict.

Spelling/Grammar Issues:
than an apartment for
They two

Think about using other dialog tags instead of relying on on said Tom, or Tom said. For instance, instead of I know,” said Tom. try something like. "I know," Tom said, his voice filled with excitement.

Adding more details with the dialog connects the reader to your characters and gives them a sense of who they are.

Description/emotion: I wondered what the weather was like and what kind of car they were driving in. Are the windows down and the wind whipping Helen's hair if it's hot?

Overall Impression: You have the basics down, try expanding upon it. Your characters clearly know what they want, and although Tom is rethinking things, you need to show your audience. Do either of them have inner thoughts? When Helen begins to realize that Tom's ideas and hers aren't the same, perhaps she wonders if she's making a mistake, or she's disappointed that he's decided they aren't buying a house right away. Just some things to consider.




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Review of Chasm  
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Storyline: Alexis goes hiking alone in the mountains, and that's when she takes a tumble that sends her into a cavern. Her leg hurts, and she doesn't see a way out. No one knows exactly where she went, and she worries that she won't be found. Life hangs in the balance as she tries to decide what to do. Before long, she begins to hallucinate, seeing almost every person she's ever known making her feel worse.

Spelling/Grammar Issues:
have successful careers,
What's happening to

Description/emotion: My mother is battling Alzheimer's now, so this really hit home. All of the little things we miss when their mind starts go. I'm glad that the person that gave her the push to get out of that hole was her mother. That she got that conversation, even though it was more of a dream, but regardless, she got that. The visual of her mom, the way she used to be was great.

Overall Impression: Just a little motherly love and encouragement was enough to get Alexis to try again, to grit through the pain and make it up and out of that hole until she could be rescued. I liked that her mother used her saying that life is hard to get Alexis to get up and get moving. Overall, it's a solid story that takes you through Alexis' thought process and determination to keep going.




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Review by Purple Princess
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: After three long years, a man is released from the mental hospital. The year is 2408 and a lot has changed. The nurse is not bothered by the fact that this patient has no where to go, just that he's taking up a room that they will be using for someone else. I am assuming that after losing his wife and job, and his children going off to fight a war, that it was too much for him to take.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: Noen

Description/emotion: Great descriptions of Bobo the clown. His round red nose fell off, his streaked make-up, crooked wig, and the tears. Bobo tells the man how he is no longer needed, and he's devastated about that. The man cannot comprehend all that Bobo is telling him and walks away. Spending time reading books in the library, he becomes informed and looks for Bobo, believing that if people laughed again, they would be happy. Bobo, he feels, is the key to unlocking both of their happiness.

Overall Impression: I did wonder where this story would end. And even though I read the description, I did not see that coming. I love surprise endings. Good job with the unpredictability of the story. Too bad Bobo didn't make it. Though it does leave questions about how the man will be received with his bowling pins.




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Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: Henry is celebrating his one-hundredth birthday. He doesn't speak, and it doesn't become clear why until the end of the story. Good job keeping that truth hidden. He is a veteran, I'm assuming from Normandy Beach, and lives in a retirement home. He isn't happy there. The waves crashing against the shore hold too many dark memories for him, and he is surprised no one has ever made that connection to understand why he's unhappy.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: No issues.

Description/emotion: Really good descriptions of Henry's mindset. He sees the young aid as bouncy, and cannot remember when he was that way. He thinks a lot about his time growing up on a farm, a place he still misses.

Overall Impression: Henry is surprised by the son of a soldier he was friends with so long ago on this birthday. David asks if Henry remembers his father and tells him how his father always spoke fondly of him and had been searching for him for a long time. Just this information was enough to pull on the heartstrings. It really didn't matter where the story went when the acknowledgment and understanding Henry needed came from David. But I loved the ending, for Henry found the peace he so desperately needed and deserved.




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Review of The Locked Door  
Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: This was a nail-biter, as I felt like I crawled up beside Benjamin and followed him through every step of this journey, desperate to know what was beyond that locked door. The ending did not disappoint, and was more a total shock that I'm still shaking my head over. I assumed someone was there, but the reality - wow.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: None

Description/emotion: Great job here. Benjamin shows how much love he holds for his father, and how spending time with him in the basement working on projects together is the best part of his day. He liked being praised for doing well, it makes him feel good. But the mystery behind that door, the expressions from his parents when he asks about the door, and their conflicting responses pique his curiosity. Determination leads him to sneak downstairs and unravel the mystery.

Overall Impression: What a gripping tale you've spun. I couldn't read fast enough to get to the end. Shocked is an understatement. Losing a child is a parent's worst nightmare. It's heartwrenching. These parents found a totally unconventional way to remedy their heartache. And not only once, but multiple times. Great detail and that twist ties it all together and then the questions begin regarding Benjamin.




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Review by Purple Princess
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


I'm not gonna lie, I always love a good rant. Usually, I'm the one doing the ranting. Whew, where to begin with this? Well, you said it was written in 2002, so 22 years ago. Here it's, good old 2024, with inflation on the rise and everything going up around us; I can honestly say the one thing that hasn't changed for me financially is my membership fee. I started with the basic membership, completely affordable. The more of the site I explored, the more I wrote. With writing comes storage. Static items turned into book items, so I upgraded my membership. And seriously if you do the math and round up, this equates to about twelve dollars a month.

Let's put that into perspective, shall we? Friday night I ordered grinder subs. We used to eat there all the time, but I'm older, work more, and I'm just plain lazy. I hate traffic and people where I live do not know how to drive in my opinion. We are a family of three now. One whole sub, two half subs, which I drove and picked up, no delivery fee involved here, to the tune of forty-three dollars! I am still shocked by this. I had their menu in the draw. They haven't even been in business for more than twenty years. When I looked at the menu, I had stashed at home, and the price of the same food about ten years ago was half what I had paid. I am still scratching my head over that.

As for this site, I commend you for being able to articulate your argument well. I wouldn't have been so nice about it. I remember when the big upgrade was happening here and chatted with a few people and we discussed how much work went into it. Moving a server, trying to make it as painless as possible. All of that took a lot of work on your part, and it's way over my head as to how these things work behind the scenes. This article should be front and center for the newbies, and for the old timers like myself who need a reminder of what is truly Free on this site. It's one hell of a list!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Description: As the contest title informs you, you are not allowed to use dialog, which includes inner dialog as well. This sounds like a great challenge for short story writers who tend to use dialog to move the story forward. Another challenge of this contest is to get the story written in seven hundred words or less. It must be newly written for that month's contest and do not forget the word count! This is so necessary and a lot of writers forget to do that, which results in disqualification, sadly.

Overall Impression: The page layout if fun and colorful. The rules are clearly stated and easy to follow. Good prizes away the winner of this contest, from the exclusive contest ribbon for first place, to their exclusive merit badge and gift points for second or third. This contest has been around for almost as decade and has even won some Quill awards. Congratulations. There are a lot of writing acitivites and contests on the site, but this one stands out because it is different from other contests. Being a bit more restrictive makes the writer take their time, polish up their skills and get to work at crafting a great story. It's too bad this contest is on hiatus. It looks like a lot of fun!




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Review by Purple Princess
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A "Game of Thrones"   by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation Review


Storyline: A little insight into taboo subject matter according to the masses. It was nice to read something out of my usual comfort zone, and this quick read was really good. I was pulled in from the first line and you held my attention until the last line and gave me things to think about afterward. It's always a good thing in my opinion.

Spelling/Grammar Issues: none

Description/emotion: You made it easy to get into the head of the woman who waited. Her thoughts were clear and focused. She knows exactly who she is and what she wants, and the thought of these things happening has her ready for the next experience. Her song is a melody of her journey in domination and submission, though her definition of the word differs from the dictionary. To her, it's a freedom of expression, of giving all she has to give to another.

Overall Impression: I liked that you clearly spelled out how trusting someone must be to go this route. It is a mindset, as well as a physical act. Between books and movies these days, that point tends to be overlooked. Using the form of her own song made this a standout piece. Now my mind is wondering what happens next, and will it be all she hopes for.




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