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Review of The Forever Dream  Open in new Window.
Review by Rainy Day Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Reminds me of a round like you sing and with every verse you add another voice. Row row to your boat... Build another raft merrily merrily merrily life just sucks like a--. It is a cool story and I got into it from the beginning. I have had dreams like this where no matter what I tried I could not wake up.this captures the feeling perfectly.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Like this poem. No surprise that it won it's contest. I do prefer my authors notes like the one belonging to this item to be in a drop note or pop note, though I can't fault the change in text color. I does separate the two segments. I just think drop notes are prettier.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an amazing activity that encourages participation in so many areas of the site. This is definitely in the top four activities on the site. Right up there with the I write challenge and the contest challenge. Like them you can jump in any time and catch up.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, great story. It is just perfect. The lead up left you wondering just where it could be going then you hit us in the face with Chaplin's ghost. I like that she was struck silent it seemed appropriate. I want him to talk to tell a long story but that just would not be right. Great ending!
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Review of Faith in Action  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a lovely well thought out piece. It is everything that it should be. Not just a blind profession of faith but one that is well supported by scriptures. I think you have expressed yourself very well. And the formatting is perfect. Lead with a quote and then come round to support it. Great job!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is adorable, yet high brow. A communist bunny? I would have gone the Easter bunny route on this prompt. Actually I still might. this stort is highly inspiring I love it. The one thing is the 's should be "s and they should be on the same lines as the dialog.
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Review of The Uninvited Hat  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Creepy, foul, gross, what a wonderful way to approach the idea of a zombie. Start with a zombie hat then follow with the chaser of its owner. I would not have opened the door the second time. That was his second mistake. The first was not throwing the hat back outside.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Awesome story!I had times like that in my family. My sister and I had an old tape recorder and 1 tape. We would record ourselves acting out little stories with our my little pony toys with plastic dinosaurs as the villains. We would listen to that tape and then tape over the stories with new ones. The characters became very detailed. This story reminded me of those stories and the times before my family fell apart. Thanks.
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Review by Rainy Day Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely poem. Very lyrical. It tells so many stories in so few words. The rhymes aren't forced and fit exactly where they should be.it awesomely fits the prompt. I would put in a drop or pop note telling about where the poem came from, writer's cramp prompt and date.
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Review of Legends are born  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ooh sounds like something i really want to read! It definitely hooked me! the alien names are just enough to tell you we aren't talking a local tale. The suspense in the last sentence is perfect and I liked the poetic nature of the last bit. It has just the right number of words.
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Review of Adriana's Tale  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ew that's gross and terrifying and really impossible to look away from, like a particularly bad car accident. The creature was scary playing on every fearful characteristic I can think of, venom, spiders, alienness, it is just creepy
I wondered from the beginning how she would kill it. And I love that she used lightning!
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Review by Rainy Day Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Awesome poem. I feel like that a lot because I have trouble believing anyone could find something in me worth loving. Sometimes a mirror on the wall is a liar and you must see your reflection in another human being's eyes to see the truth. I would put your note on the poem in a drop or pop note so that it doesn't take away from the power of the poem.
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Review by Rainy Day Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That would be a scary fortune cookie. Audits are nothing to sneeze at. The government makes all the rules, and if they say you owe, they can get it out of you one way or another, even in ways they do not allow other debtors. They can take your house, your car, and even auction off personal items. Best to pay what they say when they say or you will pay more in interest and penalties.
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Review by Rainy Day Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Okay, it is pretty good. definite conflict with nature over the rain. the main character isn't as clear in my mind as he could be. Dialog is good but so is description. Yes his words illustrate his character but a little more description of his actions would be good.

THe format of this story and poem are a little confusing. It is hard to tell where the paragraphs start and stop. Also in short stories Dialog looks more like, ( So and so said, "I said this." then you end the paragraph and you have the second person respond. Other person said, "My response is ..." or "My response is..." THe other person said.) the key is making sure there is a clear paragraph break between the words spoken by different characters. On this site it is a good idea to put two returns between paragraphs to make things clear, the tab key does nothing in the text boxes.
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Review of A Favor  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Yeah, a little predictable on the name chosen, but it is a good story. One thing the bard down in Stratford was a lot later in history than merlin and Arthur. That really threw me out of the story. It lost believability for me somewhere in that. I would leave out the mention of the young writer.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Surreal action. I wish it were possible but it sounds really fun and cool. I wish I had the balls to jump out of a window like that. I admire her for her great faith. It is an encouraging story that shows God works in ways one would not expect. That is the only way a jury-rigged contraption like that would work for anyone but MacGyver
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Review of The Diagnosis  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Cool short story, not cool what is happening to Rylan. But it is an early diagnosis and the doctor seems hopeful. I felt you made a good use of the prompt phrase. I did not see it coming but when it arrived it made good sense. What was the reason for the alternate font used earlier in the piece?
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That is sooo cute! I love the animals, they are such characters. I didn't know hogs liked the taste of turkey either. Daisy is especially cool. She is smarter than I thought a cow would be, but the way you wrote her it seems perfectly natural that she would be that smart. There are a couple of places where the formatting is a little off, paragraphs with returns in the middle of them and places where another return is needed between paragraphs.
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Review of Lake Bonewater  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The long blank space after the story was suitably ominous. Definitely a lovely horror tale. Poor Charlie. To have been transformed unwillingly into a monster and the to be murdered because of it that leaves the two scientists deserving of every horror they will reap.
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Review by Rainy Day Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
THis is an ominous poem. It follows the prompt as far as I can tell. It could use more description of what the prompt is in a drop note, perhaps also a small description of the contest just in case the contest ever gets removed. I always hate when the link I put there for my information comes back invalid item.
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Review of The Journey Home  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That is a graphically disgusting poem. Since I think that is what I think you were aiming for way to go you. It sounds like a horrible fate ahead for the sinful. It reminds me of WWII. Of the dead soldiers, and of the concentration camps mass graves happened just to keep disease from spreading.
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Review of LEPRECHAUNS  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Cute poem. I love the characters especially uncle pat. The rhyme scheme seems good to me. I like trading the shamrock for a truck. And loved the drinking the pub dry. I didn't expect the whole family of leprechauns thing that was cool. I wonder if you could come up with more verses.
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Review by Rainy Day Sox Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I didn't expect the ending. I also did not expect Dudley to be so whip smart from the descriptions in the beginning of the story or the goofy name and nickname.

It says it was based on a picture It would be a great idea to put the picture and a link to the contest into a drop note.

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Review of The Star  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Okay, it is a cute story, but I feel like there should be some kind of explanation of what the star actually was. Was she touched by an angel, or aliens, or was it some kind of medical thing? I thought it could be more inspirational if you had given some kind of reason for it since you make sure to make it clear that she looks up every day for the rest of her life. Is she just grateful to be alive to look? If so, please show more clearly how desperate her situation was. Is she on an IV or oxygen or some other medical equipment that would scare her into worrying about how close she came...

Also I would suggest a larger font for people with limited vision. It would make this more accessible to a wider audience.

In the end I love what you wrote but wanted more...

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Review of Ol' Man Doolittle  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
How horrible. I spent a good chunk wondering how Dolittle died. Then I wondered how the mortician got out from under the loan, and then I wondered about his sanity. Not sure if the corpse actually rose or if he was just hallucinating it. The coin is a nice touch.
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