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Review of Light the Way  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is a strange ride to say the least. it is almost like two poems stacked on one another with slightly different subjects. the upper part goes together but the last collection of lines veers from the path set by the first few stanzas. It might could use a rewrite separating it into two poems.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (4.5)
interesting musings it makes me think of the way atoms resemble solar systems or galaxies and how tiny structures can be modeled by bigger ones and the bigger structures are like nesting dolls. I sometimes wonder if our galaxy is really an atom of a larger universe too big for us to comprehend.
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Review of Ink  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem is a little confusing to me. I am not sure whether it is an offer of support or an offer to help tear the reader down. It is pretty surreal and doesn't necessarily make any logical sense to me it reminds me of songs my wife listens to I can't remember what the genre is called but it is pretty twisted.

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Review of Birthday poem  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I don't recognize all of the words. Are they from a language other than English? if they are you might make the reader aware of that in a footnote and perhaps give a rough translation. Language aside I understood enough to realize this is a poem about a rare and beautiful love.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
this poem is full of romance, cliche double entendre, and metaphors for less than chaste acts, at least that is how I read it. why are the two vessels at odds like this? Is it wartime are they pirate ships. The vessel is very feminine but then most sailing vessels are shes so this is almost like two women engaging one another.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (3.5)
THe format on this story is rough. It needs broken up into paragraphs. Traditional places to place the breaks are with topic changes and each speaker should have their own paragraph to speak. It helps the reader figure out who is talking when. It also feels like there is a little tense confusion, sometimes it is present tense sometimes past tense. I get temporally lost in this I don't know what is happening when. the premise sounds really good and it could be a solid story. keep writing and experiment with breaking things into paragraphs.
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Review of Let Me Be The One  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That is so romantic. I like the two hearts fated to beat as one. That is how I feel about my wife. We met thanks to a wild series of nearly impossible situations and we haven't really been apart since. it is like I waited my whole life to hear her say "let me be the one."

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Poor kitty, saddled with a far too adoring owner. Don't blame it a bit. I try to give my animals enough freedom to be them. I don't force them to bathe i don't force them to let me brush them. I usually don't make them wear sweaters. Okay it has happened once or twice. but my loving dogs would never let the cats disappear me. Right?

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Review of On Dragons Wings  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a cool little tale. I think a sarcastic dragon is a nice new twist on the age old virgin sacrifice tale. The poor woman getting tied up for passing through town and staked out as a sacrifice is really easy to see happening though in most dragon tale situations you don't think of young women traveling abroad alone, without burly armor clad male escorts. i can't see kieran traveling like that though. she is a real free thinker and I can see her and mohng getting into loads of trouble together I will consider checking amazon out.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this poem and readily admit to being an introvert too. The whole poem rings extraordinarily true to my life and experiences. There is nothing more frustrating to me than people insisting that spending time alone is unhealthy. They can't stand being alone. being quiet and still enough to hear their own inner voices. They are too busy shouting down the world to know themselves and they pretend to know us better than we know ourselves. they are the real joke in reality. they wouldn't know what to do if they didn't have others dancing about and thinking for them.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I have known people like willie pete. They are absolute life sucks. Meaning they suck the life out of everyone and everything around them. They are worse than vampires because they don't have any of the weaknesses that vampires have. They don't care for garlic but aren't repulsed by it as witnessed by their breath. Sunlight pisses them off but doesn't turn them to dust. And well a stake to the heart works but that is murder not manslaughter no matter how you argue it. Yep, nothing to do but avoid these cheery people.

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Review of Ya Know?  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, anger management is probably a good place for this man. Though I don't think he goes to enough sessions per week. He might need to get help with his addictions. Though I don't think there is a coffee anonymous, maybe I should check with Lilli she would know. nevermind. i don't like the way he thinks it is okay to hit her. It is never okay no matter how long you have gone without coffee. I am a coffee drinker too but I go in for the fru-fru latte mocha cappuccino stuff I don't hit it hard like this guy seems to. He has a problem. I don't have a problem, Ya know?
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Review of Her  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Her? who is she? is she a lost love? another victim of a murder. Is this guy a cop or a coroner or a paramedic? his ex-wife still cooks for him? a lot of questions after finishing this one. I don't like roger but it seems like every story like this there is a roger. I come away from this thinking this guy is a detective and is fairly new at crime scenes like this. for some reason I feel like there is a serial killer at work in this. Perhaps she was one of his victims. Why does the pearl anklet cause him to think of her?
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Review of To my love  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
that is a heartwrenching poem. the poet has been badly hurt. I cannot tell whether it was by a lover or a parent. I know I have felt this way about either at times. it sounds more like a parent because of the boy you built line but I don't want to presume. I think a lover is a part of building oneself as well. They are often a big part of how you measure yourself against the world. If that yardstick is ripped away it can tear a person down and lead to some of the feelings expressed in this poem.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
THis is a really hard story to read for an animal lover. I understand that animals may have to die for people to eat, but I don't often encounter examples of it that rub my nose in it. The deer is dying so that the people can continue to live but that doesn't mean I like it any. I see bambi in my mind's eye.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is incredibly sad. the idea of native American priorities being changed so drastically. Nature vs a casino. Greed is contagious and it seems that this reservation has caught a bad case of it from the white men. I guess being nature poor is better than being money poor. but is it really? I don't think so.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
interesting Poem? it really doesn't read like a poem. It reads like a snippet of a scene. It doesn't feel finished. I read it and am left wanting more but not in a good way. it could have been something cool. the idea is really creative but the final execution of that idea just didn't hit the mark for me. I'm sorry.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Global warming is real. Tornados are becoming more common and devastating than they used to. this poem really does talk of this basic change to our world in a way that hits home for everyone. Or at least it should. nobody is outside of the danger zone when it comes to devastating weather something needs to be done or it will only get worse.
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Review of The Lesson  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I have never had the balls to try skiing. But then I have practically broken my leg tripping over a wrinkle in a throw rug. I don't have the necessary physical prowess for a complex sport that requires balance while moving. I mean staying upright while sliding down hill? That is just more than I think I am capable of. Kudos to you on your coordination.
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Review of The Final Verse  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
such a complex message for a simple poem. you pack skads of meaning in just a few words. I love it. not everyone can manage to be so concise yet clear about what they are trying to say. You are both literal and figurative in your language and the words you have used each say so much. It is a really good poem.
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Review of Chapter 5  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
I was sure the number wouldn't connect, it was 40 years old if it even worked in the first place. for all the mars seem helpful I think that is the least of their duties. I think they are meant to herd the returnees into a tight group so they can be used for some nefarious purpose. I don't think they care in the least about them.
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Review of Chapter 4  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Cool he got away! yea! still totally rooting for him. I hope that he finds his wife soon. This story is sucking me in big time. You really have something cool here. Maybe he should have taken some of the clothes in the closets just in case. We really don't know what he is facing out in the world now.
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Review of Chapter 3  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
I like the writing style. Just the right amount of showing and telling. I wonder how the tv rod is powered I like that he is in a new time and new body and new life and he has already resorted to theft. It bodes well for his chances in this brave new world. I am not as worried about him as I was in the last two chapters.
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Review of Chapter 2  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Oh that is quite the bait and switch. Telling them they would be awoken together and then doing this to them. This company doesn't seem on the up and up. I don't think I like where this is going. The world doesn't seem to be as advertised by the tv or the letter from his wife. Why would they lock him in? Not goodness is all over this thing.
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Review of To liver  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Interesting. an ode to liver. The author's? or his supper? i can't really tell from this short poem. it speaks against an overindulgence in alcohol. I like the poem though I can't necessarily follow the shifts in it well enough to tell for sure which liver is being spoken of. This really isn't a very good review for a fairly good poem. I appologize.
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