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Review of Still Here  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am not quite sure what happened here, I think it was a tornado, but it could have just as easily been some kind of timeslip that wiped away the house from having ever existed. The characters are just as unclear to me. I am not sure about their full relationships, I don't know how old people are. It just seems kind of messy to me.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Interesting short story. I love the very limited point of view. The way her mind comes and goes. It reveals the story in a piecemeal way ever more satisfying than a simple omniscient info dump would have been. I appreciate the skill with witch this story has been assembled. I wonder how much longer the main character can keep this up.
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Review of The awakening  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an interesting story, very experimental in style. I like the gounhog day aspects of it. It is very hard to follow though. Dialog is usually set off with "quotation" marks. Other punctuation is lacking. The spelling seems pretty good but i think the whole thing would benefit from a grammar check
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Review of Pip  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh what a sweet story. I love pip. It is sweet but bittersweet. It reminds me that my furbabies will not always be with me in the fur. I hope pip's family is ready to come home to life without him.
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Review of Memory  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
this is a good poem, well written. I love the humorous take on memory loss. I also know that it isn't as funny when it happens to you. Memory loss is a scary thing when you realize it's happening to you. I like the humor but I don't want people to forget the serious side of it.
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Review of Baby Steps  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a good poem about the risks of love. The poet seems to be honestly cautionary with prospective suitors. Her self assessment is frankly one I sympathize with though I have not been hurt so many times that stabbing first is my first reaction. I guess I am more the patiently healing type.
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Review of I am a woman  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I heartily approve of this assessment of what it takes to be a woman. I can't think of a thing you left off that I would add, and I wouldn't subtract any of your points either. I wish I could claim the words of this poem to apply to myself but I have too poor a self-image to see myself as beautiful.
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Review of Peaceful Handover  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nice piece. I love the way human greed led to the complete loss of control for the whole human race. I am glad this wasn't just another dystopian hate the machine terminator knock off. it seemed an almost pleasant conquest of humanity. it leaves me hopeful that maybe it won't be so bad to be a slave to the machine empire.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It is very well written. There are a few typos but nothing that really annoys me, a couple of double commas in the middle. As for the subject matter it is an interesting take on 50's scifi fodder taking the point of view of the "monster".

I do find her goal a bit shallow and flat until you revealed her parents kept her on a tight dietary leash. Perhaps a little more of this backstory in explanation would help make her more sympathetic.

It was an interesting story, personally though it wasn't really my cup of tea.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This story seems to have a lot of potential. I like the main character who seems to have an admirable goal despite personal losses. That said he seems like only a quick caricature of a boy rather than a fully rounded character. I think you need to take some time developing him before you leap in and write to much, some questions that you should know the answers to.
#1 how did he lose his parents.
#2 other than being a hero, what is his biggest wish/ goal
#3 what is his biggest fear/ weakness?
#4 who is he in his deepest self.

These chapters are very short, their contents seem more like an outline for a chapter rather than a chapter in and of themselves.

Expand on things. Instead of saying what happens try describing images and other senses. How hot does the fire feel? What does it feel like to get a third degree burn. How is he holding the child to manage to keep him from getting burned.

In the second chapter you skip over possible character development, his burns mean medical treatments, and physical therapy, they hurt and have various sensations as they are healing, these things can be researched. His personal reactions to them show what kind of person he is better than saying he is "a nice dude," would.

good start, I hope my suggestions help you to bring this story up to its fullest potential.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This should be labeled fan fiction as well, It has clear ties to the Star Trek universe. I love the characters and the premise of the story I may go on to read the next chapter. I would like to know if they find a successful treatment for the virus. I like the way it ties in Covid 19. It makes it a timely story and ads to the urgency of the predicament. The mechanics of the piece are good and it doesn't have any glaring grammar or spelling issues that I can see, at least none that drag me from the enjoyment of the story.

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Review of Atychiphobia  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
interesting story. I have said that in a lot of reviews recently, but I have been coming up pretty lucky in picking things to read. I love the mythology and all, but it seems to be a pretty desperate battle for survival. It sets things up really well for an epic battle between good and evil and then we fade out just as the epic battle begins. That part is a bit of a disappointment. I was really looking forward to finding out which side would win. I was hoping that Lione would win. I feel really bad for him.

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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found this story interesting. It reminds me of some stories I played around with writing when I was younger. I find it coincidental that Stelsong could so easily appear human. Perhaps it would help to clarify how. Some of the grammar is stilted and there are some places where words have obviously been accidentally left out. I would suggest reading it aloud to so that you can make sure it says what you think it does. Overall it is a good draft. I would be interested in reading more if you have any.
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Review of Northern light  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting poem. I like the metaphor of windows. They tie the poem together well. They seem to signify all things good, hope, wealth, connection. At the same time they can be negative. He values the eastern, western, and southern views but states "There is No Glory in northern light." it reminds me of the sense of failure that comes with returning home to live as an adult.
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Review of Natural Immunity  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oooh creepy. I wad thinking about so many things that could happen. I did not expect the trees to eat the people. It wasn't a twist because it was foreshadowed, but i just didnt quite see that happening. At one point i thought the men would suicide rather than let it be trashed.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
There are several places where you used of when i think you meant off. It is very full of dialog for a battle scene. Perhaps less talkie more fightie would help. Speeding up the pace of it might be good too. But i am nitpicking. I like the story even though historical fiction isn't one of my favorite genres.
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Review of Dear Me (2013)  
Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I love the structure you set up in using a complaint letter as your form. I love the tongue in cheek tone throughout. I like how you are critical of certain past results while being proactively encouraging to yourself on future exploits. Bravo. Excellent piece!
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Review of A Displaced Man  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The punctuation and capitalisation are erratic. I cant fault that much, i do it myself more than i like to admit. The subject matter gets a little. Wobbly in the second half, like it should maybe split into two poems. I don't know though. I love the imagery of the first two stanzas. But the last one confuses me a bit.
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Review of Snokum Joe  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
One-eyed Billy sounds like a glutton for punishment, or maybe he's just not the sharpest shovel in the shed. I would look for a kindly old grandmother's grave after the first one. Or is this semetary full of the oneriest cusses in creation. Maybe Billy should just save time and dig his own grave.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It is an interesting story, it sounds like you did a good job of keeping it age appropriate. I like the conversational tone and the comfortable way you
"spoke" to your granddaughter. Sharing things like this with the younger generation is a treasure in the making. Someday when she is a grandmother she will pull this journal out and show it to her grandkids and tell them about their great-great-granmother.
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Review of My Writings  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You wrote a cute little poem here, I like the repetitive patterns you used. It was a longer poem than I usually write and I admire you for that. I appreciate that you didn't use any unnecessarily flowery words. This poem has a clear point it is trying to make and I rather like it.
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Review of Closet  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this story, and especially the double twist, first the monster is real, then it is just a dream. The characterization is cool I love the demonic father reassuring his demonic daughter it is awfully sweet. I was worried it was some kind of monster forcing him to be so sleepy.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This poem is strong. I like the story it tells about someone who is too proud to accept help when they need it. THey have charity for everyone else in the world except themselves. I have known a lot of people with that affliction. Working three jobs to get by rather than applying for aid from the government or going to food banks. It can be a scary way to live. Wouldn't it be better for everyone to realize everyone depends on everyone else.
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Review of ~KARMA~  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a good story of Karma. It is told well through the format of memos and diary entries. I don't know the prompt but I am certain it is an excellent adaptation. The upright character Mandy displays is apparent from the beginning. I suspected Sally of setting her up from the beginning. I am glad she got hers and got fired. I am also Glad Mandy got not one but two good jobs in the end.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Whoa! Did you write that? Wow. It is a serious discussion of a subject that most people don't want to think about. I don't know how it manages it but it is simultaneously dark and hopeful. It rides the edge between dragging you down and lifting you up with the concept that death is universal so why anticipate it live instead. I liked this even though it got very deep and philosophical.
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