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Review of Tabloid  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
this is a very vivid image-filled piece of flash fiction. I like the way the tension builds. The emotions vacillate between comforting and raw pain until they land in the misery of confirmation that the woman really is his childhood friend and her fate was unpleasant.
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Review of Taytum Willows  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
this is a good character sketch. It gives a concise description of the character. a few questions I ask myself about my characters include what are their favorites. Books, movies, sports, activities, quotes, colors, outfits etc. I also ask myself why they are their faves. Where do they live, what is their bedroom like, and why. Dreams, hopes, future plans. I know it's a lot, but the more you know about the character the better you can plan what to do with them.
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Review of Tumbling Turmoil  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
lovely poem, my only criticism is that in the third line you wrote breath when I think you mean breathe, probably a typo. Nothing major it just makes more sense in the rhythm and rhyme of the poem. I like the way you describe a life of belligerent nonconformity. Good poem.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
i have the same opinion as the author. writing is a very healing activity. also pain can lead to some of the truest most honest words one can put on paper. i appreciate the sense of loss this piece conveys and have struggled with some of the same fears myself. writing has helped me move from the pit of grief to the wide plains which follow.
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Review of THE FALL  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
whoa! the author seems to have a poor opinion of love. The male speaks of all loves sweet effervescent qualities, the female rants over its failings. It seems love has failed her a great deal. I feel for her and sometimes wonder about the rollercoaster that is love. Then I remember how true the emotion can be despite all of the lying words.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the premise and the playful tone of this piece while being informative. I wish I had this piece to read when I first interacted with the Grammar Jungle. I fought many a battle with the Ignoramoose in my time. It still comes around every once and a while. Very cute
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Review of Hope and Maybe  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am not familiar with the series this is a fanfiction from, but it does intrigue me. I wonder where the writer is going with this. I think it has great potential. I hope the author extends this story because I am interested in reading some more about this character.
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Review of The Real Me  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a short trip through a long journey. I appreciate what it sounds like the author went through. I didn't have it that rough. My mother seemed to accept me, whomever I loved. My stepfather wasn't the least bit surprised when I came out. The only real trial in my experience is my strict Christian father. I know my journey hasn't been as hard as this one but I find the strength of the author putting it down on paper and appreciate the boldness of it.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That is a profound exchange. I love the images that played in my mind with this story. I remember the movie. I recently read the book. The whole existential debate that it leaves me with is perfectly captured in this brief piece. In the neverending story the book the residents of fantastic (fantasia) become lies when they enter our world, this would imply that the afterlife is a lie.
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Review of Space Kid  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It is an interesting character sketch that leaves me considering examining the portfolio of the author to find out if any of the stories about the character are posted. Usually, I put more detail into my character sketches, but I have OCD. As long as the author knows them it's all good.
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Review of happy new year  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The poem was full of grammatical errors, and other things that the author probably missed in the rush to put down the words and images in their head. It happens to me all the time. I enjoyed the images and sentiments. I would recommend looking into Grammarly it finds errors for me all the time and helps me fix them properly.


"Many people has lost there job"- has should be have, there should be their

"That use to be an important part of the machine"- use should be used

"As long as we don't meet our fate to early" - to should be too

"I ain't ready to see that pearly entrance gat" - you left the e off of gate

"Or even if i'm for hell with hitler and the boys" capitalization errors, I'm, Hitler

"I ain't ready feels like im only 10% into a mission" - im should be I'm

"Star shopping while hoping i keep on coping" capitalization errors, I
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Review of Fred & Deborah  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Short sweet and to the point. I think I will probably spend more words talking about what I felt about the story than are in the story. I wonder whether they are in high school or college. I wonder what kind of relationship they have. Is he known for being inconsiderate. She seems all too ready to accept his dismissal. In the end, he proves to be something other than a complete jerk.
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Review of HURRY SUNDOWN  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this poem. I wonder why the poet is so timid about the daylight hours. Is it because of the expectation of action during them? It feels very agoraphobic with the images of being trapped and all. I am glad these aren't my emotions it sounds like a hard way to live.
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Review of The Dance  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a story full of wonder and whimsy. I love the grandmother. The little girl was cute too. She seemed like she was five or six, still young enough to believe in unicorns. I love that the grandmother has such a beautiful memory of such a magical encounter.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Wow, what an inspired take on the commercialization of Christmas! Davinci is not the only genius involved with this story. I love the names you gave the elves. It is great how you wound in tolkien and dickens. Would your name be clair by chance? I look forward to the further adventures of Legolas and Clair. There is so much more they could do.
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Review of Celebrate  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Such a happy little poem, i like it. I feel the exact same way about writing dot com. I wish I had found this website way back in 2011. That would have given me so many more years with the lovely people on here. This was a random review and I am glad this poem came up.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
this is an interesting story premise i like it. it is interesting to consider what it might be like for people who only exist in a simulation. it reminds me of a doctor who episode from a few years back. in that episode they were in a simulated reality and when they received proof that it was a simulation they committed suicide.
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Review of 2020 Review  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a laundry list of why 2020 has been crap. It is presented in a concise and pleasant way, somethings 2020 have not been. I think it wonderful that you could write something so pretty about such an ugly topic. Kudos for that accomplishment. I would like to echo your closing and say that I hope you make it through the holidays safely.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (4.5)
It has beautiful images and interesting word choices. It doesn't have a clear form. The images and language don't flow together easily in my head. They seem pretty unconnected. The poem appears to be reaching for something. I am not sure it reaches that target.
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Review of The Visitors  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
It is an interesting story of the paranormal. There are a few minor flaws, one in the first paragraph you typed wee when I believe you meant were. In the second paragraph you say it is 1974 when in the first paragraph you said 1975 you said the second paragraph happened after the first. Not major flaws, probably typo's but they did lessen my attachment to your story.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Don't forget wdc is a community too. I have found it to be even more important this year being that my interactions here haven't changed. I don't have to adapt to a new normal here. It also helps to ease some of the stress on the things that have changed. Thank you for your comforting view on life.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Very concise and interesting report on Brazil. The sentence containing "and the country became United Kingdom with Portugal" doesn't sound quite right I think "a" needs to go between became and United. Also there are a lot of run-on sentences. It is intellectually intriguing, but somewhat lacking in finer polish.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is the best! I love the contest and that you are asking for suggestions for topics!
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Review of Turkeys' Revenge  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Two very cute limericks. I was dually entertained. the rhymes were good, they didn't seem stretched at all. Limericks can be hard to get right. They are a lot more difficult than they seem on the surface. I really appreciate it when they are done well and these two are.
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Review of Chapter 1  
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
It is a good opening chapter. I like the way the story is unfolding. I am left with a question of why he would have his brain removed and frozen. Was he in poor health? Will age related mental problems hit him while his new body is still relatively young? Where is his wife?
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