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Review of 000  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
This is a sub-par story. The characterization is flat. There are a number of grammatical errors. Even the layout style of the piece is inconsistent. It is just a poor excuse for male eroticisim. it lacks the style and subtlety necessary to appeal to more than a horney adolescent audience.
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677
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting first chapter, there are a few edit points, hung is the past tense of hang not hanged. For consistency there are a few paragraphs that need hard returns between them to make for an easier read.
That all said, I love the characters and the unfolding drama. I feel for Harley about losing her mom, the whole thing reminds me a little of Guardians of the Galaxy a bit, I
am not sure why but I like it.
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678
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love it! I totally agree with the message of this piece. Individuality has been steamrolled in the name of equality. Separate but equal got a bad rep because bad people used it to hurt and divide. The truth is that if each type of learner were taught separately but with equal effort and resources the world would be a much more vibrant and creative place.
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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
That is an imaginative alternate history. I like it. I think you have a good chance in the contest but that is just my opinion. I love the characters, including the whale and the old man. It has a mystical flavor and speaks of wonders we don't see in our version of history.
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680
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
That was a complete well-rounded story. It was highly satisfying. The build up had just the right amount of angst and tension. The part about the betrayal was good, I think everyone has met at least one douche bag like that. The lunch and mutual confession of love was perfect. The kiss was sensual. The ending was priceless and really paid off the passing mention of the video in the beginning. Applause all around. I am only giving this a five-star review because ten is not possible.
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Review of Underneath  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm a little confused. In the beginning it seems like he is trying to convince her to go, but in the end he seems to be killing her to keep her from spreading the word about it. I re-read it several times and couldn't quite make sense of it. It sounds like it would be a really good story if that little thing were cleared up better.
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Review of Strange  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It is an interesting story. Short but interesting, perhaps it is more of a start to a story. What I am left wondering is exactly what that spider needs a human to do. Is it trying to take over the world? How exactly did it learn to talk. And where did it get a mouth dropping amount of money to pay tyler?
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Review of City Slicker, Sam  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Okay, the punchline was that they were horses, there are hints that they aren't human from the beginning but trying to maintain the ambiguity makes the story a little rough to read. There are places where I was like, oh that isn't normal, but it all made sense in the end.
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684
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting take on the prompt. I like that they both got what they wanted. Does he really need the wishbone? He seems to have gotten the meal he wished for? The jump between scenes was a little jarring for me but given what it is, a dialog 500 entry there wasn't much you could do about that. I like it.
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Review of Existing  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very personal poem. It demonstrates a difficult inner struggle beating up against a less than cooperative external reality. I feel for the author, questioning the mark they are leaving on a world that doesn't seem to want them there. It is painful yet seems just the tiniest bit hopeful in places.


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686
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
As the prompt indicates, this is a snapshot of a Chinese street. I love the highly embellished details of Chinese life the poem contains. There are elements that I think of when I think about China, then there are some that I should but didn't the most surprising image I got was of the Starbucks. Leave it to us to intrude in such a beautiful sounding place.


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687
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this poem. It captures the soldier's side of their sacrifice. A lot of what is written covers the family's side of the sacrifice. Both sides have their meaning and both are equally important. It is a family divided for the sake of all. I appreciate the sacrifices this poem represents


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688
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I think this is a cute poem. I am glad to have been exposed to a new form of poetry. It is similar enough to haiku for me to think I could try this myself. I found the subject humorous and serious at the same time. I like the whole thing a lot. Personally, I wish I wrote it.


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Review of Saving The Earth  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a sad story of the truth of things in our modern world. "Progress for progress sake," is the Emporer of our planet, we all bow to it,. Even though our Emporer is naked few have the sense or courage to speak out against it. I applaud the writer for tackling this topic in a sensible and sympathetic way.


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Review of Outlook  
Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: E | (5.0)
This really captures the subject. I feel the rhythm of a person being bent to adapt to modern technology. It is a sadly true snapshot of our modern life. the only thing I think is sadder is the "new normal" we have settled ourselves into today. I like this poem.
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Review of Down But Not Out  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this poem. It captures the heart of a fighter in the moments before losing a fight he cannot win. It has good rhyme and rhythm. I can't really find fault in it. I am left wondering if by some miracle he has managed to win the fight or if he ultimately falls in defeat.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very passionate piece. The grammar isn't the best. The format is a bit blocky. The language isn't the fanciest. That said, I wouldn't necessarily change a thing. It has more meaning the way it is than if it were prettied up to make other people happy.
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Review of Economy Class  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I remember when drinks and luggage were free. I haven't had the "pleasure" of flying recently but I have found that trains are a perfectly nice alternative, when available. I appreciated the effort to take this subject lightly. It is well written and I liked it a lot.


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Review of Vicky  
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
This is not appropriately rated. The implications are that Victoria is attempting to engage the male in involuntary sexual activity. It is not appropriate for everyone. The writing style is good but I cannot in good conscience give this a higher rating because of its inappropriate content for people under the age of 18.
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695
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
yikes, what a dystopian story of a dream gone bad. it is good to think sometimes about how dangerous it can be to finally get the things you are wishing for. All too often in life, people discover that the things that they have hoped, prayed, and wished for to fix the problems in their lives are the things they needed least.


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Review of 2 - The Mentor  
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a good story. I like the way you handled the subject matter. My sister is in an abusive relationship. I really felt the main character's conflicted feelings and apparent confusion over how to help. If you continue this I hope you reveal more of what is going on with the sister.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Another round of good character development in this chapter. It makes clear that there will be an epic story ahead. I hope the two youngsters find each other safely, though a little drama is obviously necessary. I dont like that the heroes have so many troubles surrounding them, but it will make for a great story.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It is an excellent opening chapter. It draws you in and gives you the lay of the land without seeming bogged down by an info dump. I find the characters very likeable and am drawn into the tension of the coming battle. I feel for everything they have been through and am already rooting for them.


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699
Review by Sox and Sandals
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a well formatted lesson on writing. I think I will look into reading the full course because all the points in this section seemed logical, valid and well put as were the suggested exercises.

I would be interested in taking this course and believe it could improve the structure and content of my work.


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Review by Sox and Sandals
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the tone of this piece and it expresses the passion of a very precious love between two people who have been apart. I don't think I could handle being apart from my beloved for much longer than an afternoon and the feeling of this poem left me with a delicious sort of tension in my heart.

One thing though, I am not entirely certain but I don't think alright is actually a word. I could be wrong even if I am I don't feel like it fits in this piece.
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