Well, hello there: Was scanning the horror section and the title and description grabbed my attention.
What I love about your work: This has a lot of potential to be a fun slasher. You've got a good setting just in the description alone, you need to carry it further.
Why I could relate to your work: I love slasher flicks, and this totally felt like one. I hope to see you continue it.
My suggestions: Well, obviously, this needs more. It's hard to judge off of only a couple of paragraphs. But I do have a few ideas.
The first is, if your main character is the killer, you need to change the opening. That much personal angst with friends and bitterness immediately sends up red flags. You may want to do more showing of why the character is so peeved at his/her friends, instead of telling us. If they're not the killer, you still want to develop it more. We need to see why the friends are so obnoxious, not just be told.
Secondly, I would recommend going into more details about the room with Tara in it. Is the bed rumpled, perfectly made? Has her blood pooled on the floor below, seeping into wood or splashing across tile., soaking carpet. Did the tang of copper blanket the air, fragrance of death, something smell-wise? Instead of saying blood, use words like crimson, her life, etc. You want to involve us more with the death scene, bring it more to life. Yeah, the irony's not lost on me, you want to make the death scene more lively. The same could be said about the turning off the faucet moment.
Thirdly, you should break this into more paragraphs. The emotions caused by the friend should be separate, the search for the source of the drip should be separate, so should Tara's room, even the scream for help. You want to break it up, help with the flow of the story.
"Not that it was scary, but the silence was all too suspenseful." This line bothered me because suspenseful does not seem like the right word. Ominous, malevolent... something dark. Suspenseful feels like the main character should be chewing their nails in a corner cause that quiet is gonna get them. Hope that makes sense.
And my last suggestion is just a reminder, try to stay in the same tense the whole time. The last line, you switch to present tense, but you've written the tale in past. You want to keep it one way unless you're doing like flashbacks and such, but this doesn't feel like that. Tenses are terribly distracting to the reader when they switch around.
Any noticeable typos: Nothing more than what I've already pointed out.
In conclusion: I think you could have something fun if you clean it up a bit and develop it more. I would like to see more character development and see where you take the story. So, keep it up, hope to see more. As they say, write on.
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