I found your item while perusing the Comedy Genre page. I was specifically looking for items having to do with autos and their repair needs, as my Comedy Newsletter has that theme going. Also, I should tell you that this particular item will be included as an Editor's Pick in the 6/14 edition.
This story reached me in so many ways. I, too, love my car or SUV, rather, but she is my baby. She's a 2005 Volvo, and now going through extensive repair work for her rusted underparts, due to the winters she had spent up North, during snow and salting seasons.
Now she winters in Florida, and I'm patiently awaiting her "wellness" so I can get back on the road and up North, again. She, just like your car, seems to have a little attraction to my mechanic, because each year, here, she insists on a visit that will last at least one night or two.
Your story was amusing and I understand all that you describe. I believe it was a little bit wordier than necessary, for example:
"I probably should have pulled over and phoned my loving dad for assistance, but I was only two minutes away from home, given that I didn’t get stuck behind a snail disguising itself as a human driver."
Fathers should be loving, thus that is understood. The snail disguised as a human driver, is good and needs to stay.
TRY: I should have pulled over and called my dad for assistance, but I was only a few minutes from home, that is, unless I got stuck behind a snail disguised as a human driver.
This is just an example of writing tighter and keep the impact of the story going. There were a couple other spots that could use a trim, I just grabbed this one for an example.
However, the overall story hit me hard, made me chuckle and identify personally with your woes about a car you love.
I found it rather interesting that you gave your car a male name. My car is "Ruby." As far back as I can remember, I have given cars female names.
Well done!
Until next time--write on!
Regards,
WebWitch
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