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You are very good in your painting a picture of innuendos that a reader can color in. And, I did a lot of coloring in.
I am reviewing your item because you sent me a request. Although I have my Review Request off, and do not usually accept requests for reviews as a matter of fact, I sometimes do respond to a request.
I have to say, I probably needed to know more about the Hangman's daughter as a series, whereby we understand where this character is coming from. However, I do not have the time to play catch-up on the series, if this is what I glean from your brief description.
Also, whose secretions were on the sheets other than his? Since there is no foundation of having had intimacy with another character. So that needs a bit clearing up, also.
There are some formatting issues. Paragraphs should start a couple spaces from the last paragraph to keep the flow smooth on electronic screens. 
Otherwise, I like the storyline, the mystery, the thriller aspect of it.
I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the Random Review generator.
Okay, it is definitely a rhyming poem. I see it has to do with a relationship gone awry. That is probably one of the topics most often related to readers in poetry -- especially because mostly everybody can relate to this topic.
You show great spirited release of emotion through your pen.
It may be a simple rhyme, but if there is a connection with a reader, it is a fine poem.
I'm not a big fan of excessive rhyme, such as a matching ,rhyme ending in every verse. It tends to have a sing-songy effect, (as a nursery rhyme has) when over used with simple rhyming words.
If there were unusual words added for impact, I think it would have raised this poem to a different level.
I am happy this item appeared for me tonight. It is my last review for today, and I have to tell you ... you couldn't be more right in your observations.
It really disgusted me to hear those words come out of that woman's moth. Imagine labeling all of us who didn't find her, the answer to our country's needs at this moment "deplorables."
Your family's gene pool is what made America a great country -- a free country. God bless your husband for his sacrifices.
I could see your great-great grand father , hiding in the hills awaiting the Northern soldiers to pass through so he could join up with them. His wife being Indian, made him even more determined to end such discrimination and treatment of some, as second class citizens. So horrible a time in our history.
I appreciate your story -- hopefully it will make others stop and think about the cost of freedom. Yes, our freedom is that important to us, and that includes the freedom to choose someone to run our country, and having that opportunity every four years, without reducing it to a name-calling event.
I am also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy genre page.
The two characters kept a fine dialogue going. The story as well as the mystery were also unfolding for the reader to see the picture being painted before her eyes. 
The she-cat was very convincing in her efforts to get to the truth of this so called mistress and almost ask him, but not quite, you understand, "what's she got that I don't have?" Irresistible flavor baby! 
This was a fun and amusing read. In fact, I am highlighting it in next week's Comedy Newsletter. 
Do I have any suggestions for improvement? Are you kidding me? How can one improve on such bad?
I didn't know if the intentional part should be taken seriously or not. Usually, when competing in contests with intentionally bad poetry or stories, the 1 star is coveted by those contestants. However, since I see no note about this being the case, nor any remarks or even mention in the brief description that this was for a contest and that 1 star is appreciated, I will just have to give you a bunch of stars for its truthfulness in being purely bad!
However, I hope this brings some brightness to you, should you be disappointed by my rating -- this terribly bad poem will be highlighted in the Comedy Newsletter, July 12. It fit the mood I was in perfectly! 
I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the Random Review generator.
I kinda saw that ending rushing to meet poor ol' friend of Binky. 
Well this poor lost soul, leaving behind his partner in crime, found his life didn't change too much. Yet, on the other hand, his little toady, the guy he ran interference for and protected in their youthful, crime spree days, has made quite a change to his life. I guess the smarter crook turned out to be Binky, after all!
What about the ol' partner's dismal discovery by the doctor? I mean we're talking about the dude's liver, right? A few pills and putting his feet up doesn't sound like a long term solution to such rot gut liquor damage upon liver. 
However, even though his reunion with the old partner in crime didn't get him saved from all his present issues, there is one very positive part to this whole puzzle ... Incarceration!
I know this is a rhyming poem with an A A, B B -type of rhyme. I am not an expert in the many types of poetic rhymes, but this appears to be line by line-end rhyme throughout, with no particular syllabic count for each line. However, I do see a problem with several lengthy lines that seem to throw the rhythm off a bit. 
I found this item while perusing the poetry genre page.
You do a fine job describing the pain and loneliness of PTSD. Here, the reader understands that although friends and family may be close-by, they still feel out of touch around that loved one who is suffering this terrible condition. It is a life changing event that can start the problem, a shock received, some horrific event endured -- something that forever haunts the mind and inner core of that person.
This appears to be a free verse poem. I enjoyed the alliteration woven within the lines. It adds a special poetic rhythm and emphasis through out.
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I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the Random Review generator.
You did a fine job weaving them into your poem. I also enjoyed the story you told within your lines. You explain the God Janus and that he is the god who gives us the New Year. Although, I think that the poem started out a bit weak, but garnered full strength and potency as the poem unfolded before the reader. The part following the prompt word-drops, I thought, made the poem's emphasis all the more special. 
These are my favorite lines:
Very nice, indeed! These lines add such impact, the reader could feel the rumble of a mythological god, as he turns the calendar to a new year and slams shut the door to the old one.
I love these diamond-shaped poems. They have such style and purpose. You did a wonderful job with your diatelle. It has perfect order of technique, within keeping the order of rhyme and rhythm. 
It's not only a poem that looks pretty laying on a blank page, but it also tells a huge story in only 15 lines.
I could picture country children grown and off to bigger cities so that they could find the proper work. Here, I could imagine the man, marrying and starting a new family, working very hard, yet stuck in the city. He missed his old home town, back in the country, where life was set at a different pace. The air was cleaner and the joys of being around family could be felt.
It had a nice emotional pull -- but mostly, it had a wonderful ending that made the reader feel good about reading it. He and his wife, took hold of their life, and returned to the place called home.
I enjoyed your story for so many nostalgic reasons -- but also, I was reminded that the stress of taking exams lingers with a person long after it is over and done with. The clock can be the enemy sometimes. 
I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the Random Review generator.
I have to agree with your observations about school, looking from both sides of the issue, as well.
However, although kids are in agreement, mostly, that school is not a very fun place to be each day, they also agree when they finally reach adulthood, that it was an important part of their future endeavors.
School should be challenging and fun, because learning should be a fun experience. Having the right teacher makes a big difference -- and yes, even for those who had nuns as teachers know that there are good ones and not so good ones in the classroom.
This was a different kind of item of yours than ones I have read before. I'm so happy it popped-up to read.However, you are just the person to write this, as you educate us each day on the Newsfeed, including pictures or videos of your berry gardens.