You sound like a salesman of sorts. I feel like I'm reading
an advertisement.
River Horse..you are talking about a hippopotamus.."related to whales!"
I guess anything is possible. Humans according to science are related
to or originated form apes or monkeys. So why not river horse to whales.
"Skin secretion has red pigment, don’t ‘sweat blood’" Its their sun block.
Its used as an antibiotic too. Isn't that great.
"Poachers kill for 20-inch, ivory tusks and meat" sounds like they're
compensating for something.
A good informational piece. I never knew hippos "cannot swim"
Nice poem. A balancing act..thats it. One has to find where the
fear originates..call on the hawk and "in that corner, the bloodletting
will be the art of your own design." The portrait "to make it to the other side"
bleeding within the subconscious..subletting the conscious.
"you do it slowly than try to walk the line."
"Hitler admired how America had taken care of its problem with its
undesirable Native Peoples " wow..I guess we feed Hitler some of his ideas.
That's jolting. Then it makes one realize how each of us affect everyone with
the things we say and do. We are all responsible a little or a lot for
the behavior of others. We are all teachers and students.
"atrocities! I might have expected it from Yankees … but Southerners!"
This made me smile because I am a Yankee now living in the south. :)
Guess what? You Southerners drive crazy...yeah..wild like! The Northerners
drive like we're in a hurry all the time..aggressively. So I guess we're even :)
I find that Southerns wave at everyone. This is unheard of in New York.
What's really behind all that niceness :) It just doesn't happen where I was from.
I got use to it though. I love smiling so I fit right in :) Its true what's been said
about the Southern hospitality. Very welcoming. I really like it here in the South. :)
No matter where one lives. There's positives and negatives. We must look
for the good. :) and wave :)
A good message. This reminds me of a review I gave a few days
ago. I was being silly..I never heard from the poet..humm. I guess
I need to be more complex :) seriously. "Even simple things," that says it all.
Sometimes childishness is looked upon as foolishness but I find it refreshing.
"From seeds of hopelessness, new hope is born."
I like this. Is it new hope or hope rejuvenated. When I
think of hopelessness, I am in a state of despair. This
emotion absorbs negative energies unless one finds
the strength within to fight. When I read what you wrote
for a second time, I find "it is good." Someone has reached
outside the window and grabbed hold of peace. Put faith
with peace, add some love.. you have "covenants completed."
All the obstacles in life will bring "smiles" as the "breeze"
brings on new wisdom and "a graceful polished contour"
is revealed.
Evil cannot win unless one submits. It will "surrender its turbulence"
when one shines the light. The light of God. Again the demon will
try..sneaking into the weaknesses of everyone. The battle remains..the
strongest survive..we decide by what we feed it.
It seems you are worried about where you are and where you're going.
Take day at a time..get from it what you can..grow. I find stressing over
something slows everything down..everything comes to a stall...then a shop is needed.
Ride each day with God or the belief that opens your spiritual window. Find the peace in knowing
he sees all.. "live the mystery of life" with a smile..seeing the good.
I like your piece..interesting. I feel like you've been sheltered in some way.
The door has opened and now many questions are asked by you.
May you find your happiness.
This is rather sad, "Gone are the days when I did look forward
To get greeting cards or some lovely gifts." Maybe you need a
sugary gift to sweeten your day. :) Hugs are nice too.
I agree with this very much.."Let’s hope New Year brings new peace in the world.
Let’s hope nations and men follow God’s word." So nicely put.
"future for which I have no fears" so you are pretty sound where
you are right now with God and self. That's awesome.
You sound like a preacher..one of God's workers.
I guess we are his helpers if we decide. This
reminding me of Christmas..true giving.
"God will smile to see me still" yes he does..he gets
sad when we stray..angry when we ask for guidance
then don't take it. God cries..angels weep. Its a deep
deep sadness.
"Walking down this winding road" God holds our hand
always.
Are we the fishers..if we can't get them one way
we find another in the tides of our dreams..
this drowning any thought of trinkets and won't the
Roman God of the Sea be angry. Maybe this should
be the tidal :)
Nice poem. I like it. I see blue :) Blue opens the flow of communication..
open mindedness ..the door opens..peace is found.
This is powerful, loaded with abuse. I can't help to say
I am stirred. I have no tolerance for meanness. Speaking
from "insanity or freedom," or both "the hard hell of the unknown"
will be seen from both sides."I do not know which direction I shall fall."
It matters not..for everyone has wings. Free "Falling" but in control like
an aerobatic pilot. :) "the rock of your existence " you have something to
lean on. God
A moving poem. It got me rolling that's for sure :) I know what you mean
when you say "it is not a simple decision." One tends to wait on that
special moment that's given intermittently. It's like taste of honey from something
bitter.
Smiling..I like buzzards. :) It's one way to give back to the earth.
Coffins are too costly plus it puts the family through too many decisions.
They can cremate me if they want..I'll probably burn in hell anyways. :)
I hope not though..I can't sleep when its too hot :) Plus I love angels.
People are like vultures hanging around at the first sign of trouble.
It makes for a crappy day :)
"each day with a dozen pills" dang..I hope not. Eat spices that will do
the trick :) It will clear the cobwebs and unclog the drains and surely
get one moving :)“Is it slowing down mentally?” Use the hot stuff..insanity
type hot sauce..maybe get some hottest hot sauce in the world. Only
use a little in your cooking and step back :) Be ready for lift off.
Wow..those pills can frig you over big time..watch out for
the hold that sneaks up. Once you start using medications
as crutches, it can be hard to let go. When or if you decide to
get rid of the aids, remember how easy it is to start again when
another problem arises. Taking medications and drinking is
a crash waiting to happen. It's not worth it believe me.
There is something more for you or for the person in this poem.
Walk the path with what has been learned and treasures will
be found.
"we never argued, bickered or fought." Did you talk? Always communicate..EVEN
if its with smiles, gestures..anything.
"Oh the look on your face as his life slipped away" What did you do? I don't even want
to know. Did you think doing that would get her back or make you feel better?
Like you said here..now you both are "connected by pain. You should have
" just walk away." There's always change in our lives which brings us to something
meant to be..something more. I hope you find your happiness
We all take on different characters. Some more than others.
Its something to help us through the day :) Yes..it gives
life to something we dare not approach..like Jekyll and Hyde
OR Freud with his cocaine. It opened their minds..hmm. They became
something more. It brought on a certain air. :)
Some of us don't need a substance to turn into someone or
something else..its all inside happening naturally :) the doors
are open. Sounds kinda spooky don't it.
The ego is the I. A lot of I's can make one arrogant. We must find
a balance..too much of anything can be a problem. :)
I like this, "I steeled myself. " I totally know what you mean. I call it "just existing"
refusing to feel the pain. Also where you say "The pain was too fresh." pure
emotion. We learn from this but it can be torture especially when the torment
continues. That can be risky. One has to be careful not to become the tormentor.
How we deal with things can invite more pain or bigger problems..it can go on an on..
something that won't grow a scab.
"resolving to make new memories. I walk out the door" this is excellent. You are a wise
person. You have strength..awesome.
"Yet we pray each year that He
Elevate our spirits,
As in such elevation
Resides true happiness."
We need to pray that each day:) God elevating our spirits..such a awesome feeling.
The higher one gets the happier. It could mean the closer we are to God the
better we feel. OR making it to the top OR finally reaching the peak.
When one speaks of sadness they usually
say they feel down OR they hit bottom. Makes sense to me.
I'm thinking a person can change their life at anytime.
We decide with the guidance of God. Why does it have to
be a new year. When I see "So party all night long," I'm
reminded of the Last Hurrah ..let it rip..we'll start tomorrow.
Always tomorrow. We all have the best intentions.
"From your past life, you depart." we leave the area but carry the
wisdom. Its part of us always. Where you say, "Time to not reflect on the past,"
I do reflect back...it helps me know that I've come thus far and I
mustn't ever forget the way it was. I do agree though, one has to
let go in order to keep climbing
Your doors remind me of heaven. There's two wide double doors then
up stairs are these type of doors. When I saw this picture..it took me back.
Only heaven is more beautiful..much. Anyways I agree with you..today is a
new beginning..each morning brings newness. Everyone should live each
day in love, faith, hope and happiness. Share a smile. It's fuel for the heart, soul
and mind :)
What I thought of after reading your poem:
"At the lighthouse",the lighthouse can be something different
for each of us. It guides us threw dangers. It lights the way. Its
a beacon. God is my beacon.
"I meditate on old subjects," this being curriculum and people :)
We learn from each these. Meditation will definitely help.
It will tell you something of both.
"Trees" of knowledge, life, good and bad. They reach deep into the earth
and towards the sky. I believe they have souls..spirits. What they would
be saying is possibly its time to branch out..find growth..looking for
the ground to lay your roots. Others are near..no one is ever forgotten.
You will see this from the top branch :)
Hey King :) I hope you had a wonderful holiday.
This is a wonderful poem. Where you say,
"Go back to yesterday and make a new start." Are
you wishing to go back in time and change things
OR are you saying lets give it another try..lets begin again for
the first time :) OR are you hoping to reactivate from where you both
left off. :)
"But, by no means have I forgotten you yet." I don't think we ever really
forget. Its put in the brains library, then a reminder swings by and
its brought out and looked into. A story is remembered. This time
a new perspective is given since one has become wiser. It might even
be put into another classification after being looked upon with a fresh eyes.
This reminds me of having to step away from drawing or poetry. When one
returns..it takes on a new vision.
Time Keeper ..Is he related to the gatekeeper :)
You have the key..you opened the door.When it
comes to the soul..soul traveling..there's no such
thing as time..just now which could be also from the past
or tomorrow..it's all right here. Going into another dimension
into the turning wheel. The clock reveals beginnings.A start of
something ended. Everything happening at one time.All sides.
The elderly man gives entrance. He gave his life in
helping others see truth.The turning point in our
lives is where Time Keeper begins. He holds everything
about us..giving a moment to see for days.
The soul is everything we are..all the choices made..wisdom
gained. This is open and added to.
I hope I made sense. You had me deep in my head.
Interesting story..I like it.
This is nice.."As you caress my breasts, I tenderly stroke your hair;
willingly submitting as you touch me everywhere."
I find letting my hair fall upon my breasts allowing
the nipples to show..and he watches me
touch myself. That's exciting. AND when he can't
take it any longer we "surrender to" all our desires.
I like your poem :) I also like "I shiver with delight as your tongue"
explores my body.
Don't be sad..you can recycle :) Fill yourself with something more.
They took what you had to give. You are not empty..its called change.
You say it right here, "After all I've only changed density"
"And I was only here to be had" someone took advantage of your
wonderful substance.They couldn't see the value..the drink become toxic and someone
couldn't handle what you had to offer... See..it's not you..it's them.
We all help to quench each other. The bottle is here for a reason :)
Neat poem :)
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