I am giving you a review for your poem "Dear Electra". I am not a review professional. I can provide feedback on how your poem impacted me.
Your poem reads as follows:
Well
you see
your ethics
cause a problem
for all moral men
as you do desire to
conquer them in such a way
that renders those men senseless and
euphoric from what you'd do to them
at which point I would say I don't know you.
You have an interesting pattern here. This looks like a poem I submitted to the Busy Bee Contest. This is where you have ten lines and the first line you start with has one syllable, the second line has two syllables, and so on down the line with the 10th line having ten syllables. It was easy for me to do. I came up with something almost right away when I did it.
I encourage you to write. Don't give up. Keep on trucking. It was sad at the end of your poem when you said you didn't know that person anymore.
I hope you have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime.
I read your letter Dear Me "Miles and Miles of Naught". I am giving you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your letter has impacted me.
It was interesting how you portrayed having a bucket list. I admire your views on this subject. I am 67 years old. Things are beginning to change for the better for me. Writing is a passion of mine, and it's starting to come around. I am feeling more confident about my writing.
You said you want to make new friends and keep your old ones. I hope I can be one of your friends.
I wasn't concerned about aging until I heard that people don't seem to care about you any longer when you're older. My parents have passed away, as well as most of my relatives. I don't know who would stand up for me if I had to go to the hospital. I have to confess; this is scary to me. My relatives didn't think I amounted to anything since I don't work. I have been there and done that. It has been difficult having a mental disability. I have a schizoaffective disorder. I hear people saying constantly "Get to Work". I hope to self-publish a book or books. I believe I can help people to accept a disability of this nature. I want them to believe in themself. It has been a long road for me, and am still have some trouble dealing with the day-to-day realities of life. I want to be remembered for doing something good. I have overcome a lot of obstacles. My parents encouraged me a lot, however, my relatives did not encourage me that much.
I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I am glad your roommate/boyfriend is good for you. I wish you well in your future.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I read your poem "Delta". I will do a review for you. Although I am not a professional reviewer, I can provide feedback on how your poem impacted me.
Your poem reads as follows:
to participate in life
We were mere droplets
brought together in clouds
that shrouded mountains.
We fell from grace,
gaining speed in rivulets,
joining to cascade
in waterfalls and rapids.
We became complacent
as land flattened out,
meandering as if --
as if there were no tomorrow.
Now we have entered the delta,
spread apart by time and distance,
still yearning for each other.
Soon our journey ends,
united again by the water's edge,
perhaps to rejoin the clouds.
Your poem sounds like you had a good relationship with this person. It is a nice remembrance of a life that no longer is, but both of you will be reunited again in the clouds. I could feel the emotions behind your writing. I could picture you having a wonderful life together.
Your poem was beautifully written. I encourage you to keep up with your writing. You have a beautiful way with words.
I look forward to reading more of your poetry.
I hope you have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I read your fictitious story "Trading Races", and I am ready to give you a review. Even though I am not a review professional, I can give feedback on how your story has impacted me.
This is a fictitious story. The story sounded like it could have been based on a true story. Your story was well-written. I could feel the emotions, as Cordaravius wanted the best for his wife and daughter. Although I haven't had any kids, I know the pain when it comes to seeing your daughter turn a different color as well as his wife. It's quite a shock when they see someone change before their eyes. There is a feeling of hopelessness when you feel there's nothing you can do about the situation. I know the feeling. When my mother had to go into the hospital for surgery, it seemed like ages before I was able to see her. I prayed for her recovery. My mother is no longer with me, but the way things are now, I don't believe that she would've been able to handle the tension and pressure that comes with it.
It takes a great deal of dedication to write a story. I admire your courage. I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I learned something from reading it.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I read your writing "Mystery Science Theatre 3000 anagramtime", and am excited about giving you a review. Even through I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your writing has impacted me.
I was intrigued by your writing where it said 0 and o is a sign of perfection and the Center of God is perfection. That is an interesting way to go about it. There is 3 letters in Yoda and to stay neutral allows one to smile and see some light. God has 3 letters and there can be only one choice, therefore 2 is "He" and only one choice. We've now covered our abc's now O is perfection, as 1 is far too many when making mistakes thru life's journey's of 1, 2, and 3. h2o - something valuable for life as well as oxygen, so why ask why and "who" is "thou" as "thou" shall "not" and I was referring to all as a unit.
Everyone has a method of doing things, and if this works for you, then why not do it. Life is a learning experience, and I have learned something today. Even though it was a bit confusing, I do get it.
I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Writing gives meaning from its author, therefore, it is meaningful to you, and that is all that matters.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I read your poem "Pray From Your Heart" (A Ghazal), and I am giving you a review. Even though I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your poem has impacted me.
There are some words that I didn't know what the definition of, but I enjoyed reading your poem. Perhaps, if you have the time, you could provide the meaning of the words you've chosen in your story. It would help me to understand your poem better. What is a Ghazal? I haven't heard that word before. I have compassion when it comes to learning new words. It increases my vocabulary. It fascinates me. I play a lot of word games. It's a lot of fun! I look words up in the dictionary and try to write a story using that word.
You have expressed your thoughts in detail. A lot of meaning went into this story when you wrote it. It gave me a different perspective of seeing things in a different light. Thank You for sharing. It takes courage to write down your story. I admire you for that.
I encourage you to continue with your writing. It was interesting to read.
I hope you will have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I read your short story "The New Neighbors WC 276", and I am writing you a review. Even through I am not a review professional, I can provide you feedback on how your short story has impacted me.
Your story managed to give me a chuckle and a laugh today. I needed this today. It's amazing how someone could want somebody watched for doing something that they weren't doing, just by the tone of their voice. It might have been a good thing that you didn't listen to your wife. You would have called the police on your new neighbors for nothing. This would have been a disaster.
Oh! you gave your wife some sarsaparilla. I won't tell anybody. That is your secret. Your wife was much calmer after that I believe.
Being married for forty-seven years is quite an accomplishment. My parents were married for 46 years. You learn to adapt to each other's little quirks being married that long. I love the fact that you're sticking with her.
I encourage you to continue on with your writing. I feel it will make others laugh too. They could relate to your story.
I hope your days are filled with blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone is deserving of this.
I read your poem "Tough Decisions", and am giving you a review. I am not a review professional, however, I can provide feedback on how your poem has impacted me.
Passion or Money, that's the question. In a world where people want you to work hard for your money, that's what they expect from you. If you don't meet their expectations, then it's tough luck. If you don't work hard enough, you don't get paid, therefore, you'll lose money. If you have a passion for writing, like I do, working hard to make my stories interesting to read, is important to me; it's what I enjoy. Not everyone has that kind of passion.
A person shouldn't have to work several jobs to make ends meet. It leaves you feeling stressed out and tired. It's important to enjoy what you do.
Your writing was good. It expressed your feelings quite well.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I have read your letter "Thank You", and I am giving you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your letter has impacted me.
Your letter was well-written. Writing.Com means a lot to me. It's like a family I didn't know I had. They welcomed me in with open arms. Their contests have challenged me with my writing. The more I write, the better I'm getting. The support from the community has been a wonderful experience. I don't give up. I learn from the reviews I get back from other authors.
I agree with you. I don't believe any other sites allow you to interact with the community.
I have earned the Preferred Author status by working hard. I just got someone who anonymously paid for a Premium Membership. This made me very happy.
I welcome you to Writing.Com. I am happy you like the site.
I encourage you to keep up with your writing, and whenever you struggle with something to do with your writing, ask the support team to help you. Don't give up.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone is deserving of this.
I reviewed your poem "Trust Resonates In Light", and I will give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your poem has impacted me.
I can fully relate to your poem about lights and trust. It's true; you can always change a lightbulb, but, once trust has been broken, it's hard to rebuild it back. I know from personal experience what it feels like when trust is shattered. I became very skeptical of this person when I was betrayed. It is hard to forgive someone who has broken your trust. I know that when you forgive someone, praying about it helps tremendously. Unforgiveness leaves you miserable; it puts a bitter seed into your heart.
I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Your poem vividly tells how trust can be broken and what it feels like. I am glad you shared your poem. Writing is good therapy. Getting it out on paper is a huge step in the right direction.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone is deserving of this.
I read your poem "The Home Sampler" and am giving you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your poem has impacted me.
Your poem accurately portrays someone who is affected by Bipolar Disorder. I can relate, from my own experience, having been married to someone with a mental disorder. When he was on medication, he was doing great. When he was off of his medication, it seemed like everything was going haywire. He would do a lot of gibberish talking, yelling, and door slamming. I have a schizoaffective disorder, and I do well by keeping on my medications. I take Aripiprazole (Generic for Abilify) and Bupropion (Generic for Wellbutrin). Abilify is like a miracle drug for me. After exhausting all the medications I was taking beforehand, a friend mentioned a new drug at the time that worked wonders for him. I decided to give it a try, and it worked!
My ex-husband, who had passed away, had three bad addictions. He took alcohol, and drugs, and was a chain smoker. It was difficult to live with him having these addictions. I finally had to leave him because of the verbal abuse that took place. We were married for nineteen years before my divorce.
It would be great if the person you're living with would take their medication.
I appreciate the courage it took you to share your story. I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Sharing your story can help others dealing with the same situation.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone is deserving of this.
I read your story "Hero from the Void" Full Chapter One, and I am going to give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your story has impacted me.
I enjoyed reading your story from beginning to end. I would highly recommend that other people would read it too.
Anti was a evil-minded person who wanted nothing more than to destroy the world. It makes me happy that I'm not stuck in the void.
The characters were well-developed; it must have taken you a long time to think of the names for the characters. Sometimes, it takes me a while longer to think up a name for a character, and, at other times it will come to me faster.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
Keep up with your writing. You are an excellent writer. Your story was easy to read. I didn't see any mistakes of spelling or grammar.
I read you horror story "Two Minds Think Alike", and I will give you a review. Even though I am not a review professional, I can provide you with feedback on how your story has impacted me.
Although I am not a huge fan of horror stories, I have to say that your story was well-written. I can see you've put a lot of thought into writing this story. Your attention to detail was spot on. I could definitely feel the emotions from the victim as her life was coming to an end.
If you enjoy writing horror stories, I encourage you to write more. There are times when I do appreciate a good detective story. Solving crimes is good for me. I was a victim of a crime, and it's hard to relive that scene when I see or hear other crimes being committed. I still see images in my head of what had occurred on that night.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to surround you for your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I read your piece "Speculate > Frustrate", and I will give you a review. I am not a review professional, however, I can provide you with feedback on how your piece has impacted me.
I can relate to your frustration of waiting in a car with nothing to do but sit there. Sometimes, on impulse, we will go somewhere we don't want to go but end up going there anyway. Having been homeless and being in a vehicle gets frustrating, especially in the evening when all the restrooms are closed. Yes, I get it. And, when you have an addiction, like in your case, Cannabis, and you go to get another supply can be frustrating. I am one of the few who didn't take drugs. I saw a movie in sixth grade about LSD and the effects it had on the brain. I knew for a fact I didn't want my brain to end up that way. It was a good decision on my part.
When I had a breakdown in 1974, I was put on medication that I had to take for the rest of my life. The effects it had on me were horrible. The creative side of my brain didn't allow me to create anymore. It seemed like my life was lost at that point. I did as the doctors said, and didn't question why I had to do that. When I was fifty years old, a friend mentioned to me about Abilify, a new drug that came out at that time. I gave it a try and found it to be a miracle drug for me. My brain could think once again. I take the generic version "Aririprazole" now, along with an anti-depressant called "Bupropion" the generic version of Wellbutron. I feel better than I did from the age of 17 until the age of 50. All that time I felt like I was 100 years old.
I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I am glad you shared your experience so other people can relate to where you've been in life.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime.
I have read your music "Day 10 The Dubliners Sick Note", and I will give you a review. Even though I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how the song impacted me.
I played the video of the song "PADDYS SICK NOTE". It sounds like the singer was Irish. I like the voices of the Irishment as they sing their ballads. It was sad that a note like this was sent; he must have been dealing with so many things at the time that he didn't want to do. It must have been during wartime when he wrote or sang this song. Perhaps he didn't want to write a bloody note.
His sense of humor was a bit drab when it came to writing a note, but I liked the accent of the voice in the song.
Thank You for sharing this song with me; it almost made me want to dance the Irish Jig. I encourage you to write. It's important to get things out in the open. I didn't get the humorous side of the song much, but it had a nice little jingle to it.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime.
After reading your poem "229 Minutes, 44 Seconds", I want to give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide you with feedback on how your poem impacted me.
Your poem reads as follows:
229 minutes, 44 seconds-
length of a phone call,
or the number of smiles
reaching beyond a distance
of that many miles.
Within the hallowed courses
of phone wires strung out,
emotions play at will.
Sheer distance holding
love at bay, even still.
As two souls share thoughts
no lulls impede life or laughter.
Farflung future beacons
down the road, across the country-
beyond 229 minutes. 44 seconds.
I love your poem. It talks about holding love at first bay, no lulls impending life or laughter, and smiles reaching beyond the distance of that many miles. I love smiles. Your writing is lovely.
I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I made some corrections to your poem. Look it over and see what you think.
I hope you have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I read your story "Forever and Always" and I am giving you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your story impacted me.
Your story was beautifully written. I enjoyed reading it. Your love for Alice was genuine. When you drew a butterfly on her wrist, it showed your love was genuine. Rachel wasn't nice to Alice. When she didn't stick up for Alice, I knew how much that would hurt. I can feel the emotion. If someone was giving me a hard time, and my friend didn't stick up for me, it would have left a devastating mark on me. I would think my friend would stick up for me. I would've stuffed my feelings inside and anger would eventually build up. It left me feeling miserable.
I want to encourage you to keep up with your writing. You have a good way of expressing yourself. At the end of your story, you mentioned that Alice killed the butterfly. Even when she did that, your love for her still stood strong.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I am reviewing "The Mystic Woods". Even though I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your story has impacted me.
Your story sounds like a mysterious fantasy. Eldoria must be a place that holds some powerful magic. At this place, Nikki wants to know how she got to this place. It's a place of wonder and mystery.
Nikki could be in a position where she will have a reign of power. Her influence could open up a new world for her. Will she be a nice person or an evil one? Since she would like to be in a place where dragons, magical creatures, and brave heroes are, who would this hero be? Would this person have the head of a dragon and a body like Hercules? Will she be riding a big white horse with special powers, and having Shazam as another hero? Would one of these heroes betray her?
I think your story has interesting possibilities to make a good mysterious fantasy. I encourage you to keep writing. I am looking forward to how your mystery fantasy develops.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I read your short story "World Builders, LLC". I will give you a review. Even though I am not a review professional, I can provide you feedback on how your short story has impacted me.
Your story made me laugh. It did make some sense though. God should be pleased with your way of thinking. The part where you said that rather than the seventh day being a day of rest, it was to be the day the papers were signed. This is an interesting twist to the story.
I want to encourage you to keep up with your writing. I am looking forward to reading more short stories, etc., from you in the future.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime.
I read your story "Doorway to the Place of Mystery", and I will give you a review. I am not a review professional, however, I can provide you with feedback on how your story has impacted me.
Your story was fantastic! I enjoyed reading it. It was fascinating how Lisa and her brother had traveled into different realms. I got scared when Lisa fell. I was relieved when she was caught by a griffin and carried to safety. It was rather sad, I was almost in tears when they were in one realm where they saw their grandpa. He said that they would be there one day.
Your story was well-written. I look forward to reading more stories from you. I encourage you to keep on writing.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime.
I read your story "A Unicorn's Tale", and I will give you a review. I am not a review professional, although I can provide you with feedback on how your story impacted me.
The name Seargent Hardhead fits well with your story. I had to laugh. The way the Unicorn was telling the story about the sergeant butting heads with the enemy, and killing fifty of them, was unbelievable. And, the part about the toilet paper being better than using leaves. That was amusing! Being in the military is nothing to laugh about, but they do need laughter in their lives.
I encourage you to keep writing. I enjoyed reading this comedy.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I read your children's poem "Coloring", and I will give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your poem has impacted me.
Your poem is well-written. I enjoyed reading it. It makes a nice poem for children. It's fun to read children's books. It takes a special knack and talent to do this. I'm glad you put in the effort to write this poem.
I encourage you to keep up with your writing. You have done a fine job. Keep up the good work.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime.
I read your letter "Returned". I will provide a review for you. I am not a review professional, however, I can give you feedback on how your portfolio has affected me.
I am happy to see you return to Writing.Com; Writing.Com has a good family support system. Writing is good therapy and it is fun also. I want to give you a big welcome back.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
I read your poem "The Dark Mark". I decided to give you a review. Although I am not a review professional, I can provide feedback on how your poem has affected me.
I found your title "The Dark Mark" interesting. It felt like you were talking to me. I have been through two marriages. I experienced a lot of verbal abuse with both of them. As I continue to reflect on those times from time to time, I can remember the horrors I felt because of it. I felt numb inside. The mental pain was excruciating. Through my faith in God and Jesus, I got through the rough times. I divorced both of them. One was a womanizer, and the other had addictions (smoking, alcohol, and drugs). I remember thinking I had something to do with it. I am thankful I didn't do alcohol or drugs, or even get myself pregnant with all that going on.
Going through all that abuse, I mustered the strength on the second one to get myself out of harm's way by leaving him. I took care of my mother at the time. I somehow think they were sorry for putting me through that. I was stronger after I left, but somehow, the effects occurring during that time still haunt me.
I don't know if this is relatable to anything you're going through, but I get the impression that you love the person you were with, even though it was a dark time. I sincerely hope sharing my story with you is helpful.
I encourage you to keep up with your writing. It is good therapy.
I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone is deserving of this.
I read your short story "The Wind in the Willows". I am going to give you a review. I am not a review professional, however, I can provide feedback on how your short story has impacted me.
I love your story. I most certainly could relate to your story. It reminded me of a time when my mother received an inheritance for her brother. My sister helped her look for a newer house for her to live in since her former place was falling apart. When I went to look at it, it was like deja vue set in. I could have sworn I had been in that house before. I thought it had something to do with my past, but I didn't know what had happened there. It was an eerie feeling at first, but I also knew it was the perfect place for her to walk with her walker.
Your story also reminds me about jumping to conclusions, certain something was true, but wasn't true at all. It's funny (strange) how a person's mind works. Just because something reminds you of past experiences, doesn't mean it will happen again. The past brings back my experiences; they tell me not to trust people; I will only get hurt again, they keep telling me. This gets to be a struggle with me, even today. When my mind starts to get thoughts that my special guy doesn't feel like I'm pretty enough for him, I revert to the past. Each time a lady talks to him, my mind thinks there's something sneaky going on between them. I don't care to have those kinds of feelings; they're a pain in the butt.
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