Well written with good rhyming a layout.
Well done, you expressed emotion and courage in this
very descriptive piece.
You portrayed sadness and despair for a forced farewell. One day they will meet again in Heaven.
Beautiful! Congratulations on winning first prize.
Very original, well written and good rhyming.
I'm sure you'll be able to send an email to Heaven
shortly! The way things are going it won't be long now.
I'm sure your dad hears you even if he doesn't receive
your email.
Take care and I hope your song has succcess.
AuntyNelly
Beautiful! Well written with emotion and good rhyming,
good display too.
I can understand that you are inspired in difficult
moments, I am the same.
Your words portray nostalgia for the presence and understanding from a person who has drifted away and
that you miss.
Well would you believe you've stolen my idea! Actually I've been thinking about doing something like this with Movies.
I'm a great Cinema fan and always attend the Venice
Film Festival in September. I love seeing the films
in the original language.
Well done and perhaps in the future we can thing of doing something else together!
Very sweet. I liked this special tribute to mums.
Well written with good rhyming.
It portrays what a difficult job it is being a mum.
I guess it has alot of other pleasant feelings too.
A great place to show off a piece of writing.
What is the difference between the Plug page and the
Request a Review page?
Thanks for the great work involved in running WC.
Hi Elisa,
I'm not very familiar with this Sestina form of poetry, but Reading your poem I feel your attempt has
obtained success! Well done.
By the way I found this poem in John Ashinn's poetry
NL.
Hi,
I saw this piece on this week's poetry NL.
I enjoyed reading your poem. Your words portray
affection for a bag without ever mentioning it as
such but as a friend.
Very original, well done.
Hi Stormy,
What a wonderful idea to have competitions on your NL.
It's especially interesting that the latest one is
free without a prompt.
Will certainly put in an entry.
Thank you for the hard work and take care.
AuntyNelly
I enjoyed reading this poem.
It was full of nostalgia for a person which is no longer present.
This loss is very hard to come to terms with.
The only consolation is that one day you will finally
be together.
Very emotional and romantic.
Growing old is something I think everyone has to comes to terms with one day.
When the colourful fashion clothes you still like
perhaps look ridiculous on you now.
When your once beautiful eyes show the first wrinkle.
The importance I think is to continue to be active,
read and exercise, to keep your mind alert.
This naturally if other illnesses don't take the better of you.
I enjoyed your poem, well written and gives the perfect definition of growing old.
Well done.
Hi Nancy,
I loved reading your poem. It was really well written
with good rhyming and layout.
Your words described fully the sensations nature brings with its smells and atmosphere.
Your feelings of nostalgia came through with intensity.
Poems have to bring out feelings and sensations and you certainly have the gift to do just that with your
writing. Keep the good work up.
By the way if you're interested in writing song lyrics.
There is a contest you can find in Frankie's girl's
portfolio expring on the 10th April. There is no prompt title, you just have to write about yourself and your emotions.
Check it out I'm sure you'll do well. I will be entering too if I can.
Hi Nancy,
I thought your poem was very touching and emotional.
Well written with good rhyming and display.
The Lord definitely makes our life a little easier
to accept and to live each day as if it was the last.
High quality confusion is a good name for your poem.
You can tell that your thoughts are fragments which came and went in various directions.
One point certainly comes through and that is your
sadness and regret.
You must close the door behind you and you will find
another new one opening out to you full of hope.
The only typo I noticed was :
- 2nd line (you're) instead of your.
Take care and keep writing.
AuntyNelly
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