Well written and good rhyming and display.
Your words are descriptive and portray the wonder of the night, with its silence and fantasy.
Welcome creature of the night from another creature of the night!
Nice topic! Well written and good rhyming.
Very descriptive, your words express a slight nostalgia
for those days!
It's a pity it's no longer like the good old days.
It just gets a little more dangerous nowadays and people are more wary of picking hitchhikers up!
I remember a holiday in Ireland during the 80's and
the people there picked you up frome everywhere.
They even helped you by telling you to write on a piece
of cardboard where you were heading so that the people
knew which direction you were heading before they
stopped to pick you up.
The Irish really surprised me with their hospitality
and generosity!
Well done!
Congratulations for winning the first prize in the
Picky Poetry Contest. Well done.
Well written, good rhyming and descriptive.
The emotions portrayed were very much alive. A touch of reminiscence and nostalgia could be read along the lines.
It could almost be a ghost whispering!
Well done! Well written with good rhyming and good
display.
The emotion and ode to eternal love is portrayed
with intensity and passion.
You expressed romance and tenderness in your words.
I hope you succeed in your intent to capture a yearning heart!
Well done. Well written and good display.
The words you used were descriptive and flowed well.
The emotions of this love just found and then immediately lost,leaves you feeling desperate.
You are left with the memory which will remain within you forever!
I found a few typos which I will list here for you:
Shawn instead of Shaun or Sean.
Hope we can (could)meet again after today.
As I felt embarassed talking about it to my parents.
And that (hat) was why
made us feel (felt)
One of her smiles grown familiar with (of)
Sent (send) shivers down my spine.
That she liked (like) me as well.
Why? I wonder, would God want to take.
But what I wanted to say was.
I noticed then (than)
I could feel the life draining out of her. You don't need to repeat hand as you've already
mentioned it.
Short but to the point and descriptive.
Your emotions were well portrayed.
Well written and good outlay.
I understand that this was your daughter's wedding day!
Children never really grow up for the parents.
At 47 my mum still covers me with attention and considers my brother and I still babies! I don't mind though. She lets us get on with our lives but shows us
she's always there for us.
Snap! I Know just the way you feel!
I hope after many disappointments you will finally find 'the one'.
Well written with good rhyming and display.
Emotional and sad, I could relate to it.
A very nice poem. Well written and with meaning.
In your words you describe a very solitary life and
the picture of the lighthouse seconds this.
A life of adventure and mystery and the excitement of
the sea and stars surrounding 'a lighthouse keeper'.
Well done I enjoyed it.
Hello Countrymom,
Hope you've been keeping well.
I liked this poem very much. Well displayed and words
flowed smoothly. A very sad and intense piece.
As I was reading I could almost hear the rain falling
hard. This seems to bring sad memories to you.
Actually when it rains, I quite like lying in bed snuggled up with a good book to read.
I feel protected at home and at ease.
This is a really well written piece. I enjoyed reading it. Describes fully what writing means to you.
I also agree about romantic poetry, which is my favourite ,that portrays the author in his true form.
It enables one to pour everything out on a piece of
paper, his life and character.
Well written, i enjoyed reading this piece.
Your wide selection of words shows a good vocabulary.
Very descriptive and original use of science objects.
Describes a sense of uncertainty and insecureness.
Beautiful! I really enjoyed reading this piece.
Well written, flows well and sad. I know the feeling.
The words you selected were adapt to strengthen the
passion and tension in the poem.
Reading along the lines, I felt that the outlay illustrated very well the words in line one: 'silently it slithers through her veins'.
This piece was very well written with true feelings.
Very tragic and devastating , you described Mia perfectly and her personality came through.
What a beautiful tribute to a friend.
I'm sure she has read it from above and is the angel
watching over you in this present moment.
Well done and I feel for your loss.
AuntyNelly
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Beautiful story and up-to-date condition of life.
Very sad and emotional and well written, Well done!
You portrayed the characters well and captured my
attention from the start.
I expected a very different ending as I didn't imagine
Karen be infected with Aids too. A very original proposal full of meaning.
Keep writing.
Anto
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What a wonderful idea! Greatly written and amusing.
I think you've described exactly how a Newbie feels
when he's just arrived. A story with all the tips of
'Writing.com' very original.
I remember when I first got introduced by a friend.
it was a real mystery at the beginning, so I was always
asking help and advice to her on how to use all the
tools. At first I couldn't understand a thing, so I
explored until slowly you just wake up the next day and
find you've mastered most of the mysteries.
Actually now I find it hard to keep away. I say to myself ' I'll just go on site for an hour', then go to
bed. Instead I find myself writing and reading till past 3 or 4 am and in the morning I get up at 7am to
go to work. I still get to work on time and wake up
in a better mood. I love it here! Thanks to you and all
your other fellow colleagues.
I enjoyed reading this piece. Well written and with
good display. The topic chosen I think is quite familiar with alot of mums.
I think when children grow up parents have to come to
terms with a new outlook to life.
They will miss the children and will have more time
on their hands, but it is right to let them fly to
experiment on unknown territories.
Well done.
Anto
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Beautiful! Really well written. Descriptive, the
loneliness and fright of a future mother's role is
portrayed well.
I like the ending where the girl takes position of her state, and has the courage to face the future.
Naming her unborn daughter Grace gives her the hope
to carry on.
Well done.
AuntyNelly
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Shawn instead of Shaun or Sean.
Hope we can (could)meet again after today.
As I felt embarassed talking about it to my parents.
And that (hat) was why
made us feel (felt)
One of her smiles grown familiar with (of)
Sent (send) shivers down my spine.
That she liked (like) me as well.
Why? I wonder, would God want to take.
But what I wanted to say was.
I noticed then (than)
I could feel the life draining out of her. You don't need to repeat hand as you've already 
