Well done a beautiful poem! I liked the words and the
rhyming. Also the subject is very familiar to me.
been there , done it!!! [e:smile}
I see it should be a lyric for a song. I entered a
lyric competition just recently , and the judges who are experts explained that in a song the chorus starts
after 2 verses usually. Then continues after every two
verses. it varies depending on how long the lyric is,
but usually that's how it works.
The song doesn't sound right if the chorus is after
every verse.
Hope to have been of help. keep writing and take care.
AuntyNelly
This could be used as a Valentine's day card poem.
it's very emotional and romantic, flows well, good
display and rhyming.
It's nice to read how a true love wears the toil of
everyday life and still continues to be faithful and
sincere.
Your words moved me. You're a lucky person!
Take care and keep writing these beautiful poems.
You have a natural talent.
Well written and good rhyming.
Many people don't like poetry. I've heard quite a few
famous authors talk about poetry as unsatisfactory
compared to a novel.
Personally I love poetry especially if romantic and
emotional. Just my cup of tea, I'd say.
Your words illustrate perfectly the feelings and meanings poetry give to the writers, the flow of
words with rhyming. beautiful.
I enjoyed reading this piece.
Well done. It was sad and emotional though.
Full of regrets. I think one should not have any regrets for the past, because at the moment it's what you wanted to do.
The nostalgia of having a close family and losing out
on all the special occasions was portrayed fully in
your words.
Take care and keep writing, it does wonders for the mind!
I liked reading your poem. Very enjoyable.
I liked the part where you write :
'the silence that comes in from the sea'.
I've never thought the sea to be silent. But the way
you describe it in your poem , it almost feels as if
the waves pulling in were part of the silence.
Beautiful!
Well written with good rhyming and display.
Sad and emotion portrayed with intensity.
It's true, one must always learn to let go before
starting a new relationship.
Well done! I enjoyed reading this piece.
You chose quite a difficult topic to discuss but
you portrayed it very well.
Very meaningful words and emotions used.
I agree with you we are all part of the HUMAN RACE.
Well written and good rhyming and display.
Your words are descriptive and portray the wonder of the night, with its silence and fantasy.
Welcome creature of the night from another creature of the night!
Nice topic! Well written and good rhyming.
Very descriptive, your words express a slight nostalgia
for those days!
It's a pity it's no longer like the good old days.
It just gets a little more dangerous nowadays and people are more wary of picking hitchhikers up!
I remember a holiday in Ireland during the 80's and
the people there picked you up frome everywhere.
They even helped you by telling you to write on a piece
of cardboard where you were heading so that the people
knew which direction you were heading before they
stopped to pick you up.
The Irish really surprised me with their hospitality
and generosity!
Well done!
Congratulations for winning the first prize in the
Picky Poetry Contest. Well done.
Well written, good rhyming and descriptive.
The emotions portrayed were very much alive. A touch of reminiscence and nostalgia could be read along the lines.
It could almost be a ghost whispering!
Well done! Well written with good rhyming and good
display.
The emotion and ode to eternal love is portrayed
with intensity and passion.
You expressed romance and tenderness in your words.
I hope you succeed in your intent to capture a yearning heart!
Well done. Well written and good display.
The words you used were descriptive and flowed well.
The emotions of this love just found and then immediately lost,leaves you feeling desperate.
You are left with the memory which will remain within you forever!
I found a few typos which I will list here for you:
Shawn instead of Shaun or Sean.
Hope we can (could)meet again after today.
As I felt embarassed talking about it to my parents.
And that (hat) was why
made us feel (felt)
One of her smiles grown familiar with (of)
Sent (send) shivers down my spine.
That she liked (like) me as well.
Why? I wonder, would God want to take.
But what I wanted to say was.
I noticed then (than)
I could feel the life draining out of her. You don't need to repeat hand as you've already
mentioned it.
Short but to the point and descriptive.
Your emotions were well portrayed.
Well written and good outlay.
I understand that this was your daughter's wedding day!
Children never really grow up for the parents.
At 47 my mum still covers me with attention and considers my brother and I still babies! I don't mind though. She lets us get on with our lives but shows us
she's always there for us.
A very nice poem. Well written and with meaning.
In your words you describe a very solitary life and
the picture of the lighthouse seconds this.
A life of adventure and mystery and the excitement of
the sea and stars surrounding 'a lighthouse keeper'.
Well done I enjoyed it.
Hello Countrymom,
Hope you've been keeping well.
I liked this poem very much. Well displayed and words
flowed smoothly. A very sad and intense piece.
As I was reading I could almost hear the rain falling
hard. This seems to bring sad memories to you.
Actually when it rains, I quite like lying in bed snuggled up with a good book to read.
I feel protected at home and at ease.
This is a really well written piece. I enjoyed reading it. Describes fully what writing means to you.
I also agree about romantic poetry, which is my favourite ,that portrays the author in his true form.
It enables one to pour everything out on a piece of
paper, his life and character.
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Shawn instead of Shaun or Sean.
Hope we can (could)meet again after today.
As I felt embarassed talking about it to my parents.
And that (hat) was why
made us feel (felt)
One of her smiles grown familiar with (of)
Sent (send) shivers down my spine.
That she liked (like) me as well.
Why? I wonder, would God want to take.
But what I wanted to say was.
I noticed then (than)
I could feel the life draining out of her. You don't need to repeat hand as you've already