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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*Bigsmile* Cool set of bright color options. *BlockO*
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Review of BCOF Insignia  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice insignia. *Smile*
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Review by KingsSideCastle
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This entry was written for "Hook of the book" and follows a picture prompt. It was set up very well with the prompt visible and the contest being applied for shared. As a science fiction fan, I really like the hook used. It is cool to see teleportation. It is definitely an interesting draw in for the reader with a character completely vanishing from the experiment and definitely makes the reader like to find out more about what is going on. It is good entry for this type of contest. Best of luck with your writing and entry.


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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a nice Haiku. It follows the format very well. As a poem it is pretty strong providing powerful imagery for the reader to visualize. I love the depiction of raindrops being connected with weeping. The second line gives an impression of a restless night where the narrator appears troubled. The last line seems to be a literal heart stopper.


There is a lot that is captured withing the seventeen syllables provided for the reader to process and it works very well. Thank you very much for writing.

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Review of KrisTee  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That is one cool looking mouse. *Mouse*
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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Really cool pirate image. *PirateFlag*
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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice mermaid / dolphin scene. *Dolphin*
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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
Looney toons. *Bigsmile*
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Review of Film/Movie  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice film reel image. *Smile* *Film2*
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Review of Orion Hurricane  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Here I am ... Rock you like a Hurricane. *Smile* Great picture!!
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Review of tj & Max  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yay... Snoopy. *Smile*
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Review of Hip Replacement  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
Always love a pun. *Smile*
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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful Butterfly. *Butterfly2O*
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Review of castle  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely castle *Castle*
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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
The premise of this series is really good. I like how the lawyer represents unusual cases. This one involving a prankster was fun to read.

There are a few edits I would recommend:
'well that was really fun .'chuckled Willie
"Your unbelievable' 'Illness' he continued to laugh 'Now I've heard everything.'
Willie was elated
Mason Cooley once said' Dan responded as he took aim and threw a wadded piece of paper in the trash can. 'Excuses change nothing but they make everyone feel better.'
'Taxi' Willie called out. A taxi pulls up and Willie gets in.

I also recommend expanding the courtroom scene a little bit giving Dan some more dialogue with the judge. It will give the lawyer a better opportunity to highlight his legal skills.

In general though this is a really great short. Thank you for an enjoyable story!

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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very nice story. It was fun to read and I loved the description in it. I could visualize the beach and the waves as they were described as well as the bottle very vividly as I was reading this

I also really like the twist at the end that the characters sister was the one that sent the bottle out. It had a sweet ending as well where the narrator left a note for her sister.

There is one slight editing recommendation: only about a half hour drive

This was a beautiful short story. Thank you for sharing it!

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Review of White Tale  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a nicely written short. I like how the focus of this is so mysteriously described. It is almost like she is a mystery women with exotic qualities to her. I find myself picturing the Mona Lisa with her mysterious smile or forces of nature like the sun. It is only at the very end of the poem where I was surprised to find the subject is revealed to be a cat.

I love the prose in this work. It reads like a poem, particular the opening. With a beautiful image of the subject facing east like a Sphinx at sunrise. Great writing!

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Review of Breathing 101  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem really captures the essence of breathing. The reader feels like they are breathing as they read this. Breathing is a great way to slow down and reflect on what is happening and the narrator of this poem really manages to do that.

There is a nice shift in the second half of the poem where the narrator compares a loved one to the act of breathing itself. It provides a really nice metaphor for the reader identifying how essential that person is to narrator. This is a beautifully written work. Thank you very much for sharing it!

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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
When I was going through your portfolio, this poem on Robin Hood caught my eye. I was a fun read that mentions a lot of the legends I remember reading about the character (Sherwood Forest, the Sheriff of Nottingham, the Golden Arrow and his nickname 'The Prince of Thieves"). I think the second and third stanzas were my favorites because of all the references.

This poem has a nice rhythm to it making it very enjoyable to read through. It has has some fun rhymes and approximate rhymes in it. I liked how Robin hood corresponds with Legalhood. Great writing!

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Review of The Rat  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very nicely written poem. I really love the wordplay. The rhythm seemed to perfectly capture the title with a frantic pace and wild beat to it. The readers can feel the chaos the rat is causing as they read this. I love the "because of that...the rat" refrain. You have some great alliterations in this skittered and scattered, sour symphony and stabbing screams.

A couple of slight editing recommendations:
Line 8 - Penetrating
Line 9 - eye-lid

The rest was very good. This was a very enjoyable read. Thank you for very much for writing. *Mouse*

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Review of May Flowers?  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Nice Poem. The title reminds me of the phrase "April Showers bring Mayflowers". I was also reminded of some classic nursery rhymes (i.e. the itsy bitsy spider and little Miss Muffet) when I was reading this. My initial thought poem seems to take on the perspective of the spider as it is met with the water washing him away but upon closer look I think it is more from the perspective of a flower starting out especially taking the title into consideration. Incidentally I was reading this poem at the end of April so the theme hits particularly hard now

On a technical level, I feel like this poem was written very well. The strength of it is its imagery. I particularly love the description of the water as Heaven's deluge and a Monumental Monsoon. Great alliteration with the later. After reading this it feels refreshing as if the reader is a given a shower along with the plant.

This was a lot of fun to read... thank you for writing this. *Smile*

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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is an exciting story. I felt like you really captured the essence of the Naruto series in this story. I loved the face pace and action in this and you through in a lot of classic characters and villains while introducing us to new ones. It was cool to see classics like Orochimaru and the Akatsuki members make an appearance in this. Team 7 along with Kakashi were nice to see in action again. Adding vampire like characters in the mix made for a wild story


There were a couple slight typos in this but nothing that detracted from a reader's enjoyment of the story:
Naruto, Sasuke, and Sakura walk at a hasty pace.
“You're late where are the other two?” Kakashi says from behind her as he puts a hand on her shoulder.
“Saya…” Makoto sheds a tear.

I really liked reading this and would love to read more if you decide to continue this. Thank you for writing this.

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Review of Anonymity  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
This gives the reader a lot to think about. On the internet anonymity is a treasure. As a writer exploring multiple different styles I definitely can see how anonymity can be important with writing and sharing personal material. I think when we are sharing stuff online in an anonymous fashion, it allow us to have the best of both worlds being able to share what we want with a large community and keeping it separate from our everyday lives. I would recommend being careful though and not posting anything online that you would not be able to handle being revealed. Best of luck with your writing!

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Review of New Body, New Me  
Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a very interesting interactive. As a science fiction fan I love the concept. It reminds me a little bit of the sci fi Netflix series altered Carbon where characters can extend their lives by being placed in new bodies and older science fiction series called Tek War where the lead character was Cryogenically frozen.

This interactive is still in the early stages but the choices set up so far are very interesting with multiple body possibilities for characters consciousness to be placed in. The most expanded arcs so far are characters being placed in younger enhanced versions of themselves. I am very curious to see how this story continues to develop in the future. Thank you for making this.

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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Cool interactive. I love Shrinking storylines and Avatar so it is very neat to see a story focused on both of these. I also have a huge crush on Azula so it is nice to see this story has a storyline with her added.

This interactive is still getting off the ground but it does have some nice storylines being developed for it with chapters involving Katara and Azula. I hope that you continue to add to this story and that it continues to grow. Thank you very much for making this and best of luck with your writing.

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