This short has a nice title making the reader think about being far away from familiar territory. It also has a great opening as the description provides a feeling of a sudden stop and vulnerability. Phrases like "time ceases to exist" and "exposed soul" contribute to this. It gets emphasized further as the next segment described being pulled into darkness.
I think the strength of this work is the description. Readers are able to feel the sensations as they read through it. An example being sensations breeze or eyes hurting upon opening them. I also like the contrast between the darkness and brightness. All the feelings and thoughts the narrator is describing come fast leaving the reader feeling a little bit of whiplash as they feel experiencing darkness and light and love and hate
The ending feels like a little bit of a shock considering the previous sentences "His eyes remind me of spring...I see his smile and now I feel it. I almost thought it was a typo where Content should have been used instead of contempt. I had to do a double read through. The sudden change is abrupt and I wonder if this is a piece of a larger story. I feel like the expanding the segment before the last setence would really help the reader to follow what was occurring. Maybe a couple of sentences in between to shift the tone unless the intention is pure shock.
Anyway... this is very nicely written and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you very much for writing.
I am reviewing this store towards the end of July. I think seeing all the images of snow and ice during a hot summer just make it all the more appealing.
This store has a lot of beautiful images and a variety of messages to choose for holiday greetings. All of them are beautifully crafted My favorite has to be Kitty Santa card. The cat is just incredibly adorable.
In terms of suggestions I think this store covers all the big winter holidays (Christmas, Hannukah and New Years). Just as an interesting twist, It would be fun to see a Solstice card thrown into the mix as a nod to the shortest day of winter. I also think that another popular addition would be to include more holiday treats themed cards. There is one with the gingerbread man but it would be great to see other winter snacks such as candy canes and hot chocolate.
In any case really great shop. I have to remember to visit it again in the winter.
I really like this CNote shop. It has a very nice theme with Nature and I really like the flower images taken. There are a nice variety of messages for visitors/shoppers to choose from (inspiration, birthdays, get well etc). My favorite image is the sunflower (the last one showing in the store for me). It is beautiful with the petals spread.
There are some great uses of font color such as the purple for the violet. It is a good match. I also like the color blending in the "For you" and "Hello" card
This seems like one of the earlier cnote shops. It is probably one of the classic stores. I hope that you continue to add to and develop this shop in the future. If you are open to recommendations one thing I would love to see with this are more landscape images to take advantage of the nature theme. Cards featuring Rivers, mountains, sunrises/sunsets would probably be really popular.
Thank you for creating a really nice set of notes.
This is a very good article. I have been reviewing a lot of Poetry lately and the category there are some deeply personal works that I couldn't bring myself to review. I just felt like they were sharing the author's personal feelings.
For the poems I do review, I try to be as gentle as possible just offering soft suggestions when necessary or just sharing with the writers the aspects of the poem that I liked.
I agree with you that Poetry varies tremendously and each poet's styles are different. You gave a lot of good criteria to analyze such as grammar, rhythm and rhyme. In addition to those I also like to recommend highlighting areas where the poem shines. Usually two other things I check for when reading a poem is the word choices that a poet uses and the imagery that the poet shares. Some great poems allow the reader to picture what is being described, others make the reader think. If the writer uses creative word choices or incorporates wordplay such as alliteration I like to share that I appreciate it.
Thank you for writing this article and sharing feedback on what to look for. It is really very helpful.
This is a nicely written poem. Actually this is the first time I've heard of the word "limerence". It is a new vocabulary word for me.
I wasn't able to identify completely what was being depicted/occurring. It might have been intentionally vague or left open to interpretation. The strength of this poem was in the imagery provided. There were a lot of individual things occurring that were great to visualize. A couple of examples include the opening 2 lines (I could visualize staring down cold metal below from the the balcony) and lines 9 through 14 (the sensations conveyed makes the reader feel like they are going into sudden shock along with the narration).
Notes/Recommendations: Most of the poem was written in couplets making it easy for a reader to enjoy as they are much more fun to read. There are two segments where the lack of a rhyme (circulation/patient and gone and song) was noticeable pulling the reader out of the smooth flow a little bit. This was still very well written though. Thank you very much for writing.
This poem was a lot of fun to read. It takes a painful scenario that a lot of people can relate to and brings it to life in word form. The not getting the Best Buy protection plan hits particularly hard because I think a lot of us tend to avoid picking it up. It had some really great comedic timing
This poem had a lot of great moments. I think my favorite bit of this was the with E key getting stuck mid poem. As a Star Trek fan I loved the Star Trek line
On a technical level.. The style of the poem feels a free form poem so there are some nice rhymes throughout mostly with line endings but there was a nice triple rhyme fit into the middle with Sly Buy Guy.
Recommendations / Notes: With poetry on this I like to recommend authors add a note about what poetry style they were writing in (I suspect this was a Free verse. It allows other writers reading it to get a little bit of insight into what a fellow writer was going for and appreciate the writing more.
Anyway this was a really enjoyable poem. Thank you very much for writing it.
This is a nice entry written "The Prompt Me Contest". It has a little bit of a philosophical feel to it where it gives the reader some things to think about. In terms of the contest it manages to successfully achieve the goal of the contest it is written for using the word laptop to create an interesting and thought provoking prompt within a couple sentences. It is well done!
On a sidenote... This is the first time I have heard of the Prompt Me Contest so thank you for introducing me to it. I'll have to make a note of it in the future. It seems like a fun and quick activity to try.
This is nice. This poem succeeds in conveying a lot of emotion. It has a little bit of a mental dilemma where the narrator cares about the subject of poem but recognizes that that maintaining a distance from the person that they care about is the best for the person they care about. That type of love where a person is willing to sacrifice being close to the person they care about comes off as really powerful.
On a technical level there are some really good elements to this work. There are some nice word choices evoking emotions in the reader. Peace, love and distance all appeal to the readers feelings. There is also a great bit of alliteration in the first line with "Fire Forever". It's a great draw for the reader.
In terms of suggestions. The main recommendation I have is that this could be expanded. I feel it has a beautiful idea being shared. I would love to see more lines to get into the narrator's mindset and explore more about why the speaker feels they need to maintain a distance from the person they love. I also recommend one adjustment to the description. I feel like it could use an I between So, and avoid.
Other than that, this is a very well written work!
I like this poem. It shares some good advice for healthy relationships. One of the things that drew me to it was the title. It evokes a beautiful and delicate image of a Butterfly in flight. The poem provides a lot to think about reminding about the importance of Freedom and to avoid selfishness and codependence/
On a technical level, it has a very nicely written. I love the ABCB rhyme scheme which makes it fun for the reader to read through. Some good word choices as well. I like that you were able to include the word codependence in this. There is some nice imagery in this particularly with the butterfly soaring at the end but there are other ones as well such as gripping tight when it comes to relationships.
With rhyming poetry, one of the things that I recommend is to try and keep track of the syllable count of each. If possible each couplet of lines in a four line stanza would have the same count. I makes the poem sound a little bit more smooth and adds a better rhythm to it. The second stanza comes closest to doing this. The other stanza syllable count could be a little bit closer as well though the poem still sounds really good as is.
Also have to add this item has a really beautiful cover image. Great writing. Thank you so much for sharing it!
This is nicely written poem. I feel that it fits the theme of the prompt well and covering a journey within the confines of 8 lines. On a technical level this poem is described with some really great imagery. I love the landscapes described in the journey ... the hidden valleys, grand mountains, hidden vistas, lakes and skies provide beautiful pictures for the reader. Readers are also able to pictures this poem's narrator and his/her mindset going through this journey as they read this. This poem feels relaxing to read through as narrator is content to go through the journey at their own pace. It is a good method of approaching life.
This is nice blog entry discussing being a father and parenting. It is great to read on Father's day. The quote in the prompt inspiring this is a nice one and this entry makes good use of it. I think that a lot of parents relate to this as they experience moments of pride and frustration when raising their children. There are some really nice memories of being a father shared in this and it was enjoyable to read through. The description of the backyard barbeques and camping trips evoke warm feelings. Happy Father's day.
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