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Reviewed by: Lisa Noe
Hello Brian K Compton, I'd like to wish you a very happy account anniversary this beautiful morning, I do so hope that you are having a wonderfully blessed day today so far. You have been a valuable member of writing.com for fourteen years since August 2, 2006. This piece of poetry is just simply awesome. How on earth did you create a perfect pair of lips with your words; your poem is about the perfect kiss I think. It is very descriptive and warm. The title, "Time-Kissed," is perfect for the piece of writing, I can still recall the first time my husband kissed me, I giggled, it was so sweet and memorable. I will never forget it even if I live an eternity. The item description was very helpful for the reader of the poetry.
I remember, years ago in typing class, I learned to type out a picture on the typewriter,, it was a picture
of a typewriter.
thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.
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Hello cheshire, I'd like to wish you a very happy account anniversary this morning, I do so hope that you are having a very fine and blessed morning.
I just adored your little poem, "Parents," as it was so wonderfully written and sweet.. I know what you are trying to say, as my father is no longer here for me.
Although he was always there for me when he was alive, My mom is still living and you had better believe that she is always here for me. It never fails , if I need her she is always by my side.
she is my very best friend in the whole world and when my father was alive, he was my best friend too. He used to call me his shadow because I would follow him every where that he would go. I thought your poem was precious and I hope that you have a close relationship to your parents as I did with mine. The title is perfect.
thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.
THIS IS A REVIEW FROM A Story Poem Contest, IT IS A GIFT FOR YOU!
Title: Gainfully Employed
Reviewed by: Lisa Noe~Kittyluv~um~puppyluv
First Impression: Hello ruwth, Thanks for entering A Story Poem Contest this month. I know the feeling, I remember when I used to work at the radio station, I made money but I worked all of the time and could never spend it.
Suggestions: your story was very well written and I am glad you decided at the last minute to enter the contest. The title was good and the story was relatable I thought.
Conclusion: Thank you so kindly for entering my contest, I want to wish you good luck and say I hope you will enter again next month. have fun with your writing and God Bless You!
Hello Koyel~writing again, I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.
Structure: the structure of this item is a Fibonacci.
Theme: the prompt for the item is an image,
Flow: the item seemed a little broken but I do believe that is because of the form of the poem and not a lack of knowledge by the writer.
punctuation: the punctuation is correct as written.
Title: the title, "If life was a compass," is appropriate.
I thought that this was a very well -written piece of Fibonacci poetry.\
You did a good job creating this item. you show much promise as a writer of poetry,
I do so appreciate your sharing this piece of poetry with me. You keep writing and I'll keep reading, God Bless You.
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Hello Dr M C Gupta, I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.
Structure: this structure of this poem is called a sonnet,
Theme: the theme of this sonnet is turning seventy
Flow: I thought that the sonnet flowed well
punctuation: the punctuation is correct as is the spelling and grammar.
tone: the tone of the item seems a little reminiscent and melancholy.
Title: The title, "ON LEAVING SIXTY NINE BEHIND: a sonnet," places an emphasis on the subject of the poem which is also the title, leaving sixty-nine.
it is very appropriate for the item.
Suggestions: The poem is very well-written and a little sad.
I do not think your writing is finished. Just because you have turned seventy, it means you should have more of life's little anecdotes to share with the world hone.
with age comes wisdom, you already have talent, now comes wisdom, right?
Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.
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Title: The Journey of Azmaroth Author: Beholden Type: Poetry
Reviewed by: Lisa Noe~Kittyluv~um~puppyluv
First Impression: Hello, I am this item because you are an entrant in A Story-Poem Contest, Thanks for entering. This is a difficult poem to read as all of the names are difficult to pronounce. I do think it is very imaginative and very creative as well. I think the uniqueness helped add s bit of mystique to the story.
The title is appropriate for the item, and the item description is helpful to the reader.
Suggestions: I did find that the names tended to throw me a bit, but not enough to take away from the wonderful writing.
Conclusion: Thank you so kindly for entering my contest, I want to wish you good luck and say I hope you will enter again next month. have fun with your writing and God Bless You!
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Hello {suser:(a.karpouzos}, I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day.
Structure: this item is structured using one verse or paragraph
Theme: the language of the universe
Flow: I felt as if this item was a little broken because many words were missing for some reason.
.e:exclaim} punctuation: The punctuation seems correct top me.
Title: the title, "TO THE END OF THE WORLD:ALEXIS KARPOUZOS,"
is very appropriate for the item, I understand the all caps represents the danger of the world ending. I don't think you really need toi write your name in the title.
If I were you, I would read the poem aloud and then make corrections by adding miaaing words.
Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of writing with me. God Bless You.
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Hello {suser:cybergirl01 }, I came across this item on writing.com's read and review items list today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day. I found a few things wrong with your story. It made it very hard to understand, I think you really need some punctuation.
I have your words in red and corrections in blue:
So detective what do you have therethere's a bit of blood andthere's also two shell casings from what looks to be a magnum 45 good work lieutenant Yuki you must be commended for your evidence finding skills will send this blood sample off to the lab to see if we can find the suspect the four criminals still two bags full of rice from the pot rice store the cook-off is now canceled because these ingrates call section Chief go to now we must learn how bad this is just a we you'll find these criminals last week yojimbo's soy and chopstick supermarket lost shot lost $2,000 💴💴🤔how could that be there was nothing on the cameras now this with the rice pot rice being taken for the cook-off in Osaka prefecture.
In line one, you don't need the word there two times right next to each other.
you also need a space between and, and there's I think a period after
45 is also needed. and capitalize Good. a comma after Yuki.
a period after skills and capital will. a period after suspect, capitalize the
add the word have after still . there are just so many spaces where you need punctuation and skipped words to make it make sense. Just go back over it and write it adding punctuation.
Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this piece of writing with me, I truly appreciate your talent. May God Bless You and Yours.
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Reviewed by: Lisa Noe
Hello Jay O'Toole, I'd like to wish you a very happy account
Anniversary today. I do so hope that you are having a blessed day today.
I thought your poem was very honorable to our blessed Veterans. I love our veterans, my father was one before he passed away. He spent his whole life in the military protecting and fighting for our beloved country. I thank you for paying tribute to all of our vets.
thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.
First Impression: Hello, I am judging this item because you are an entrant in A Story-Poem Contest, Thanks for entering. I thought that this story poem was just awesome. I really loved it, it reminds me of my father and me and my husband also watch Gun Smoke and Wells Fargo every day. I just love the old western television shows and I love Clint Eastwood too. t few don't, am I right?
This is an excellent example of a story poem and I can only say that I don't have enough stars to give you.
Conclusion: Thank you so kindly for entering my contest, I want to wish you good luck and say I hope you will enter again next month. have fun with your writing and God Bless You!
Type: Poetry Reviewed by: Lisa Noe~Kittyluv~um~puppyluv
e:poseyp}First Impression: Hello, I am judging this item because you are an entrant in A Story-Poem Contest, Thanks for entering. I like what you did with this poem, however, I am not crazy about the form, there is too much repetition in it to suit me. I do think you did well with this form though. I think it is just a matter of personal preference is all.
Suggestions: if you did the poem using a different form I would love it. because I know what you are saying and I like it then again who am I to tell you what form to use. I guess we all have personal preferences. since I like what you are saying and I see that you said it in the correct way for this format I'm giving you five stars. Conclusion: Thank you so kindly for entering my contest, I want to wish you good luck and say I hope you will enter again next month. have fun with your writing and God Bless You!
First Impression: Hello, I am judging this item because you are an entrant in A Story-Poem Contest, Thanks for entering. oh what a lovely little poem.
it tells the sweet story of a grandpa and his darling granddaughter and the tiny lady bug which was really a real one and not a painting. this was an adorable idea for a story poem. good work!
Suggestions:
Conclusion: Thank you so kindly for entering my contest, I want to wish you good luck and say I hope you will enter again next month. have fun with your writing and God Bless You!
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Hello April Desiree-I'm back!, I'd like to wish you a very happy account
anniversary this beautiful evening, I do so hope that you have had a wonderfully blessed day today. I thought that this was a very powerful and kind of frightening piece of writing. The title, " The Solemn Vow," is appropriate for this poetry.
I thought that the item description was also very helpful to the reader to tell them about the item.
The poem had a really good rhyme scheme and it also had a very nice rhythm.
you did a very nice job creating this item.
thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.
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Reviewed by: Lisa Noe
anniversary this lovely evening, I do so hope that you have had a w0nderfully blessed anniversary this day. Tomorrow is Independence Day in The United States, I hope you have a double celebration. This poem is about Mountains, I live in the mountains of Appalachia and I just love them.
They are beautiful and there are all of the perks of wildlife like blossoms and animals. I can't say enough great things about the mountains. Your title, "The Mountains," is appropriate for the item. This poetry is called a chain Haiku,
there are four Haiku connected together to create this on-chain. It is all about the mountains, and wildlife and it touches on the sounds and color of the hills.
The item description tells the reader a little bit about what the poem is.
It makes it helpful to the reader of the poem. You have don e an excellent job.
thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.
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Hello Gasper, I'd like to wish you a very happy account
anniversary This late evening, I do so hope that you have had a wonderfully blessed day today. tomorrow is Independence day so Happy Independence day as well.
The title of your poem, "Sweet Sixteen," is very appropriate as it is the age of which your sister lost her life. I think that the item description is helpful to the reader of this poem, and helps them to understand what the poem is about. If it does not then the Author's note should help to explain about your sister having an aneurysm and brain cancer her whole life. I think that this is a very sad story indeed. You tell a very sad story about your sister's last day on earth. I bet it is a very hard thing for you and your entire family to have to deal with. I will pray for you all tonight as I am sure this is hard on you. I saw a couple of little mistakes with your work.
plaining to any god that would listen that yes, she was sick but look how much she was worth.
God should always be capitalized, and so should the pronoun I, in referring to one's self.
thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.
First Impression: Hello, I am judging this item because you are an entrant in A Story-Poem Contest, Thanks for entering. I thought that this was an amusing little tale. I recall my cousin did the same thing as that little girl did back in the day, in the 1980s. She got in trouble by the Sisters who ran the school.
I personally was very shy and would be way too embarrassed to do that.
I think the title was very clever and for a young man that must have been a treat!
Suggestions: I didn't really see any mistakes with this item, I thought that it is well written,
Conclusion: Thank you so kindly for entering my contest, I want to wish you good luck and say I hope you will enter again next month. have fun with your writing and God Bless You!
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Hello Stallion, I'd like to wish you a very happy account
anniversary this beautiful morning love, I do so hope that you are having a very blessed day today. I thought that this essay or whatever type of writing it is
it is very well written. I thought it was a great subject matter for us to explore. I never thought of us as being angry as little babies coming into the world for the first time, I never really n to think about it before either. When a baby is first born it is a swat on the bottom for it as the first interaction with humanity. So it learns about violence and anger right off. I think you are correct the baby has been safe and protected by its mother's stomach. When it comes out into the world it knows fear and anger to have to leave it's safety. Then it is immediately hit on the bottom. Lord what a poor little babe.
thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.
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Hello Eliot, I'd like to wish you a very happy account anniversary This beautiful morning, I do so hope that you are having a wonderfully blessed day today.
I read your little poem two times to really get the full meaning and feeling of it.
I thought that the title that you gave it, " Hitchhiker," was very appropriate for the item, as that is what the whole entire poem was about, hitchhiking.
I see you have won a pretty yellow ribbon for writing this item, congratulations on that. I thought that what you wrote for the item description was very helpful to the reader of this poem. it tells the reader that the narrator is impoverished and has no independence as far as travel goes. I think the last line was, to me, the most telling of all of them. as it made me see that your destination was really up to the driver of the car you got a ride with. You are dependent on them.
thank you for sharing this item with me I appreciate your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.
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Hello ivesixer, I'd like to wish you a very happy account
I do so hope that you are having a wonderfully blessed and good day today.
I thought that this was an awesome song or set of lyrics. I really do think you chose correctly when you entitled the item, I really do believe that it is a good title, "Proper Condemnation," is an appropriate name for the item.
I also think you did a super job creating the item description, I think that it tells well what the poem is going to be about to the reader. You created this piece of writing using three verses and then a repetition of the refrain. I think that you did a great job creating this song. I am curious to what it would sound like if someone sang it out loud to us. Myself I have never been any good at writing lyrics or songs of any kind. I can't even think of a subject to write about lol.
"thank you for sharing this item with me I your talent, you keep writing and I'll keep reading God Bless You.
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