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Review of O Mohonk  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Webwitch, I'm back again. This time, I had the honor of reading this enchanting poem. I found this poem to be full of wonder, delight, and beauty. Very nicely done.

I've been working on using more descriptive words in my writing, so such descriptions are fresh in my mind. I can see that you were able to do this in a smooth and flawless manner. I believe you are able to present your expert writing as a dazzling painted picture in the minds of your readers.

The picturesque scene is set from the very first stanza. Although I've yet to know what place Mohonk is, I can get the feeling of it from your beautiful poetic words.

I think you easily succeeded in awakening all of your reader's senses. We can feel and hear the gentle breeze and we can feel the warmth of the sun; we can take in the sweet scent of the flowers; we can see the pretty cherry blossom trees. You expressed that the scene is intoxicating, which brings the feeling of knowing how amazing it all is.

Your second stanza, made me think that this enchanting place makes us feel that our soul has been inside of a cocoon and is only now revitalized. Of course, you say all of that in an outstanding way through remarkable poetry. I'm forever impressed. Last night I read your detective story, which you wrote in the style of a 1930s gangster, and now today I'm reading the poetry of an artist! The brilliant talent displayed is in your portfolio for sure!

I loved the sounds you mentioned of the night animals scattering across the dried leaves.

The moonbeams in the darkness did sound glorious! I found your poem to be a very pleasant item to read.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello again, Webwitch. I reviewed the other thing, the Witch's House item, and it mentioned The Witch's Garden, so I thought I'd stop by to see what that item was. I know that I visited this item in the past, but I didn't give it the pretty stars from me that it deserves.
So, here I am to fix that.

Ah what holiday spirit memories. Ledger does an amazing job with the Secret Santas, but you are known for this fun, holiday spirit item. I think many WDC members might not remember to join in the festive atmosphere if they didn't notice this holiday activity. Your item encourages everyone to add the festive spirit into their handles.

The presentation in your heading looks great and sets the mood of the holiday spirit theme. Again, as I mentioned when I reviewed the Witch's House item, I love the festive colors - the reds and the greens, emoticons, and images you added into the item.

I felt that the instructions were very clear and well-written. A WDC member simply needs to make a post with 'holiday handle' in the subject line. Unlike the fun which you do at Halloween time where we post other people's handles, at this event, we only post for our own. One post per member. Easy to do for sure.

To add to the fun, you give out prizes. I thought it was smart to leave the prizes vague. This allows you to give more or less as your time and spirit lead you. I understand that, and I also use that philosophy at my "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  raids. Sometimes I give out more goodies during the raid, sometimes I give less. You seemed to give out lots in this last event!*Santahat*

You ended the heading writing on a note to spread the cheer. That's what I felt this activity does in a nutshell. It spreads the cheer for sure.

Congratulations for all the Quill wins on this. Well deserved. *Smile*

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


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Review of The Witch's House  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello again, Webwitch! I thought I'd do a little light reading after that long, amazing detective story, so here I am. I came across this Witch's House item. It does feel homey and welcoming, so you created the most fitting title, in my opinion. It's also the second item listed in your portfolio, so I clicked on it.

What an awesome page! Wow, you have a lot of merit badges! My group has a few, but I don't own one personally. That is on my list of things to do, but seeing all of these nice ones here that you have, I feel inspired. Maybe I'll get to that in May.

The Crow bird, 'Webbie' image at the top gives a nice feel to the page. It cements the idea that this is, indeed, Webbie's House, or, The Witch's House, as you have it titled. And, I see the larger version of the one you have in your brief introduction, too.

I glanced back at the brief introduction, and I see that it further explains that this is the home for your merit badges and the Band for the Witch's Garden. What a pretty title, by the way. As expected, you have awardicons, more than one, and a very unique little image at the brief introduction as well.

The page is set up very nicely, the way that I like to present my pages, with lots of emojis, color, and images to complement the writings.

Speaking of the writing on the page, *Wink* I really loved this line: "...I am a Web~Witch and cover a whole lot of territory via my handy, zoom-broom!" You are so much fun! It's no wonder everyone loves you on WDC so much!

I see that you are Pisces like my son. You both seem to have a lot in common.

I giggled at the Gingerbread kids baking comment. So much fun! Little details like that add to the fun atmosphere of the page.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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FIRST IMPRESSION:Hi Webwitch! Your chapter series, Windy City Tales, was highlighted in your port. To me, it looked really intriguing. The idea of a Private Detective story from the 1930s seemed like it would be very interesting, and I was impressed that you were able to write such a thing. I was also impressed that you won a couple of very nice awardicons for it. Megan really has beautiful awards. After I thoroughly read this story, I realized that it deserved this award and more!

THOUGHTS: I saw this story and thought it would be a fun thing to read while I was relaxing in bed last night before sleep. Webby! You are such a very talented storyteller!! My gosh! I was in awe with every word! I always knew that you are brilliant at setting up fun activities, which the entire site has fun with. I learned yesterday that you are a fine poet. But this! This is amazing!

Often my husband and I listen to old-time radio while on very long car rides. I used to try to read my sci-fi books, but it was too distracting with the radio blasting, so I caved and simply listened to Johnny Dollar with him instead. I liked it! I am sincere in saying that I thought your story was just as good, heck, even better than those old-time radio broadcasts. Nicely done, indeed. *Starstruck*

FAVORITE PART: I must say that what I liked the most about your story was the voices that you gave to your characters. The language you gave them in their words was very believable, and it made me feel like this story was absolutely taking place in the 1930s. The entire story had a gangster and mobster feel from the beginning to the end.

Your opening was great, as it set the stage for the rest to come. You gave a glimpse of the main characters, though your readers learn more as we read through the rest of the captivating story. Yes, when it ended, while I was half asleep in bed, I nearly forgot that I was reading a WDC story. The whole thing reads like a good page-turner novel. I thought, 'Oh, that's the end. I guess I better get to sleep now.' Yes, I was very into that story!

You thought up a wonderful plot. Poor Gloria, new in town, met a guy named Vinny Lo Bianca and thought he was nice. It was only until she saw him killing a person from a distance, that she realized he was bad. Nervously, (and smartly) she ran off to seek help and that's when she came upon the office of this small-town Private detective, Lou Ryan.

He agreed to help Gloria and wow, what an adventure that turns into! I felt that you executed the display of this adventure really well. You even mentioned Capone at one point, which I thought added a more gangster feel to the story.

The ending was sweet! I love happy endings, and (of course) your character, Low Ryan, lives to fight crime another day!

SUGGESTIONS: I mentioned that I really, really loved the 1930s Chicago character voices. With that said, there were a few mentions that I will need to look up. One was, 'transom'. I still don't know what it is. An elevator?
'Smarmy', is another example.
Maybe for some of the old-time lingo, I would have liked a glossary at the end of the story, or maybe a subtle explanation causally slipped into the writing.
While none of that took away from the excitement of your captivating story, it's just something I thought I'd mention.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi there WebWitch! I thought I saw you on the newsfeed, though you claim that, 'You're not really here'! *BigsmiLe* Anyway I suppose it's part of the GoT fun that I stop by for another visit!

Wow, somehow I navigated to this wondrous poem! I'm glad that I did because it really gave me the feeling that I had a glimpse into the mind of a mother wolf. You wrote this one well, so I hope you did great in the contest it was entered in.

I wondered if the poem was about the actual animal, or the instincts of an inner animal, which the title implies. Either way, I felt a brilliant mystery.

From the first stanza, your readers will understand the strength, both inner and physical, of the Mother Wolf. We read that she can be fierce when needed, but she still knows to respect the elder wolves.

The tales of wolves always involved a showing that these beasts are wise, graceful, and spectacular. Their senses are super keen, and I believe you succeeded in expressing that in your various stanzas. You mentioned in your second stanza that they can sense things with no need to look! How extraordinary is that! In your third stanza, I felt that this poem was drifting more about the narrator feeling like the wolf, with the spirit floating. The energy seemed boundless.

My favorite stanza was the second to last. It spoke about the keen hearing of the wolf. "Nothing's undetected from me/Even the shallowest breath". To me, that just seems so remarkable that animals can do that. I recently read that deer can sleep with ease because they can smell things and hear things that wakes them right up. I had the feeling that's what this stanza was expressing.

The last stanza was a great closure, in my opinion. It brought my attention back to the topic of the contest prompt that asks, "What kind of animal are you?" The poem ends with the narration about being thankful for having the wolf as a guide. Very pretty poem. *Wolf*

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Webwitch! I haven't been by your port in a while, so I was happy that I had the time and the opportunity to stop by. I was glad that I did because now I get to see hidden gems like this great cNote shop. Yesterday was my WDC anniversary, so I wished I had a list of great shops lined up to send out as people gave me things like award icons or merit badges. I'm sure I certainly could have found items at your shop.

I am most impressed with your affordable prices. Hey, now that I've been earning lots of gift points, I could afford higher, but I love to be frugal, and gift points don't stay in my pocket for very long. It's nice to know the address of a fine shop at great prices.

Aww, I clicked on your pretty ribbon and saw that Sherry had given it to you. Time flies, people come and go, and we will miss people like Sherry and Mona. Your ribbon keeps her memories still with us.

I loved that you filled up your shop with ten cNotes. It gave me lots to look at and choose from. You have a wide variety of various types here, too. One can find Sympathy, love, friendship, or get well. In addition, we can congratulate someone for anything or just say a simple hello. I like that you supplied us with a cNote to give to a person who had a baby, or who had a birthday. Both are occasions to celebrate!

My absolute favorite cNote in this collection is the Congratulations with the Marching band character. It had a very colorful, fun look to it. Even the, 'well done' saying on the inside was colorful. Yes, I clicked on all of the, 'view full cNote' areas! Thanks for putting this shop together.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Exclaim* Hi Dan! Oh we never got to hear what happened to the keys! I was hoping for a punch line or an explanation, but I guess that's part of what makes this story a mystery. Your readers will just have to use their imagination and guess what might be happening!

I liked the light humor in your story, and I see that's why you added comedy to the genres listed. Your character kept his sense of humor, even though he was obviously stressed out from his bad luck with keys. He had been losing them out of his pocket, then they didn't work anytime he hid one to use. His solution of selling anything of value and simply keeping the doors unlocked was funny. I imagined a door accidentally locking anyway, and he still wouldn't be able to get in. LOL

I thought you had a fun start to your story. The narrator tells us that he had to break into his house again for the third time this year! Oh no! Nobody should have to do that. I was thrilled to read more because I kept hoping to find out what was happening, especially after reading the next part!

Oh my gosh, the narrator starts feeling paranoid because he came up with the far-fetched idea that someone is taking his hidden keys, filing the teeth of them down, and then putting them back. Like a prank! I would have thought maybe a rat was gnawing at them, but now you have your readers wondering, too! That's the sign of a fun, thought-provoking story.

I think it's time that character gets himself an electronic door lock. Then, there will never be anything to lose, unless he forgets his code!
Nice work. It was a fun read. *Delight*

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review of "The Darkest Sky"  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi JCosmos! I absolutely loved this story! I thought the title added to the mystery and suspense found inside. After I read it, I kept thinking that I would love to see THIS in movie form. I think it would really make a great movie because here we have a great story already.

I would suggest redoing the brief introduction when you get the time.
Instead of simply repeating the title, maybe you might writing something that provokes curiosity, such as, Is the Earth prepared?

Another thing that I would suggest thinking about changing is this part:
"Quickly dubbed the doomsday asteroid. Everyone looked up at the doomsday asteroid." It could maybe be something like, ...'Everyone looked up at the treacherous wonder.'

Other than that, I felt your story was a provocative masterpiece. It provokes thought about what might happen if one day, we all wake up and there is something perilous threatening the planet from above. The unknowing would cause extreme anxiety. As you mentioned, people could speculate aliens, and, well, impending doom, as in your title.

I liked how you stressed the point that in an event such as this, the entire world would come together as one. They would have to! Enemies would now be allies. The US would be joined by Brazilians, Chinese, the EU, Koreans, Japanese, Iraqis, Iranians UAE, and Israel,. Indians, Pakistanis, Russians, Saudis, South Africans, Russians, and Ukrainians, even the North Koreans. You made this all sound easily believable and impressive. I would have needed to do a bit of research in order to name all of that! Nicely done.

You gave good closure to your story, in my opinion. In the end, while the world watched, the crisis was averted and the asteroid was blown away.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Jackie! I found your story to be very enjoyable and entertaining. I could certainly feel the mystery that you so cleverly wrote. It could have almost have been also in the comedy genre, as it had a bit of light humor in it as well, which I also liked.

You are a talented storyteller. I loved the suspense and adventure that you smoothly added throughout your story, and your descriptions were spot on to have me captivated with every word.

For example, at one point, the character mentioned that they were hiding in an old house, and then later when the police jiggled the door knob and the door squeaked, I could imagine all of those sounds that an older house would make.

I noticed that you had a phrase in bold, so I'll assume this was for a contest. I hope you did well in it, or at least, I'm sure, you must have made it hard for the judges to choose because this is very good!

I thought it was a great move to start the mystery and suspense right from the starting hook. When the narration spoke about partners hiding in a suspect's house, I thought they might be police officers, but then I remembered the title and realized they were detectives. I could hear the anxiety in the character's voice, as they hear noises and hide for fear of being discovered. The setting you described so well, made me think of an old cellar for sure, with talk of cobwebs and decaying rats.

I felt that you described what the characters were experiencing while hearing footsteps upstairs. 'My heart is thumping around in my chest." I wondered what would happen next and wanted to read on. Nice work in this page turner. I thought it ended nicely, with the characters feeling that they did a good job in solving the crime, and they could, if they can first get out of jail! Fun story! *Smile*

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review of Predictable News  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Christine! You should write for Hollywood because while I was reading this awesome poem, I kept thinking that I wished this was a movie!! What a great idea for a movie it would be. I would certainly watch it and I think it would be a blockbuster hit. Did you ever consider writing a short story about this idea? You already have a very successful poem. I think it could easily be turned into a successful story as well.

By the way, a big congratulations for winning at the Writer's Cramp with this entry. It is truly well deserved.

Thank you, also, for adding all of those links about Lisbon and Portugal.
Next year, my husband and I will be visiting Spain. We were thinking about going to Lisbon while we were in that area. You might have just inspired me to do that for sure!

I thought you did a terrific job with the rhyme in this poem. I love poems that rhyme, and this one seemed to flow smoothly. It made a pleasant feel without interrupting the great sci-fi story that the poem told.

Most of us recently experienced the Solar Eclipse, so it is fresh in your reader's minds. We can know what it must have been like to be so entranced with watching the beautiful phenomenon, and not realizing that there was a terrible earthquake about to happen. I liked that you added a Martian spaceship that had been paying attention, and saved the day by beaming the spectators up to safety.

I plan to look up that earthquake of seventeen fifty-five so that I can find out all of the details. I think that might be one of the great links that you added at the bottom. I wonder if there might be ruins of it over in Portugal!

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Wow JCosmos! I enjoyed the vast amount of information you provided at the bottom of your poem equally as much as the delightful poem itself. Some days I feel that I actually learned something new.
You can take the credit for me learning what a Coy Dog is. I truly never heard of it before. Maybe it's because, I don't think, we have those on the east coast where I live.

I was attracted to your item because I love dogs and I thought your poem story was about shy dogs. How funny is that! Anyway, now I know something new.

You did add the prompt words nicely. I thought they were well-placed, and they told a believable story. When I read those lines, I felt that you described a beautiful symphony gala. How fancy everyone must have looked, wearing tuxedos, top hats, and red cocktail dresses. These descriptions made it seem like a beautiful event.

You did a great job with showing concern that the guy felt about going to the event, while leaving his chickens unattended at the rural farmhouse. I would have been worried, too, if I knew there were out of control coy dogs running around. Oh gosh, and there were mountain lions, too! Your poem had a disturbingly realistic feel to it!

Mr. Chuckmiester added a bit of humor to your story poem.

I liked the fun fact that told of how the Sobrante area where your story took place, had been inhabited by the Huichin, an Oh lone tribe, between 5000 and 1000 BC., and that one of their villages stood where the El Sobrante Library now stands.

Important: Please change the rating of your item. You have it at E, but with the mention of drugs and weapons, of course, it should be a higher rating. Thanks!

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review of Bobby-Q  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello, IE! I was glad that I 'set a spell' to read your funny poem story about a tourist getting directions from a local. I loved it so much, that I went back to the contest to see if this one won.
It certainly must have been a close race because this is so much fun to read. You have a talent for writing comedy.

I read through the entire poem first before I started writing this review, so I did see the link that you mentioned about, 'Southernese'.
I took a glance at that, but I'll have to go back to it at a later time. It also looks like a fun piece to read.

There seemed to be a lot of requirements to the prompt, but I feel that you covered all of it. It can't be too easy to give directions without using the words, north, south, east, west, left, right, straight, but you did this flawlessly. *Well, maybe not according to the stumped tourist!* *Laugh*
You also made up a funny way to show why Bubba's Corner BBQ isn't on a corner. That is knee-slapping comedy for sure!

I felt that you did a great job of capturing the mannerisms, personality, and, especially, the speech of the local guy. Your readers don't get a glimpse of the tourist until the end when he runs off. It makes us ponder the idea that he either didn't understand anything of what the guy was saying, thought there was something wrong with him, or both!

My favorite stanza was your third. I chuckled when I read the part: "Yer nose’ll lead t’way
Bubba’s Bobby-Q ribs smell just like heav’n" LOL
I almost want to tell someone that the next time I have to give directions. "Your nose will lead the way at that point..." How much fun would that be! Anyway, I'm sure I'll be thinking about your poem if I ever do have to give directions. Thanks for creating this item.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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Review of The Shoe Emporium  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Detective! Oh, I loved your poem about Shoes! I was attracted to it because...Well, SHOES!! As a person who could spend hours 'playing' in a shoe store, I knew I would enjoy yours, and I did!

What a fun poem! I think if you want to get someone's attention, you talk about puppies or shoes! I felt that your title of, The Shoe Emporium, was very clever. Whenever I hear of a store called a boutique or emporium, it always makes me think it's a very special type of store, selling exquisite merchandise. That right there already set the stage for what's to come in your poem.

Did you ever consider adding a stock image to the brief introduction? I just took a quick little look, and I see lots of selections that would work nicely here. This one, for example: C102336, was listed under the 'shoes' category. It shows someone resting with their feet up. The age is unknown and the shoe type could really be anything. There are also other places in the stock images you might look under for 'boots', 'shoes', and accessories.

I liked that you used creativity in making many stanzas of various types of shoes. In those stanzas, I felt gentle humor, and (since you meant this to be in the children's genre), I could imagine little ones running around in their fancy purple sequined cowgirl boots. My daughters certainly had cowgirl boots, though those were pink!

You covered everything, though I didn't see any rain boots there. The idea for an additional stanza? *Wink*

I liked that you added sports cleats, walking shoes, and business shoes as well. It's the type of words which make your readers envision your Shoe Emporium well. Speaking of which, it was nice that you returned to that wording at the end for good closure, too.

Oh, and I would also like to point out that your rhymes were clever as well. You chose unusual words to rhyme, in my opinion, which I felt added to the uniqueness of the, 'store'. Nice work!

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Exclaim* Hi Kristina. I was looking for a light, fun story to read. When I noticed yours, I knew I found what I was looking for.
The title, mentioning a Marshmallow Squad, sounded like it would be fun for sure.

I didn’t understand what the story would be about from the brief introduction, but it did sound intriguing to me. It wasn’t until I started reading it, that I realized it was about a boy and his dog. I love dogs, so it made me want to read even more.

You had a sad opening, where your readers learn that the boy’s parents died in a car accident, and now all Michael has is his dog, Jordan. I think you set to scene well, because your readers will understand why Jordan was too upset to go to school when he couldn’t find his dog.

Wow! Nice work in creatively turning what sounded like a strange dream into a sci-fi type reality. I liked the names that you gave to Marshmallow creatures. I also thought you chose a great name for the planet that they came from. I found myself glad that they were there to help Michael find the dog.

Your story ended with a scene where it is revealed that the dog was taken by a mean person who hoped to sell the dog. I take it this was a first chapter and that you might be planning to write more.

I found a few little things that, in my opinion, could be polished up so that your story could shine like the great story it is.

Your first opening paragraph seems to go on and on. I would break it up into at least two paragraphs. For example, the part, ” That day, Michael decided not to attend school because…”, could probably start a new paragraph.

Typo here, ” Jordan is you’re lost puppy who is very special ”. Of course, you’re should be your.


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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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40
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Tracker! What a fun story! I'm so glad that happened upon this one and chose it to read! If I can make a suggestion, I would say to also add comedy genre, because I smiled the whole time I was reading it. What a great mood-lifter as I was enjoying my coffee! I would love to join the Hammock Haters Movement! LOL

With that said, I've never had the desire or the courage to attempt to try one out, and after reading your story about it, I probably never will. *Laugh*

I enjoyed reading all of the descriptions in your story. It made me recall strolling around in Playa Del Carmen, Mexico, and having several of the venders try to sell me hamacas. I was intrigued, but I wondered if it was a thing. Apparently from your story, it is. But who can actually use one of those correctly! *Crazy*

You gave good advice throughout, offering suggestions as to what people should choose to pass their time in the sunshine. I would also choose the lounge chair myself.

Your descriptions of the makings of a hammock were great. I could imagine, if I never saw one before, exactly what they look like. I also chuckled at how you mentioned greeting cards like to pose a retired person sitting in a hammock. By the way, the little image in the brief introduction is cute as well, and sets the scene for the story.

The unsuspecting user is really in for a shocking surprise when he tries to get out of one. Hey, according to your fun writing, he might not ever get into one to begin with! That would be me - no, I'd be in the comfortable chaise lounge!

I felt that it was nice of you to add a link to the activity at the bottom, but sadly, that item is no longer valid. The thought was there, but perhaps you should remove the link and have this cute story stand alone.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Sindbad! I found your story to be adorable! I couldn't expect what it would be from the title, but from the brief introduction, I had a feeling that it would be cute. It was, indeed!

I never thought about what twins would be thinking in the womb. I felt it was clever of your to write a story about them and what might be going through their minds.

As they kept saying, 'life after delivery', it made me think it was a play on, 'life after death', and that would add a philosophical or even biblical aspect to your story. In any event, I felt that you created a nice twist on that.

I thought you did a great job in showing that the twin's mother was resting, enjoying the breeze and beauty of a garden, unaware that her unborn babies were pondering thoughts about life after delivery. Bringing your readers back to her in the garden at the end was a great closure to your story.

You created the twin's personalities well. One twin thought with positivity, contemplating that there must be something else other than what they have been experiencing. ...A life after delivery. The other twin felt that such thoughts were unrealistic. I thought it showed your creativity in having that twin question suggestions about possibly being able to walk with their legs or eat with their mouths instead of having to depend on an umbilical cord. He questioned the idea of, 'Mother', in general.

You expressed the optimism of the first twin well. He didn't give up with his determination to convince the second twin. He told him to focus and listen for her loving voice. That was sweet. If only the mom resting in the garden knew and was able to reassure her babies!

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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42
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi GreenWillow! I'm coming across so many pretty items here on WDC this month so far, and yours is no exception! I love Acrostic poetry forms, so when I noticed yours as a tribute to St. Patrick's Day, I knew this is one that I'd love! I was right!

Let me first say that the colorful image in the brief introduction is eye catching. The title, Ode to the Emerald Isle, adds to the poetic beauty.

I thought it was a perfect choice to present your poem in a large, green font. What better way to show off a St. Patrick's Day poem!

I also thought it was a nice touch to not only capitalize the first letter of each line, but to underline those letters as well. It really made the, 'St. Patrick's Day' show out, in my opinion.

Your lines told a story of Ireland well. Your opening, made me feel the warmth of spring. I liked that you said, 'clover', and I immediately thought of shamrocks! I was also able to imagine a pink hue of sunrise, so I could picture the narrator waking and seeing that sky.

The mention of castles and the stone they are made of, added a piece to your poem that makes Ireland seem like a, 'wondrous land', indeed. You also cleverly provoked thoughts in your readers, by hinting for them to ponder what stories those ancient castles hold. Maybe there were saints that lived nearby. In any event, there is certainly a lot of history.

I've visited Ireland a few times, and I've seen castles. I agree that it has a beauty all of it's own. You captured that beauty in your lovely poem.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Exclaim* Hi Megan, and happy WDC anniversary, a month early!
I didn't realize we've basically been members here for just about the same amount of time. My twenty-second WDC anniversary is this month, so I've only been here one month longer than you. Nice!

You have a nice anniversary forum, and, if I'm understanding it correctly, it's an on going forum - not just for your anniversary month, but all of the time. It's open as a merit badge exchange. What a great idea! I'm glad I happened upon your port because I never knew about this item before. I will have to remember to get back to this again. I should really be keeping notes of all these hidden gems as I notice them! LOL

Congratulations for this activity getting nominated at the Quills Awards and for having your friends put such large awardicons on it. I liked that you added font in your heading to match the color of the Quills banner.

I thought the instructions in your brief introduction were very easy to understand, however, I had to read over the instructions in your forum twice. I would suggest breaking that up into two different paragraphs.
In one, you would put what you are saying about yourself - How long you've been a member, what you like about WDC and your writing genres, etc.. The other paragraph could be the precise instructions about how this activity works. Right now, you have it jumbled together. I'm sure people could still get the idea by seeing what other people did, but it would be a shame if some people passed it up because something wasn't too clear.

I was impressed at how many trinket/badge pages you have and added in the heading.

Anyway, I think this shop is great, and I'll have to stop by to wish you a happy anniversary next month!

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


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Review of Christmas in July  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Beholden! Ah, I enjoyed your sweet poem about Christmas in July. I enjoy rhyming poems, and this one was fun to read because of the rhyming couplets. Your poem made me think of Summer and Christmas, and wish for both at the same time! The best of both worlds for sure..

I'll have to say, I chuckled when I saw the image which you chose to put in your brief introduction. It was clever to put a beach/summer picture there rather than a Christmas tree, because it has a fun look to it next to the Christmassy title!

Your poem is presented well. Thank you for putting your poem in bold font. I can see it well and the colored prompt words pop nicely throughout.

I liked that you gave information at the bottom. It's clear to see that you have couplet stanzas in your poem, but some people might not recognize that, so it's great to have it readily available. Of course, the other information about the prompt is a terrific addition as well.

I had so much fun, honestly, reading your poem. Aside from the smooth rhyme, which I adored, I thought you came up with the greatest lines to write. My favorite was the line about what type of tree would be had.
I wanted to say..Oooh, oooh, a Palm tree!! That would be nice! Though my people in Florida use regular Christmas trees. How uncreative! LOL
I liked your line about the socks. I'm guilty of occasionally giving socks! But I do like to give better things along with them. Your stanza did bring back fun memories. Thanks for putting this humourous poem together.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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45
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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Wow, Lilli! I feel like I've been to the twilight zone and back - How did I never see your image shop or this cNote shop before!
If I did, I certainly forgot about them. I won't forget anymore because both of them are now in my favorites where they belong.

I love the look of this shop. You have a large variety of cNotes - I counted ten - and every one of them is as bright and cheerful as your personality is.

Congrats for this shop being nominated in the Quills. We mustn't forget about YOU after all, and this is a great shop to be in the running for sure.

These are my eyes after seeing the price *Right* *Shock2*
At only 450 gift points per set, these are probably the most affordable cNotes I have ever come across on our site. Lilli, that is very, very generous and thoughtful of you. I will need to remember these when I send out bunches of cNotes, such as during and after a "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  raid as little extra goodies.

The heading looks neat, pretty (large, purple font) and easy to follow.

I enjoyed looking at the colorful images in the notes. I'm glad the Congratulations one is at the top. It has a festive and fun look to it, which, I think, sets the atmosphere of the rest of the shop.

The simplest one, the Good Day, is probably my favorite. It's cute and special in it's own way, and it is like an all occasion card.

The Thank you one of colorful flowers is very lovely.

Let me say, that the most unique one is the 'Blessed Be the Weirdos'!
How much fun is that!! Lilli, thank you for putting this shop together. I like it a lot!

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


46
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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello Kings Sice Castle! I don't do crossword puzzles on WDC too often - rarely actually, but I am treating myself to 'fun' this week here, and I figured (correctly) that yours would be easy. After being a member of our site for twenty two years, I thought I would be able to get a good ego boost by knowing all of these answers without needing to look anything up. I had fun with it, and I hope you had just as much fun creating it.

I thought you picked the right questions for the game, in honor of WDC's birthday celebration. Most members will be able to think up the answers, and I bet it was more of a challenge to think up these fun questions.

I had to think about how many colored cases there are. Let's see, I thought, black, yellow, blue, purple, red and white. No! That won't fit! So then I remembered that I was leaving out grey! See, I was even challenged in this little game!

Everything fit well across and down, and I was able to find the numbers connecting well, too. I'm curious. I wondered how long it took you to make it, and do you remember how to make one? I was thinking about trying to do it myself sometime. I don't think I ever made one before, or if I did, it was a long time ago.

I actually messed up on two of the questions! I don't know what I did wrong, as the player doesn't get to see the correct answers, at least I don't think so, as I mentioned, I rarely do these things. I don't know if you get to see my answers, so maybe you would like to. As an additional bit, I'll show them. Here is what I had:
Across:
2
upgraded
The membership level between Basic and Premium.
5
interactives
WDC's choose your own adventure items
9
crn
Youtube has subscribers... WDC uses this term for follower.
10
trinket
Members click on these to collect them
12
madlib
The item where you fill in the part of speech to create wacky stories
13
poll
The Item where you get members to vote in.
15
newsfeed
The place to post the latest information / updates.
17
newbie
A member who just joined the site last week.
18
seven
The number of different color cases on the site
Down:
1
writingml
Spice up your writing with...?
3
portfolio
Where all your items are kept on the site.
4
active
When you officially create a WDC item for your portfolio, you become a ...?
6
emoticon
Smiley faces are an example of this.
7
handle
User name that other members would see you under.
8
cNotes
Greeting cards members send out.
11
book
The item you would use for a daily blog on the site.
14
reviews
Feedback for writers on the site are given as ...?
16
quills
WDC's equivalent to the Oscars.

Anyway, as I said, it was fun and it took me the time it took to drink a cup of tea to get it done! LOL



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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


47
47
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Intuey! I don't know if I've ever been to this fundraiser before, but I figure I'll give it some pretty stars. Being a dog owner, I like the name of the activity, and I love the little dog pictured in the brief introduction. I notice that there is a lucky dog merit badge associated with the prize, which makes your activity even more interesting. *Bigsmile*

I wasn't a fan of the people and the raffle tickets at the top image, but I really love the dog image! He reminds me, just a bit, of the dog from 'Little Orphan Annie'. The other has people smaller than the raffle tickets. I think I would have rather see just the tickets at the top, but in the end, it really doesn't make a difference what images are used when people are looking for tickets to send out.

Overall, I think your heading was presented well, and I found it easy to follow.

At a thousand gift points for each ticket, I don't think it's a low price, but it doesn't seem too unreasonable as that's basically the common price most people use in all the raffles.

All in all, I'd like to say that you did this well. It seems to be an ongoing raffle, which is good because I have no doubt people will grow to use it as their, 'go-to' place to buy little gift prizes.
Also, it has a very neat and understandable look to it.

In addition, it's so sweet of your to rotate the groups which will benefit. This will probably get your activity noticed by more people.

I liked that you reminded people that they can buy tickets for themselves as well as to be given as gifts. I thought it was smart to even add that they can give these tickets out anonymously and you gave instructions for that, too. Some people don't think of such things, so it was good to bring it to their attention.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


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Review of Red Carpet  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello Hope! Bravo! What a fun story! I thought it was very clever of you to write a story from the point of view of a lipstick which belonged to a celebrity! Very unique, indeed!

I liked that you included a link to the prompt. I think that added to having your readers appreciate the twist that you put in the challenge prompt.

You were asked to write a story from a Taylor Swift song (That attracted me to your story, by the way, because my daughter likes Taylor Swift and has been to one of her concerts a few months ago.), and you wrote about Taylors lipstick getting interviewed. That took creative imagination, and I loved that idea.

I felt that you, 'set the stage' well, with giving your readers the vision of the red carpet lights, hearing the song from the loud speakers in the background, and seeing the excited reports with their microphones waiting to get the Lipstick's voice captured.

I chuckled when I read the name you gave to the character - L.I.P. Stick! That added to the fun of your story! Your reader's were able to get a glimpse of the excitement the little lipstick must have also felt, 'waking up in Taylors makeup bag'. I didn't know the ingredients of a lipstick. I'll assume you did a little research to find that out, and it was great to include that in the narration of your story.

It was funny to add that small gossip about how many times Lipstick said Taylor reapplied it! Also, the QR code was hilarious! It was a smart way to stick the name of the song in the story. Well done.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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Review of Pink Perfume  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim*Hi PiriPica! If I can be honest, I was attracted to your item because of the really pretty unicorn ribbon which it has on it. After I clicked on the item, I was glad that I did. At first glance, your presentation made your item look like a fun piece to read. I wasn't disappointed!

LOL I must say that I read the notes at the bottom first, and I smiled when I read that the perfume pictured wasn't meant as a product placement. I did hover over 'here' and saw that it was Clean. Nice use of that feature, by the way. Not too many make use of all the features on our site.

Also in the notes, I didn't realize that June 23rd is National Pink Day.
I'll have to remember that, and I'll think of your lovely poem when I do.

I liked that you gave information about the decuain form of poetry. I like to try structured poems from time to time, but I don't always remember the patterns. Adding a bit about it here will help people to see it in your poem, and understand what you were doing.

The pink font at the bottom as well as inside the poem itself added to the nice presentation.

The look of your poem reminds me of a sonnet, though I knew it is a decuain.

I feel that you succeeded in making your poem seem like a 'pink little bottle full of summer aroma'. I enjoyed reading that, although you have a 'kaleidoscope of memories', summer (in other words) brings back memories of pink.

The narrator says that past memories can easily be recalled when thinking of that pink bottle. I loved the little details that you included, such as pink aromas in the breeze, pink clouds, pink floral fragrances, etc. These thoughts help your readers to see pinkish, too.

One more thing that I'd like to point out is how nicely I felt that you rhymed your words. You did this effortlessly and your poem flowed smoothly because of it. Nice work in putting this unique piece together.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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50
Review of Follow the Sun  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hi Emerick! I saw the title of your sweet poem, and that's what drew me to it. It reminded me of so many lovely songs with that title, such as Xavier Rudd - Follow The Sun, which I had to put on in the background. With so many nice thoughts about that title, I knew your poem would be just as nice, and I wasn't disappointed.

I found all six of your stanzas to be dazzling and full of pretty poetic words, which left me with a good feeling. I felt that you kept up the upbeat theme well throughout your poem.

Your first stanza was stunning, and it had me wanting to continue on to read more. You are a talented poet! As a person who loves to watch sunsets, I might say that your words complemented the beauty of the sunset, with words like 'orange hue' and 'fiery blaze'. Great choices for the first 'hook' stanza.

I felt that you succeeded in continuing the inspirational purpose of the poem, urging the readers to follow the sun. I interpreted it that although a day might bring sunshine and happiness, it's not always that way. When one sunset brings an end to the day, it's a promise for a new sun - a new start to tomorrow. I think you expressed all of that - and more - in your pretty poem.

I think that your fourth stanza brings the message to your inspirational poem the best, and brings the readers back to your brief introduction about fervent plea from The Preacher as we are reinforced with the thought - "One setback is a chance to soar." What a beautiful message that is!

One more thing I'd like to say, is that I enjoyed seeing the title here and there throughout your poem. It enforced what you were trying to say, in my opinion. Very nicely done. *Smile*



The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

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Game of Thrones  [13+]
Returning in April - Prep starts March 1st
by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation




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