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Review of Mentors  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Rhychus! I found your poem on the 'read and review' list.

What an interesting contest. It sounds fun and easy for everyone. You might consider adding a link to the contest under your poem, so we can all enjoy it, and see what the theme was. I noticed, for example, you have one word highlighted in your poem. Perhaps a little might be mentioned about that word.

Great presentation! I like the clean look and the way you centered the poem.

The title goes well with the poem, which talks about how well the manners of minors can be improved with mentoring. Great work and good luck in the contest.

Happy WDC Celebration week!

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Review of Ladybug Beach  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your fun poem.

*Exclaim* (((Itchybarn))) So great to read a poem which you wrote!
I absolutely smiled while I read each and every stanza! *Bigsmile**Delight*

What an awesome presentation!
I liked that you chose red font to nicely complement the redish ladybug cover image.

My favorite poems are those that rhyme. Your rhyme scheme flowed very smoothly, which added to the fun experience of reading your poem.

I also liked that your poem told a story and included factual information about the little bugs. Your readers will learn about their colors, what they look like, and about how they hate to be kept in cases!

I thought it was a nice touch to end at the beach. It drew attention back to the title.

Thanks for sharing your entertaining story. *Smile*

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Review of Invisible Strings  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your story.

*Exclaim* Oooh, what a captivating story! I liked how it began with a dream.

Maybe you'll be tempted to write a chapter book of it someday, so we can read about Elsa's experience at the Las Vegas strip!

I enjoyed reading your story. Your readers can feel the hurt and frustration which Elsa endures from her bully husband and lonely life.

I did come across just a few small typos.

Here you wrote: " "No!" She said aloud, setting straight up in bed." sitting straight up...

Here, "Elsa sit up in bed and check the clock" ...sat up in bed and checked the clock.

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your tribute item.

*Exclaim* Hi Elisa! I found your great item in the random reads list.

I was glad to stumble across it because it was nice to reminisce contests, names of WDC members and items which brought back memories - especially now, during our site's 19th anniversary celebration.

The brief intro is unique and eye-catching.
I like the fun atmosphere and occasional humor in your item. It's also presented nicely, with a very organized look. Gosh, good for you to have kept up with it for so many years!

Just so you know, there are a few invalid items. We can't help having those pop up from time to time, as people come and go (...and so do their great items!)

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Review of Woodpecker  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem

*Exclaim* Hi Someone! I enjoyed reading your pretty poem. It reminded me of the sights and sounds of a green, spring day. I often hear the birds outside and the sounds of woodpeckers.

I liked that you took your poem through the journey of the determined woodpecker building her home. We saw the world through what the woodpecker would actually be going through.

She pecked away trying to create that home, despite all of the hardships, such as predators and other dangers. It finally had a wonderful home before the storm arrived, which I thought was a nice, happy ending.

Great choice making the font green, as it adds to the pleasant experience of reading your poem. Nick work! *Smile*

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Review of Personal C-notes  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your cNote item.

*Exclaim* Hi Purple Princess! I couldn't help but give this great item a bright purple awardicon!

I love cNotes, and these are really cute! I like all of them, but my favorite is the last one of the couple with the caption, "There's nothing better than you!"

I'm glad you put the purple image first, because it goes so well with your theme of purple. *Bigsmile*

The introduction writing is a nice touch, and it was a good idea to list three of your other cNote shops.

I normally don't use cNotes which are over 750 gps, but these will be nice to use for special occasions like Valentine's Day.

I hope you eventually complete this shop by adding more of the Romantic cNotes. Great work!

Enjoy the WDC Birthday Celebrations this week! *Delight*

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your TV item.

*Exclaim*Hi Typo! I enjoyed the nostalgia of your TV item. Some of those, like Howdy Doody, Sky King and Rin Tin Tin, I've never seen, but I smiled at the memory some of those other ones brought back.

Heck, I still watch the reruns of Star Trek and Bonanza these days! I was just thinking about Happy Days yesterday when my husband and I was a Twilight zone with a very young Ron Howard in it. I think he was in that before he ever landed a role in Mayberry.

I would add a few pictures here and there throughout your story of shows like Captain Kangaroo and Bat Man. Or, why not add in a few popnotes for people who aren't familiar with the shows. The following is an example of a popnote:

Beverly Hillbillies

Thanks for sharing this great item, and have fun this week at WDC's Birthday Celebrations! *Balloongo*

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your great poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Meg! You're poem about one of my very favorite birds caught my attention. I've been to Australia three times, and each time I always enjoyed seeing the Kookaburra birds at the parks.

I liked how your poem told a story. I could picture the bird sitting in a tree, waiting for his favorite food to go by. In this case, he finished his breakfast, and was setting up for lunch! *Laugh*

I never thought about what a Kookaburra eats before. I imagined it ate fruit. ...So I learned something from your poem.

I liked how you wrote how they laugh. *Smile*

Your image isn't working, btw. I put one of mine at the bottom of this review. *Bigsmile*

Nice rhyme and fun poem. Have fun this week with the WDC Birthday celebrations! *Smile*



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Review of Dead Leaves  
Review by Maryann
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your short story.

*Exclaim* I thought this was a really creative story for a short fiction.
I could imagine a dull classroom, where students minds get lulled into a half-asleep daydream.

My favorite description was of the carpet of leaves outside the classroom window. I felt that it painted the picture of autumn breezes well.

I wasn't sure how old Clayton was, but I assumed he was a young child. Maybe now that the contest is over, you might add a few more lines to this little story to elaborate more on Clayton's age and the age of the narrator. You might also mention why the narrator was having this daydream. Was he psychic?

Speaking of the contest, it doesn't seem to be in business anymore, so I would remove the link to it, but I would keep the prompt.

Nice work with the descriptions and with putting this creative story together. *Smile*
Have fun at WDC's Birthday Celebrations this week! *Delight*



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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your great Chicken recipe.

*Exclaim* Okay, so I'm sure this is the first time my new puppy experienced watching me laughing out loud at my computer...My five year old Boxer is used to such outbursts. Thanks for making my day! I loved reading your recipe, and if you ever write a cook book, please let me know because, not only would I buy it, but I'd buy several copies to give out as gifts. *Cool*

So, it takes two beers to finish making this dish..*Laugh*

I love the humor throughout. One of my favorite lines: "You can use any kind; your own leftovers, KFC, or that bag of hot wings your gal smuggled out of the restaurant where she works" So funny!!

I liked how easy your recipe is. I was getting hungry reading it. I'm sure it tastes awesome. I might print it out and have my grown kids make it next time they visit. They'll get a kick out of it, and I'll be sure to hide the ketchup but leave a jar of Ragu around instead. *Delight*

Thanks again for sharing. This was a treasure of fun. *Smile*
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Review by Maryann
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your summer beach poem.

*Exclaim* Ah, as I type this in my house, I can imagine being on that beach.
The sights and sounds of your well-written poem brought me right to it.

I could imagine a young poet, inspired by the salty air, crashing waves, and damp sand, experimenting with rhyme and beauty with her pen in hand.

You made me wish I were on that beach, feeling the sand on my feet. Great descriptions of what could be going on. The little flowers and steaming soup were great additions, but my favorite was the way it began. The beach dreamed of summer visitors. Very nicely done.

Awesome name of the beach, by the way. ...Crabapple Beach...Is that a real place?

Enjoy your weekend, Joy, and happy dreams of summertime beaches. *Beach*

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Review of Silent Enemy  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Pure Sci Fi, and happy anniversary week! *Smile*

I loved your poem. You mentioned that it was your first try at poetry, so I really hope you write more like this sometime. In fact, I thought your poem read just like an epic story poem. You might like to write another one for contests such as this: "Invalid Item" 
It's all about story poems, such as yours.

I enjoyed reading through this fantasy tale about the battle in space. Of course, I am a bit partial because I love everything Star Trek! *Laugh*

Your readers can feel the intensity of the ship suddenly being attacked by surprise.
The ship seemed to be still in the darkness of vast space, when the other ship proceeded to fire. I thought that the descriptions of the laser balls of light exploding were a nice effect.

I liked your ending stanza the best. It leaves your reader pondering the situation. We wonder why this could have happened. The ship attacked and it was over as quickly as it began. You succeeded in creating an ending, which keeps your reader thinking about your poem. Nice work. *Smile*

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Review of The Dance Of Dis  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your great poem.

*Exclaim* Happy WDC Anniversary, Angus! Wow, what a fun poem to read! I was a very delightful experience on my very stressful day! The smooth-flow of your rhyme seemed to have a calming effect on me, and I was captivated by the story.

You chose your words well, as in the character name of, Irene. I loved the story and explanation of the 'Dis'. The Webster notation at the bottom was a nice touch.

I'm glad that I stopped by to wish you a happy anniversary month, because I really enjoyed reading this poem. *Smile*

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Review of Rising Star  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
FIRST IMPRESSION:

THOUGHTS: This is another of your folders which I have read and reviewed just about everything inside of. You needed some stars and recognition for your work, and I'm excited to be the very first to give it to you. *Smile*

FAVORITE PART: I really enjoyed reading the items inside of this item. My favorite was the list of your favorite music songs and groups...I spent SO MUCH time listening to those songs!! Please don't tell my Martell Princess! LOL *Laugh*
I liked that you posted about two songs from one of my favorite groups, Cold Play. You'd probably enjoy Savage Garden songs, too. I used to love that group before the singers broke up. Around that time, I moved more toward Cold Play.

I liked reading your historical article. I remembered reading Johnny Tremaine and other Boston Tea Party type books as a young girl, and your story brought back memories. Yes, later in life, I spend more of my time in sci-fi's and cookbooks, but back then I read a few scholastic books. *Bigsmile*

It was fun to read some of the Rising Stars stuff. I know Gabriella here for years and years. She's one amazing lady.

SUGGESTIONS: I would suggest adding an image and maybe some creative writing to the body of this item. I can understand that sometimes we quickly sweep items inside of a folder to clean up. Well, now that those items have a 'home', maybe you might think about decorating this home. Think of it as pretty and decorative landscaping, like one might have outside their place of residence.

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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a collection of various random item, such as contest entries and images.

THOUGHTS:I figured that since I already reviewed (almost) everything in this folder, and thoroughly read, looked at enjoyed everything in it, I might as well give the folder some pretty stars as well. I hate when folders are ignored and never have any stars on them, so I thought maybe you might feel the same.

FAVORITE PART: I enjoyed everything inside this wonderful folder. Whenever I open a folder, I always feel like it's a box of surprise goodies. This one was no exception. I really, really love that snow globe!! It's so pretty. What a great find!

I was delighted to read all about the actors and actresses of the Game of Thrones show which we are having fun with on WDC. Of course, our version of it, I'm sure, is much, much different than the TV show, but we are still having fun with it none the less. It was great to come across that gem of an item so that I could get to read about it. I hate to look things up on google because I get so distracted there! LOL Having this item to read was easier for me.

Your Hope story was a tear jerker, and showed your interesting creativity.

SUGGESTIONS: Oh! Nothing is standing out to decorate this folder! I like the image that ~ Aqua ~ made for you...The longer, blue, cloud banner with your name. Maybe you might consider putting that in the body of this folder, along with a longer introduction as to what we will find inside. After reviewing many things in your port today, I can see that you have a very creative way of writing. You might think of a very witty, and attention-catching paragraph to write here. *Smile*

I would suggest changing the genres which you picked. ...Other, other, other! How would one find this in their searches? Do people normally search, 'other'? Maybe it would be fun for Gaby to make that one of the daily genre searches for our reviewing! *Laugh*

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Review of My City of Dreams  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a bitter sweet tribute to a city where the narrator lives.

THOUGHTS: I was trying to figure out which city you were talking about in this beautiful poem. I was never really quite sure, and I thought you'd mention it as the 'punch line' near the end. You did say, 'City of Lights', but *Blush* that didn't really help me. I looked up, 'City of Lights' in a Google search, and actually a few came up. Paris, was the one which came up the most. Did I guess it correctly? Was it Paris?

FAVORITE PART: Great work in putting this one together. I loved how each delicate stanza was only two lines, and the rhyme pattern added pleasant entertainment to your poem. My favorite lines were, 'For their leaders are just like them, and their promises are all a big sham'. This did add a 'political' sense to your poem. One of the genres you piked was 'other', but maybe you might change that to 'political' so you could get the extra views.

I liked the closure you gave at the end. The contrast of the City of Lights and the darkness which is there now, will leave your readers in thoughts about this meaningful poem. Nice work.

SUGGESTIONS: I really love poems which rhyme. I guess I've read so many Dr. Seuss books to my four kids while they were growing up. I spent way too much time enjoying your great poem! LOL A few of the words, though, I thought didn't really rhyme as smoothly as the rest. Here are a couple of examples: money and irony and religion and Justification. I'm not sure what you could put in their places, but maybe end those lines with different words instead...Like, They think and dream about hoarding money they make,
and never about using it, for Heaven's sake! It would have the same impact, in my opinion, yet it would rhyme more smoothly.

If this is about Paris, a small image at the bottom of the Eiffel Tower would be amazing. Or, maybe a short factual bio of the city, which sparked your thoughts for this poem.

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Review by Maryann
In affiliation with The Iron Bank of Braavos  
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a newsletter all about Jane Austen related material.

THOUGHTS: Hi Megan. I'm really glad that I somehow came across this very entertaining newsletter. I didn't realize that you wrote these. I learned a lot about Jane Austen which I did't already know, and I also enjoyed the other tid bits of information which you included as well. Gosh, I don't think I have any of your pretty Jane Austen merit badges. I hope to be able to get one someday. I'll have to learn how I might win one perhaps sometime.

FAVORITE PART: Oh my gosh! I always loved anything Barnabas Collins, so I'm, of course, impressed that you have an autograph of him...Well, Jonathan Frid. ...And Bat Man, too. How proud you must be of your collection! Where did you get them?

I liked how well written and informative this newsletter was. You even told about a Danielle Steel book (Dutchess). The last Danielle Steel book I've read was one that was different from what she normally writes...About a robot man, but I can't remember the name of it.

Not too long ago, I watched...Wait for it...Pride and Prejudiced and Zombies. Have you ever seen it? You'd probably like it, if nothing else, for the style. I really enjoyed it. Gosh, those gals were strong, and that reminded me of what you wrote in your newsletter. I liked that you said Jane Austen wrote her books about women heroines --Their inner lives, feelings, and points of view.

I'll have to see if my daughter ever heard of that Jane Austen beer called Tible which you mentioned. Thanks for sharing your very special newsletter. I learned so much from you today. *Smile*



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by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


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Review of Signatures  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a very impressive collection of a variety of images all in one place.

THOUGHTS: I couldn't pass by this collection without saying a few words about it during your WDC anniversary. Seeing all of these brought back my great memories of you through the years you've been a member here. Isn't it funny how images can seem like a 'journal' in itself? You have several "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  images, and well deserved nano images, too, included in this nice grouping.

FAVORITE PART: Again, I felt like I was walking down memory lane. Gosh, we know each other a very long time here. I actually remember making the Power one with the flowers for you way back in 2012. Gee the years fly by sometimes it seems. It was among the first batch of images I ever attempted.

I'll have to tell you, I spent way too much time in this collection enjoying your images. I love the Dolly Parton one, and the saying inside of it. I see that you have several pretty Power Group images, and you were gifted a few truly beautiful ones. Congratulations on the nano winner images -- to me, it means that you've participated in nano in some way, which is impressive. Other than sponsoring people, I've never touched upon that myself.

SUGGESTIONS: Just a small suggestion, but someday when you get a moment, why not add a pretty image to the body of this collection heading. Right now, you have, "All my signatures and other bits and bobs.", but I see that you created this item back in 2001, and you haven't modified it since 2014. You could probably go back and make the font larger, center it, and perhaps add some color. ...And, maybe one of your pretty images. I actually like the Dolly one for it. *Bigsmile*

Game of Thrones  [13+]
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by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (2.5)
FIRST IMPRESSION: I felt that this was a dreamy love poem to enjoy.

THOUGHTS: Hi Mary. I'm so glad I decided to read and review your beautiful poem. I think that, with a bit of work, this can turn into something really very special. I really think there's potential in it, and I hope to give you some feedback of my ideas in how you can fix this up.

FAVORITE PART: : Wow, these sound, in my opinion, a lot like song lyrics. Did you ever consider adding more to them to make this into a song? I could imagine many brides and grooms getting married, and dancing at their wedding reception to these 'lyrics'. It would truly make a very perfect 'first dance' song.

You succeeded in expressing love and emotion in your well chosen words. I particularly enjoyed reading how they would take each others hands and be 'there' for each other. The descriptive words you picked seemed, to me, so sweet and beautiful.

SUGGESTIONS: Mary, what does this have to do with 'short stories'? I was pretty confused upon reading your brief introduction. As I said, if you add more and polish this up, you have something here for sure! You might change 'short stories' to 'a wedding song of dedicated love'.

I would also change the genre. I think you might find something else other than, educational to put this in. I thought it read more like a love poem. Romance, maybe?

Until the time you decide to add more, I would suggest to at least separate the poetic lines, break up the sentences, and center them. This way, it will give a more reader friendly appearance. It's really a pretty item, and deserves a little tender loving care.

Game of Thrones  [13+]
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by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


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Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.0)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a haiku about small animals and nature.

THOUGHTS: Hi Peach! I recently wrote a poem about squirrels, and that's what drew me to yours. I had also been looking for something in the 'education' genre. I'm not sure I would have listed your poem in that genre, though perhaps it's fine there. After all, people do need to occasionally be educated about animals and nature. This shows your creative mind thinking of great genres to show off your poetry in.

FAVORITE PART: As I already mentioned, I do like poems (and stories) about squirrels, and yours was all about them in their natural environment. The form you chose, Haiku, is one of my very favorites.

I also enjoyed the part about the clouds. Gosh, I have my head in the clouds a lot of the time, especially when the child in me tries to finds images up there of rabbits, and, yes, squirrels. I can certainly relate to the squirrel as he watches up at the clouds! LOL

I loved the twist you put into your cute poem. While the other squirrels were playing, one of them prefers to have his head up in the clouds. So lovely and adorable.

I checked the form, and I found that the syllable count was done very well. Nice work in putting this one together.

You had the perfect brief introduction with, 'One day at a time'. What a smart little squirrel! That's how we should all be!

SUGGESTIONS: I'm not sure I would have picked the word, 'lightly' playing. Squirrels, in my opinion, buzz around quicker than bees. The high spirited creatures tumble and twirl, and zip all over the place. Maybe I would have replaced it with 'freely'. There are better words, but we are limited with the syllable count.

Other than that, maybe center the poem and make the font bigger, but of course that's up to you.

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Review of Acquiesce  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: E | (4.5)
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a story about the culture of China, and one's experiences with it.

THOUGHTS: I felt that you wrote this story very well. It held my attention because you wrote it in an entertaining way.

FAVORITE PART: I really loved your descriptions. I could imagine the sun drying corn cobs on the little roof tops, and the donkey carts moving along. As a person who lives in the United States, this all sounded really exotic to me. Yes, I agree with your statement that those types of things show how truly hard the Chinese people work for a living. They are like, I would think, the rustic pioneers of U.S. yesteryear.

LOL I loved the humor you added here and there throughout your story, even though it's one of those 'sad but sweet' circumstances. The idea that street lights are only around for decorative purposes had me cracking up, although I could understand how scary it must be to cross the streets. I recalled my first visit to France, and seeing how the motor scooters felt free to drive on the sidewalks whenever they pleased. If a person is not used to it, it seems surreal.

I envy you and your husband for actually being right there at the Great Wall of China! Gosh, I would have had a few asthma attacks if I tried to hike up. I would have taken the skylift for sure, but good for you to do the hike. I thought it was nice of you to think of the high touristy postcard prices as a donation to the hard-working people who were selling them. I could relate to that, because I always seem to buy things that I really don't want, just because I understand that people depend on tourist money for income.

SUGGESTIONS: Thank you for sharing your cultural experience of China. Maybe sometime you might think about adding a picture or two of the Great Wall, or something from the bus ride. *Smile*

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by Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Exclaim* Hello Jay. I loved the feel of this very upbeat poem. It's pleasant spirit makes for a great way to face the day. We all experience challenges, and you succeeded in expressing hope in this inspirational poem.

I like special forms of poetry, and the idea of 'Villanelle' was intriguing to me. I'll have to say that I wasn't so familiar with it, so I looked up it's definition as: 'A villanelle (also known as villanesque) is a nineteen-line poetic form consisting of five tercets followed by a quatrain. There are two refrains and two repeating rhymes, with the first and third line of the first tercet repeated alternately until the last stanza, which includes both repeated lines' I would suggest to add a bit about the form after your lovely poem, for people (like me) who might not be so aware of it.

This is a very lively and summery poem, filled with lots of fun. The wording which you used, such as 'neath and fin'lly, made me think of the romance of old fashioned poetry.
Your talents shined through the poem.

I 'saw' all of the sights and sounds of a summer day throughout your stanzas. You allowed your readers to experience things like a green field and the blasting heat of summer. Your creative use of words like 'storm o'ercast' and 'show'ring flood' adds to the beauty of your work.

Inside of the summer references, we also find strong inspiration of hope in which challenging days will be healed. Nicely done. Nice centering in your presantation, and I like both your cover image and the colorful one at the bottom, too.

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Review of Last Flight  
Review by Maryann
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your suspenseful poem.

*Exclaim* Awesome poem, Kerri! I love poems about dragons, and I was glad I came across this very exciting one.

I felt the power of this poem. You chose terrific poetic words, which aided in that effect. You succeeded in awaking your readers senses, while we imagined winds blowing, bells chiming, and all in all the dragons battling through the stench and strength of seawater. You really did a creative job with this one.

I'm not very familiar with the Interlocking Rubyait form of poetry, so it was enjoyable to see one in action. *Smile*

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Review of My African Gray  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your pet poem.

*Exclaim* Hi Lisa! What a really cute pet poem. I loved the way it rhymed and told the story about your lovely African Grey Parrot, Katie. I'm assuming it's a pet that you have. She sounds really sweet.

My favorite line was the heart warming lines at the end of the last stanza. Our pets are so very dear to our heart, and I believe you expressed that well in your last stanza...As well as all of the other stanzas.

You gave a nice idea about the fun-loving bird, and the relationship between the owner and the pet. My friend's African Grey can whistle, too! I could imagine how yours whistles.

Maybe you might be able to post a picture in the item of her someday. *Smile*

Nice work in putting this poem together. *Smile*

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*Star*This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your cNote shop.

*Exclaim* Penguins!! These penguin cNotes are so cute!

I enjoyed browsing through all of them. I chuckled, and had a very nice visit here.

My favorite is the 'port raid'! So funny!! It's perfect, because I could imagine all of those many penguins storming through. *Laugh*

The friendship one, and the 'hugs' one are also a couple of my favorites. ...And, gosh, the baby 'fuzzy' penguins are adorable!

I liked that your prices are decent, and that you offer many cNotes in this shop. Each one of them has just the right saying along with it. They are great for every occasion, as you mentioned in your brief introduction. Nicely put together. *Smile*

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