You try for self-evaluation, it is a good practice, but you do it often, as you speak the truth, but not in true perspective, in your own style of expression, you say you lie, as you think the world is full of novice, you are professional, again you speak you lie, by telling lies you can sleep and get to feel peace; there is a little controversy, I find, as you have spoken here, I give below your words:
Lying
I’m trying
The truth
No reason
Seasoned
La professional
In a world of novice
Only deceiving
Is what I say
What I tell myself
It allows me sleep
It allows me peace
Otherwise
There would be
None
You speak you lie in the world of novice, while you claim yourself a professional, and you believe in God, and say more, God give us freewill and devils give no will, and again you speak you know you are a liar and those who are not liars have little idea, you never tell what is the idea, but say they only deceiving, then I fail to understand who is deceiving who and why, who are real deceivers, and who are real liars, who are you, what are you exactly; your self-evaluation is incomplete, you are just making round and round, and not speaking anything concrete about anything and speaking about everyone and about everything, as I find the idea from your words given below:
God above
Gave us freewill
The devil below
Gave us no will
In between we live
So inclined
Those so bound
Those unlike
The liar that is me
Have little idea
Only deceiving
Again, you are trying to prove yourself so critical and unpredictable here, because you say, in need of no truth or reason, you do what you must and what is required and you have limited regrets; again, you confess, what you do are increasing part of your dilapidated heart and soul, and without any link and reference to that, you speak a new thought, you say you will all find residence and at the same time you speak, while in this world, you are sure that you have no home, what is the point, I do not understand any coherence of such thoughts at par with your previous thoughts about yourself expressed; so I give below your lines for your understanding and appreciation of your controversial and incoherent expressions:
In need of no
Truth nor reason
I do what I must
What is required
I have limited regrets
But that which I do
Are increasing parts of my
Dilapidated heart and soul
Upon the page
I’ll always find residence
While in this world
I’m sure
That I have no home…
Only Deceiving
Anyway, I think you have some solid concept and ideas, you have experience ample about living but you fail to express your ideas and experiences rightly in tune or at par with your wisdom, and as a reader you make me confused by distractions of thoughts, while I find there are thoughts appreciable but you do not express them properly, while Grammatically I find no errors in expression.
Truly speaking, you have genius, you too know, you have intelligence and caliber of appreciation of living, but I think, please do not take it personally, it is just my opinion, and you know I am also a human being I also make mistakes, and I think I am not the wisest or I think only the right, just I think, you are not in a position to express your thoughts with right or proper words and you do not maintain rhythms and coherence in expressions, as I experience it here in this poem; now I do not consider how excellently you wrote other poems I reviewed.
Overall, I have offered my viewpoints on this poem and hope it will help you to understand and appreciate your stand as far as this poem is concerned.
Wish you good luck.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
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