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Review of Joke  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
It is a good endeavour; a limerick is well conceptualized and expressed.


The theme is good enough to appreciate, and there is clarity of expression, though I find sister’s response is not appreciable but that does not make it a poor work anyway.


In terms of form and format, a limerick is not essentially an inferior poem; here I find it is a well thought and expressed, and it is in good rhythm of narration.


I enjoyed the read.





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Review of Yummy Salad  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
You talk about yummy salad, and I find it is prepared so meticulously to give yummy taste on dishes of lunch, I presume.



I liked how nicely you have taken care of its preparation to serve like a professional cook, but you do not like it here for you keep a different tongue for taste of salads, even if it is dressed properly with cream, etc.



Maybe you do not like the cook and you need salads must be prepared and dressed by adult cooks to get a romantic feeling along with the taste of the salads you wish to enjoy its taste.



Anyway, why you call it the most obscene salad, I do not understand, particularly when there is no specific mention of obscene in preparation and presentation; maybe you have just like to give it a name for fun and nothing more than that.



But I enjoyed the read.




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Review of The Dying Dragon  
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Questions put, logically! It is good, a good idea to raise questions like these, and these are about faith and belief and based on the common philosophy ‘seeing is believing’, I think so.


We cannot see God but we believe, there is God, as you wish to mean it this way. That seeing is not so important always or ever, as you wish to explain behind believing in God.


You say, imagination is the stepping stone of conforming or perception of believing something as you say through our imagination we can make a cause of existence of something in reality and there is no doubt about its existence.


You have explained the base of belief and how one could conform to make a belief in something in reality and imagine of its existence and when there is belief there is cause of faith in the existence, where there is no need of seeing it upon which belief rests physically.


I find there is a logical presumption and analytical portrayal of power of imagination to foster belief.


I liked the word of reasoning and explanatory viewpoint about conforming belief.





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Review of Black  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I find you say black is both positive and negative, clearly I have expressed about black hereinbelow, I think, as per your voice of words in this poem, and you think black is coming with good fortune, as people say about coming of black in your life, and you find black is most reliable, black is coming over so close to you, and soon black will embrace you and get you and there will be nothing after coming of black after embracing you black and that you would like to call life, your life, as you have spoken in this poem, let us have a look into the lines:


Black
Real
True
Undeniable
Most reliable
Coming for me
Creeping ever so close
Within all reach
Soon it will get me
Soon it will embrace me
There will be nothing
Within this frantic something
That I call my life…




Though you have spoken other point of view about black previously in the beginning of this poem, just have a glance over the words you have expressed, all you have written: here, you have given a different idea, feeling, perception, experience, expression about black, stating that you cannot feel what is black, and nothing seems real to you, and further, you state, you have no idea exactly when it all went wrong, and you feel that you are there within nothing, again speaking that it is screaming or screaming something saying these words, spelling out lies, simply hiding the truth, it is black; as you have written, the lines are given below:

Black
I cannot feel
Nothing seems real
I have no idea
Exactly when
It all went wrong
But it did
And I am here
Within nothing
Screaming something
Saying these words
Spelling out lies
Hiding the truth
Black
Nothing implied
Doing time
A prison of the mind
A tortured being
Unable to believe
Unwilling to see
There is no light
There are no shadows
No variations
That I am comfortable with
Black
Nothingness




Again, you have given a different idea about black, hereinabove you please find what you have said, you state that you are comfortable with black the nothingness.



Thus, I get different viewpoints about black, but black is not defined, or say, black is not explained, or exemplified, and black is ever kept something implied but you have talked everything about black and its effect, without explaining black, I mean, without telling what is black.



Anyway, I have got your different viewpoints about black, and you have endeavoured a good poem.



I thought it is my duty to let you know about your words and how they affect the mind of a reader, and it is me, I think I have expressed my feeling honestly to help you appreciate your work and its stand.




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Review of Only Deceiving  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You try for self-evaluation, it is a good practice, but you do it often, as you speak the truth, but not in true perspective, in your own style of expression, you say you lie, as you think the world is full of novice, you are professional, again you speak you lie, by telling lies you can sleep and get to feel peace; there is a little controversy, I find, as you have spoken here, I give below your words:

Lying
I’m trying
The truth
No reason
Seasoned
La professional
In a world of novice
Only deceiving
Is what I say
What I tell myself
It allows me sleep
It allows me peace
Otherwise
There would be
None

You speak you lie in the world of novice, while you claim yourself a professional, and you believe in God, and say more, God give us freewill and devils give no will, and again you speak you know you are a liar and those who are not liars have little idea, you never tell what is the idea, but say they only deceiving, then I fail to understand who is deceiving who and why, who are real deceivers, and who are real liars, who are you, what are you exactly; your self-evaluation is incomplete, you are just making round and round, and not speaking anything concrete about anything and speaking about everyone and about everything, as I find the idea from your words given below:

God above
Gave us freewill
The devil below
Gave us no will
In between we live
So inclined
Those so bound
Those unlike
The liar that is me
Have little idea
Only deceiving

Again, you are trying to prove yourself so critical and unpredictable here, because you say, in need of no truth or reason, you do what you must and what is required and you have limited regrets; again, you confess, what you do are increasing part of your dilapidated heart and soul, and without any link and reference to that, you speak a new thought, you say you will all find residence and at the same time you speak, while in this world, you are sure that you have no home, what is the point, I do not understand any coherence of such thoughts at par with your previous thoughts about yourself expressed; so I give below your lines for your understanding and appreciation of your controversial and incoherent expressions:

In need of no
Truth nor reason
I do what I must
What is required
I have limited regrets
But that which I do
Are increasing parts of my
Dilapidated heart and soul
Upon the page
I’ll always find residence
While in this world
I’m sure
That I have no home…
Only Deceiving

Anyway, I think you have some solid concept and ideas, you have experience ample about living but you fail to express your ideas and experiences rightly in tune or at par with your wisdom, and as a reader you make me confused by distractions of thoughts, while I find there are thoughts appreciable but you do not express them properly, while Grammatically I find no errors in expression.

Truly speaking, you have genius, you too know, you have intelligence and caliber of appreciation of living, but I think, please do not take it personally, it is just my opinion, and you know I am also a human being I also make mistakes, and I think I am not the wisest or I think only the right, just I think, you are not in a position to express your thoughts with right or proper words and you do not maintain rhythms and coherence in expressions, as I experience it here in this poem; now I do not consider how excellently you wrote other poems I reviewed.

Overall, I have offered my viewpoints on this poem and hope it will help you to understand and appreciate your stand as far as this poem is concerned.

Wish you good luck.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
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You have expressed what you mean in the wake of devastation, you have experienced, truly in your living, as you have lost lives, relations you have lost for which you would not like to make yourself responsible though, still you continue to live and wait and you believe you will remain there as you are today.



Your experience of living as expressed drawn from reality is appreciable in term of your living in the wake of devastation or loss you had.



I liked this work and enjoyed the free flow of thoughts and I find nothing to offer as suggestion to improve the work.



Thank you for sharing this special work.



I enjoyed the read.





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Review of My Writing Sucks  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG! You have done a nice job. Truly, I find it is a Senryu. All the requirements you have fulfilled in producing it a Senryu.


This lyric verse has three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables upon the theme of human foibles with an ironic tone.


The theme of human nature is explicit and clearly conveyed within the form and format.


I find no chance of offering suggestion for improvement of this work.


I enjoyed the read.




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You have portrayed the reflections truly, naturally, and in a voice to appeal every heart about life, living, time, eternity of time, living for happiness, satisfaction out of living, feeling and enjoying life within a specific parameter of living in the realm of time or age.



This work fulfills its purpose, aim, goal and target and again you have achieved your objective of writing this work.



Your appreciation of living in age, experience of purpose achievement out of living is achieved in the light and glow of appreciation of living within the ambit of age.



There are true reflections of the journey of life, each spell of living experience is accounted for as versed in words.



It is good to know and find your feeling is rightly portrayed, as and when we live most of our given days of living on this surface, when we feel in term of age and if we consider the age as period of living is enough and is on to the conclusive portion of the journey, we should feel the need of retirement and happiness and go with nostalgia or go down with our memory lane for purposes to feel for the moments and derive enjoyment out of the memoirs in reflections.



It is nice to get a reminder that time and tides wait for none and we have no control over time and time is eternal and life is bound by time and time is out of bounds to one’s thoughts and measures of control to get the desired wish fulfilled naturally at the span of time or as time flows as time is the quantum of our period of living and mark of living called age.



You have highlighted again another truth, everything takes birth must have death, and man can only hope for happiness out of living in the spreadsheet of time.



You have righteously reminded of need and purpose, objective and meaning, validation and recognition of life out of living and that man should contribute his best to the cause of life and living in summation to make living meaningful and worthy.



So it is a work that has a classic value of its own and you have expressed your thoughts in a glowing, appreciable, worthy, truthful order and fashion in sharing at par your wisdom of living in appreciation.



I find no scope of offering my suggestion to improve this work, I think you have expressed yourself at per your wisdom in living and you have achieved the purpose of writing this work.



Thank you for sharing such a novel work of thoughtful manifestation.



I enjoyed the read and learnt a lot about living.







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Review of Trinkets  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I think it is not unwise to write a review on this today, I am glad to find this on public review display, though it may appear redundant or unimportant to you, but I find it is a good opportunity to express a few words about the work placed on public review.



Your opinion about an upcoming challenge of the then is somewhat fun as you expressed, as you expressed you had no idea about trinkets and you had no idea about their usage since you thought the challenge was of the days gone by but you mentioned you liked the video was well done.



It was well expressed of your thoughts and likes and concerns, and I find it was well expressed and well done in tune with the objects and purposes you had.



There is no question of my offering any suggestion for improvement in the work which, I think, is out of date, today or in the present context.





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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a poem on and about the term Grace; it is defined, explained and exemplified; simply, it is a feeling of grace, when we do not know why we do it, it is a matter of grace, obviously, it is all about God’s grace



In simple term, we may think, grace is seemingly effortless beauty or charm of movement, form or proportion.



In other words, grace is divine favour bestowed freely on people, as in granting redemption from sin, or the state of having received such favour, or an excellence or power granted by God.



I liked the work.






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Review of "It"  
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Obviously, I find you express yourself rightly, here in this poem, you have exposed your thoughts weird, and taken up the matter of ‘it’ in a weird scale of expression, I liked.


Your concept is so huge, you talk about your life, living, feeling, aspirations, wishes, activities, and more and more about everything around you and connected to your state of living.


You talk about others’ feeling, attitudes toward you and your life, so you think how to begin and how to cover the entire matter in a poem.


There are weird people, weird activities people take, there is nothing to feel ashamed of, you know, something you do not understand, some complexities of living, and you think you do not know how to explain and cover within the thought for expression.


You know, attitude changes everything, as you find in ‘it’ both the letters – I and T; your order of thought making process is really poetic, something bizarre, something strange, something interesting and noteworthy, right you are, you claim yourself a writer.


Why you like this poem is clear here, you are straightforward in your exploration of thoughts and expression of feelings about living.


I liked this informative and exploring poem.






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Review of our fate  
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A great thought, I find it here, you have tried to expose, and worded in this work.


You wish to think your presence, existence, there and elsewhere, is within the parameter of fate, something is indescribable.


You are here, and there, and everywhere, or elsewhere, and you question why you are there, and why you are not somewhere, and why you feel the same like others, a peculiar state of mind that you express.


But, I think, I could not understand your point exactly, rather I find, you are not clear in your expression, though you have expressed your feeling in full swing, but I am afraid, I fail to reach you through your words.


What makes you to think that we all are fleeting as the sea is not clear, as I could not find out the point.


I think, I would like to guess, maybe you are trying to tell us that our presence, appearance, existence on this earth is fateful, or we are bound by fate, we do not know why we are here or there, and why we are not here or there or somewhere, and that we are fleeting hither and thither, all we are not at the same place, we are at different places at the same time.


Anyway, I liked your endeavour, your thoughts but I could not enjoy your expression, mode of expression, while I find everything you have expressed so freely, naturally; I do not know what is missing exactly.




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This poem took its birth, methinks, when you had a disturbed, worried state of mind and you felt your heart broke, as it is evident, so intense feeling is exposed here, and I think, that is the hub of this work.


This is a poem about lamentation and finding an answer to what made you to fall in love with him; you really feel sorry at his bad attitude and behaviour; you had been in a peculiar situation.


I enjoyed the read, I could feel the state of your mind as expressed in a few words, you have described the story and experience by heart.


Cause of unhappiness is well worded in a natural voice.





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Review of WATERS  
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Everything is there around you, and you are around waters, near and in water, though you enjoy water in the sun, but you could not enjoy the beauty of the vastness of the existence of water, something is missing, and you are not in full mind of enjoying the state of being in water; though you find others nearby are enjoying the beauty around the environment and streams and lakes.



This is a good work, but I could not enjoy the read, maybe the visual portrayal is not intense and imagery are not so glowing to touch my heart; I get a gloomy feeling after the read; interestingly enough, maybe you wish to portray such a viewpoint through this work.




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I liked this for I also write reviews. I can relate the feelings of a writer and reviewer.



It is nice to know, you have described simply why and how you review. I get a fair idea about your personality (not by observation, but by visualization through your words), including facts about your likes, choices, decisiveness and wisdom.



It is good to find and get to see you in my vision an extremely emotional and passionate reader, learner, writer and reviewer.



Since you are a person with keen interest in English Literature and today’s published literature.



Primarily, you review for the aesthetic pleasure. And, obviously, you find the act of reviewing or writing reviews is a thrilling activity, as reviewing is an enjoyable experience and you consider reviewing is a pleasant and beneficent occupation.



And how you write reviews is another interesting part of this work. You maintain and follow most of the common rules of writing reviews. You maintain honesty in writing reviews and you are careful about facts you read and you write to help the authors or poets.



You avoid religion issues and write everything impartially. Moreover, you write reviews impartially, without being prejudiced and use soft and courteous language.



I enjoyed the read and learnt a lot about reviewing, though there are so many aspects you have not mentioned to keep the work brief.





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Inspiring words!
Rightly and simply stated, you have appreciated God and God’s grace amply.
God’s light like that of sunlight ever shines within our hearts, and the Spirit moves from within your heart, and the Spirit acts as muse, more than muse and speaks the words, speaks the thoughts out, and those come out so kind and pure, freely, naturally and innocently and incessantly.
You believe the light, God’s light protects you, saves you from evil.
I liked the poem, and enjoyed the read, the sunlight of the spirit.

Thank you for sharing.





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A good question, you have raised, I do appreciate, and I find, you address the question in a generalized form on and about or concerning appreciation of human beings about our status and identity irrespective of colour, sex, creed, religion, caste, community, language and faith.


You raise the same point, as you make a categorical mention, we all are the same, human beings, first and foremost, and next we are citizens and followers of certain religion.


We the human beings, irrespective of our sex, age, language, place of living, we feel the same, we get hurt at the loss of our relatives, and the colour of our blood is red only.


You lament for some men do not learn, do not want to learn and follow morality and humanity and practice cruelty to human and commit crimes to humanity.


You wish we should think about our state, status, stand and standing and live morally and humanely.


I liked your work. Though I find it is a prose poem, and there is good flow of thoughts, at the end of the poem, there are run on sentences without poetic flavour. Still, I enjoyed the theme and expression.





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Review of Lies To Find  
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This is a reasoned work, a logical approach is evident, a good concept you have fostered and expressed.

You have decided you will find out all lies, you will fight against and you expect truth to come out after each fight.

For the sake of discoveries the truth, you have planned for finding out the lies and truths will automatically come out.

You are determined to do so and all you fight for and against, only by using your best tool, that is writing or your expression in words.

And if required, you will go deep into your heart, and you will care to find out the truths and face lies and you will check out all those are there on stock, looking into your memories to find out the revelations and truths and trace out the lies and face all lies there and what you will find in the days ahead.

This is a good work done, I liked.







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This is a good thoughtful poem, you think everything in your favour, you wish to sail smooth along the reign and rule over the kingdom free of any opposition, objection and criticism; moreover, there would be no heir and you would continue to the pickled prince of the world you form in thought and think to come out with success.

I get some different idea from the following lines:
Faith in only the bottle
Ungodly he rules
His iron fist
Has knocked out
More than a few sets
Of rotten teeth
The pickled prince
Is without question
Alone

You have shown your other features of personality, other phase and picture of the pickled prince.

You write the pickled prince is without question, alone means there is none to oppose or fight against.

I have enjoyed the fanciful thought and exploration expressed in this poem.






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I find this is a huge work, a work that is determined to express about yourself in your words about what you are and at the same time, you wish whatever you have done will be spread far and wide.

It is man’s nature to think of achievements, recognition, name, fame and to see him immortal in work and activities done or performed.

But, I think, name, fame, glory and immortality are all destined or based upon fate, because, I do believe, we get what we earn, but real prize comes from God, what he Gives on judgment is our price, entitlement, according to what we deserve.

You have done so many things, written epic like works, huge and enormous works and all published, so you have confidence upon your success and you have every right to declare that your performance will spread far and wide.

But, I could not exactly understand the meaning and essence of this stanza or part of the poem:
The end result
Of who I am
What I’ve done
Has come clear
To the sea
To the sky

Already you have found ‘what you have done has come clear …..’ I need some clarification about this statement.

I am confused, I do not understand exactly what you are trying to mean and explain, rather I need your clarification, I am helpless to reach your thoughts herein below:
Between living
And dying
There is beauty
But just as so
There is ugly
To the sea
To the sky
Spread
Far and wide
Meat and flesh
Bone broken
Raised to Heaven
Then dropped

I do not understand --- ‘between living and dying there is beauty’ again you write here ‘but just as so there is ugly to the sea to the sky’ --- I could not relate, just I need your clarification.

Again, I could not catch you here – ‘spread far and wide meat and flesh bone broken raised to Heaven then dropped’ -- what are you trying to mean and express, I fail to catch the relation, I find there is loss of link, maybe I am unable to catch you.

Furthermore, what you try to mean --- far and wide meat and flesh bone broken….

No problem in appreciation of whole concept, but I could not reach you each line of expression.

Anyway, I liked your theme.

Thank you for sharing.

Wish you best of luck.





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Review of August.  
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Rated: ASR | (1.5)
Good. This is a good attempt. I find there is a good thought in the background. But I do not find coherence in expression.

I think, there is something missing, you wanted to write but you did not. It appears to me like a run on sentence with some words forcibly put to complete a task.

I fail to relate to the paragraphs. I could not understand the essence. Why you are speaking and what for you wish to speak so.
Truly speaking, I could not find out any solid theme, I think you are just making a merry go round without any specific purpose.

The sky, the sky,
the long lone dead end - bury memories bury the absent the unsent

Why the sky you think so? What things you are going to relate to?


The sky the sky,
looks anxious and tired today, looks burdened and scarred its face is blank, its limbs are are falling in heaps on the grass and its tongue
crawls on back
taste saliva, taste a fatigue, a beauty and a nothingness rolling along with the dust

The state of the sky is something and you think about the sky something else, and I find no relation between the words and in the words and among the words you have used.



takes, gives, gives, takes,
what's returned is what is left what's birthing is the room without a door or
maybe a doorknob floating between many doors

What are you talking about here?
What is the relation between the first line and the other two lines following?

Sorry, I could not reach you. Maybe you have great thoughts but I could not even reach around, maybe something philosophically you wish to mean.

I think writers do not write for own satisfaction, they think about readers and wish to offer something to the readers.

I get nothing from this work.

Maybe you are so intellectual in thought, but I could not even decode, reach, understand and appreciate you anyway.

While I can follow your declaration of your thoughts under the title that you wished to express: Home is as alive and dead as the smell of the clothes in the cupboard, but I failed to find out the relation you have expressed in the body of the work.

I appreciate your endeavour and attempt and making this a contest entry. I wish good luck in the contest.

Thank you for sharing this.

I hope you would never take it personally, it was my opinion I wished to express out of reading, maybe it is me and my wisdom, I could not appreciate your work.







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Review of A Hopeful Day  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a gracious thought! I think I do not write something more to promote your personality as a poet; I do find you have shown you have great thought and you know how to use, how well the thoughts of yours could be expressed and particularly in a poem that is so easy to read and understand the essence of your thoughts.

You not only expressed what hope is, what it does, how it can help the person who keeps hope, and what makes a hopeful effect.

I find how wisely you have used the form and format for expression of your thoughts into this specific form of poem.

Obviously I have enjoyed the rhyme schemes you have followed and maintained all over; I enjoyed the read.

I find how expertly, rather naturally and dexterously, you have used appropriate words to convey the message.

Of course, you have proved how words, if rightly used, can do miracles, here I find, you have rightly expressed, hope is more important to the human spirit than food and water is to the human body, as you claim and proved the worth of your thought in practice.

A hopeful mind is just like a child and keeps childlike innocence about the outcome, fruition, effect of action and courses of living in anticipation of hope abound in effect.

Nicely flourished in thoughts, rightly poured thoughts in words in essence, hope grows spirit to a limitless bound and border, not essentially selfishly to get or gain profit out of each deal having hope.

Truly thought, hope is more important than food and water to a human body; when there is hope, one does not bother taking and enjoying food that much even it is essential for survival, for hope is not for mere survival and achieving success to prove worth of personality but it gives the keeper of hope a sense of joy, happiness and sense of satisfaction of achievement, so soundless achievement that the keeper appreciates.

When there is hope, one keeps working for the activities to see and find the light after lights of hopes.

I must thank you for sharing such a work having commendable worth for reading and learning the essence of hope/







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Review of Broken  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Clearly expressed the theme, such painful is the state of heart, tale of love, after effects of heart broke, state of mind, head and heart go like this, something inescapable, love that you cannot forget, and so many happy and romantic moments you remember; everything is fair in love and war, perchance appears true in this case also, though nothing is so intentional, everything changes, love changes, person changes, situation changes, feeling and emotion change, for change is permanent, no one can control over changes; something we have to accept, maybe this is fate; anyway, I liked the theme and mode of expression.




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Review of Sad Is The Case  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Truth reveals, experience speaks, feeling emerges, sentiment about living comes out, now you accept fate, it is unchangeable, none can control over fate, none can predict even, you thought for changes but you fail to change anything, life goes on, in its own flow and flavour, you think it is a terrible waste; a nice work done; I liked and enjoyed the read, so informative and expressive, reality is well projected.




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The story of the portrait of the power of love is told nicely in rhymes in this poem, love song did the miracle, by the power of love that lifted the sorcerer’s curse upon the lady; so nicely expressed, like the Lady of the Shallot; I liked and enjoyed the read, free flow of thoughts, good imagery and visual portrayal; thank you for sharing.




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