I enjoyed reading your unconventional haikus. I find it interesting that your teacher didn't want you to count syllables. In so doing, does this mean that they are not true haikus? Just wondering. At any rate, you did a good job with them.
I liked your little flash fiction story. Your story has a good beginning, middle and ending. Since you didn't highlight the prompts I don't know what they were, but I will assume that you used them well. I found no grammatical or spelling errors.
Congratulations on being featured in the Spiritual Newsletter.
I am really impressed with your acrostic poem. You have written not one, but two verses in it. That is really a challenging thing to do. The poem has a lovely rhythm and flow, and a great sentiment.
Welcome to writing.com. I hope you will like being here. There are lots of things to do, and to learn.
I really enjoyed reading your description of the seven deadly sins. I think you have done a great job of explaining them without mentioning their names.
Congratulations on being featured in the poetry newsletter. This is a really interesting poem about the sea. Do you live near the ocean? I wonder. Your poem has a nice rhythm and flow. It captures the feeling of the sea nicely.
I loved your poem and the positive sentiment it embraces. Although I am not gay, I am constantly bombarded by the 'archaic beliefs' of many, and yes they do threaten my soul. I love the way you found a new family who accept your truth, and accept you, simply as you.
I also loved the format of your poem. It has a beautiful rhythm and flow. I found no grammatical or spelling errors.
I enjoyed reading your little romantic poem. I thought it was nice the way you related love/romance to a car ride. Your poem has a nice rhythm and flow, and good rhymes. I found no grammatical or spelling errors.
Welcome to writing.com. Wow! I am impressed that you could write the word CONTENT that many times. Cool. While this is a good beginning, I hope you will find your voice and maybe a dictionary, which has LOTS of words from which to choose. LOL. Thanks for sharing your CONTENT.
I enjoyed reading your little flash fiction story. You did a good job with the prompts, and with developing your character in a very short space. I loved the way your character used social media. Your story made my laugh.
Welcome to writing.com. I liked your poem, and I think it has possibilities. You need to work on tenses. Either use past tense or presence. Don't use both in the same sentence.
Flowers that feels like heavy stones. - "FEEL"
When I needed to be picked up after I fall, - when i NEED
I wish you left me at peace. - I wish you HAD
You never knew what it is, that gives me an ease. - knew what it WAS
I certainly enjoyed reading your funny Valentine poem. What a lucky wife you must have. I love throwing a bit of levity into a story or poem. I remember in one that I wrote every chocolate in the box had been nibbled on. Well, the giver had to make sure none of them were poison, didn't he?
florescent lights, - fluorescent - just a little typo I am sure.
Welcome to writing.com. I hope you will enjoy being here. This is a nice poem about contrasts. You have done a good job exploring your subject. Your poem is well-written and has a nice rhythm and flow.
Very interesting poem about touch, about touching and about staying in touch. I like the way you have explored the differences in different touches. This poem has a nice rhythm and flow. I like the way the last line can be interpreted in different ways.
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I really liked your poem. It has a good rhythm and flow. A nice free form poem with no grammatical or spelling errors. I like the positive sentiment it has.
As always, I enjoyed reading your little bit of flash fiction. I loved the way the grandmother turned into a green dragon. Nice little twist to the story. Well, I do hope your poor character at least gets a nap once in a while. LOL
turned, - I think there should be a period after turned. Then start a new sentence.
I liked your poem about heartbreak. It is a good free-form poem, and has a nice rhythm and flow, except that one line toward the end is REALLY long. LOL
I feel like I would never get over her - in this line you change tenses, either i FELT like i would never, or i feel like i WILL never.
I loved your little piece of flash fiction. It really made me laugh. Well, I don't know if it was supposed to be funny or not, but I found it so. Great job using the prompt. I found no grammatical or spelling errors.
I enjoyed reading your dark flash fiction story. I liked the way you used the prompts. You did a great job developing your characters in a very short space. I found no grammatical or spelling errors.
I really enjoyed your little piece of flash fiction. I don't remember what the prompts were, and you didn't highlight them. I don't suppose it matters. I loved the ending of our story.
I found no obvious grammatical or spelling errors. Good luck in the contest.
I like your haiku about Cold Winds. I think you have captured their feeling well. I love to write haiku. They are such a challenge, but are also so satisfying to write. Have you studied the form much? Some say there should be no capitals at the beginning of lines, and no punctuation. I don't know if I agree completely.
Hi, Sophy,
I liked your poem about waves. I think you have really captured the essence of them very well. I like the sentiment in your poem and the way you compare waves to heartache and grief. You did a great job while still following the rules of the contest.
Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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