It has been so long since I have done a word search. I actually forgot how refreshing they are in breaking away from tireless reading whilst still keeping the mind active. I enjoyed this word search which has been based on you. Many of the words I recognized immediately as being associated with you whilst others came as a surprise. I am curious to know who made this for you. Obviously their heart is as big as yours.
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I am completely blown away by how many cNote shops you have, Sherri. Way to go! I am familiar with some of them because I have purchased from a few but there are many others that I have never come by before. When I am able to find the time, I will most definitely be looking into these a little further.
This is amazing! Such a large variety and there is no possibility that all individual needs cannot be met just from visiting this one place.
There is no doubt that your Poem is emotionally potent. An array of different emotions are weaved through your item and they are all ejected onto the reader with ease. Pain, rage, desperation, fright and a sense of abandonment are just to name a few that are featured in your item.
In general I feel your Poem is one of substance and definitely one that is worth more effort and patience fused into it. The lack of format, punctuation and meter in your item is what is hindering the quality of this item.
This is a Poem which would receive benefit if you were to break it up and section it. The item itself, is far too long to have no division and it feels as though the Poem is dragging on. Sectioning is the cure to erradicate this blemish.
Punctuation is required to help stabalize a natural rhythm and or flow. It is widely used a tool of guidance for your audience to orientate them through your Poem as you intended from the beginning. It also enhances many items merely because it takes on the appearance of an item which looks more professional and kept.
Please keep in mind all suggestions and comments anre offered in the spirit of kindness and improvement. Take onboard what you deem is helpful and discard the rest at will.
Aww it is not often we are able to read a Poem where two different worlds merge and result in a happy ending. Many items which have been written about people who have met on the internet and later had the opportunity to get to know one another in actual reality are usually stories of disaster but yours is the complete opposite and it seems you found the perfect fairytale that many people dare to hope for.
I feel the rhyme in your item fits well and does not feel forced at any point.
There are no visible errors but I do have one suggestion for improvement and this is to punctuate the item. I feel your item is in need of this, to stabalize the flow and help to guide the reader through your item at the pace you intended when it was written.
All comments and suggestions are offered in the spirit of kindness and improvement. Please feel free to take onboard anything you deem is helpful and discard the rest at will.
I love this story! I am so pleased a dark writer took it upon themself to take a fabled mediocre story and turn it into a modern tale of terror. I was almost jumping out of my seat with excitement, the further I read thinking 'No, he won't take it there' and then bang you did, each and everytime!
The use of vampires was a nice added touch to a story which has become old as we have all grown. It opened up the story for something completely different to the norm. Vampires, young girls, brothers and sisters, curse, wolves...the list goes on! I must say, I am thrilled to see this item has been awarded. It is very deserving of the recognition.
There are a few visible errors which were noticeable in the content. I will point them out to you as follows:
Line 8- 'manevered' should read as 'maneuvered' (Spelling taken from the Concise Edition of the English Dictionary) may not apply to you.
Line 12- 'frozen' should be 'froze'.
Lost in the content somewhere you have written 'then' and it should read as 'than'. You will have to locate this error on your own. I lost it and have not been able to find it again but I know it is there.
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This Poem has a fantastic rhythm which is captured from the very beginning and is sustained through out the entire duration of your Poem. At no point does this aspect of your Poem skip a beat.
The content is dark and chilling and naturally I was completely mesmerised by it because this is my favorite genre.
This review will be kept short as I feel there is nothing whatsoever which requires alteration. It is a fantastic Poem and speaks for itself.
I love the mystery your item creates. 'What if's' are always the beginning of questions which lurk in the mind of many people, especially when it comes to matters of the heart. This notion can cause a person to step back from an opportunity or step forward and enthusiastically embrace an opportunity which otherwise would have been lost to them. It is a double edged sword and I always like to read items like this particular one, to see how the character reacts.
The emotions within your item are running rampant. There is love, fear of the unknown, anxiety....the list goes on. It is a tumultuous read and effortlessly swept me up by the time I reached the 2nd stanza.
The twist at the end was great and one I did not see coming. The descriptive wordplay was so intense that I did not, for a second, consider this may be anything short of a reality. I liked the surprise!
There are no visible errors in your item but I do suggest you take another brief look at this Poem to be sure your punctuation is completely in order. I did happen to notice a few sections where I feel a comma should be inserted but I will leave this up to your judgement.
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The Poetic language you have used is quite attractive and I was drawn to the soft and subtle tone of narration which was coming across to me. There are huge contrasts in this item which I found were interesting to watch unfold. It is as though you are sympathizing with 'Sarah' because of her choices rather than feeling honored by her decisions. The later part of the item is displayed to the reader as an attempt to make 'Sarah' change her mind. As I said, it was very interesting to watch it play itself out on screen.
I enjoyed everything about this, minus one factor: the repetition. The reptition in your item is extreme and your item would read smoother if you were to eliminate it. The constant references to 'My love' became a hinderance and an annoyance to me because it caused a constant pause in your items momentum.
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I was completely mesmerized by this Poem. The darkened message swept me up with ease and gracefully carried me to the finale of your Poem.
You set a dark scene and infuse it with potency by using language which is also dark and withdrawn in tone. As a dark writer myself, I loved it!
I would love to rate this a 5.0, because I enjoyed it so much but there is too much room for improvement in regards to the mehanics of the Poem. I suggest you re-format some of your lines. They stop mid-way and fall to the next line at crucial moments within the item. This creates a pause in the momentum and it is definitely something I would suggest you take another look at to rectify. There are also many punctuation errors within your item, leaning more towards periods (fullstops) which are not present and should be.
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This is a very inspirational item. It encourages one to relish the good times rather than be caught up in the bad.
I feel what is written here is very motivational in helping others beat those blues and remind us that tomorrow is another day and each breath we take, is life.
It seemed a shame for it to end so quickly. I would have loved to have had the opportunity to read even deeper into this whilst it was on such a high momentum.
In general, I feel this was an excellent form of expression and certainly something all people should take a peek at when they are feeling like the weight of the world is on their shoulders.
There are no visible errors in your item.
Well done and write on.
Your Poem is centrally focused upon regret. Age and time have a way of creeping up on people and forcing them to take notice of many lost opportunities which occured during their lives. You address this very clearly in your Poem.
It is a Poem which essentially encourages the reader to ponder what may or may not have been during the course of their own lives up-to-date.
The Poem has been written well but there is some room for improvement in regards to your rhyme. Majority of the rhyme is direct and consistent but this seems to lapse in 2 sections.
The 3rd and 4th line of the first verse and 3rd and 4th line of the second verse. I thought perhaps this may have been done deliberately and was part of a pattern but it does not occur in the final verse. I suggest you correct the indirect rhyme which occurs on these lines so it matches the direct rhyme which has been used in the rest of the Poem.
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Aww this is such a sad Poem. It is generally based upon the less fortunate and the futile environments in which they are forced to live. Your Poem does not directly point to any one individual scenario as to how these poor souls got to where they are but the message is pushed across crystal clear to the reader nevertheless.
I have one suggestion and no it is not to do with punctuation. LOL
The 2nd line of the second verse may sound better as:
'Confrontation goes unrewarded or Confrontation remains unrewarded.
Of course this is just a suggestion and only you truly know what is best for your item.
Well done, Michelle. As always you have managed to write yet another Poem that I think is a success.
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I love the cheek which can be found in many of your items. They always make me laugh and keep me thoroughly entertained and this item is no exception.
The content is very misleading. You manipulate the reader into believing you are speaking of a thunderstorm only for us to find out this has been based on something entirely different. I won't divulge too much information because I do not want to ruin the twist for others.
The rhyme featured in the opening stanza was fantastic and I was hooked by the time I reached the second line.
Tip- Remove the period at the end of the 1st line of the 2nd stanza and replace it with a comma.
Remove the capitalization of the 1st letter featured on the 2nd line of the second stanza and remove the comma at the end of the line and replace it with a period.
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Woah...there is a little bit of everything hiding within this folder. There are 23 items of Poetry in total displayed within here at this precise moment and they all cover different subjects, themes and genres. The only thing one can be certain of reading when entering here is Poetry.
Well done Crissy. I appreciate a well organized folder.
Write on.
This is a treasure of a folder. Nestled within are many different items pertaining to Bipolar disorder.
This folder is full of writings which are emotional on many different levels and informative for those who do not have knowledge of this illness. I found some of the items on display within this folder very encouraging too, especially for fellow sufferers who feel they are alone in their battle.
Way to go! This is an A class folder.
Well done and write on.
This is a Poem depicting the emotional and psychological abuse of someone who has become a crutch for another. The example you give of you being this persons trigger is fantastic and an explanation that could not be explained more accurately.
Within the Poem you find excuses to pardon 'him' for his bad behavior such as your reference to 'It's not really him doing these things, it is his disease'. This enforces even further that you are the victim of manipulation because you are trying to justify actions which you know are wrong.
I feel your content is potent and intriguing from many aspects. It kept my sole attention riveted to it as I anxiously awaited the finale.
There are no visible errors in your content and I would usually suggest some punctuation be added but it seems you are more of a free form Poet, so I will not.
Thanks for the awesome read.
Well done and write on.
This is an interesting story and I love that it is so closely related to the traditional story but fused with modern elements which put your own unique spin on it.
I think your story is a fantastic starting point for something which can be made more in-depth with some extra attention.
I have a few suggestions for improvement but by no means do you have to take them onboard.
I feel your characters need some more personality. There is minimal mention of Blanche and as a result, her fate at the end of the story has no significant impact upon the reader because we did not know her to sustain that connection.
Giles is also an important character within the story because his presence marks a pivotol element in the relationship between Margo and Blanche and yet we have no description of him. We are told the two women are feuding over him but we are given no visual nor reason as to why.
I loved the ending. It was a nice twist in your item and enforced margo's sadistic nature.
There are no visible errors in your item and suggestions for improvement have been made.
Well done and write on!
The content is so warm and rich with emotion. I feel you have captured this raw and unabashed emotion very well and delivered it full force to the readers.
The color changes in the first stanza are creative and a great show of craftsmanship. It is a shame you were not able to find a way to continue the same pattern on through out the rest of the Poem. It would have really driven this Poem over the finish line.
The rhyme is impressive and settles in naturally to the content. At no point does the rhyme feel forced in any way.
One suggestion- Last line of the 1st stanza, remove (---) and replace with a period.
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Best of luck to you in the Ink Blot monthly draw.
Well done and write on.
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this Poem. There is an abundance of flamboyant color and imagery incorporated into the item and this captured and held my attention.
The rhyme is great. It is solid and consistent through the entire duration of the Poem.
There are a few lines I would focus some extra attention upon because they feel forced and out of place. One example of this can be seen on the last line of the 2nd stanza. Whilst it fits the rhyme, it does not really have any significant impact as the other lines do. I would suggest a re-work of this line to raise the quality to the same standard as the rest of the Poem.
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What a fantastic way to introduce us all into your personal story! It is true what you say, many people who have suffered through abuse in general, strive to write their own personal accounts for many reasons but the two most noted seem to be- to raise awareness and as a theurapetic outlet for themselves. Writing itself, has a medicinal power if we allow it. I am so thrilled you found the direction you needed to begin telling your own story.
Minus the horrific memories I am sure will eventually make their way into this story as the truth reveals itself, if the foreword is anything to go by, then we all have an interesting path to walk as we journey through your magnificently composed and inspirational story. I am amazed by the discipline you have shown when reaching deep within yourself to re-tell this to us.
There are no visible errors and no suggestions for improvement.
I wish you the best of luck and will be visiting to continue reading on.
Hello Kim Ashby
Congratulations on your nomination into "Ink Blot Hall of Fame" . You were nominated by a secret fan to receive the Sylvia Plath package. I am here to give you the first of two FAN-ATIC reviews you will receive from me as part of your package.
Wow, that was a very detailed introduction of the woman behind the words. I reached the section at the end of the item where you offered if anyone has anything else they would like to know about you, just ask and I thought no, it has all been covered and then some. This is a fabulous item which gives us insight into the real persona of the writer and what makes you the person you are.
I loved everything about this item. The snippets of cheeky personality which kept shining through, the spirit within the content which kept my attention glued to the item and the whole take me as I am or not at all theme, the item generally has.
There are no visible errors and my only suggestion is to increase the font size. It was a little tricky to read.
Your thoughts on this subject are interesting and creative. It is a subject which calls for much debate so it is always stimulating to read/listen to the thoughts and beliefs of others in regards to this topic.
The mechanics of your Poem need some extra attention. While it has been set out well and presented to the reader in a neat and tidy fashion, there is a lack of punctuation, which is needed.
The first line of your Poem does not read smoothly and I feel it would, if it were worded properly. My suggestion is to keep the same theme for this line but write it a different way such as: At the beginning there was an end. Of course this is just an example.
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So much expressed in such a miniscule Poem. The red font enhances the source of the apple and deliciously raises the quality of the item.
I love the contrast between the purity at the beginning which quickly switches to one of evil gluttony. It was like reading a severely edited Snow White story. I loved it!
There is no visible punctuation and I feel if you were to lightly sprinkle the item with it, the flow would remain consistently smooth.
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Hello LdyPhoenix
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This is such a moving story. Both characters deliver a story of pain, suffering and inspiration in a powerful fashion. I am actually amazed how significantly the characters were able to affect me, considering the limited size of the content.
There is nothing about this I would suggest requires alteration. All elements of your story are working hand-in-hand and there are no areas which are lacking in strength.
Tip- (its) on line 9 should read as (it's).
There are no other visible errors and no further suggestions are required.
Hello LdyPhoenix
Congratulations on your nomination into the "Ink Blot Hall of Fame" . You were nominated by "Invalid Item" and stacylynn71 for the Maya Angelou package. I am here to give you the first of two reviews you will receive from me as part of this package.
This story is well written considering the limitations of no word repetitions. You tackled the challenge well and I believe you conquered it.
The story itself, is one which piques the curiosity of the reader and holds their attention because we 'want' to know why this woman is in the state she is in.
The imagery which has been used, especially in the opening paragraph raised the quality of the item for me. Brief stories do not have to necessarily be flat as some think. If hard work is invested into them, the shortest of stories can still have a very powerful impact upon the reader. It is obvious you have given yourself to this.
There is a pause in the 2nd line when I reached 'harshly across face...'. If this item were not detailed that there were to be no repetitions then this is definitely something I would urge you to correct but as I have been made aware the action is justified.
There are no visible errors in your content and suggestions for improvement are not required.
Best of luck to you in the Ink Blot monthly draw.
Well done and write on, shiny star.
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