My Thoughts: This is a lovely poem in all lowercase. Somehow all lowercase fits this poem as it flows across the page.
My Favorite Part: My favotite part was the thirty poems in thirty days. That sounds like a fun thing to do with friends, even though it's difficult to do.
My Suggestions: I can't find a thing I don't like about this poem. Please continue with your poetry.
Final Thoughts: I found this by using the random review option I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: This is a beautiful poem. I feel like you're doing honor to someone with this poem.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the glowing theme of possitiveness running throughout this poem. It feels uplifting and cheered me up this morning.
My Suggestions: I think you are using your instead of you're. I found it in three places, you're humble, you're kind, you're ruled.
I think you used whose when you meant who's earth bound.
Final Thoughts: I found this by using the random review option. I hope you continue writing poems. This is lovely. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: This is a cute story. It was well thought out and the loose ends seemed to be tied up.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the gift from an active grandpa to his grandson. That was nice.
My Suggestions: This is a good story, but it feels a little stiff. It's hard to put my finger on it. It feels more like technical or formula writing that is a little rough on the edges. It's still a worthwhile story, though.
Final Thoughts: I found this story by using the random review option. I enjoyed reading this story. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: This story/poem feels like a limerick of some kind. It took me a little bit to get the hang of the rhythm, but then I was off and running.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part was that there were actually people in the woods. That's an interesting add.
My Suggestions: I know there are things done to keep the rhythm, but it was a little hard to understand at times, but overall it played very well.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this piece. It had a sing song quality to it. I found this by using the random review option. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: This is a beautiful picture painted with words
My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the descriptions of the butterfly/aura of fae.
My Suggestions: I have no suggestions.
Final Thoughts: I found this piece by using the random review option. I enjoyed it very much. It cheered me up to have such beautiful descriptions dance before my eyes. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: This is a great story with a fitting ending with a warning. I was dragged through this story. I just had to finish it.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the warning at the end to not mess with the devil. I think that's a great way to end this story.
My Suggestions: I found a lot of nits. I know commas can be up to the disgression of the author, but I'm going to toss out what I was taught - court, so - worry, the - up, his - John, but - insisted, so - die, then - treatment, John - drivers, knowing - cars, but.
The word the seems to be missing in to the devil.
Missing a period - company. He.
The word will is capitalized twice and I believe they should be lowercase.
An apostrophe s seems to be missing in car's place.
I believe in formalized writing, the smaller numbers should be spelled out - 6 months - 6th month - 2 doctors.
Missing a comma - said, "You.
I think you're missing the word he in and he would.
Final Thoughts: Please continue writing. You have talent. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: I really like this tiny story. It sounds like a lead in to a longer story or series of stories. You have a big enough idea for a novel here.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part is being this way and living out in the open with people. That's a great concept.
My Suggestions: I found a list of nits. Try adding a blank line between paragraphs to make it easier to read the story.
I think pain full should be painfil.
I wonder if torched look was supposed to be tortured look.
It looks like a missing letter in f my victims. I think it's supposed to be of.
You're missing a comma - said, "You.
Another missing comma - again, though.
Another missing comma - love, Peter.
I think he destiny is supposed to be my destiny.
Capitalize I.
Separate the name with commas - me, Lucia Gilbert, and.
Final Thoughts: I truly enjoyed this piece. I hope you continue writing. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: This is such a touching story. I truly enjoyed reading it.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the magnetic letters. Helping kids with reading and writing at such a young age is so very important.
My Suggestions: Oh just keep writing way cool stories.
Final Thoughts: I remember my mom was so happy to turn my room into a study when I left for college. I know there are people who keep their children's rooms enshrined. To each his own, I guess. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: I really liked this poem. Las Vegas is a very busy tourist spot and tourists are a different animal.
My Favorite Part: I really liked the compare and contrast between the locals and the tourists. It reminded me of my time living in South Lake Tahoe on the California side. It really is like mixing with a different kind of people who don't understand the area. I hear you about the heating bills.
My Suggestions: I think I found a missing comma, but I forgot to write it down. Sorry about that. This is very well done.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed this trip back to my years living in a tourist town. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: This such a touching story you wrote for your daughter. It shows how much you care.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part was that she shouldn't take this one failure as a reason to stop. I liked how encouraging this piece is.
My Suggestions: It looks like you were trying to keep to a pattern of four line stanzas, except for the beginning and end. I wasn't sure if that was intentional or not. It might be better as all four line stanzas, but the choice is yours. Your in the end should be you're.
Final Thoughts: I just really liked this. It is so nice to see someone care so much for her daughter that a poem was created. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: This is a cute little tale. Of course it could grow up to be a great big tale, but I really like it as is.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the detail of the two tailed character. It made me wonder how else that could be used. It made the story more interesting.
My Suggestions: There are two places in the dialogue tags where upper case is used and it should be lowercase. One needs a period changed to a comma. I had an issue with knock out gas being injected. Knock out gas should be inhaled and how would that work? Maybe that detail could be reworked.
Final Thoughts: This could work as a series of tiny stories or added to to make one large story. Either way, I really like it. Thanks for sharing.
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My Thoughts: This is an interesting piece of writing with personal issues showing through. You are exposing yourself to the world and it helps people understand the situation.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part is that your family does care enough to get educated and this could possibly make your life better with more support.
My Suggestions: My suggestion is to continue writing from the heart. It seems like writing therapy works for you and making it public could possibly help others.
Final Thoughts: I like that you're opening up about things. Perhaps after writing about things for a while, you might start to find patterns in your bahavior that could be underlying issues for you so that it might be easier to address the real issues causing other issues. I hope I'm not talking in circles. Take care and thanks for sharing.
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Hello Maryann
My Thoughts: I like that you commemorated your first visit with a poem.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part is that it's better than the kitchen coffee. This helps explain their popularity and prices.
My Suggestions: I have no suggestions.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this fun and light poem. It was also nice that you made a listing of your favorite parts of your portfolio. That's how I found this poem. Thanks for sharing.
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Hello Web Witch
My Thoughts: This is an interesting and educational piece of writing with a wikipedia entry for background.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the snow on the trees like a well tailored shirt. I imagined the tree as a man tryy wearing his shirt of snow colored cotton.
My Suggestions: Continue writing poems like this to remind you of parts of your life. I felt the sadness about missing these little birds.
Final Thoughts: I really enjoyed this writing and finding out juncos go all the way to the arctic was great. Thanks for sharing.
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Hello Earthenware Haven
My Thoughts: I didn't realize this was a puzzle when I first opened it. So this is fun.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part is the Geology theme. I used to be a cabin leader at an outdoor science school and I got to lead the geology hike, so the words are mostly familiar to me.
My Suggestions: There is a word missing in the opening to the puzzle. Likely become should be likely to become.
Final Thoughts: I think everyone can enjoy a word search. Thanks for the trip down memory lane with this puzzle. Thanks for sharing.
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Hello Kenword
My Thoughts: This is a lovely tale of two different cultures thrust together by force.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part was the understanding that he better be on his best behavior because the fairies were in control.
My Suggestions: I wanted to know he was the grand wizard earlier in the story.
Final Thoughts: I very much enjoyed reading this tale. I liked how the thought of relations between the two groups made me think of sex. Thanks for sharing.
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Hello Angus
My Thoughts: This is very gruesome. It gives a feel of what's going on from different perspectives.
My Favorite Part: My favorite part was that the person who called the cops was targeted. He should have known better.
My Suggestions: I wished there was more of an explanation of why he was in such a bad condition and had to have more fat. I didn't understand the situation, unless maybe he's homeless.
Final Thoughts: Thanks for sharing this different piece of writing.
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