Beautiful. You must be speaking of Jesus or some
heck of a guy :)
Where you wrote "His energy shared by just standing there,"
We all have this..no matter what we emit something from
within. It touches upon others which affects their light..their
energy. We breathe each other. Sometimes one has to cough
maybe feeling chocked..fresh air is needed..keep moving and
one will be uplifted with great relief :) Nature transmits a wonder euphoria :)
This is a poem of life..we all go through it..
Seeing how you find so much going on inside
yourself..I know you'll achieve comfort. In the darkness
is a light..it radiates for you..soul searching helps to
discovery unknown paths. When we long for something
we tend to walk in that direction and in doing so attain much
welcomed wisdom :)
Happiness is waiting for you :) Your poem is titled "Always
Lost"..you have been found :)
Why are people afraid to talk to one another.
Communicate..one doesn't have to say
they're in love with the other but talking
lets one know where one stands :)
This is sad..did she actually go? Communication is so important.
Did you sense something was not connecting. If you think back,
you'll probably remember something that is if you want to.
"I surely don't want you if you don't want any part of me" this is so
true..one cannot force love. One cannot do it alone either..its team
work. No one should have to wear handcuffs or shackles..only if they want to :)
This is interesting. I agree with a lot of what you say. When you write
"Some lies were small and easily overlooked."..these small likes
help people to become liars. I found that once a person gets away with
a lie and then another no matter how big..it gets bigger. The guy with
the big lie probably started with smaller ones.
Animals are wonderful you're right..they love you unconditionally and
they are straight up :)
I know God has a sense of humor. He has all the emotions we do.
Be careful the cat doesn't get your magic..I mean..mouse :)
I like this, "May He give them a voice to scream out their rage,"
may he give them a key to open the cage..
There's a cage people build around one..then self builds
their own cage from within free of them. We take on emotions
and who we are behind this cage. When will they release the
lion and dare they say "where did we go wrong"..so typical.
I agree..praise is important to all children. It's a way
of knowing the way :) and if we don't give direction
the path becomes an open road with many confusing
signs
In fact..praise is good for anyone at anytime...for animals
too. It reinforces the behavior being praised to continue.
If a child who misbehaves gets all the attention then chances
are others will follow.
Its not only big women who hear lies.
The truth is we look for expectations
when we are with someone..we look
for the same things thats been done
over and over. Just live..dont look for
anything..let it find you. Follow your
path with a smile knowing there is
something ahead..look upon it with
an open mind. If its to be more.. you
can share your thoughts with love
and truth :)
They also helped the candy industry :) Reese's Pieces is what
they really came for..yeah..the truth..sugar addicts :)
It is greater than ourselves..we love it..aliens and sugar :)
I find it very neat how you wrote this piece. I like it very much :)
This fits everyone in someway whether its psychological
weakness or a moral weakness..we all have some
psychological problem to deal with. A protagonist may
hide his feeling but believe me it bleeds though.
I like where you state "as negative emotions creep into the
mind, they transform into moods and eventually into traits"
Thats so true. I find that very interesting.
I find people use the word 'Hate" way too much. Its powerful..
its strong emotions..it shouldnt be used at all but when it
is one has to remember the strength it carries.
The blank page says plenty :) I agree..leave it blank..let
everyone read what they see. The space becomes a place
for everyone. There is something written that each of us
sees..its written in our own language. We speak from who
we are.
I like this poem. :) where you say.." with power in its impotence"
that is such a powerful statement. I love it. Less is so much
more.
Your poem can be relating to mother nature.
Shes lovely one minute..nasty the next. :)
She tolerates noting..she just is. Nature
always wins. One day she will swoop down
and change things..a big difference will take
place..she holds us in her talons. Respect
her or fall from her grace..she could eat you
at any time :)
.
Shoebox..a good place for the pictures. The pain wears thin. One cannot
tolerate too much at one time. Your feet get sore retracing the
steps. I really find it sad where you stated "Mom hated me.
I hated dad. Dad hated us both." but you speak truth on how you feel.
Its funny how we have our pictures taken to remind us of the time..for a
memory. But they are a mismatch. Where you say.." Pictures are
so deceiving." What one felt in the picture is different from what
actually was. It makes one wonder how many times pictures are brought
out and a happy family comes to thought.
This is very sad but it happens. Its not just with same sex couples
but with others too. Sometimes parents or relatives or anyone can
think they know whats best when in reality it hurts all around.
Don't worry..the one you loved knows you were there..your feelings
were known. I hope you found peace. I pray you found strength to forgive
and let go. This type of thing can consume ones thoughts..their life.
Your friend, your love would not have wanted that.
I dont know if this is a true story but I do know it happens.
Mother has all the cures..she understands
Call upon her without demands
Speak to nature because you know she hears
She'll make everything right..wiping away tears
If mother nature takes away the human race..that includes you too.
I like your thinking here where you say :
"The selfishness comes from keeping these feelings bottled rather
than sharing these feelings and giving others a chance to improve."
Communication is so important. Where you write.."And remain still the
the same" it seems to me this person has a need to touch upon change..
with self..uncap the bottle..let the feelings pour out :)
Do you believe in angels..in demons. I do. What makes you talk
of a veil? Also how did you know behind the veil are creatures.
The creatures can be good or bad. It depends on the energy
one works with.
I found this story very interesting.
Itchy Water..thanks for letting us know how you came up
with the name. You opened my eyes on some things and
I thank you for that too. We have so much to be thankful
for.
going through my drawer I find super glue
can this be the thing that can help you
I see here some sticky sticky tape
it must be strong has a picture of an ape
finally a hammer and a nail
I found some screws in a pail
looky now..a needle and thread
one of these should work by using our head
poetry is fun..and living it up :)
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