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Review of The Box  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi No Sox with Sandals Author IconMail Icon;
I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your piece as it falls before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

This was a great piece - very moving. It held me from the first sentence. I liked how you incorporated the words. The last two lines brought tears to my eyes. Powerful.

I hope you do really well in the contest... I'll have to check.
Thank you for sharing your work. I'm glad I got to review you after you reviewed my own piece. *BigSmile*

I don't see any spelling or grammatical issues.


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Review of Contest Entries  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Angelica Weatherby- Bday WDC 9 Author IconMail Icon;

I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem as it comes before my entry into the I Write in 2025 forum.

Even as a teacher, reading this gives me nerves.... I am not ready to go back. August seems to fly by.

I haven't decided if this is university... or high school. Though it would work for either. The last verse had me scratching my head. Is this a professor or student conjuring this poem - Associate professor or bachelor student.

Personally, I have my Bad Attitude (BA) and my BEd (Bachelor of Education).

I wish you luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.


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Review of The Invisible Boy  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Jeffrey Meyer Author IconMail Icon;

Interesting wee flash fiction piece. I am a little nervous about what the 'invisible boy' will do with the knives.

How does Freddy know where the remote is after seeing the smile on the mirror. Is the 'invisible boy' a part of himself? His home life seems unsettled and frightening for a wee boy... has he got some kind of split personality?

I did notice an extra word in this sentence: "Even if he had the vocabulary, he wouldn't have been able to make his mother would understand."

Either way, I thought it was a rather good story and worthy of the win. Congratulations.

Thanks for sharing. I really enjoyed the piece.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Jeffrey Meyer Author IconMail Icon;
Wow... I didn't see that twist coming. I was rivetted from the beginning. Congratulations on the wind. It is disserved. I was up against some great competition this round. Well done.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lonewolf Author IconMail Icon;
I loved this tale. Well done. The story pulled me in from the very beginning and I had to know how the boy made out. I also loved that the captain was a woman.

Here's to Black-eye Blackburn! Cheers!



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Review of Mountain  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Sumojo Author IconMail Icon;

I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum. I do appreciate that you are going beyond the 25 entries as it gives some of us slower challengers a chance to read and review some great stuff.

I really like your poem. You have chosen some powerful words to convey the image of a beach. One that is a contrast - one not so spectacular, but rather chilly and the other hot and worthy of a dip. I could imagine each of those beaches at various parts of the year.

One note: I had to look up the form of a diamante poem as I was aware of all the rules off hand. I like it when that kind of thing is added to the bottom as a note or some sort of thing. I think you follow the form, but I always thought the first and last lines are related or opposite nouns.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Love it. Congratulations on your win. You did an amazing job capturing my interest and pulling me along for the ride. The humour was fabulous... and I am reading this while sitting in a cafe in Fergus, Ontario - the place where this weekend Bagpipes and Tartans will reign supreme as it is the Fergus Highland Games Festival! This story was very apropos.

Thanks for sharing and giving my a wee laugh laddie. “Hae a grand (wonderful) day.”

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Review of The Jericho Loop  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very cool tale... frustrating for the character and I can feel it as well as sense it. Will he ever get his life back and who is the man in the grey coat? Ah, the mystery of it all.

Congrats on the win. It's well deserved.


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Review of A Tragic Mix-Up  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Yeah, this definitely deserved the win. Congratulations. I was in from the first sentence. Thanks for the giggle and the reminder of some TV show that always had the guy trying to improve something or other. Can't remember the show... but it never turned out well for him either.

That was a seriously expensive smoothie.... if you were in Canada it would cost you even more.


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Review of The Gardener  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Amethyst Angel 🌼 Author IconMail Icon;

I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your epic poem as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

I am so glad I got to read this. It read like a story and I was hooked and pulled into the tale. I too felt like Mary, thinking he did not deserve forgiveness, but the poem reminded me that poison comes not from the person who harmed us, but from within. Her forgiveness allowed her to see the true culprit - the snake and she killed that bringing life back to her garden in the process. Well done. You crafted and amazing tale. One that others would gladly read and appreciate.

I did not see any spelling or grammatical issues. The poem swept me along.

Thank you for sharing your poem. I look forward to reading more of your work.


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Review of The Jump  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Now this was fabulous. I was so worried for David as I went with him along his adventure. The ending was a delightful surprise and my worry dissipated.

I can see why this won. Well done. It is deserving of the prize. I look forward to reading more of you work.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days! Author IconMail Icon;
I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your piece for the I Write in 2025 as it comes before mine in the forum. I also want to thank you for keeping on keeping on past the 25 entries because some of us like to space our our entires... and still review wonderful pieces like this one.

I loved this! The twist was fabulous. Got that old biddy. I had to giggle as I imagined the woman's face. I do hope you win.

Thank you so much for sharing this. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Review of Dehydration  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi No Sox with Sandals Author IconMail Icon;

It's 💙 Carly: poems & novel Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your piece as it falls before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

Interesting piece. I had never heard about the pee on a shirt and wrap it around your head.

I was right there with him.... though I am glad I have my water as I read this. Love the sensory aspects with the sand in the shoes.

I liked the ending. Seeing and joining his passed relatives and dog.

Good luck in the contest.

This looks like an interesting contest.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Humming Bird Author IconMail Icon;

It's 💙 Carly: poems & novel Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure to read and review your blog entry as it falls before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

I really got the uplift from this piece. Despite the desire to cut off that painful leg, you find ways to bring in positivity to bolster yourself. I like the concept of 'destruction to construction'. Finding ways that work for you and that is the best defense against things that want to tear us apart. My hat is off to you.

I am currently recovering from a dislocated elbow - massage and ice packs are my friends as I try to work on getting my range of motion back. Patience is also part of the equation - slow and steady will make the healing happen.

My prayers are with you for the pain to diminish and go away.
Thanks for sharing. Good luck in this contest.


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Review of More at Risk  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Jeff Author IconMail Icon,
It's 💙 Carly: poems & novel Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

I really liked the flow of your piece. I liked the repetition of the final word of the couples to start the next line. That was a fabulous form. You held to that until the last line making it succinct and powerful.

Your poem has 50 lines which works for the poem, but I believe the contest guidelines restrict the poem to 30 lines. I did this contest as well and found cutting my piece back from 40 to 30 lines was not an easy feat.

despite that hiccup, I think you did an admirable job crafting your piece.

Thank you for sharing your piece and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.


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Review of (Forever)  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Brian K Compton Author IconMail Icon;

It's 💙 Carly: poems & novel Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

This is a very powerful poem. It resonated with me.
The line "I still cannot metabolize you" really sunk in. Relationships change you just like everything else we 'consume' in life - from what we read, hear, see, smell, taste. A relationship brings all of that into play and when they end - there is an unlearning of sorts... a 'metabolizing' of what had been. It is difficult, particularly when the relationship was very much a part of who you saw yourself to be.

I really enjoy your word choices. I may just have to print this poem out as one to savour and read over every so often. It makes me feel human. Like the human experience is in the living and the loving of what is important to us.

I enjoyed the song as well. Thank you for including it. I read the poem once, then listened to the music, then reread the poem.

Thank you so much for sharing. I look forward to reading more of your work... I have a feeling this might be the first time I have gotten to enjoy your work. Keep writing.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi ruwth Author IconMail Icon;

I had the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

Wow. My first response when I opened your poem. I LOVE the colours. Thank you so much for the bit of information that today is National Crayon Day. I just might have to add some colour to my life today and get some colouring in.

I loved the sweetness of your poem. There is a simplicity to it that makes me smile. It brings me back to that beloved childhood memory of colouring and creating. Thank you for that.

good luck in the contest. I look forward to reading more of your work as the year progresses. Write on my friend.


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for entry "Clickety Click Clack" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days! Author IconMail Icon;

It's 💙 Carly: poems & novel Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure to read and review your poetry as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

I notice repetition of "Clickety Clink Clank" which I stumbled over (but that is all on me, not the poem - I am over tired)
I notice rhyming couplets which I found quite good. At first I though everything would rhyme with 'clack' but then that pattern changed.
I do appreciate the colour changes as that helped me visually see the changes in the rhyming patterns.
The blue words - quick and pick linked up nicely.
I really enjoyed the 'story aspect' of the green pattern of couplets.



One suggestion I had - particularly with this contest - is to add a notes section to your entry that states the actual prompt. This would help me know what you are attempting to do with your poem so that I can give a review that would benefit. I had to check out the website and look up the prompt and I found it a challenge to find the link for the prize prompt you were writing to as the prompts fall within the forum itself.

Good luck with the contest and the challenge. I believe I did the first week only.



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Review of Music Notes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Amethyst Angel 🌼 Author IconMail Icon;

It's 💙 Carly: poems & novel Author IconMail Icon and I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

Interesting contest and intriguing prompt. I love acrostic poems and I enjoyed yours.

You chose the Biblical character of Daniel. Your chosen words are powerful. Well crafted.

My only suggestion is to remove the 'as' from 'as kittens' I think it reads stronger, but that is only my opinion.

Good luck in the contest. I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep writing.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Luzingu Author IconMail Icon;
I got to read and review your news article when I pressed the read and review button on the left hand side of the website. You never know what you are going to get as the button is random.

I want to welcome you to the website and do hope you enjoy your time here on Writing.com (WDC).

I am not one to read the news or watch news on TV. I find that the world is filled with far too much negativity, so I try to minimize my intake of such stuff.

I tried to make an effort to read your piece. It seems to be a passion for you.

I read it over several times.... looks like a descent article. Given that I tend to enjoy fiction I kept wondering what the training workshops would be like... but articles are facts.

I see no grammar or spelling issues. You seemed to say what you wanted to say.

I apologize for not being the best reviewer of your piece. Keep writing.



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Review of The Lost Hour  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days! Author IconMail Icon,
I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your short piece as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

Your piece highlights the cultural aspects of the genders. We are not all so different, are we. Everyone has expectations that seem to be imposed on us... especially when we become of an age to be part of the 'adult' parties - heels, a new dress and having your chin and upper lip threaded. Not something I have had to endure, but I can feel for the girl.

I also feel for the mother who has to endure her husband's laughter when she gets a flat. That could not have been helped.

Things I noticed:
"Dad has said to be absolutely ready by the time he gets home from office" - I would be inclined to say "the office."
And I also noticed an 'i' instead of an I.

Other than that I felt the piece was quite good. Good luck in the contest.


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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days! Author IconMail Icon;

I have the pleasure to read and review your piece as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025.

I like the ambition of the piece... I too would easily put the rug off.

My only comment would be why they would be concerned about her mother being allergic to the dog... if the dog already lives with them.... and mom too. Though, I have cats and allergies to them. They are just not allowed in my bedroom.

Beyond that I felt it was a good story. Good luck in the contest. I look forward to reading more.


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Hi ruwth Author IconMail Icon;

I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your piece as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

Interesting information about Constantine. This piece got me thinking...

I am not crazy about a certain religion being forced on all members of a society. Forcing or imposing anything does not sit well with me.

I think each person has to come to their own spiritual vision. Do their own seeking, even if they have grown up in a family with a certain religion. Coming to your own determination makes your spiritual connections stronger and your faith bone deep.

Forcing people in anything keeps things surface level. All for show and I am not a big one for show. It comes off as phony and insincere and that breeds hypocritical actions and thinking.

Some people claim things in the name of God in order to serve their own needs. Examples of this are being the man of the house and abusing that by abusing their wife and children.

Following your own heart and seeking your relationship with your Creator generates truth and love. You can see it in the person as they shine with that love.

All religions at their core are based in love.

Radicals tend to be extremists that use doctrine to dictate what they should or should not do. That is not based in love.... not real, true love of humanity at all. And that is scary.

Sorry, I went on and on.... but the prompt was intriguing. Good job. Thanks for sharing.


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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days! Author IconMail Icon;

It's 💙 Carly: poems & novel Author IconMail Icon and I had the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem as it came before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

I enjoyed your poem. You chose to write in in couplets and told a story within that was cute and well done. All done in dialogue.

I like that Cupid is a poor speller. Instead of getting her SOUL mate, she got a sole mate. And that sounds rather stinky to me.... feet can be rather off in the odor department.

Instead of getting her money back he's already spent the money on Pink collars. Silly bugger.

I wish you well in the contest. Hope you had a happy Valentine's Day.


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for entry "Thunder Blunder" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi THANKFUL SONALI Magical Days! Author IconMail Icon,
I have the pleasure of reading and reviewing your poem as it comes before mine in the I Write in 2025 forum.

I enjoyed the rhyming couplets. Your word choice was dramatic and well done.

I especially liked:
"I'm gonna make Zeus
Look like Dr. Seuss

I'm gonna treat Thor
Like an apple core"

Those lines made me smile. I would also be inclined to sleep through the storm as the line:
"Let it rain, let it pour
I'll drown out the thunder with my snore!"
has me thinking.

Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest. I think I looked into that contest. I may give it a whirl at some point, though this year I am trying my hand at more stories and a little less poetry. I signed on to do The Bradbury - 52 short stories in 52 weeks. All I can say is, thank god for flash fiction. *BigSmile*

Keep writing. I look forward to reading more from you over the course of the year.


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