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Review of Eat your words  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sumojo, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Eat your words"  by Sumojo

Clarity:Wonderful title for this masterpiece.

Writing style:Fairy-tale folklore.

Are all 3 genres listed?Great job.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A great structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog is specific for its speaker.

My favorite line:--- “Lost are you? Lost are you?”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:I hope you won the contest. This is a awesome classic work. I love it.
An author in the woods getting buried in leave words. What a great idea for a tale. This readers attention was held start to finish both times.

Short, to the point without a dull moment. Kudos!

Definitely one of the most entertaining stories any reader will come across. Descriptions so real they will take the reader in and bury with leave words.

Sumojo, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Thomkatt, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"God’s Love Overcomes Life’s Storms"  by Thomkatt

Clarity:A good title that well describes the content of this work.

Writing style:Religious inspirational advise.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes. This makes your work available to more readers and potential readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? The structure and format is fairly easy for the reader.


My favorite line:--- It’s in these moments that clinging to the truth of God’s word matters more than ever.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well written article that is so true. It is indeed those hard dark times that make us stronger and define the person we become.

You have worded this article well so that it does not sound too preachy or judgmental like many of today's religious leaders so often do.

It has always puzzled me how that many of those people in the Bible even after witnessing first hand God's miracles could so easily turn there back to God when times became dark. God does work in mysterious ways, at least too us. We are truly blessed. God has not given up on us humans with all our constant drama and complaints. A wise Father who is always there whether we realize it or not.

Well chosen scriptures to reference are provided in this strong inspirational work.

Thomkatt, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider double spacing, this might make the article less intimidating for browsers or potential readers.

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Joseph
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Review of Benji the Wolf  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi John Andrew Jenkins, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Benji the Wolf"  by John Andrew Jenkins

Clarity:A great title for this folklore tale.

Writing style:Fantasy family folklore.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog seems right for its speaker.

My favorite line:---“Come on, you lily-livered pack of fragilastics!” said Forstall, nodding in the direction of a mountain pass.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A delightful entertaining folk-tale. Great descriptions that might transform the reader into a wolf, there with Benji.

Too bad Benji died.

John Andrew Jenkins, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider some blank lines between longer paragraphs, this makes it less intimidating for a browser or potential reader.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Petunia Black, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Taste of Heartache"  by Petunia Black

Clarity:A nice title for this work.

Writing style:Personal experience romance drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure appears cluttered and intimidating, that is not easy for the reader.



My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A lost love type rant. I suppose a rant like this might help get the bad feeling out of your system. Move on, hold your head high. Time will quickly heal this loss.

Try to write a positive story while your emotions are running high. This might help to write a better story by having your senses tuned in high.

Petunia Black, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider a good edit using line-spacing, short paragraphs with a beginning, middle and end.

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Review of Hunter  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Sinbad, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Hunter"  by Sinbad

Clarity:A good title that describes the content well.

Writing style:Folklore animal religious.

Are all 3 genres listed?Great, this makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is good for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialogue seems to be specific to its speaker.

My favorite line:---One who imitates good actions, even outwardly, gets a chance to smell the alluring fragrance of goodness, whereas, one who even hypocritically imitates evil, contacts the odor of the polecat of evil.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Interesting tale starting with a greedy hunter that transforms into a Saint.

A good idea for this story, it seems like it got stretched out for a word count. This is only one opinion.
This story begins well then starts to loose my attention when it just seems too preachy.

Sinbad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider breaking down some of the longer sentences. Maybe edit to shorten the tale, todays reader seems to prefer short, straight to the point tales.

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Joseph
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Review of a day in the rain  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Rhyssa, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "a day in the rain"  by Rhyssa

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautifully worded nature poem. I love poems about nature, seasons, rain...


Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a young mother nature setting on a bridge with her bare-feet dangling over a stream while a mist of rain cools everything off, is what this reader sees.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:All looks good.

Rhyssa, thank you for sharing your delightful poem.

Write On!

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Review of astrophysicist  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi vluxyr, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "astrophysicist "  by vluxyr

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong emotion filled free verse poem. Life has its ups and downs, it is funny how when we're down it feels hopeless yet in what seems like no time then we're back up. It's then we can look back and appreciate the experience. Acknowledging lessons we learned and realizing those lessons made us a stronger person

Artistic Voice and Imagery: For this reader I can see the portrait of slaves working on a cotton plantation a couple hundred years ago.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Not sure why there is no use of capitol letters.

vluxyr, thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi JT Baker, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"The Conversation "  by JT Baker

Clarity:A good title, however it could better describe the contents of this story.

Writing style:Fantasy teen drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Good job. This makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A nice structure that is fairly easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem specific to its speaker.

My favorite line:---Basketball season just started and you've ruined 3 sets of clothes already."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written and well described folk tale. Strong character with realistic dialog. This entertaining story carries a realistic flow.

JT Baker, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider double spacing and maybe larger font. This will make it easier for those of us with weak eyes.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Colorblind  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Minnie, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Colorblind"  by Minnie

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written free verse poem that is both strong and emotional. So true, when there is the death of someone close I always feel like the world has gotten smaller. I suspose that you are right, it does indeed loose some color.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:For this reader the portrait of a child attending their first funeral is seen.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see nothing at all wrong with this spelling grammar or mechanics of this poem.

Minnie, thank you for sharing your powerful poem.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Cloelia, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Agony In The Garden"  by Cloelia

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A romance lost lover type poem. An emotional plea to a former mate. Well described.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The image of 2 Viking children walking apart from each other in opposite directions is what I see after reading this poem.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the spelling grammar of this work

Cloelia,thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review of 27. Backlash  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi aracrae, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"27. Backlash"  by aracrae

Clarity:Seems to be a good title for this chapter.

Writing style:Family thriller drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Good job, this makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? The structure is fair for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog seems to be appropriate for its individual speaker.

My favorite line: ---“Just Kai.” Nail emphasizes. “And what he stole.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written drama with good descriptions that help the reader picture the scenes while trying to get into the story.

Strong characters with good individual dialogs.

Mabey just me but seemed to have too much drama. Kept loosing my attention. That's just one opinion.


aracrae, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider a good edit and proof read and possibly shortening or breaking down to several chapters. This will make it less intimidating for a reader. Today's readers seem to like short and to the point.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Chaotic Evil, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"I'm a girls girl... Here is why "  by Chaotic Evil

Clarity: A great title.

Writing style: Personal opinion drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is not good for this reader.



My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Sometimes life is just a beach. Modern society and human nature can get us all down at certain times in life.

Well told opinion article that expresses your thoughts well. Seems to be written more in a fast rant. A good edit to the format and this could be a top article revealing signs of the time.

In life everyone goes through times when it seems everything is against us. Hang in there, it gets better.

This article reveals a great talent for expressing your thoughts. Use that talent to try and fix things. Time is on your side.

Chaotic Evil, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider a good proof read and edit to make the format less intimidating and easier to read.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Sunset Melody  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi HuntersMoon, I came across this delightful psalm while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Sunset Melody"  by HuntersMoon.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A great tune to this 42 line melody. This is the sunset's melody. A great idea for this awesome lullaby. No doubt a prize winner. A catchy rhyme scheme that stays with the reader. Well done.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the portrait of a composure drifting through time while composing this classic lullaby.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this piece of art.

HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing this beautiful song. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Mr. Man, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "If I could be anything"  by Mr. Mans

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Strong words to this free verse poem. Wouldn't it be nice to be able to choose anything you want to be? Wait some of us can, or can we.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a soul altering time in a dream, is what this reader sees.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling of mechanics.

Mr. Mans, Thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Joeman199, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Rivers of Time: A Karnak-Ra adventure"  by Joeman199

Clarity:A good title that catches the readers attention.

Writing style:Fantasy fanfiction drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, good job.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is not good for the reader. It looks intimidating and is hard for those of us with week eyes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog seems appropriate to its speaker.

My favorite line:--- "A cat? Wearing clothes, what magic is this?!"---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A great idea for this story. I like the use of ancient Egypt as well as the reference to Mark Twain.



Joeman199, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider breaking down the long paragraphs to short ones with a blank line or two between them. Double-spacing and maybe larger font. This will make it less intimidating for a reader or browser. Consider formatting the dialog more appropriate.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Kayaking  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Have a sunshiny day!, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Kayaking"  by Have a sunshiny day!

Clarity:A good title that describes the content good, also catches the readers attention.

Writing style: Biographical adventure drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Yes, great job.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure and format is fair for the reader.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A nicely written well detailed tale of learning to Kayak or first kayak adventure.

I am a canoer and have lived beside a river seems like forever. The title caught my attention. I found this article very well written and formatted with good detailed descriptions that brought back many memories for me.

I just can't imagine kayaking the first time at 70 years old, you've done good. There is nothing about it easy. It is very uncomfortable for a young person even. There is nothing like the rush of manoeuvring down a river in a canoe or kayak. That out weighs all the negatives'. It is good for the body and mind.

This well written strong story has taken me back to remembering the first times learning how.

Your great detailed descriptions make it easy for a reader to picture the scene.


Have a sunshiny day!, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it. Keep paddling.

Suggestions: Nicely formatted however a bit more line spacing would not hurt.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Tim Chiu, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Youths Being Put in Their Place"  by Tim Chiu

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A very informative free verse poem about abusive human nature. No doubt it is too easy for those in power to abuse it.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The image of someone trying to reveal a magician's secrets is what this reader see's.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see with the mechanics of this poem.

Tim Chiu, thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!

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Review of Pretend  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Dear Slim, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Pretend"  by Dear Slim

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A unique free verse poem about relationships. Nicely worded with questions as to what's real.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a child learning to use emojis is what this reader see's.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see with the grammar, spelling or mechanic's.

Dear Slim, thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review of The Rotating Fan  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Winchester, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"The Rotating Fan"  by Winchester Jones

Clarity: A good title that describes the contents o this story well.

Writing style: Mystery adventure drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Great job listing 3 genres.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A great structure and format that does make it easier for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog is individual for each speaker.

My favorite line:---“Okay, that might be right. Who keeps count?”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Another great story, Winchester. I just finished reading Punta Mala so I was glad to see another one of your stories pop up.

I like this story also it is very well described with strong characters.

Well told holding this readers attention well from start to finish.

Winchester Jones, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None.

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Review of Punta Mala  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi again Winchester Jones, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Punta Mala"  by Winchester Jones


Clarity:Good title for this Pirate adventure.

Writing style:Adventure drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? your work will be available to more readers by using all three genres that you are allowed.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The format and structure is fair for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog seems appropriate to its speaker.

My favorite line:---No morphine today. Today, Jack Granger needed his wits about him.----

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: I really like this story, of course getting killed by pirates sounds a heck of a lot more exciting. A great idea for this contest entry.

A good opening that grabs the readers attention. A great job with the descriptions, this keeps the readers attention through the story. That Jack Granger is quite a character. It sounds like you are familiar with the area and sailing.

To bad about Janet. I hate that Jack didn't get to use his Molotov cocktail.



Winchester Jones, thank you for sharing this work, I love it. A joy to read it.

Suggestions: I hope this won the contest.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi JCosmos, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "in the year 2025 the world ended "  by JCosmos

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: I like this poem. Very well written and I must say it sure gives you something to think about doesn't it. The pandemic showed us that just about anything can happen at anytime and society is not even close to being prepared for many of the worst disasters.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This reader see's the portrait of a cyber attack making all electronics obsolete. Thus setting the modern society back Millennium's.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I see with the spelling mechanics or grammar.

JCosmos, thank you for sharing your story, it has begun this reader's mind to Spinning.
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Bella N, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "The Valley of Monarch"  by Bella N

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: I really like this sci fi type of poetry. A great idea, well done.
This work contains and maintains a nice constant flow with a realistic tone.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The portrait of ancient Star Trek type astronauts exploring the cosmos, is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problem at all with the grammar mechanics or spelling.

WindSpirit 3, thank you for sharing your story.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi WindSpirit3, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "ballads of the mountain caps "  by WindSpirit3

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: Beautifully written poem emphasizing nature and the environment. I like this work and can relate to it as I think most other people will too.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see beautiful mountain peaks with the animals that live there slowly changing from season to season.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can see nothing at all wrong with the grammar spelling or the mechanics.

WindSpirit3, thank you for sharing your work. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Happy to write, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Don't make Gremlins out of your Mogwai!"  by Happy to write

Clarity:A good title for this work.

Writing style:Fantasy folklore.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, that's good making your work available to more potential readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? Nicely structured stanzas making it easy for the reader.


My favorite line:---A rage you can hardly deal with,gremlins that just run a-muck---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: I like this work written in a poetic type form. A good bit of world building that could be used over and over in different types work.
Hey great idea for this, I would keep it filed close and use it whenever needed in your writings.

Happy to write, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:A good relook and edit never hurts.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Day 32-33  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Fyn, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Day 32-33"  by Fyn

Clarity:A interesting title.

Writing style:Diary style drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Good job.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure could use a bit more line spacing to make it easier on those of us with weak eyes.

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My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:An entertaining tale described very realistically. The work carries this realistic flow from start to finish.

I like the diary style format of this, it seems more real this way.

Fyn,thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider more line spaceing and larger font.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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