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Review of The Rising Tide  Open in new Window.
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Hi again Emberly Gray I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Rising Tide" Open in new Window. by Emberly Gray

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A deep and emotional poem describing anxiety from normal everyday routines.
‘To find a shore, a place to land,

Away from the drift of the shifting sand.’

A well written realistic poem that most everyone should relate to.
We are creatures of habit and many of us let everyday routines that were once fun start to stress us out and take all the fun away. The majority of the time most of those pressures we have put on ourselves. Often it is good for us to get away, take a break and get some rest. This helps to clear the mind then come back with a whole new Focus.

*Fox* *StarfishY* *Sly* *CircleRainbow* *Sparkle*
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can see.

Emberly Gray thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Lilystar.com I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Architectural of trust" Open in new Window. by Lilystar.com

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful fifteen line poem with a nice rhyming scheme that adds to this unique flow.

An entertaining poem that leaves plenty of room for the reader to use their imagination to fill in the mystery.
*Footprintl* *Footprints* *Shine*

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find in this delightful poem.

Lilystar.com thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Rojodi I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"October 29 Object Description and Bonus" Open in new Window. byRojodi

Clarity:The title could describe the story better.

Writing style:Folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Bookshelf* Yes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*Vamp* Yes.

My favorite line:--- The painter Diederik Van Rossum had accompanied his father Joost to the Western outpost of Schenectady, helping the elder Van Rossum trade goods – silver, weapons, and blankets – for furs with the native population.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written, delightful and entertaining tale. Written with great descriptions that help to take the reader into the storyline. A bit of History was a nice touch for this artistic Tale.

Consider changing the title to better describe this tale’s content.


Rojodi thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Penw* Write on!*WDCSurveyForm*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of "Hide"  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Netty I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: ""Hide"" Open in new Window. by Netty

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written free verse style poem with eleven lines focusing on how God's presence is everywhere and you cannot hide from his presence. This simple poem carries a realistic flow and presents a powerful inspirational message.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find.

Netty thank you for sharing your inspirational poem.
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Review of Summer Rain  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi ChristineB I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Summer Rain" Open in new Window. by ChristineB

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Artistic Voice and Imagery: It is almost magical how Mother Nature can change so suddenly from a beautiful day to an apocalyptic storm. This well worded free verse style poem focuses on rain and more rain which turns into floods.

Personally I live near a river where it seems to always be wet, however this past year is the dryest I can ever remember around here.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find.

ChristineB thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Inner Rose  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again The Uplifting Essayist I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"The Inner Rose" Open in new Window. by The Uplifting Essayist

Clarity:A nice title for this uplifting tale.

Writing style:Realistic folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*StarY* A good structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*StarY* Yes.

My favorite line:--- And the love with which she distributed food to the needy was beyond compare.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:‘The Inner Rose’ is a well-written and entertaining story about Mala who is preparing to go to a wedding reception with her snooty crowd. On her way there she spies a nun with a peaceful aura of Serenity about her. This manages to change Mala's attitude and perception of things. She returns home and changes out of all her expensive things and dresses more simply and goes on a simple mission to help people.

An inspirational tale.

The Uplifting Essayist thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write On!*Highlighter* *Highlighter*
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WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Construct  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi SanguineAngel I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Construct" Open in new Window. by SanguineAngel

Clarity:An interesting title.

Writing style:Philosophical fantasy drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*StarBr* Good structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*StarBr*Yes.

My favorite line:--- I wake to the dark. To the blind valley in which I have always existed. ---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written and entertaining Alice fell into the rabbit hole type adventure tale.

A good opening that slowly pulls the reader right into the adventure with you. Detailed descriptions.
You got to wonder about those mushrooms. That blind valley sounds very familiar.


SanguineAngel thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write On!*Crayons*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Joey's Ready for the Giving I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Of Friends and Keyboards on WdC" Open in new Window. by Joey's Ready for the Giving

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A great image of the keyboard to begin with.
A well worded modern greeting to all of Writing.com's members, readers and future artists. A nice modern flow to this inspirational message that surely inspires anyone that reads it.
"Here's to the words unwritten, to the stories yet untold"

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems to be found.

Joey's Ready for the Giving thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Parents Love  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "Parents Love" Open in new Window. by ShristiChand

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded eight line poem that carries an emotional flow. Focusing on the love of parents and how much they can be missed when living a distance away. Indeed it's some of the little things like this that makes one appreciate what they have.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find.

ShristiChand thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Hen Pecked  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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My impressions of the poem: "Hen Pecked" Open in new Window. by LenJenD'

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A simple and delightful eight line poem about chickens. Poetry about simple things is most delightful to read. I love ‘express it and eight’, it's amazing how much you can say in eight short lines of poem. A nice ABCD rhyming scheme for a Charming flow.
*Chicken*
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems.

LenJenD' thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!*Chicken*

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Beck Firing back up! I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"Something in the Air BNB" Open in new Window. by Beck Firing back up!

Clarity:Great title for this Air BNB ghost tale.

Writing style:Folktale mystery drama.

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Is the structure and format easy for the reader? *CheckP*

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*CheckP*

My favorite line:---“What the shit show is wrong with you?”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written entertaining tale. Straight to the point in a few words like the modern reader likes.
“Don’t touch the art”
Penny and Marsha's Air BNB vacation turns into a night in the haunted house.
*HauntedHouse*

Beck Firing back up!thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*HighlighterG* Write on! *HighlighterG*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Revealing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Snowone Knows I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Revealing" Open in new Window. by Snowone Knows

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:'Revealing' A Christmas message - Poem using the Alouette form.
A creative Christmas poem written in a different style that challenges the readers imagination.

Interesting twenty four line poem of six line stanza's.

A beautiful poetic work that carries a angelic flow.

Alouette form with a 5,5,7,5,5,7 Meter.
Rhyme scheme a,a,b,c,c,b.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:*CheckO*

Snowone Knows thank you for sharing your poem. *Smile*
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi John I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"The Perfect Road trip" Open in new Window. by John

Clarity:Great title for this afventure .

Writing style:Family adventure drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*CheckGr* Yes by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*CheckGr* Nice structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*CheckGr*Good dialog.

My favorite line:--- "Darling! The paper dispenser was empty! Empty! Do they not understand the fundamental necessities of a civilized society? One cannot endure such an oversight!" She gestured wildly towards the restroom door, as if inviting the entire state of Iowa to witness her indignity.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:'The perfect road trip' an appropriate title for this Jeep Cherokee Adventure in the heartland. A well told entertaining story that quickly transports the reader into that Cherokee right between Bella and Spot. I think I did that corn maze and met that proud farmer.

John thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Adventure typo under the title. *Crayons* *PoseyY* *Penw* Write on!

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi tophatfiddle, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Archie Teegardin put the Clear...." Open in new Window. by tophatfiddle

Clarity:An interesting title however it could describe this smoking sci-fi tale better.

Writing style:Sci-fi drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*GlassesY* Only see one, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*FacePalm* A good structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*AsteriskO* The dialog is appropriate for it's speaker.

My favorite line:---Then he blew out the match with the stream of first smoke that the cigarette had generated—and coughed loudly.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A Entertaining sci-fi Adventure with the characters seeming to have the same everyday problems that we find ourselves in all the time.

A mild opening that introduces Archie Teegardin and begins to paint a pretty good picture of Archie's nature.
I guess smoking is not allowed in sci-fi either.

Hopefully Archie can stop stealing.*Smirk2*


tophatfiddlethank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Crayons* Writey-O *Crayons*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi again stuckintheend I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "I feel so dirty now." Open in new Window. by stuckintheend

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A nineteen line Free verse form poem emphasizing on one from a past relationship that has begun a new one with another. By leaving that past on paper you can now move on to your Future and learn from the mistakes of the past. In the blink of an eye time has a way of changing today's drama to a distant memory.

The grass always looks greener on the other side of the pasture.
What we think we can't have can be the most desirable.
We cannot change yesterday however for tomorrow we can learn from yesterday.
The greatest Thrill Is In The Chase, the conquest ends the hunt.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can see.

stuckintheend thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Home For Sale  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Pernell Rogers I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
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My impressions of:"Home For Sale" Open in new Window. by Pernell Rogers

Clarity:A mild title for this twisted treehouse tale.

Writing style:Folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Check* Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Shine* Nice structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?*StarV* Appropriate.

My favorite line:---"It probably needs a little work. I don't think anyone has been up there in years. It could be something nice to have whenever you get married," the realtor answered.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A delightful and entertaining story about Lewis's Adventures buying a new house. Well described story that paints a great picture for the reader. Ending with an unexpected time twist paradox which puts the house back up for sale.

Pernell Rogers thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Crayons* Write on!

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of The Dreaming One  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi TeeGaeM I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Dreaming One" Open in new Window. by TeeGaeM

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:‘The dreaming One’ Is a creative and most entertaining children's poem consisting of 58 lines in four line stanzas with a delightful rhyming scheme that adds to the overall flow of this entertaining story.

This well written poem is a delight to read. I perfectly understand your mindset for changing an unfinished work into a classic poem. I have various unfinished works that I feel would be better in a poetry style. It seems almost magical how a work will come to life after starting on paper, feeling like it has the power to dictate how it is finished then told.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems to be found in this artistic poem.

TeeGaeM thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Grateful Ever  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi jaya I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Grateful Ever" Open in new Window. by jaya

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:It is a delight to read 'Grateful Ever'. A strong inspirational poem giving thanks and praise to those cherished souls that helped to mold a blessed life. As well as giving praises to the Lord God Almighty, the Creator of all things.

A fifteen line free verse poem consisting of a three, five and seven line stanza that blend well to create a humble tone.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems to find in this poetic work.

jaya thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Swagger  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi again THANKFUL SONALI Party Hopping! I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Swagger" Open in new Window. by THANKFUL SONALI Party Hopping!

Clarity:Interesting title for this casino adventure.

Writing style:Adventure drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Only two are listed,*Frown* by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Nice structure and font. *BurstR*

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Good dialog. *Sparkle*

My favorite line:--- His swashbuckling swagger gave way to slumped shoulders as they lost at Blackjack, his guesses sometimes being this close but not quite. ---*Cage*

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A Well written delightful and entertaining story about a trip to the casino where at the end Sally and her mom come out winners. An unusual yet creative twist with the doors being locked for a contest.
It is almost like getting struck by lightning to go into a casino and come out with more than you went in with.
An enjoyable story. I do hope you won the contest.

THANKFUL SONALI Party Hopping! thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Crayons6* Write on! *Penw*

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Hi again jackiesmuse I came across this holiday story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the story: "Rumor Has It WC 271" Open in new Window. by jackiesmuse

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:An entertaining and a realistic short story about Cindy and her Mom out doing their last minute Christmas shopping. Mom tells Cindy a rumor that gets her into a panic mode.
It is an appropriate time of year for this entertaining Christmas Story.
Well written with a realistic tone, this story is short and to the point in a delightful entertaining last minute shopping kind of way.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with this Christmas tale.

jackiesmuse thank you for sharing your work.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi The Uplifting Essayist I came across this essay while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the essay: "Happiness Is an Inside Job" Open in new Window. by The Uplifting Essayist

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:People tend to over think and make things way more complicated than they should be. Happiness is really so simple when we train our mind to search for and appreciate those beautiful things that are all around us. Such as a tiny yet beautiful bird, like described in this delightful and entertaining essay.

The Uplifting Essayist thank you for sharing your work.
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Review of Only in Dreams  Open in new Window.
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Hi Redtowrite I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Only in Dreams" Open in new Window. by Redtowrite

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written poem that says a lot in six four line stanza’s, focusing on the mythical time of the Pandemic.

“This mythical time will live in history books.”
Well written with a nice rhyming scheme that adds to the overall realistic flow of this poem.
The emotions scream at the reader from this poem, especially those who remember so well that mythical year when time stood still. Though just a short while ago today you don't hear many people talking about those times as they have tried to forget them.

This Modern World Racing to keep up with technology so quickly that they let their guard down for a virus. Or was it all just a conspiracy to prepare us for what has been unleashed. Today’s modern new technical age of inflation, AI, and Amazon that we find ourselves in.

Indeed that was a terrible time conspiracy or not. No doubt it is carved in my memory as well as one for the history books. It would be Interesting to see what history says or reveals about the year 2020.

This strong poem has certainly taken me back in time. I am glad you dated it, well done.


Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a historical time when all the world was quiet, as if time stood still. The little pace of traffic on the roads is practically invisible. Same with the skies, clear without jet lines of smog painting across them. The few people out wear colorful fashionable masks while keeping a distance from one another. Technical entertainment was in a repeat mode, nothing new.
The government paid people to stay home. Curfews were made, the few businesses open would close at dark. Goodbye ancient world hello modern age.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Well done!

Redtowrite thank you for sharing your classic work.
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Review of energy rock test  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi WindSpirit3 I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"energy rock test" Open in new Window. by WindSpirit3

Clarity: An interesting title.

Writing style: Spiritual experience activity article.

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Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Nicely laid out.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Yes.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Eastern medicine’s ‘Energy Rocking’ a well described process for this, what seems like a lifelong experiment for you.

Ask yourself a question and if you rock forward it's true, if you rock backwards it's false. A nice touch with the ‘humor me’ challenge for the reader to give this mystic doctrine or meditation a try. I admit I've never heard of this before, however I'm going to accept your challenge and give it a try.

130 Personalities you say, it seems feasible I wonder if I've got more than one.
There are many philosophies that say that our current life is only one test in the grand scheme of things, only one part in the big play.

A well written and powerful article describing this process. A good work that has been a delight to read.


WindSpirit3 thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Write on!

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Deano Sharples I came across this story while random reviewing.
I am no literary professor however I like to read and feel like my opinions relate with today's average reader.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"The Worker's Christmas Carol" Open in new Window. by Deano Sharples

Clarity:A good title for this Scrooge Carol.

Writing style:Holiday folktale drama.

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Are all 3 genres listed?*Ghost* Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?*Ghost*Nice structure.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? *Ghost*Good dialog appropriate for it's speaker.

My favorite line:---Bob started to feel the fear creeping up to his chest as the sounds had reached the peak of their volume.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:‘Helping those in greed.’ I think that is actually my favorite line. A nice opening that introduces this modern day Union workers nightmare Christmas Carol. A well told and realistic version of how big business treats its loyal employees the majority of the time.
I am glad Bob got to buy that turkey.
A delightful and entertaining modern day union Christmas Story. Bob becomes a better man after the visit from the ghosts of Past present and future.


Deano Sharples thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:*Ghost**Ghost**Penw* Write On!

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of The Ghost Story  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Jeffrey Meyer I came across this tale while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the story: "The Ghost Story" Open in new Window. by Jeffrey Meyer

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Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A 300 word Flash fiction tale about tricks ghosting candy. (A typo, I think I'll stick with it.)
It does seem like ghost stories and sleepovers go together. That's about all the ghost stories I remember ever hearing were at some sort of sleepover or campout.
A well written and entertaining flash fiction story that keeps this reader entertained well.


Jeffrey Meyer thank you for sharing your work.
Write On!

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