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Review of Fear of Flying  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Sinbad, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Fear of Flying"  by Sinbad

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style: Personal biographical drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Nicely written story that expresses your feelings on flying very good. If humans were meant to fly wouldn't they have been born with wings?

They say your chances of crashing in a plane are very slim compared to automobile accidents. My wife has the same fear, that's what I tell her.

Although your feelings can be felt through this story it is written in an entertaining, even a bit humorous way. Well done.



Sinbad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review of A Frank Letter  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Jay, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "A Frank Letter"  by Jay O'Toole

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A delightful poem with a bit of humor to boot.

A great job with the rhyming pattern that adds to this poems unique flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The portrait is painted for this reader of two people, one of which is trying to talk the other one into going on a diet.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can see with the grammar spelling or mechanics.

Jay O'Toole, thank you for sharing this delightful poem.
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Amethyst Angel, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Ode to the Emerald Isle"  by Amethyst Angel

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well written acrostic poem for St Patrick's Day.

A nice rhyming pattern that gives this poem an easy going flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: A portrait of the Highlands of Ireland are painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this beautiful poem.

Amethyst Angel, thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Weirdone, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Our Wicked Cool Teacher"  by Weirdone-Back in the games

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style: Modern horror drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written tale of school-teacher horror.

A good structured story that is easy for the reader.

Strong characters with good dialog. Good descriptions that make it easy to picture the setting.

A good ending. This was the cute style horror not the dark gloomy horror.



Weirdone-Back in the games, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review of Ode to New Love  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Drake, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Ode to New Love"  by Drake

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded romance poem with a random rhyming pattern. This poem carries A rhythmic flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the portrait a young couple fussing over nothing, then threatening breakup.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Curious why you did not start the poem with a capital letter.

Drake, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maria Mize, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"WHEN DARE + DOUBLE-DARE = FIRE"  by Maria Mize

Clarity:A good title that describes the contents of this story well.

Writing style: Biographical drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well written biographical tale. As youngsters most all of us go through phases and make mistakes sometimes worse than others.

Written in a nice structure, very informative with good details. A good strong opening which quickly draws the reader in to the story keeping his attention all throughout to find out how it ends.

Maria Mize, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi W.D. Wilcox, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"The Stuff Screams Are Made Of"  by W.D. Wilcox

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Fantasy folklore drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:Well written adventure horror tale.
Nice structure, I like the large font. That makes easier to read for those of us with weak eyes.

Strong characters with great descriptions that bring the demons to life for the reader. A lot of screaming indeed.

A great entertaining horror story, I think most people will like this tale as I do.

W.D. Wilcox, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review of Swallowed  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Ton, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Swallowed"  by Ton

Clarity:The title's for each chapter seem good, Not sure about the main title.

Writing style:Mythological fantasy friendship drama.

My favorite line:--- Seeing his strong, comforting presence brought a glimmer of hope to Elias's heart.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written tale with strong realistic characters that are likable. To bad about Elias.

A good opening that draws the reader into the story.

Nicely structured story. This makes it easier for the reader and more inviting for a browser or potential reader.

--The deed was in minutes.-- I think you may have left a word out and this sentence.



Ton, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: a good proofread and edit to catch any typo's or left out words, never hurts. Consider putting the chapters title in bold and then skipping a line before the content. This will make it appear better to the reader. This reader didn't quite get the title.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Jeff, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"The Eternal Optimist"  by Jeff

Clarity: The title fits the story well.

Writing style:Family adventure drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Yes it sounds like your dad is the eternal optimist. I hope he don't have to get the kayaks out of the attic.
Very well written and entertaining adventure tale that I think most people will relate to.

Well done using the prompt and for daily flash fiction. I know it is hard to complete a story in a day. This one is awesome.

Jeff, thank you for sharing this entertaining work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None.

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Review of Is it only me?  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Moyo Kamlin, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Is it only me?"  by Moto kamlin

Clarity: A good title for this work.

Writing style: Personal opinions.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written piece asking questions that most all of us ask at a young age. Everyone is wired differently, throughout life we often learn that what we thought were our shortcomings or actually actually some of our strong points. Different is good nobody wants to be normal.
Surrounded with a shroud of mystery is extremely strong nobody wants to be an open book. Listening and taking it all in is like an art form. Especially these days you don't find many listeners everyone is too busy talking about themselves. You speak with more authority and intelligence by listening weighing out the information so that your response is more meaningful in an intelligent way.

You often learn that those people you were worried about what they think of you we're actually more worried about what you think of them.

Your commitment to self improvement and seeking guidance is a strong trait that a lot of people never master.

This is a very strong piece of writing that shows you have a gift for expressing your thoughts on paper. Well done.

Moto kamlin, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None.

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Joseph
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Review of Today's Child  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Kenzie I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Today's Child" 
by Kenzie

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: Beautifully written poem. Well worded short stanzas that make their point well. I like the large colored fonts, this is easy to read plus it make this poem stand out.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This cyber age is full of mystery especially for some of us dinosaurs. We always tried to avoid chat rooms and social media groups, then suddenly we're told we're behind if we are not a member of this and that and got XXXX number of followers.

Well obviously this is a very strong poem, it has caused the philosopher to show up. Well done.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: There are no problems with the mechanics that this reader sees.

Kenzie, thank you for sharing this inspirational poem.
Write On!

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Review of The Journey  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi MJones, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "The Journey" 
by MJones

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A strong free verse poem, in a few words you have said a lot. Indeed it is about the journey not the destination.

I really like express it in 8, when I first heard of it I thought that was not enough lines now it seems to be just about right.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This Reader see's the portrait of a soul on life's pathway.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see.

MJones, thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jackiesmuse, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Rachel Howard Live WC 296"  by Jackiesmuse

Clarity:The title works well for this apocalyptic drama.

Writing style:Modern fantasy drama.

My favorite line:---I snorted. I’m admitting live, on the air, that I snort when I’m scared---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good idea for this story. I like it.

A well written strong storyline in a few words, you got your point across good.

A very realistic story. I can picture this happening on several of the news show's. Well written with strong characters that are very realistic.I Feel that most people will be able to relate to this story.

Nicely structured this makes it easy for the reader.

I like the way you added humor to this otherwise serious story, well done.


Jackiesmuse, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review of Hide and go seek  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ritzy Vampi, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Hide and go seek"  by Ritzy Vampi

Clarity: Good title for this tale.

Writing style:Adventure drama.

My favorite line:--- She explained how to bark a squirrel off a tree limb with only a slingshot and then confessed she hadn’t been able to kill more than one---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written story with a good structure. This makes it easy for the reader while inviting for a browser.

Good characters with good dialog. A good narrative.

Great descriptions that help the reader visualize the setting.

A sudden ending that leaves the reader wanting to know more.

Ritzy Vampi, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider working on the ending to give the reader closure or a hint to another chapter.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Max Griffin, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"A Twist in Time--Chapter 1"  by Max Griffin

Clarity:Great title for this time travel tale.

Writing style:Sci-fi drama.

My favorite line:--- The more important question is when we are.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written sci-fi mystery adventure. This story is written with a very realistic tone that it carries through out.

Good characters with realistic dialog. Great descriptions that take the reader into the story right beside Justin.

A good job with the action, this keeps the reader toward the edge of his seat.

The story holds a realistic flow. A good ending that leaves the reader wanting to turn the page.

Max, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sumojo, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Be careful what you wish for. "  by Sumjo

Clarity:A good title for this story.

Writing style: Pet relationship drama.

My favorite line:---“But...” He tried to explain how much it would mean to him, but Fiona shook her head.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written biographical style story about Harry finally getting a dog.

A good narrative with a strong likable character. This helps draw the reader into the story.

Good descriptions that take the reader into the story.

A good ending that highlights the title.

Sumojo, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sinbad, I came across this story while reviewing for the superpowers May raid.
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My impressions of:"Transformation of Divine Dragon"  by Sinbad

Clarity:A good title that describes the content of the story well.

Writing style: Mythological folktale drama.

My favorite line:---I shall transcend the estate of ordinary fish and achieve a place among the order of sacred dragons.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written entertaining tale. Nicely structured story that is easy for the reader. A good story-line.



Sinbad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review of First drum set  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi again Kare Enga, I came across this story while reviewing for the superpower May raid.
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My impressions of:"First drum set"  by Kare Enga in Montana

Clarity:Nice title for this poem.

Writing style:Children poetry.

My favorite line:

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written and very descriptive poem.
The way you structured this poem brings out the point. Well done.

Kare Enga in Montana, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi dogpack:saving4 premium:DWG, I came across this story while reviewing for the superpower May raid.
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My impressions of:"We three: God, Bella, and Me"  by dogpack:saving4 premium:DWG

Clarity:A good title for this poem.

Writing style: Pet spiritual poetry.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A random rhyming pattern aids to this poem's deep flow. They say Dogs are man's best friend, suppose that is pretty much true. I know my dog sure acts like my best friend.

A well worded poem with a nice structure.

dogpack:saving4 premium:DWG, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review of Haunting Memories  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi again Dave, I came across this story while reviewing for the superpower May raid.
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My impressions of:"Haunting Memories"  by Dave

Clarity:A good title for this work.

Writing style: Family relationship poetry

My favorite line:--- After he passed, your faith surpassed
the darkness trying to invade
your spirit world, as life unfurled
beyond the ever-growing shade
in loving memories. ---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: tThis is a strong deep poem, the emotions can be felt. Good random rhyming pattern adds to the unique flow.

A portrait of one in mourning is painted for this reader



Dave, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mary Ann, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Come With Me Beneath The Sea."  by Mary Ann MCPhedran

Clarity: A good title for this poem.

Writing style: Nature poetry

My favorite line:--- No fishing hook can reel them in.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A lovely poem with a unique rhyming pattern that gives this poem a nice flow. A land of beauty beneath the sea, a nice image.

Mary Ann MCPhedran, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Big Bad Wolf is Hopping, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Planet Animalus Info and Book Sums"  by Big Bad Wolf is Hopping

Clarity: Interesting title.

Writing style:Animal descriptions.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A nice introduction piece to describe the animals in your book.

-No one wants the wild beast after them.- This seems like very good advice.

Big Bad Wolf is Hopping, thank you for sharing this unique work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi The Grum of Grums, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Big Boys Don't Cry"  by The Grum of Grums

Clarity:A good title that describes the contents of this story well.

Writing style:Pet drama.

My favorite line:--- Perhaps that’s ‘cos she’s a girl and girls are allowed to cry---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Indeed it is sad to loose a pet. With their shorter life span it prepares us for loss in our lifetime.

A nicely written story for this touchy subject. Nicely worded with good spacing between lines.



The Grum of Grums, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider breaking the story down into shorter paragraphs with a blank space between paragraphs to make it appear more inviting for a potential reader. As is, it appears to be 1 long paragraph.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Nixie, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Dr. Zhivago and the Cheesecake"  by Nixie

Clarity: A great title for this entertaining tale.

Writing style:Family childrens drama.

My favorite line:--- A fourteen-year-old trying to be invisible in the chaos of Dad's fortieth birthday celebration preparations.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written story with strong characters. A good job with the dialog. A good easy to read structure.

Nixie, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maryann, I came across this story while reviewing for the superpower May raid.
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My impressions of:"The Majestic Animals"  by Maryann

Clarity:A great title for this entertaining poem.

Writing style:Animal poetry.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A beautifully written and structured poem about animals. Nicely done.

Peacocks are indeed beautiful birds. My aunt used to raise them so I had several experiences with them. A word of advice do not grab one by the feet when it's in its roost, they are some big powerful birds.

Maryann, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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