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Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Seamus’ Leprechaun"  by Words Whirling 'Round

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? Fantasy folklore drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Folklore, Young Adult, Comedy

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening however it could be stronger to grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nice structure, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Words Whirling 'Round, thanks for sharing this entertaining story, this reader has enjoyed it.

Well written story with a strong character. I like Seamus.

Good dialog with an Irish accent.

Good descriptions that help the reader visualize the story.

A nice folklore style narrative.

If I had to make a suggestion:Consider a stronger opening.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Sam Adams and the leprechauns"  by JCosmos

Does the title describe the story? A great title for this story.

What is the style? Fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Travel, Contest Entry

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening. It could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nice structure, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:JCosmos, thank you for sharing this entrtaining short story, I have enjoyed reading it.

Well written short story with a bit of humer.

Nice twist for the ending. Well done.

If I had to make a suggestion:A stronger opening line.

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Review of McCarthy Forever!  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

My impressions of: "McCarthy Forever!"  by Kare Enga in Udon Thani

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Family personal drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Family, Dark, Death

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening, however it could grab my attention better.

Is the structure good for the Reader? Structured nicely making it easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:
well written and entertaining story.

A nice job using the footnotes.

What a day to be Irish.

Kare Enga in Udon Thani ,Thank you for sharing this unique story it is a good read.

If I had to make a suggestion:.

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Review of Room 314  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

My impressions of: "Room 314"  by Tori Purchase

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Mystery horror drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening, however it could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nicely structured, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Tori, Thank you for sharing this mystery story, it is a good read.

Well written and structured story.

Good descriptions making the story a bit emotional for the reader.

If I had to make a suggestion: Consider a bit more action and maybe just a little dialogue.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

My impressions of: "Chapter 005: Heal Thy Own Wounds"  by Troyizen

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Mythological fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure: By listing all 3 genres your story will be available and read by more people.

Does the opening line grab my attention?The opening does grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?A good structure, looks professional and easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Troyizen, thanks for sharing this entertaining tale. It is a joy to read.

Great descriptions, helping the reader visualize the setting and characters.

Strong characters with good dialog. This helps the reader keep up and stay into the story.

A good flow, this helps readers get into the story-line.

A good writing style that I think most readers will relate to.

If I had to make a suggestion: Consider a little mystery at the ending to make the reader want to read the next chapter.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Chapter 008: The Crow Learns to Count"  by Troyizen

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? mythological fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure: By listing 3 genres your work will be found by more browsers that are looking for stories in that genre.

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that draws my attention fair.

Is the structure good for the Reader? Nicely structured making it very easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Troyizen hi, I came across this interesting tale while random reviewing. Thank you for sharing it it is a good read .

A bird taken a census count seems like a good idea .

Well written and well told making this a entertaining story .

Strong likable characters with good dialogue . This helps the reader to relate to the story .

Good narrative and well described helping the Reader to picture the scene .

A good ending, it could haven't been more a cliffhanger to make the reader want to turn the page.

If I had to make a suggestion: Consider a stronger opening and ending with a bit of a cliffhanger.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

My impressions of: "Chapter 012: Teachings of Thresh"  by Troyizen

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story fairly.

What is the style? fantasy friendship drama

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening that does grab my attention .

Is the structure good for the Reader?A great structure for this story very easy to read for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: Troyizen, I came across this story while random reviewing . Thank you for sharing it. This is very entertaining and well written .

Strong characters with the great dialogue . This helps the reader to get into this story .

A nice professional structure that makes it very easy to read . This story maintains a consistent good flow.

Very good descriptions that help the reader to visualize the setting.

Well done, this is an awesome story.

If I had to make a suggestion:None.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review of 15th March  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "15th March"  by Ameliorating

Does the title describe the story? Good title, more of a diary title.

What is the style? Diary entry style.

Are there 3 genre listings? Experience, Adult, Other

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening however it could better draw my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader? For my read the structure seems a bit out of whack.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Ameliorating A, thank you for sharing this unique work. I came across this while random reviewing. I have enjoyed it.

Well worded and told, does read more like a diary entry but that's OK.

I agree with you sometimes it is hard to figure out what is right.

If I had to make a suggestion: Perhaps double spacing format would help, the structure format is showing up wrong on my computer. The punctuation for periods seems to be in the wrong places not at the end of the sentence like usual.

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Review of FIRE & LIGHT  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "FIRE & LIGHT"  by Mayon57

Does the title describe the story? A nice title for this story.

What is the style? Sci-fi adventure drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Sci-fi, Horror/Scary, Other

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does catch my attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?A good structure that makes it easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Hey Mayo57, I came across this story while random reviewing. An Awesome story. I bet this took a while. I like the reference to Star Trek.

Well-written and told, holding the readers attention fair.

Great descriptions that make it easy to picture the scene. This holds the readers attention good.

This story maintains a realistic tone. This helps readers relate to the story.

Good dialog with plenty of action. A lot of sci-fi science for this reader to keep up with.

Mayon57 thank you for sharing this entertaining sci-fi adventure. This reader has enjoyed it.
Awesome Work!


If I had to make a suggestion:Consider breaking down into chapters, A good job with the dialog, some could be edited to flow better.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Little Girls in Parks"  by Winchester Jones

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? A realistic drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Contest Entry, Other: By listing all three genres your work will be found by more readers.

Does the opening line grab my attention? The opening could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nicely structured. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: Hey Winchester, I like this story, well done. Especially considering it was done in 24 hours.

Well-written story with good characters and descriptions. Good dialog with a nice flow.

I like the twist at the end.

Thank you for sharing this entertaining story.

If I had to make a suggestion:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

My impressions of the poem:"I Never liked Wednesdays"  by p.b.sandwixh

Clarity: A good title for this emotional poem.
Style: Romance/Love, Nature, Other

My 2 cents is only one opinion: p.b.sandwixh, I came across this lovely work while random reviewing. A well worded strong and emotional poem. Thank you for sharing it this Reader has enjoyed reading it.

It reads sort of like 2 separate poems the second one being "that baby is what you do for me. "

Well written giving it a nice flow all the way through.
Thank you.


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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)

My impressions of: "Are We Ever Getting Out Of Here"  By Phoenix

Does the title describe the story? A nice title for this story.

What is the style? Teen fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Adult, Entertainment, Environment

Does the opening line grab my attention?The opening could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Needs formatting and breaks. It is intimidating for a possible reader when there is no space between the lines and appears like a long paragraph.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: Phoenix, thanks for sharing this entertaining story I have enjoyed it.

Well-written story-line with good descriptions and good characters.

A unique idea for this story, I can see there is a lot of potential.



If I had to make a suggestion: Consider breaking down the structure into short paragraphs, and double spacing. This will make it more appealing to a reader plus easier to read.. A good proofread and edit to catch any mistakes, typo's and sentences that are too long and rambling.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review of Arthur's Return  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "Arthur's Return"  by JAEman02

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? Mythological folklore drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Mythology, Folklore

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nicely structured, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:A well-written story with good descriptions. This helps the reader to picture the setting.

Good characters with good dialog. This keeps the readers attention.

A good ending, leaving the reader wanting to turn the page.

JAEman02 thanks for sharing this entertaining work, this reader has enjoyed reading it.

If I had to make a suggestion:None

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Review of Jack  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

My impressions of the poem: "Jack"  by Wanda Jane

Clarity: A good title for this poem.
Style: Poetry, ode

My 2 cents is only one opinion: Hi Wanda Jane I came across this lovely poem while random reviewing. Thank you for sharing it. I enjoyed reading it you have an artistic voice.

Wow the rhyming pattern is implausible in this beautifully worded ode to your Grandpa Jack.

The words really flow together well. I feel sure your grandpa would be extremely proud.


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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of the poem:"Whispers in the Rat Race"  by Rootcreater

Clarity: A good title for this poem.
Style: Emotional free verse poetry.

My 2 cents is only one opinion:Rootcreater thank you for sharing this entertaining poem about the rat race. I've been in the rat race many times I agree with you I don't like it.

A nicely worded poem that carries a unique flow. I like the reference to the biblical Job and I have never thought about it but it does not inspire you, except to have strong faith.

The rat race for me was rush hour city traffic.




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Review of Spilled  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of the poem:"Spilled"  by Grace Kween

Clarity: A nice title for this poem.
Style: Free verse poetry emotional.

My 2 cents is only one opinion: Hi Grace, thank you for sharing this emotional poem that has brought back some memories for me.

A short well worded very emotional poem. The kind of poem usually written when the author was a bit depressed. I have written many like this through the years, sometimes it seems like that depression can bring out the creative fluids.

This poem carries a really strong flow.



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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

My impressions of: "I Saw the Whole Thing WC 294"  by jackiemuse

Does the title describe the story? Title describes this story well.

What is the style? Crime drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Crime/Gangster, Relationship, Detective

Does the opening line grab my attention? The opening line grabs this readers attention well.

Is the structure good for the Reader?A great structure that makes it very easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:jackiemuse, this story is awesome in less than 300 words, well done.

This is a classic, worded perfect, grabbing this readers attention and holding it from start to finish.

A great structure, great dialog and a nice entertaining ending.

I really appreciate you sharing this story I enjoyed it and my head is spinning trying to figure out how you did it. Thank you.


If I had to make a suggestion:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "One among the two is gruesome"  by Ben

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this .

What is the style? Horror

Are there 3 genre listings? Horror/Scary, Thriller/Suspense, Mystery

Does the opening line grab my attention? A fairly good opening that does grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader? A fair structured story. A bit more line spacing would help the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:.Ben, thank you for sharing this story. This reader has enjoyed it.

A good storyline, sort of reads like it's a quick draft. A good idea for the storyline. Good characters being developed.

Good descriptions that helped the reader to picture the scene.

A lot of potential in this story-line.

If I had to make a suggestion: Consider more space between the lines to make it easier for the reader. A good proofread to edit any typos, mistakes or unwanted lines.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "What Jules had been doing?"  by Richard Allen

Does the title describe the story? The title describes this story well.

What is the style? fantasy mythology drama

Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Detective,

Does the opening line grab my attention? The opening grabs my attention good. Very nice with action.

Is the structure good for the Reader? Structured really well, very easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: Richard I think you have done a really good job with this one. A lot of action well constructed holding the readers attention well.

An action-packed adventure with well described characters sharing good dialog. Laid out nicely holding the readers attention well.

I like scene where the queen envisions the dragon.

A good ending leaving the reader wanting to turn the page.


If I had to make a suggestion: A good proofread and edit never hurts to catch any mistakes or types.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Writer's Cache I: Lesson 5"  by Charity Marie

Does the title describe the story? A good title fot this syory.

What is the style? journalist news drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Educational: By listing three genres your work will be easier for readers to find while browsing for that type of genre.

Does the opening line grab my attention? a good opening line but it could better grab this readers attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader? a very well structured and laid out work.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:A very well written work with good characters and dialogue.

Great descriptions, it is easy for the reader to picture the scene.

Strong characters that are easy for this reader to relate to.

I like the references to the Great Depression.

Thank you for sharing this entertaining work this reader has enjoyed it.



If I had to make a suggestion: no suggestions.

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Review of Who am I?  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

My impressions of: "Who am I?"  by Bruce.preast

Does the title describe the story? a great title for this poem.

What is the style? Free verse poetry.

Are there 3 genre listings? Teen, Emotional, Writing

Does the opening line grab my attention? a nice opening.

Is the structure good for the Reader? Well structured very easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Bruce, I really like this one I like the way you structured it.

A great idea for this unique work. You say a lot with only a few words. A deep emotional poem.

Bruce, thanks for sharing this work, it has brought back memories for me.

If I had to make a suggestion:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of the poem:"What do I say to you"  by Christopher Day

Clarity: a nice title for this work.
Style: spiritual poetry

My 2 cents is only one opinion:A well written spiritual poem.

Well worded poem. Kind of like a prayer.

I like the questions.

Christopher thanks for sharing this poem, it has got my mind to thinking.




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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
My impressions of:
"The Silver Saga, Book 1."  by Elliot

Does the title describe story? A good title for this adventure tale.

What style? Family fantasy drama.

Are there three genre listings? Fantasy, Family, Action/Adventure

My favorite line: --On her other side stood the man himself, Farron Whispers, a devilish grin spread on his face.--

This is only one opinion: Elliot, thanks for sharing this awesome story, this reader has enjoyed it.

A good opening that gets the readers attention from the start.

Well-written and well described adventure tale full of action. This helps to keep the readers attention and helps him to get into the story and visualize the scene.

I like that you used birds like vultures, the owl and the Hawk as characters, even though they did turn out to be mutants. A very creative idea.

Strong likable characters with good dialog. This helps to keep the readers attention.

If I had to make the suggestion: Consider breaking down the long paragraphs into several shorter ones. This will look less intimidating to the reader. Consider line spacing also, this will make it easier for the reader. Consider a blank line between the longer paragraphs (at least) this will make it easier for the reader. Consider a cliff hanger ending or a conclusion.

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Review of The Soup  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
My impressions of: "The Soup"  by W.D. Wilcox

Does the title describe story? a good title for this story .

What style? horror

Are there three genre listings? Horror/Scary, Other: By listing three genre's your story will be able to be found by more readers searching for that for that type genre.


This is only one opinion: This is an awesome story especially considering only 200 words.
A very well written and well structured story with a good twist for the end.

Thank you for sharing this story it is a pleasure to read it.

If I had to make the suggestion: None

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Review of Magic  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
My impressions of: "Magic"  by Just Jay

Clarity: The title is great for this awesome short story.

Style:Fantasy story.

Genera listing: Fantasy, Action/Adventure, Contest Entry

My favorite line:--"Yer makin' me nervous," said her friend, eyes darting around the room, all the while ducking his head.--

My 2 cents is only One opinion: This is an awesome story written with only a few words.
Perfect for today's reader with their short attention span.

Thank you for sharing this work it is giving this reader some ideas.

Suggestions:None
Write on! Keep Writing! God bless you!
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