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Review of A World of My Own  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi LeJenD' I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "A World of My Own"  by LeJenD' Looking Up

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A deep and emotional work worded well and written nicely in an easy to read structure. A unique rhyming scheme with the end results being a nice flow for this poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The words of this poem carry a unique rhythm or tone. Very catchy.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Except for the capitalization of IS in the fourth line I see no problems with the grammar, spelling or mechanics of this work.


LeJenD', thank you for sharing this strong and unique poem, it is a joy to read.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Grass, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "My beautiful survivor"  by Grass

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Grass, this is a nicely written strong and emotional love poem.
Well worded work with a very nice structure that makes it easy for the Reader .

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This unique poem carries a nice realistic sounding flow

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

Hi Joy I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Love Among the Ruins"  by Joy

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Paradelle seems to be a unique
and somewhat difficult style. Well written poem, especially considering paradelle style.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This poem shows that obviously you have a very
artistic voice to be experimenting in this way.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems with the mechanics or grammar.

Joy, thank you for sharing this unique style work, I am thinking about trying it myself.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "The Amazing Low-Cost Laser Box Cutter"  by Graywriter

Does the title describe the story? A great title for this entertaining story.

What is the style? sci-fi marketing drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Sci-fi, Crime/Gangster, Thriller/Suspense

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening line for this work.

Is the structure good for the reader? very well structured story. A bit more lines spacing would help this reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Greywriter, this is a great story I hope you won the writers cramp contest. Thank you for sharing this work it was a joy to read, very entertaining .

Very well written. Are you a marketing expert? It looks like you had input from one. It sure reads like very accurate marketing information on products like we read every day on Amazon and such.

A good touch with the National Enquirer and the other news agencies. They all read very realistic like everyday news.

Well done this is a great article. It goes with the times because these days it probably could be true because you can buy anything online cheap.


If I had to make a suggestion: Well structured, consider experimenting with a bit more linespacing to help the Readers with week eyes.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Gervic, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Touch Me Once More"  by Gervic

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A unique rhyming scheme with the 1st 2 stanzas and none for the last one. This works well for this poem and gives it a nice flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:A love poem in dream form.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Structure looks good I can see no problem with the grammar or mechanics .

Gevic, thanks for sharing this delightful love poem, it is a good read. I sure did enjoy it.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "1. Phone Calls in the Dark"  by aracrae

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Suspense drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Thriller/Suspense, LGBTQ+

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does get my attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?Well structured. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:aracrae, thanks for sharing this entertaining adventure it has been a joy to read.

A original style for this well-written realistic tale. This gives the story a good flow that slowly draws the reader in.

Good characters that come to life through descriptions that keep them real. This helps the reader to relate with the story-line.

Nicely written dialog that help the characters seem believable. Most readers will be able to relate because the characters seem like everyday people, could be your neighbors. This helps keep the Readers attention throughout the story.

A good touch with an unexpected twist at the end that leave the reader wanting to know more.



If I had to make a suggestion:A good proof read and edit never hurts.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review of Heaven And Hell  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi dogpack:saving 4 premium:DWG! After reading "Heaven And Hell" , I offer you these comments:


My impressions of: "Heaven And Hell"  by dogpack:saving 4 premium:DWG


Clarity, does the title describe this story?:A good title for this inspirational story .

Style: personal spiritual view.

Genres, are 3 listed? Inspirational, Educational, Personal

My two cents: dogpack, thank you for sharing this well written and informative testament. I have enjoyed reading it and in agreement with pretty much everything you said.

My favorite line:---God does not want puppets therefore we have bee given the gift of free will.---

A strong inspirational work. Well chosen words that give this work a powerful flow.




Structured easy for the reader? a well constructed article however a little more line spacing would help us readers with weak eyes.


Any suggestions?Consider a stronger opening to better ground the readers attention . Perhaps double spacing with the extra line between some of the longer paragraphs would make it easier to read and less intimidating for a potential reader or browser.

Write on!
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Ravi ! After reading "The curse became a blessing" , I offer you these comments:


My impressions of: "The curse became a blessing"  by Ravi Ranjan Goswami


Clarity, does the title describe this story?:A good title for this tale.

Style: Mythological fantasy drama.

Genres, are 3 listed?Drama, Folklore, Cultural

My impressions:: Well written tale with good characters and descriptions. A curse backfires and makes the prince young forever.

Ravi thanks for sharing this entertaining folktale it is a good read.


Structured easy for the reader? More line-spacing and a blank between paragraphs would make it easier to read for us older weak eyed ones.


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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "LOST SPIRIT OR ANTIE'S BEDTIME TALES III"  by CBH

Does the title describe the story? A good title however does not really describe this chapter.

What is the style? History, folklore.

Are there 3 genre listings? Folklore, Supernatural, History

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening. Could be stronger to grab the readers attention.

Is the structure good for the reader? A nicely laid out story. It would be easier and less intimidating for the reader if it had line spacing.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:CBH thank you for sharing this informative story. I have enjoyed hearing some history from a different country therefore all new for me.

A well written story, very informative on some Moroccan history.

In school most of us learn mostly history from our country and know little about the rest of the world's history, therefore this is all new to me and I really enjoyed it.

Well-worded story, I especially like the way that you did the ending.

If I had to make a suggestion:Consider line spacing or even double spacing to make it easier on us older readers, who's eyes are getting weaker. Perhaps break the long paragraphs down into shorter ones this looks less intimidating to a browser or potential reader.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)


Hi Carly! After reading "Freedom on Route 23" , I offer you these comments:

My impressions of: "Freedom on Route 23"  by Carly


Clarity, does the title describe this story?:A good title for this story.

Style: Personal travel drama.

Genres, are 3 listed? Travel, Contest, Other

Plot: An adventure for a young couple on route 23 from upper Michigan to Florida.

This entertainment story reads as a true story, I just wonder if it is since it was also a contest entry.

Well written and very good use of the prompt words.
I hope you won the contest.

Characters:Rye and Carly.

Structured easy for the reader? A good structured story that is easy for the reader.


Any suggestions?None.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "The Toilet Paper- Paper"  by Bunny Sox

Does the title describe the story? Great title for this informative article.

What is the style? Informative article.

Are there 3 genre listings? Cultural, Folklore, Technology

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening however it could be stronger to better grab the reader's attention.

Is the structure good for the reader? Nicely constructed article.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Bunny Sox, thank you for sharing this informative article that I ran across while random reviewing. It is a good read.

Today most people do not realize that toilet paper itself has not been around that long at all.

This article is well written and very informative.

A good idea for this article most people enjoy knowing the history of a product.

If I had to make a suggestion: Consider a stronger opponent to grab the readers attention quick. Although the structure is good a bit more line spacing would not hurt to make it easier and less intimidating for the reader.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "QUINTANILLA \PEREZSELENA/UNA"  by Captbike

Does the title describe the story? A good title that somewhat describes the contents of the story.

What is the style? biographical true story.

Are there 3 genre listings? Other, Biographical, Activity

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening however could be stronger to grab the reader's attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?A good structure. More linespacing would make it a bit easier for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Nicely written and very informative article.

I have heard of the death that ended her career. This is the first account of the aerobics story that I have heard.

Captbike, thank you for this informative article. I enjoyed this knowledge.

If I had to make a suggestion:Consider a stronger opening to better grab the readers attention. A bit of line-spacing would make it easier and more appealing to a reader.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
My impressions of:"The White House Against Minorities"  by Anna Mare Carison.

Hi Anna I came across this article while random reviewing. I'm gonna say I'm pretty much in complete agreement with everything you said.

Politics indeed is a sore subject that personally I try to just stay away from because everybody has their own view and there's no changing it that I can do. Well that's my mind set, it might be wrong but indeed it is a sore subject.

It seems that you can take any good person with good intentions elect them to office and in no time flat there a politician and forget all that brought them to office.

In this well written article you hit many good points that are absolutely true.

Anna, thank you for Sharing this strong article it has got my mind to spinning.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Fantasy World Build To Be Named"  by diademedaid

Does the title describe the story? This title works for this unique Sci-fi adventure tale.

What is the style? Sci-fi fanfictiod outline.

Are there 3 genre listings? Fanfiction, Folklore, Sci-fi

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening for this work.

Is the structure good for the reader?Nice structure, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:diademedaid, thank you for sharing this unique sci-fi outline. It has given me ideas. :)

A great job for this detailed outline, I feel sure you will find it most useful for probably a series of chapters and stories.

I really like the idea of "Electricity Possession".

A well thought out and written outline that I'm sure will result in an epic adventure.

KEEP WRITING.


If I had to make a suggestion:None

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Review of Father  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Wanda Jayne I came across this deep emotion filled poem while random reviewing.
Thank you for sharing this strong work of art. I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Father"  by Wanda Jayne.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A great job! This realistic poem express's your words
with a true tone. A great flow. Beautiful rhyming scheme.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:With an artistic voice your words paint a clear picture for this reader.

I feel that the most Readers will be able to relate well to this poem as I have.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I could find no problems with the mechanics grammar or spelling. Well done.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Hi JCosmos I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Down in the Dirt poetry"  by JCosmos

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Great work, this collection of poetry is awesome.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: my name , it is nobody .... I like this poem the best I think.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: naturally no problems at all with the mechanics . JCosmos, thank you for sharing this strong work of poetry this Reader has thoroughly enjoyed it .

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

Hi elisabeth I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "a death long since forgotten"  by elisabeth

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A short para normal story about a dark mysterious place, a nursery in an abandoned old farmhouse.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: Well described, this story paints a picture for me of a baby bed in a haunted room filled with evil spirits. In a few words this short story says a whole lot.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Well done, this unique story sets its own boundaries.

Elisibeth thank you for sharing this powerful story. It has got my head to spinning.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Chapter 037: Monsters and Maidens"  by Troyizem

Does the title describe the story?

What is the style? Mythological fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure: By listing all three genres your work will be easier to find by more browsers that are browsing for this type genre.

Does the opening line grab my attention?The opening lines do grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?A nicely structured tale. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Troyizem, thanks for sharing this fantastic tale. I have enjoyed reading it.

Good strong characters sharing good realistic dialog, this keeps the characters believable and likeable. This helps keeps this reader's attention.

Well described details that make it easier for this reader to see the scenes and get into the story-line.

A unique and entertaining adventure with plenty of action that keep's this reader's interest.

" You just stuck it on your head without wondering what it did?" this type of dialog keeps the story tone very realistic, keeping the readers attention and drawing him more into the story. A great job.

A good ending leaving just enough mystery to make the reader want to know more.

If I had to make a suggestion:This is a great story. Just for the sake of making a suggestion a good proofread and edit never hurts.

Kudos! A great job! Well done Troyizem.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "Through the Forest Through the Trees"  by Gman

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this work.

What is the style? personal philoposhy

Are there 3 genre listings? Spiritual, Self Help, Adult

Does the opening line grab my attention?The opening line does get my attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?The structure would be easier for the reader if it was double spaced and maybe a extra line at the end long paragraphs.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Gman, thanks for sharing this deep philosophy I have found it a joy to read.

In life we all get fed up at different times, I feel that most people can relate to your words I know I can.

This is a strong and deep work. Well laid out and well worded.



If I had to make a suggestion:Consider line spacing and perhaps double space, this will make it easier for the reader.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Hi St. Francis II, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Rapping of the drum"  by St. Franciss II

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Da dum da dum da dum- A unique tone for this poem. A random rhyming pattern that works well for this poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:Well laid out and worded stanzas slowly leading to the last two, which caught this reader a bit unprepared. I can picture a dark quite town.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:This poem
carries an original flow.

St. Francis II, thanks for sharing this deep poem, I have enjoyed reading it.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review of Big Yellow Moon  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Big Yellow Moon"  by Winchester Jones

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Personal drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Contest Entry: Even though a contest entry this story would be available for more browsers if all 3 genres are used.

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening, however it could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?Well structured. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Winchester thanks for sharing this unique story. It is a good read.

Well-written and worded with good descriptions that make it easy to picture the scene.

A nice ending.

If I had to make a suggestion:Consider a stronger opening. To catch the readers attention from the start.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review of The Job  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "The Job"  by Abby Gayle

Does the title describe the story? A good title.

What is the style? Fantasy sci- fi adventure drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Business, Career

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does get my attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?A nicely structured story, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Abby Gayle, thanks for sharing this unique story, I have enjoyed reading it.

A good idea for this original and unique style sci- fi drama.

Well-written story with good descriptions. This helps the reader picture the scenes.

Strong character that is very likable. Good dialog well worded and placed. This helps the reader to get into the story better.

This story has a good steady flow.

A bit of mystery at the end that leaves this reader wondering.




If I had to make a suggestion:None

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review of Vernal Equinox  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi m.alice I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Vernal Equinox"  by m.alice

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well-written free verse poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:Strong emotional poem. We learn by trial and error this poem describes a learning experience.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Nicely structured and worded poem.

m.alice, thanks for sharing this well worded poem, I have enjoyed reading it.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review of The Last Act  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)

My impressions of: "The Last Act"  by brom21

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Mythological fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Environment, Emotional

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening. Could be stronger to grab attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Great job with the structure and dialogue this makes it very easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: brom21, thanks for sharing this entertaining tale. I have enjoyed reading it.

Well-written tale with great descriptions and detail. This helps the reader to get into the story better.

Strong characters speaking with realistic dialogue for each one.

Well described action keeps this story moving with a good pace while holding the readers attention.

This is a strong story with a great flow that held this readers attention great.


If I had to make a suggestion: Consider a stronger opening line to catch the reader's attention faster.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

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Review of Timber  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
My impressions of the poem:"Timber"  by Kevster

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well-written poem with a nice rhyming pattern.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: Good descriptions I can picture Timber.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Nicely structured poem with a nice flow.

Kester, thank you for Sharing this unique poem, this reader has enjoyed it .

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