My favorite line:--- They already know it all. ---
Overall impressions: A well written and informative article.
A good idea for this story, personally I feel that these days college is overrated and all about tuition.
This is a well written and well structured article, easy for the reader.
Kathleen, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Clarity:A good title, however it could better describe this story.
Writing style:Short story.
Overall impressions: This looks like it could be the good start of a story or a rough draft.
These two paragraphs seem to be well written. I'm bad for jotting down ideas and outlines figuring to look and finish at another time. This appears sort of like that to me.
Bob County, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: Take another look at it, a good proofread and edit never hurts.
Overall impressions:Well written diary entry style. College is only an extention of high school. In these times it is overrated and all about getting that tuition money. When the economy slows down they are among the few that still show profit.
friska kida, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Well written poem in a challenging style. Pantoum with reaping lines, begins and ends with the same line. I bet that could get tedious while writing.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: The portrait of Malachi (the poet) is painted for this reader.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems.
Jaeff, thank you for sharing this beautiful poem, a joy to read. Write On!
Clarity:A good title, however it does't describe the contents of this story clear.
Writing style: Fantasy religious political drama.
Overall impressions: A nice use of present day people and icons in the story. The story is laid out similar to poetry with 8-9 line stanzas.
Perhaps a screenplay. Is that what this is?
This story seems to jump around a lot and this is a bit hard to keep up with. Some great writing and the unique idea.
This story definitely makes an interested reader work to try and see if you miss something.
I Like this story, can see great potential here.
Bob County, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: Consider some line spacing and bigger font to make it easier to read. Take another look a good proofread and some editing and you have a masterpiece.
Clarity:A great title for this educational article.
Writing style:Educational opinion.
Overall impressions: Great job on this informative well structured historic article.
You're preaching to the choir brother, don't get me started.
Those pandemic times seem so long ago when in reality it was yesterday. Now it seems the world is trying to make up for lost time. Where that leads us is the question I would like the answer to.
Knowledge is crucial: well said, so true.
This is the most informative article about the pandemic that I have seen. It is amazing that humans become so vulnerable that they will believe almost anything. In a panic they can even be herded like wild animals. What history will uncover about the pandemic conspiracy will be a story that I would love to read.
I like ---I will list *5 important things* that we know now that we didn’t know in February 2020 for your understanding.---
Interesting the new things learned after 6 months of the pandemic.
Sinbad, thank you for sharing this strong work that has taken me back in time. :) It has been a joy to read it.
Hi again Eveandthetree, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.
My impressions of the poem: "Flood" by Eveandthetree
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful love poem that seems to turn to hate. A good rhyming pattern. There is a thin line between love and hate because the emotion is so strong.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:Your artistic voice paints a picture of a worn out relationship that needs to be left behind, looking toward a better future.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems.
Eveandthe tree, thank you for sharing this poem, it is a good read.
Write On!
Overall impressions: Well written with a great narrative voice.
Great descriptions that helps the reader to get into the story.
A bit of mystery in the story as to whether Sam was and animal trapped in a human body or there was some kind of spell on the coat. I had to reread the story and still am not sure.
Shika/Noah, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.
Suggestions: Consider a little more detail to solve the mysteries that this reader found.
Hi Kristi, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.
My impressions of the poem: "Bitter Tears" by Kristi
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Kristi, thank you for sharing this poem,
and teaching me about constanza. I like new challenges and gonna have to try this.
Well written, a good job with the rhyming pattern, as well as the overall poem.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: Your artistic voice can be heard in this beautiful yet sad poem.
I know it had to be challenging.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can see with the grammar spelling or mechanics.
Does the title describe the story? The title some-what describes this story.
What is the style? Spiritual fantasy drama.
Are there 3 genre listings? Dark, Fantasy, Religious
Does the opening line grab my attention?The opening line could better grab my attention.
Is the structure good for the reader?A nice structure, however it would be better for the reader with line-spacing and maybe breaks between longer paragraphs.
My two cents worth is only one opinion:
Stam Kourz, thank you for sharing this powerful story. I have enjoyed reading it.
Well written story with good descriptions that help the reader to picture the scene.
Strong characters with good dialog. This helps to draw the reader into the story.
A good story-line and narrative.
If I had to make a suggestion:Consider a stronger opening line to grab the readers attention. Line-spacing and breaks would make the story less intimidating for a reader or browser.
Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Nicely written poem in a unique style with repeating lines come together in this poem for a great unique flow.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:--- pretending just a little bit--- just enough to get the kick of it.---
These catchy lines work well and add to this poems tone.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: A great job no problems at all that I see.
Bex. thank you for sharing your work, it is a joy to read.
Write On!
{{c:black}My impressions of:"Mama Bear" by Temperance Stone
Clarity: The title works well for this delightful story.
Style:Personal experience drama.
Genera listing: Animal: by listing all three genres your work will be able to be found by readers looking for that genre. Giving your story more views.
My 2 cents is only One opinion:A well written and well described nature tale.
I like how you describe the mama bears thoughts.
Well-worded and told story with a calm easy going tone.
Do you really see this bear every Sunday?
Bears in the woods usually do not pay much attention to a humans, at least the few times that I have seen one in the mountains.
Temperance Stone, thank you for sharing this delightful story. It has brought back memories for me I have enjoyed reading it.
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