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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Antony, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"How to Make Money with Carbon Offsets"  by Antony

Clarity: A good title that describes this article well.

Writing style:How to article, educational.

Are all 3 genres listed?No. If you use all 3 genres for this item it will be available to more readers that are looking for this type genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure and format, however it would be easier for the reader with a bit more spacings between paragraph's.



My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written article packed with good information on this subject.

Antony, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider skipping a line between paragraphs and maybe two at new subjects that are in bold. This will make it more appealing to browsers.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Patrickcmk, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Chap2 : Real and Unreal Mental Illness A"  by Patrickcmk

Clarity:A good title for this chapter.

Writing style:Fantasy mystery drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes. By listing 3 genres your work will be available to more readers that are looking for this genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nicely structured and formatted story. This makes it easier for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog seems to be specific to its speaker.

My favorite line:---
"Cousin, don't be afraid, just treat it as if you are acting in a play and come here for a psychological examination."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written, entertaining and easy to read story. This story gets the readers attention from the start then holds it good with bits of mystery throughout the story.

I like that one of the characters is referred to as cousin.
A good job with the ending leaving the reader wanting to turn the page.

Patrickcmk, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good proofread and edit to catch any mistakes you may have overlooked is always a good idea.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Ryyth, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"A box changed my fate "  by Ryyth

Clarity: The title seems to need work to better describe the content of this story.

Writing style: Teen fantasy drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Good job listing 3 genres.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? The structure and format in the second half after ChatGPT corrections is much better.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog reads better also in the second-half.

My favorite line:---Ryuk was shocked. "Are you a girl or a cat?---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good idea for this story. ChatGPT certainly did do a good job correcting spelling, grammar and format.

In these modern times ChatGPT is a great tool yet it is a bit scary how some people start to depend on it. A bit scary also how smart the darn thing has become. No doubt a helpful tool used in the correct way.

Today's modern marketing works hard two make people dependent on their products then after time the product becomes updated and more expensive to keep using. Unfortunately leaving many that were dependent on it at a loss.

It appears that you've done a good job of using the chat box to rewrite your rough draft. Personally this reader would worry that this practice might make one get lazy and become too dependent on it and forget the good habits that we were taught. On the flip side, seems like it could save a lot of time.

Ryyth, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Delete the rough draft at the beginning of the work.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Weirdone-Back in the games, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Planning a Party to Please the Lord"  by Weirdone-Back in the games

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded entertaining poem with a nice rhyming pattern that contributes to the realistic flow and tone that this poem carries.

I like the very realistic startup of this work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The portrait for this reader: I see a young child writing invitations to his upcoming party.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics, that this reader can find.

Weirdone-Back in the games, thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

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Review of The Apple  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jacky, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"The Apple"  by Jacky

Clarity:A nice title for this lovely tale.

Writing style:Flash fiction contest entry.

Are all 3 genres listed?By listing three genres to this work it will be available available to more readers and browsers that are looking for this type genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? Very nicely structured with a good format that is easy for the reader.


My favorite lines:---Growing up was certainly not as much fun at eight as it was at four. Suddenly people were expecting things from him, actions that required thought and work.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A delightful entertaining story. I like the use of the apple and crabby Mr. Andrews. This helps with the realistic flow of this story.

Short but to the point which is exactly what today's modern reader likes.

Jacky, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Joseph
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Review of The bridge  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Life's Dreams, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "The bridge"  by Life's Dreams

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong emotion filled poem with a random rhyming pattern that adds to the powerful flow of this work.

Well written and structured, I think most people as I will be able to relate to the strong poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The image of a single member straying away from the direction that a large herd is leading toward. That is the portrait painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Well done. I see no problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics.

Life's Dreams, thank you for sharing your poem, a jot to read.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jackiesmuse, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"The Countdown WC: 297"  by Jackiesmuse

Clarity:A great title that describes tis story well.

Writing style:Family children drama.

My favorite line:--- He was always joking about having enough boys for a baseball team.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A nicely written as well as described short family story that most people should relate to because they've been through it too.

A typical scenario you can't make everybody happy at once there is always going to be somebody unhappy.

Jackiesmuse, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Have a great weekend.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Kenzie, I came across this story while random reviewing.
Kenzie, welcome to disAbility Writers Group. It's good to have you here. I feel you will enjoy it here as I have, a great atmosphere with friendly and helpful people.

My impressions of:"You Need Those Cookies WHEN?"  by Kenzie

Clarity:A great title for this story.

Writing style: Personal parental drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A great idea for this well written short story.
This strongly written story has brought back memories for me. Not in cooking but in science projects for the science fair Monday night and I'm told about it Sunday night. As with your cooking project I improvised and made due and succeeded though didn't win no prizes. It was definitely a learning experience and I feel that most parents have went through similar.

Kenzie, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Have a great weekend.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Tamo, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Uncertain Circumstances"  by Tamo

Clarity:Interesting title

Writing style:Folktale drama


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A interesting tale, with good descriptions that make it easy for the reader to picture the setting.

I'm not exactly sure how the title describes the story or what it's about.

Tamo, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider double spacing with a blank between paragraphs, this will make it easier and more appealing to readers. Consider shortening the long sentences and breaking down the long paragraphs into shorter ones. This makes it less intimidating for browsers or potential readers.
Quotation marks for spoken text is pretty standard.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi again MoonChilde, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Pop-Pop's Chocolate"  by MoonChilde

Clarity:A good title for this ritual story.

Writing style:Family rituals

My favorite line:--- However, anytime one of the kids would reach into the bowl my grandfather would say gruffly, “The dark chocolate is mine.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:This is great. Short straight to the point, just the way today's readers like things.

This well written piece has my has gotten my memory to working trying to remember all those small rituals that so easily get lost in time. A great idea for this story.

MoonChilde, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Have a great day. :)

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Use I Am, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: ""Whispers of Hope""  by Use I Am

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: in the quest for dreams, no one declines--
A strong well worded inspirational uplifting poem.
A great flow to this strong poem. I like that this poem is very positive with uplifting energy flowing.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the portrait of a great and helpful soul born and then rising with time.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics.

Use I Am, thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi CSCJR, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Making Space: Emptying the Upper Shelves"  by CSCJR

Clarity:Seems to be a good title for this tale.

Writing style: Personal drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Sounds kind of like that dream I had. Most every one has been through days when they felt the shelf was about to collapse. Those hard times are what makes us stronger. There is a way out and it sounds as if you are at the doorway.

A lot of good stuff here, just a bit of tidying up.
Some good parts for a future work.

CSJR, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Calm down. Breath. Make somebody smile. Smell the roses. As my daughters used to tell me chill LAX.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Thank You  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi again MoonChilde, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Thank You"  by MoonChilde

Clarity:A good title for this delightful tale.

Writing style: Romance experience drama.

My favorite line:--- However, after all was said and done, you left behind a tiny spark of me that I could build into a roaring inferno.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Well I hate that it took seven years, I'm glad you came out better.

We learn from our mistakes, then get stronger even though we never realize it until it's done. A great attitude you do have.

A well written and structured thank you letter to a jerk. Your positive attitude is refreshing.

MoonChilde, thank you for sharing this entertaining letter, it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Dr M C Gupta, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "TRYING TO WAKE UP THE AWAKE: a sonnet "  by Dr M C Gupta

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nicely written poem with a good rhyming pattern that gives this poem a unique flow. A cute, even humorous ending lines.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:This reader see's the portrait of a saint trying to wake up souls, some that do wake others that don't.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can see.

Dr M C Gupta, thank you for sharing your delightful poem. Write On!

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Review of Imagine Paradise  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi MikeDK, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Imagine Paradise"  by MikeDK

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nicely written free verse poem about imagined paradise. A unique idea for this lovely poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a soul sitting on a riverbank trying to imagine if paradise would be any better, is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:The mechanics of this poem look good.

MikeDS, thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Hi Ken, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "To Begin Again ..."  by HuntersMoon

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautifully formed 64 line poem. A great job with the rhyming pattern to give this poem a rhythmic flow.
Wouldn't it be awesome to be able to travel in time with the ability to fix mistakes that occurred.
A new Garden of Eden. What a sight that would be.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a craft lost in the dimensions of time, is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:All looks great.

Ken, thank you for sharing this awesome time traveling poem.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi again FixTheLizard, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Echoes of the Lost Expedition (ep3)"  by FixTheLizard,

Clarity: A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Adventure fantasy drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written adventure in the dark wilderness, I am glad they made it to the morning.
I like the reference to the eerie carved symbols in the trees.

This story gets the readers attention and leaves him wanting more.

FixTheLizard, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Keep writing.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi RabiaJ, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"The Environmental Escapade"  by RabiaJ

Clarity:A good title that describes the content of this article well.

Writing style: Environmental impact article.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A very informative article. Sad but true humans are the worst for the environment of good old mother earth.

A good well spaced and structured layout full of valuable information about the environment of our planet.

Even with the best intentions humans don't seem to really appreciate anything until it's to late. When its gone and we can't have it then we miss it.
I sincerely hope that we can somehow begin to repair some of the damage that we have caused for our planet.

We need more articles like this to make people more aware and begin to work toward repair for the environment.

Environmentalist is certainly a proud field to be in and I'm sure there will be plenty of demand for articles like this in the near future.

RabiaJ, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ayla, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"El chico del juego"  by Ayla

Clarity:A good title for this gaming tale.

Writing style:Relationship drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written story with strong character and an ere of mystery. This reader is a bit confused with the story repeating itself. I don't know if that is intentional it appears to be a draft of a work in progress, maybe.

Good descriptions that help the reader to visualize the setting.

Ayla,thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:A good proof read and edit never hurts.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Angel, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Love me or hate me"  by Angel

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:We are who we are, couldn't change that even if we wanted to.
This poem is short yet the point comes across strong. I like that each line starts the same. That helps the strong rhythmite flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see an individual standing strong like a statue.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see. I am who I am.

Angel, thank you for sharing your lovely poem.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Mary, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "To An Absent Friend"  by Mary Pavey

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful poem with a random rhyming pattern that adds to give its unique flow. I understand, strong words indeed.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a young person remembering an absent older family member is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can see.

Mary Pavey, thank you for sharing your poem.
So you are 120 years old? :)
Write On!

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Review of UTOPIA  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi InterGalacticDonkey, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "UTOPIA"  by InterGalacticDonkey

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Human nature can be both a blessing and a curse.
A deep poem about human nature and how easily swayed we can be.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a child growing up on life's path way is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Looks fine to this reader.

InterGalacticDonkey, thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi FixTheLizzard, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Echoes of the Lost Expedition"  by FixTheLizzard

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style: Action adventure drama.

My favorite line:--- Sitting around a crackling fire, they marveled at the vastness of the rainforest, its ancient trees whispering secrets in the breeze.----

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good idea for this adventure tale. Well written story with good characters and realistic dialogue. Good descriptions that help the reader to visualize the setting.

A good structured story that appears inviting and easy for the reader.

FixTheLizzard, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider making the opening lines stronger to get the readers attention from the start.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi StoryMaster, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Read This; It's FREE!"  by The StoryMaster

Clarity:A great title that describes the content of this article well.

Writing style:Personal opinion

My favorite line:---The desire to receive everything for free is understandable, but you must step back from that and realize it is a selfish desire.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: How can you renew your membership with gift points? I had heard that and I read it again in this article yet I can find no path to do it that way.

A very informative article about WDC and many of the free benefits. It is true that there are many web sites that get your attention with the word free yet when you go there you find that they are slowly reeling you in to ask for a fee. Nothing is free especially today. Well that is business, of course if everything was free it wouldn't work. Profit is the reward for work so naturally all businesses need to make profit to survive.

WDC is indeed a great website with numerous free activities. Also for free you get to associate with some of the top writers in the field. Not to count you get to associate with the top writers of the future.

StoryMaster, thank you for sharing this work for free, it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi use 'Iam', I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"the journey of hope"  by use 'I am'

Clarity: A nice title for this tale.

Writing style: Fantasy friendship drama.

My favorite line: ---Through the valleys of despair and the peaks of triumph, Aiden learned that the true measure of life lay not in the destination, but in the beauty of the journey itself.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well told journey of hope. Nicely structured story that is easy for the reader.

By listing all three genres your work will be available to more potential readers.

This story carries a familiar flow. Faith in the promise of tomorrow. Well said.


Use 'I am', thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider experimenting with adding a little action.

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