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Review of The magic  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of XXXXXXXXXXXXXX

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An older man tells a story of a magical time to his grandaugther. The story is full of dragons and wonder. We find in the end he was sharing about the wooodstock music festival.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The grandfather weaves a tale of spiritual magic and wonder. The grandaughter listens to it all with wonder.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Expanse  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Expanse

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A flash fiction story about a family exploring space.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The Hutchins are two experienced astronauts who are in a spacecraft with their unnamed baby girl who is destined to continue to explore space.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

More children? Mpre detail please. Use a larger font and break into paragraphs.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Peace as my mind's chatter becomes numb

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The poem is about making butter from cream.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Twelve verses. The first is four lines long and the remainder three lines. The first verse has no rhyming scheme but all the rest each line in the verse rhymes.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I liked the poem.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Before I Die  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Before I Die

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A person thinking ahead to his/her death and making some bold statements about what they want to make sure and say.

POETRY INFORMATION:

free verse with no rhyming pattern.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I am (a) loner.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of The Farmer's Pig  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of The Farmer's Pig

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A flash fiction story about a farm which seems to have an outstanding pig that goes beyond the norm to assist the farmer in the running of the farm. the pig even protects the farm from a pair of thieves

PLOT AND CHARACTER INFORMATION:

The pig is called Moo Shoo and is the protector for this farm. The pig is also too much to believe. This is almost a fairy tale.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

The play on the name for the pig to Moo Shoo Pork for the adage at the end is almost beyond reason.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)



Review of NON project defining I AM

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A listing of bible verses that show that the term I AM Jesus used to state he was also God.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Of course God and Jesus are in essence the same. Great list of references.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Perhaps more detail of the verses.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of A Best Selling Book

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good little flash fiction story. However it does need some editing.
There are a few spelling errors.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I think a larger font will also make the story easier to read.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Facing His Fears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)



Review of Facing His Fears

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The different visual images that the writer must deal with as he develops the acrostic of be aware of his own fear. Fear in so many ways. so many aspects that each of us must deal with.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Just one character. Self Just one emotion. Fear.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Blue bells  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Blue Bells

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short poem based on the blue bell flower.

POETRY INFORMATION:

It is written in free verse and freely describes the wonderful little flower which are the delight of many gardens.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more, there is many images to share.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Working Late  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Working Late

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

About to send that email that allows for your wrath to be deposited on the rightfully guilty person. However it never gets sent because the writer realizes the futility. In this case however the end rather than the delete key is pressed. Makes a very different story.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

One character with his anger. He is steaming and does the thing that makes the story.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Continue the story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I enjoyed how you increased the pent up emotion. Thanks for sharing this item!


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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Praying for a Sign

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A love poem where the woman is praying for God's intervention and direction in finding and reconnecting with her lover one.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Four verses each with four lines with a rhyming scheme of A A B B.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

it is a good poem and shows deep feeling.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Holding onto Hope  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of HOLDING ON TO HOPE

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Growing up in the inner city i,s difficult because most of the pressure is very negative. When the majority of your friends are going a different way it is hard to stay focused on a more difficult path, This short piece is directed at doing just that.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A mother is standing up to try to make her daughter see this as the better way.
She is concentrating on her church to aid in that effort.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Some more detail would be great.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: ASR | (3.5)



Review of Rota, the first draft Chapter One

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. I was directed to this piece using the read and review option.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I was not prepared for talking horses. once the initial shock passed I woundered about making this the first chapter without preparing the reader with some additional informatiion.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A fire has caused this family to lose its home and they must decide what to do.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I saw no errors in spelling or grammar.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Thirty Years of Marriage

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good poem that depicts the thirty years of the poet's marriage. The poem is very positive and was enjoyable to read.

POETRY INFORMATION:

17 four line verses and one six line verse as a conclusion.
The rhyming scheme was A B A B for the four line verses and A B A B A B for that final verse.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I have enjoyed the poem.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Choices  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)



Review of Choices

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A flash fiction sci-fi story about a young having to work in some mines at school in order to afford things. He dies and even with out saying the wife blames the husband.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Jack and Maggie are the parents of Billy. Flash fiction gives little time for character development.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Good story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of First Date  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of First Date

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A humerous quip about a father seeing his daughter out with a boy on her first date.
Good interaction with short concise bit of dialogue.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

What should a dad say as a girl leaves on first date.
The dialogue defines these characters.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

This could be longer.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of The Valley of Dried Bones

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

While his mother was right that the dried bones were nothing to fear i can understand the young man not wanting ti cross the dried out battle field.
My pressing question is why leave the bones exposed. Should they have not been buried?

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A young man not wanting to cross a dried out valley where the dead were left to rot.
Character development is fine.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Explain why the bodies not buried.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (5.0)




Review of An outline for the Novel, A Son for Prince Koltar

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This item selected using read and review.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A detailed outline for the twenty chapter novel.
there is a breakdown by chapter as well as a general synopsis of the entire novel.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Prose sketch of the Main Characters:

Volusia
Rindar
Moogy
Tupa
Chief Rathome
Lord Marcutti
Prince Koltar

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Great preparation

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Relationship  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Relationship

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A straightforward truth about relationship. It takes time to mature it.
Too often we try to hurry it.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A truth that should be self evident.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

You could expand on this.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of LIGHT  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)



Review of Light

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Confused is how I would describe this story. There seems to lack of direction for most of the story. A personal tragedy with a motorcycle having hit Jacob who is the main character. All he seems to remember is the light. He has nightmares about it.



PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Jacob seems to be infatuated with another boy but he is unnamed.
When he pays attention to Jacob, Jacob almost runs away.
Then he sees this other person riding a motorcycle with that light that is in his dreams.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Make relationship clearer. Work on personal contacts with other students.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of A New Friendship

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

a lovely little story of a friendship which is made over the need for food.
Many good relationships do actually begin that way.
it interesting that the man fills the bird feeder with seed but it provides for the family of squirrels, A special relationship develops with the smallest squirrel.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The kind man who brings out seed for the birds and the squirrels as well.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more of these backyard nature stories.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)



Review of November 26, 1985

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A presentation to moot court of a hospital's responsibility in the security and risks involved in counselling past violent offenders in an area where others are not advised of the possibility of danger. (I am almost quessing that this is the final arguement that is presented here).

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

This is a great example of legal jargon and official terminology dealing with what seems to be a unwarrented and unsuspected violent crime.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A few side bars to give the unaware people as to what is truely going on here.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thanks for sharing this item (I think)


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Review of Tea for Three.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Tea for Three

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Interesting poem. i understand the picnic aspect with the two girls but am confused at the four legged, a dog or horse.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Twelve lines of free verse.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I enjoyed it but did not completely understand it.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Our Soulful Union  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of Our Soulful Union

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A romantic poem stating the depth of love between the two people. The poem states that this love is all consuming and eternal.

POETRY INFORMATION:

This poem is written in free form.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Paint and Painters

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Everybody eventually gets down and decides to change the colour of their dwelling.
That means getting out the equipment and paint the walls.

POETRY INFORMATION:

there are five four line verses which are each comprised of
two rhyming couplets.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Great inclusion of all aspects of the painting process.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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