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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of Suitcase  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is indeed very chilling. I would love reading this sort of thing around Halloween time or on a camping trip.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a beautiful story. I've had dreams about a strange cousin I've never met. Maybe I'll meet him at a time I need him the most.

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Review of Moon  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This piece provides a lot of food for thought. I never thought of the moon in this light before.

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Review of Playing The Game  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was very intriguing and well-written. I like how you took time to develop all the characters of interest.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This isn't a personal interest of mine, but I am glad you are writing about what inspires you. It certainly brings back memories of high school and university for me.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You portrayed some powerful emotions here. It looks like you covered all the stages of grief.

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Review of Lyla  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

It took me some time to recover from the sheer exhaustion I felt after going through the birthing process, but I definitely feel those things now.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. It reminds me a bit of a meditation that a substitute teacher guided my class through many years ago. Thanks for reminding me to shift my perspective.

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Review of Unlovable  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Honestly, you sound a lot like my husband. You are lovable. Just don't forget to talk to a therapist or psychiatrist when you need one, and you will definitely need one if you have kids. Also, take a human development course before having kids. Remember that humans are a social species, and asking for help when you need it is a responsible thing to do.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was great food for thought. I liked how you explained that it's up to the reader to finish it at the start.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very intriguing piece.

The past tense of lie (not the telling of an untruth, but to recline) is lay. Lay is the present tense of lay. Lay and lie are pretty confusing verbs, and I still look them up from time to time to make sure I'm using the right version.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a cute start. I'd argue that having squishy skin is better for getting hit. If you're a rock, you'd shatter. Of course, it depends on how hard we get hit, but usually we just get a little bruise that heals.

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Review of I'm Fine  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! I like the emotions here and the message that sometimes family is more important than adventure.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This collection provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for sharing.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Newbie!!!!  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I wish I could help, but I've got a toddler and can only spend a limited amount of time on the computer every day. I know there's a group specifically for finding beta readers on Goodreads, though.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. I think many of us can relate to these experiences.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an intriguing premise. It also provides a lot of food for thought.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as am, are, is, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

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Review of Tales of a Hacker  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I like how you introduce the characters right away and show their personalities through their actions.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as am, are, is, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

Example:
He was always in a flannel shirt and suspenders.
-->
He always wore a flannel shirt and suspenders.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Next Radar  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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