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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of 2nd place  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me of something I saw in a psychology book years ago. 3rd place Olympic medalists typically have happier facial expressions than 2nd place Olympic medalists. It is believed that 3rd place winners are grateful to have won anything at all while 2nd place winners are upset about not being 1st.

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Not Just Another Brick In The Wall  (ASR)
Most teachers are amazing, but sometimes . . .
#2281472 by K5Rakitan

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Review of Autumn  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I love seeing seasonal pieces here. It really helps to put me in the mood for enjoying it to the fullest.

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Not Just Another Brick In The Wall  (ASR)
Most teachers are amazing, but sometimes . . .
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This piece carries some powerful nostalgia. I too spent as much time as I could barefoot until the adults noticed. I also liked to dance in the rain, but then one time, an old person at school made me go change into my PE clothes.

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Not Just Another Brick In The Wall  (ASR)
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This looks like it was copied and pasted from somewhere else, and the formatting here is an assault to the eyes.

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

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Not Just Another Brick In The Wall  (ASR)
Most teachers are amazing, but sometimes . . .
#2281472 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

There are some very powerful emotions in this piece. I identify with some, but not all of these sentiments personally.

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Review of Garbage collector  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a good start. Like anything, it is going to appeal to some people but not others. I feel that the narrator spends too much time in her own head and not enough time interacting with others.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was very enlightening. I've been considering using AI to finish the fanfiction I started back in 2019, though I have to complete typing the rest of the stuff I have sitting in my paper notebooks first. Do you think it would be capable of finishing a story if I feed it all of the text I already have? In other words, could it copy my writing style while building an epic conclusion? Maybe a few years from now when the algorithms have improved?

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a fun piece. This reminds me of when I wanted to be a shepherd when I was younger to make clothes from real wool.

"Without the bovine, there'd be no cream cheese" - It may taste different, but milk from pretty much any mammal including humans can be used to make cheese, yogurt, and other dairy products.

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Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
Monthly contest for people who find joy in lewd things.
#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Here's an idea I came up with recently:
A teacher disrespects students and wastes their time with off-topic lectures. One student's mom talks to the student at home and agrees the teacher's behavior is too disruptive to the learning environment. She helps her son set up an independent study plan for the topic. Her son forms a study group with some classmates who also want to drop the course. Word quietly spreads, and more students form their own study groups. The next time the teacher gives an annoying off-topic lecture, the entire class walks out.

Feel free to change the genders of the characters if you want.

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#2250133 by K5Rakitan


Actually, I might start up another contest with the idea I just gave you.
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
Monthly contest for people who find joy in lewd things.
#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is certainly educational, but it lacks emotion. Try including more body language and facial expressions to convey more emotion. Gasps and other indicators of shock would help.

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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've packed a lot of emotion into a few words. I feel much the same way about my first love.

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Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
Monthly contest for people who find joy in lewd things.
#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a fun piece of exploratory writing. It provides a lot of food for thought.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review of How much longer?  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
Monthly contest for people who find joy in lewd things.
#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! I like the premise, and the circumstances are adorable.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
Monthly contest for people who find joy in lewd things.
#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review of Sleepy Weiss  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a fun piece. I especially like the part about how hypnosis isn't magic.

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Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
Monthly contest for people who find joy in lewd things.
#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

The ability of the human mind to give life to inanimate objects and even to generate collective imaginary friends never ceases to amaze me.

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Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've never been a sports fan, but I did play a game called Big Farm that had several seasonal events. One of those events involved betting on World Cup results. This would have been helpful to me back then.

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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start. It sounds like the beginning of a marvelous tale.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of George Forsyth  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me a bit of my ex-boyfriend, except that he also had an ex-wife, so it wasn't his first rodeo. He hid his meth habit from me for five years. It shocked me when it surfaced, but after I moved back in with my parents, I realized that he was indulging in it every time I went to visit my parents because meth suppresses the appetite, and there was always rotten food in the fridge when I came home.

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Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
Monthly contest for people who find joy in lewd things.
#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
I am also running a contest in case you are interested:
 
FORUM
Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
Monthly contest for people who find joy in lewd things.
#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review of 2023  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a concise and clear introduction of an author with ethos, logos, and pathos.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
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Review of untitled  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This short saying provides a lot of food for thought. It reminds me of when my boyfriend died in 2015, and there was a lot of laughter in the house.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Lewd Poems Contest  (18+)
Monthly contest for people who find joy in lewd things.
#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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