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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've never been a sports fan, but I did play a game called Big Farm that had several seasonal events. One of those events involved betting on World Cup results. This would have been helpful to me back then.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start. It sounds like the beginning of a marvelous tale.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of George Forsyth  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This reminds me a bit of my ex-boyfriend, except that he also had an ex-wife, so it wasn't his first rodeo. He hid his meth habit from me for five years. It shocked me when it surfaced, but after I moved back in with my parents, I realized that he was indulging in it every time I went to visit my parents because meth suppresses the appetite, and there was always rotten food in the fridge when I came home.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of 2023  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a concise and clear introduction of an author with ethos, logos, and pathos.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of untitled  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This short saying provides a lot of food for thought. It reminds me of when my boyfriend died in 2015, and there was a lot of laughter in the house.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Ferryman  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This piece covers some very heavy emotions. It also reminds me of the power of our minds to reframe how we view ourselves and others. Clinging to an old ideal of ourselves for too long never bodes well.

“Nursing does not diminish the beauty of a woman’s breasts; it enhances their charm by making them look lived in and happy.”
— Robert A. Heinlein

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a good start, but it's difficult to tell what's going on. I recommend setting the scene and starting with a few actions.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words and covered some powerful emotions here.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I felt much the same way about my name as a teenager. I have not bothered to legally change it, but I'm over 30 now, and I still introduce myself with the name I chose unless I'm at a bank or something.

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Review of SHE>>  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is very sweet and simple. I have had similar feelings for others.

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Review of JESUS IS ENOUGH  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. This strikes me as a message that is used by rich people as an excuse for not giving away their wealth, though. Claiming that poor people are poor because God doesn't want them to have money is dangerous territory.

Matthew 19:21-24

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Review of The Prayer  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is very simple and sweet. It paints a beautiful picture, too.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Impossible  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a riveting and emotional story, and the part about the phone gives it a spooky vibe.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of What is love?  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a beautiful concept in theory, though unfortunately I've seen churches stomp on love in too many ways.

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Review of Glass Butterflys  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I like how you jumped straight into the action here. This makes a fantastic hook!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This piece has a lovely tone, though it is difficult for modern minds to follow.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Thirty Minutes  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is simple and sweet. Your partner is very lucky indeed!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

Being in a relationship isn't necessarily a barrier to starting a new one. However, it is important for people to discuss whether or not they desire monogamy before a relationship begins. Honesty is the most important component of any relationship.

Personally, I've been non-monogamous since 2009. I didn't know the word polyamory back then because nobody ever told me, but as soon as I learned it, I knew that's what I wanted. I've dated many people and had many wonderful experiences. I've walked home in the dark while holding hands with two men. I've dined with my boyfriend, his coworker, his wife, and their child while listening to tales of adventure. I've hugged my boyfriend's widow at his funeral in 2015. I got married in 2018 and sent pictures to two boyfriends from my husband's phone after giving birth in 2021 because my phone didn't get reception at the hospital.

Of course, my lifestyle is not for everyone. My parents are monogamous and still happily married. Their love is as beautiful as mine.

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Blank  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing your experience with writer's block. Personally, my writer's block has a name. It's my toddler. I miss being able to hold pencil and letting my fingers dance over the paper for hours until I get calluses. These days, I'm too exhausted by the time he takes a nap to indulge in such activities.

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Review of Juniper Tree 1  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words.

I recommend organizing your work into shorter paragraphs for easier reading.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Lucidity  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a lovely piece. Personally, I never bothered trying to be normal, though I am intrigued by people who seek to "normalize" various things.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Lost in Place  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Personally, I've found that telling my secrets generally gets me closer to my true friends and shows me who is not a true friend. However, one needs to be willing to meet new people in order to find enough true friends to make life worth living.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Cardboard Man  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is certainly a unique story. Excellent work, and keep it up!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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