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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of Lost Night  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with just a few words. Thanks for sharing these feelings.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Teeth  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for sharing this part of your life with the world.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! You've established an intriguing concept. My advice is to spend more time developing the characters.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I like how you jump straight into the conflict. It's a good way to hook the reader.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Hike  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! You've painted a vivid picture with your words.

I recommend organizing your story into shorter paragraphs for easier reading. Here is a resource that can help you: https://www.ylva-publishing.com/2013/08/18/paragra...

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

The grammar could use work, but the meaning came through clearly. I enjoyed learning about learning :)

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of title  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (2.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Garden  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a beautiful picture with your words. Thank you for taking me to this lovely place.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of UNTITLED  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.
Example:
She needed to find out if Jason was behind this ...
-->
She needed to find out if Jason bore responsibility ...

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Review of The Peaceful Man  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start!

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.
Example:
One of them was tall, and the other was short and lanky.
-->
One of them towered over the other.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of A lair story  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of To Be Hokage  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This isn't one of my fandoms, but I am glad you are writing about what inspires you.

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of You & I  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I like the use of first and second person here. It really helps others to relate. Personally, this brings me back to my breakup in 2014, except I walked away hearing many words that meant nothing to me. I even told him the words I wanted to hear, but he simply kept talking about other things until I got sick of taking his calls.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I like how well you established the characters and made the reader invested in their lives.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Transaction  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought! I love the way it turned out.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Ethanol  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

“It’s” is a contraction for “it is.” If you want to make it possessive, drop the apostrophe. This is the single most common grammar mistake I see among beginning authors, so you’re not alone in this.

This is great information. It's well-organized, too!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was interesting. I thought the recommended level for sugar consumption was 0 calories per day.

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Review of Power is not all  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! I like how you jump straight into the action.

I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of TIMELESS  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! The green font is difficult to read, though.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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#2250133 by K5Rakitan

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

These are great tips. I like how you included a story to make it feel more personal.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Twin Flame  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This short poem packs a lot of emotion. It was clearly inspired by someone special.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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