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Biography, short stories, all styles of poetry.
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Horror, Dark because I am not fond of voluntarily being scared.
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True stories and experiences
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Anything that scares me
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I will review anything. I have reviewed books, however, they take a lot of time, the turnaround is longer than 3 days.
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Review of Rock Music  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Margaret,
Happy 18th WDC Anniversary! In honor of your special day. I have reviewed "Rock Music." I see your note that poetry is your specialty. This poem is identified in the description as an oddquain. Unfamiliar with the style, in the online description it is to have 17 syllables arranged as 1,3,5,7,1 or the reverse 1,7,5,3,1. Your poem is 1,1,5,7,1 which is a variation of the form. I heard a frog's 'song' only a few times and remember it making sounds like you described here. Thank you for an 'odd' poetry style. It is a challenge to create a poem within the parameters of a set style. I leave it up to you to create it as you see fit. There does not to be any fault mechanically. Thanks for showing me this poetry form.

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Review of The Fallen Rose  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Dragonfire,

Congratulation on you 3rd WDC Anniversary! In honor of your special day, I am reviewing "The Fallen Rose."

Your story is original. I did not know what would come next which made it engaging. The plot developed in unexpected ways. The characters were well defined with their personalities and quirks coming out in the dialogue. Good job. You have a few small things that another edit will catch. The first is in the first sentence of the prologue, "It was warm, and beautiful day." You would add "a" and remove the comma to read, "It was a warm and beautiful day." I enjoyed the story and with time permitting will return to read the following two pieces of the tale. Keep on writing!

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Amethyst Angel,

I came here from the link on the Shameless Plug Page. Here is what you said your concerns are: "Super nervous about this! I've wanted to write it for years, but it's such a delicate subject. Does it work within the word count? Is it impactful, respectful, understandable, trite, predictable?"

My response is why did you wait so long? The story is a perfect example of an excellent short story. Your characters are distinctive. It had a significant impact on me for several reasons. First, I was not sure exactly what asexual orientation entailed. Your drop cap note gave me that information. Another reason is the story is similar to a brief relationship in college so I could relate to the true love part. It was not trite because the plot was original and new to me. I was engaged with the story at the end of the third sentence. Your main plot had a plausible subplot with Shawn and what his motive was showing the pictures to Mary. I was shaking and relieved when she asked him to leave.

What I liked at the start was the lovely presentation. The font style and size were easy to read. You showed what was happening, leaving some to the reader's imagination. With the name Pierre, I am imagining a French man. I loved the strong love connection they had. A simple misunderstanding could have been a lifetime mistake if he had not brought his sister home. Having so many ways things could have gone is one of the keys to great storytelling.

Mechanically flawless, I would recommend your story to everyone. It educates and informs in addition to being a sweet love story. Congratulations on a wonderful piece you can be proud of. Your transitions are smooth, your word choices are sound.

I was looking at the plugs on "The Hub" to provide the link for a Newbie who is anxious to have his work reviewed. If you have any more specific questions please let me know. This piece is proof you are a strong and gifted writer. Kudos to you!

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Review of Toxicity  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello CSCJR,

Welcome to WDC, our shortcut way to write our site name. I hope you are finding everything okay. Your story "Toxicity" came up on the Read & Review tab. I have a few thoughts to share with you which I hope will be helpful.

Overall impression: The title drew me in because it is an enticing invitation to something of interest. Your opening sentence is almost hypnotizing with its active description getting my buy-in immediately. The sensory words like "stressed pores" set the tone. I felt the emotions and know all too well the scenarios you described. Well done.

It will be a lot easier to read with a little larger text size (use the square with three sSS} and double spacing. I Appreciated the unique way you expressed yourself and wanted to read again to savor some areas like, "The false perception of emotional numbing and self medicating is the savior of all circumstances."

Welcome again to our wonderful community. Kudos to you for a great read. I feel you have done more than a little writing in your life. Keep up the good work!

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hello Wake Up and Live,

Happy 8th WDC Anniversary! I thought I would take this opportunity to give you a review in honor of your anniversary. I had tons of pieces to choose from! I was in the mood for a romantic love story and there was "The Beautiful Voice" calling my name. I have a few thoughts to share after reading it and hope they resonate with you.

Overall impression: The hook started with your genres as I was looking for romance/love. You used a nice sized text which made it easy for me to read. The paragraphs looked the right size so I knew I would be able to process your story thought by thought. You did not disappoint. In my view, this is a wonderfully original story. It appeared as if it were biographical because it felt so clear and the progression from proposal for coffee to actual meeting your person with the beautiful voice transitioned flawlessly. The surprise ending made my experience reading superb.

You are a gifted storyteller. The premise is plausible. It actually sounds like something I might do. The experiences of your life are often determined by the risks you are willing to take. Such a marvelous learning opportunity coupled with hearing that beautiful voice was a win/win.

I have one reminder for you. When you are writing dialogue, the punctuations goes before the quotation marks. You have it done both ways. One example is "How old are you anyway", my voice sounded funny. The comma would go right after the word anyway.

Congratulations again on your anniversary. Kudos for a great story I thoroughly enjoyed.

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Review of 27 Years  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Moonchild,

Your story came up on Read & Review. I enjoy what I have read here and am happy to review "27 Years." These are my thoughts alone. I hope they will resonate with you.

Overall Impression: Your opening sentence hook was terrific. I definitely wanted to know whose voice you were hearing. I liked the presentation making it very easy to read. Your brief description and correct genres were well done. It was smart to inject a little humor, almost like an inside joke, which helped ease some sadness welling up as I was reading. I am not sure if I needed you to say if it was an auto accident as I could only guess it was.

A couple of things that were not caught in editing. "Mom told she was going to get the kids." It sounds unfinished without saying who she told. "Mom told me that at the kids were silent." I think at should be as.

It is sad you had to be told during the kids time, but there is no good time to hear bad news. You wrote the story with grace. I am glad the story ended with chaos restored ther memory, a sad one, which is well written with no mechanical errors. Great job!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Ayla,

Welcome to WDC, our abbreviation for writing.com. Your monologue came up on the Read & Review tab. I thought "What the Nature" might be a poem or a long story. I was pleased to read it for its point simply stated but a large topic. There are no woods here, but our sunrises and sunsets are awesome and awe-inspiring. I have birds singing all night outside my bedroom window.

Your first sentence hooked me into reading the whole piece. Forgetting our worries and appreciating life is something to strive to attain. My favorite line and the one that sums up your piece is "Nature profoundly influences our emotions, fostering a connection with the world and ourselves."

Your writing style and command of descriptive words indicate you have written before and you are good at it. Thank for writing about something I too often take for granted, when instead I should take any opportunity to get close to nature. It never fails to inspire and get to a mindset where life makes sense. Keep your work coming!

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Review of Thank You  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi MoonChilde,

I saw "Thank You" and its description in "The Hub." The words "that I will never send" ignited my curiosity. In writing the reasons for thanking this disgusting excuse for a person, your seven-year nightmare is revealed.

Expressing how the relationship started, I was waiting for details to explain why you would not send the note. "It took you seven years to kill the person that I was when we met." Have you ever read something and your mouth physically dropped? Mine did when I read that sentence. It was like a stab in my own heart.

One thing I have noticed in your pieces is no double spacing between paragraphs. Please do that to allow the reader a break to process what has been written thus far in your story.

Thank you for sharing what was an awful thing that sparked a huge change in your life. Your writing is engaging!

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for entry "~ Habit Building ~" 
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Ruwth,

I followed the link to your piece "Building Better Habits." I have some thoughts about it. These are only one person's opinions I hope you will find them useful.

Overall impression: I am thrilled to see how you organize your monthly goals at Habit Heroes. Color coding and using bold print for visuals make it easy to gauge your progress. I see how many times you check in and how often you meet your goals for the month.

I liked the way you listed your goals here, along with the reasons why you needed to be successful. The entire piece appears to be written without any mechanical issues. That makes for a good reading experience for me! Thanks!

One recommendation is to run your goals by the SMART goal-setting test. Goals should be specific, measurable, attainable, relevant, and time-bound.

You did a great job organizing and explaining the system you use to document your desired habits. I wish the best of luck to you in forming important individual habits.

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Review of It's a New Day  
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Hi Kenzie,

What a heartfelt, honest, and amazing accounting of where you have been and where you are now and for your future. Your contributions to your community, and church, and sharing your craft prowess are all tributes to the life to date of an awesome and awe-inspiring woman. I have second hand knowledge of fibro from my BFF and my daughter having it. I have first hand knowledge of breast cancer being a survivor since 1998.

My overall impression of how you write is more positive than I have words to express. Your knowledge, style, and expertise is superior. The high number of reviews on the pieces I have read so far are proof positive I am not the only one who feels this way. Nary a comma nor apostrophe out of place, it was a pleasure to read and not be stopped by a misstep.

Thank you for sharing your letter. I think friends and family believe they know what you are going through, but really, in my humble opinion, one can never know unless they have walked in your shoes. Let me know if you have any questions about the similar things I, too, have experienced. What a joy it is for me to read a gifted writer like you are.

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Hi Kenzie,

I got here by way of the DWG disABILITY Writers Group. A big welcome is coming but first, your blog jumped out. Blogs are personal things that I feel privileged to read. Your entry Texas Sunrise gives the promise that I thought only rainbows provided. My son recently moved to Northlake, Texas. Supposedly if I say the name of that town, everyone in Texas should know where it is. I mention it because the sky photos my daughter-in-law posts are almost surreal. I am on my way to review your "It's a New Day." Thank you for writing in and sharing your life in your blog. I will be back!

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Hi Jake,

Your poem "I Saw My Father Die" appeared on the right panel BY ONLINE AUTHORS. I think reviewing a five-line poem is challenging. Here are my thoughts, solely my own, which I hope will resonate with you.

I appreciate the explanation you provided of a double cinquain. First, I read your poem. After that, I took the liberty to look a little further online to see if there were any other guidelines. I read a few examples to increase my understanding. I read your poem a second time. It is structured correctly. Your senses at the time must have been on high alert. "I sensed his soul departing" was a powerful statement. I belief that literally is what happens to us and happened to your father. I take great solace in that feeling.

It was enlightening that you could tell a complete story in so few words. The haiku sounds almost like one has the hiccups where this new form results in a smooth flow from start to finish. There is a beginning as you saw him, then the body with the sensation of his soul leaving, and the end, as all of our stories will one day end in the death of our body alone.

I believe you knew death through the experience and expressed it clearly. I am glad I learned a poetry form, as well as the telling of your first hand account of what the process showed you. I am happy to see you writing new poems frequently in new styles. I am amazed at the endless amount of poetry styles in existence. Thanks for your poem.

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Review of No Closure  
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Hi Moon Childe,

Your story "No Closure" came up on Read & Review. I have a few thoughts to share with you which I hope you will find useful.

Overall impression: I had a terrific first impression. The title matched the story, as did the genres you chose. The text size is nice and large which will help more people read it. The story flowed well from the death to the funeral and finally, I got closure reading the ending.

A few things to bring to your attention. "Alex began to cry to." The word to should be too. "As her understanding of what was happening had grown so had." Place a comma after grown. "Alex never found that she couldn’t forgive them." Confusing double negative? Do you mean Alex never forgave her parents?

Congratulations on the perfect presentation, organized chain of events, and showing how a seven-year-old is grown up enough to attend a funeral. It sounds like their daughter was very ready to handle a funeral. I enjoyed your story, your writing, and your attention to details. Great job!

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hi John,

Thank you for requesting me to review your short story, "Trouble At The Store." You are looking in particular for feedback about the fight scene. The following are my opinions alone and I hope you will find them useful.

My first impression of the overall story was positive. You have a nice balance of paragraphs with many of them to break up the story. It is the best way for your reader to process each step, especially when you have a good character and their nemesis. The common event of a woman being targeted for a crime like the one in your story was different because of where it occurred.

Your fight scene had plenty of action and suspense which kept me engaged. I was guessing who was the stronger fighter which was very good. It seemed like our good guy would win part way through. There are a couple of things that may make it better. It is the way your sentence are structured. You are telling the reader blow by blow exactly what is happening. You may want to leave something up to the imagination. For examle, when the fists came out, you may say just that. The reader can then imagine what that is like without saying a speedy fist approached the face. The emphasis may be better on the action. Something like, before he could react, a fist to the left jaw jarred him for a few seconds. "May that guy sure carries a great left hook." Or something to that effect.

I might add that you need to proof read the piece and read it out loud. There are several actions in each paragraph and the number of them is a lot to take in. You want to use active words leave out "that" and "wich" that make the words after that less important.

I would love to see you revise the story to be more active. I will help you with phrasing or anything else you would like so we can make it a learning experience. I am available to help. Email me if you would like. There are no gift points necessary for additional help. I think most of the parts of the scenes will be fine with some tweaking.

Thanks again for the request and gift points. Reviewing is my number one focus here. I hope you can relate to and use the suggestions. As always, I encourage you to write on!

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Review of The Final Goodbye  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, Donna,

I saw your story "The Final Goodbye" in the recently plugged items at "The Hub." I like to read true stories of people going through life's experiences. Some stories are light and humorous. Yours is sad but hopeful as your dad came back to reassure you he thought to say goodbye letting you know he was okay.

Overall impression: I liked your narrative which was written chronologically which I appreciate to follow the chain of events. You shared with affection your husband and son. Your story is complete with all the elements of a great short story. The first sentence hook revealed he had recurring heart trouble. I was interested in whether he would come home or be in the hospital if the worst happened. I was invested in his life and his relationships within the family.

My favorite part was your son feeling the "breeze" when no air was moving inside the car. Being the "Apple of Pop Pop's eye" made the loss all the more poignant. When he came back to say goodbye to Jeffrey, and told him he loved him is when I got an emotional response to the story.

Your writing is flawless. It increases the satisfaction of reading a story. Your grief is being brought to the surface this week. I am sorry you lost your father so suddenly. As a grandparent, I am glad he had the chance to know his grandson. I am sure that was one of the high points of his life. You have many stories I have yet to read. Thank you for this and the other pieces. Kudos to you!

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Review of Remembering You  
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intuey,

I followed the link on the Newsfeed to your poem "Remembering You." I read it and have some thoughts to share with you. I hope you find them useful.

Overall impression: Your remembrance poem for your grandson Brandon is poignant using expressive words for the reader to get a glimpse of the wonderful person he was. It has a consistent rhyming scheme which had to be difficult, but paid off as it made it a pleasant experience. The presentation of the poem is fabulous with a unique font style that is large for easy reading.

There are no mechanical issues which sets it apart from the rest.

My favorite line is "I scour the stars for your smiling face." What a strong verb which you don't see much. Thank you for writing about Brandon. I feel like I know him. Providing his picture was wonderful of you. I see a hint of that smile you refer to.

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Hello Kenny B,

Welcome to WDC! Reading and reviewing each other's work is the main focus of our community. I am happy to see you have written a number of entries. You have received some reviews also which is wonderful. Thank you for requesting a review of "My Fun Time Today, Saturday May 18, 2024." The opinions are mine alone and I hope they will be helpful to you.

Overall impression: This is a story about a wonderful day in your life. The day's events were covered and all seemed sincere. The setting was real and all the people you interacted with were genuine. I found the topic of how the kids you babysit act unique.

For my reviews, I look at the presentation. My concern here is the spacing. There needs to be a double space between paragraphs. The reader needs time to absorb what has happened. The piece seems to have been written quickly, possibly a cause for many typos. Reading what you wrote out loud may have caught the errors. One thing that needs correction is in the title. There should be a comma after Saturday. I know it sounds picky, but these may be things you are not aware of.

Thank you for sharing your experience and the question you had about what is the appropriate process with children, especially young girls, in the process of hanging out. to sit on your lap. In most cases, I don't think it is a good idea, regardless of how the parents feel. Good luck with publishing your book and keep your writings coming!

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Review of Easy  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello Anya,

Welcome to WDC, our abbreviation for our site. Your description of why you are here is similar to many of us. What you write is as important to us as it is to you. One of the main focuses here is to read and review each other's work. Your personal, emotional letter came up for review on the Read A Newbie page. You are referred to as a Newbie, or new member for the first year you are here.

Overall impression: Your piece is a personal and emotional memo to yourself to remind you about why you are with this person. The things the person has done to earn your respect are apparent. In a few words you have conveyed deep feelings which appear evident to the reader as well. I think your writing is well-organized and expressive. Each thing, no matter how small, is detailed here. I felt the depth of your emotions and moving a reader to feel like that is a gift of good writing.

A word about a couple of things. Your first word "Its" should be It's.
The way you "begun to recognize" should be began. "For example moving a centerpiece" should have a comma after example. All in all, a second edit never hurts to catch things.

I appreciate you writing about something deeply personal in "Easy." I felt privileged to be one of the first to read your work. Looking forward to more.

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Review of Alone  
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Hi foxtale,

I see your poem "Alone" on my request list. I am reviewing it now with some of my own thoughts. It is a short poem with such pathos. I got emotional thinking about being alone. I understand the idea that one suffers pain alone. It may be for more reasons than isolating or getting lost in a crowd. It seems with such emotion between the lines you were feeling some discomfort at the time. You've been somewhat enigmatic here so I am putting my own interpretation into it.

The freeform style was beautifully presented with the lines 2,4,6,8 being indented more than the average indent. It was appealing and unique which I liked a lot. I think capitalizing the words Forever and Suffers got the message through, at least in my view. Thanks for sharing a change of pace poem from you. I was happy to come back to wander around your portfolio and review your work. Thanks and have a wonderful rest of your weekend.

Take care!

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Hello ruwth,

I followed the link you provided in your entry to "~`In Jesus' Name~" because the subject matter was of great interest to me.

Initially, I was concerned with the trigger warning which is in the tiniest of print and in a bright orange which both drew attention but made it difficult to read. I would have left it in black and at least the same size as the entry.

Now that I got that out of the way, on to the content. You said it was not the entry the way you had intended. For me, however, it was a very good choice to talk about your scripture passage when you were young because that rolled right into the story of the hitchhiker. I think saying it out loud for your attacker was Jesus nudging you to do so. It was a miracle.

I am sorry for what you went through because of the physical beating you took and the mental trauma which has continued to present itself as PTSD. Your testimony is strong and compelling. It is rewarding to see the power of prayer manifest miracles even in the worst of circumstances.

One correction I would like to mention is in the sentence starting with "I prayed aloud:" The quotation mark mid sentence is quoting a quote within a quote. A single quotation mark is used at the start and end of the Bible quote. My opinion is due to the content, even with a trigger warning, there should be at least a 13+ rating.

Thank you for having the courage to write down the details of your living nightmare. A reminder not to pick up hitchhikers is valuable. We all know what we know is the right thing to do, but circumstances urge us to make choices that go against what we know. Your writing brings out strong emotions in me. As I read I am thinking there but for the grace of God go I. But, that infers insensitivity to you. I am on the side of "What would Jesus Do?" There are other entries to read linked from your piece about where you are going to go from here. I could spend a month reading all you have written at WDC and not have finished. I set a goal to read more.

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Hi Mary Ann,

I am doing the SPR Raid today. What a delightful little poem, "Sylvester Is a Smart Cat." It is just as difficult to create a short one like this as a longer poem. You followed a nice pattern. It was fun to read out loud with the rhyme light and happy. I could picture Sylvester in my mind who was a clever one to open a window. I had a cat who opened a locked door.

I would like you to take a look at the genres. You have the opportunity to select three of them. It is good to do because if people are looking to read a story about someone's cat they would select "pets" or "animals." "Other" is not one people would check out. Also, with specific genres you piece can be selected as an editor's pick or something a person might read and like as much to nominate it for a quill.

I am content with selecting this poem to review. You have a nice writing style. I wish for you a pleasant evening.

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Hi Ruwth,

Thank you for telling me about your story, "A Horsewoman In My Dreams..." I read your story and have a few thoughts. I hope they are useful.

True stories are one of my favorites. It sounds like your foster experience was okay with foster sisters who cared about you enough to help you when you got into difficulty. Each interaction with a horse was fun to read. My first time on a horse was in Yosemite National Park. After a tame ride of a couple of hours, my legs were sore for a week!

The presentation of your story was pleasant with a nice soothing font color and easy to read text size. I also liked the paragraphs formed with a few sentences in each one. The last sentence confused me somewhat. Stating you were a horsewoman in your dreams made the experiences you wrote about not clear if they were real or just in your dreams. Thank you for the extra treat of the trinket to collect.

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Hello Anya,
First, welcome to WdC, the way we abbreviate our site address. Your first entry appeared in items written by people new to the site. I read "Partial Confession" and related to the frustrating event of being unable to fall sleep with something lying heavily on your mind or heart. You noted the genre is poetry, free verse the style. The genre choices are to make your item visible to readers looking to read works in their favorite genre. They direct newsletter editors to select specific types of items to recommend as editor's picks. You may choose 3 altogether. I suggest adding "personal: and "psychological." My favorite line starts with "My mind begins to start a track race..." Nice metaphor. Congratulations on your first entry. If you have any questions about how to do things, just ask.

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Hello and thank you for this wonderfully relaxing story. It felt like a good day to email the boss saying you needed to take the rest of the day off! A good excuse is to say it is for "personal" reasons. These opinions I provide are mine alone all of which I hope will be useful to you.

The album by the Moody Blues covered music from dawn until night. They gave a unique sound. Your descriptions were full of imagery, like a "Kite flying day." It was left to my imagination to picture the breeze watching the "Powder puffs" in the sky. Good job creating a framework of peace and tranquility.

One area you may want to look at is in this sentence: "This too shall pass my father always told every time I got into trouble." There needs to be an object of the telling. Otherwise you could say "Father always said every time..."

I enjoyed reading your story. Keep up the great work!

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Hello Victoria,

Congratulations on your 22nd WDC Anniversary. That is amazing! Here is an anniversary review of "Diana: One Woman for the World." The opinions I express are mine alone. I hope they resonate with you.

Overall impression: I loved Princess Diana. I read Morton's book, magazine articles, and anything else I could find. I find the monarchy unrivaled by anything out there. I related to your essay. I was watching television at the late hour's announcement and hours thereafter with story after story about her life and more relevant to me, the things she was able to accomplish because of her position in the Royal family. My overall impression is the piece is well done. You used chronology which made one thought move effortlessly to the next. The narrative was fact-giving for the most part.

I was thinking about the genre opinion. I did not see opinions. Rather, I saw the piece as relaying true facts, not how you felt about them. The final words explained your lasting impression of one who died too young. You might want to expand a little on "Diana had many charities," and "And she loved to dress." I understood what you meant, but would have liked to know a ew o the charities she supported. She liked to dress in fine clothes.

Thanks for this reminder of the tragedy that affected people around the world.

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