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Review by dblameck (David) Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Walls Around Us

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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Yes we tend to surround ourselves into some hidden object because our world
is a very scary place.

POETRY INFORMATION:

• Written as per 7-6-7-6 syllabic scheme.


SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I am unsure about the need for walls.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of Spring Fairy and Tooth Fairy

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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A nice little ditty about fairies It brings a smile and we have to be on the look out for fairies.

POETRY INFORMATION:

There are five stanza each with four lines and a rhyming scheme on A B A A.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Those little sparkling things we see and think are dew drops and fairies.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Empty Nest  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)



Review of Empty Nest

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good straightforward depiction of what a mother might do when her some was gone. Thru most of the story it felt like be was missing but the end seems to direct that he has gone away to college.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Missing or away seems to be a question that should be answered.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

The layout of the story is well done. Please continue with this I realize the word constraints

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of A Broken Family in Ruins

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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Family strife, broken relationships leaves damaged lives. This poem hits at the heart of these problems.

POETRY INFORMATION:

16 lines written in 4 quatrains which a rhyming pattern of a.b.a.b.
There are 10 beats per line

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Follow the trail of pain and you will come to family struggle.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



Review of Why People Gain Weight

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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

All the reasons that people gain weight but no solution as to how to lose weight it.


SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Not eating is not exactly a possible solution. However moderating our diet is a good start.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Fading Stars  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)



Review of Fading Stars

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

It's New Years Eve and the old rock star has failed trying to reconnect with his family.
He promises the bartender that he will have a new start with new songs. It doesn't happen.


SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A story that has been heard many times before. This is well told.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Kelli  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of Kelli

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A mini short story about a young girl expressing her displeasure with her very first day at school.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I can think of no changes need for this story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



Review of Journal/Blog for Unnamed Story Project

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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A teenager blogging his activities. He is heavilly involved in RPG video games.
His parents do not always know what he is doing.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

He is starting to spend time firing a pistol. He is lying to his mother about this.
This is not good.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of The Lovebirds Cage

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

What seems to be a loving relationship later seems to be a trap where the poet is caged in and now regrets.


Five verses of four lines each with a rhyming scheme of A B A B.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I think your poem has accurately laid out the situation.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of TEN LITTLE WORDS  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Review of Ten Little Words

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A story that is played out over and over again. Often the patient is not so negative to the diagnose.
I think it would be better if the story ends with the ten little words. As it is written it does not give much power to the ten words.


SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Make the waiting time in the hospital more dramatic.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of My Neighbour s Yard

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A very short poem about nature.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Three line Haiku.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Confined by restrictions deals with nature.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of blue water  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of Blue Water

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The thrill of rushing deep water. it is enjoyable and comforting. There is a sense of lack
of control like a releasing of freedom.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Short stacco phrases make it seem like flowing water.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep the flow of words to mock the flow of running water.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of NATURE OF LOVE  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of Nature of Love

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Love is passion. Love is forever. Love conquers all.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Four four line verses.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Each verse ends with the word "beloved".

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Saturday Morning  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of Saturday Morning

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This setup for this story is tremendous. This guy is taking his life in his hands. Not only is he tasking his over-worked wife with making the dinner and transporting children to various games and lessons he is planning to go golfing.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Get a divorce lawyer. Perhaps some changes in their plans.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

It brought smiles to my face.
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Trust in One of Us

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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Walking alone can certainly be difficult. That is the theme of this essay. It offers the one that is loved but if that one fails it points to Jesus. The One who can always be trusted.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A well written piece.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of My Dream  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of My Dream

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The author has a group of important dreams but they are difficult to obtain often because they need the efforts of society.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Sixteen lines but not a sonnet.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I like your dreams.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of This One Kiss  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)



Review of This One Kiss

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A romantic interlude where one holds to another just wanting, just expecting, just needing that one thing, That one kiss.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Four poetic couplets.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A romantic embrace and perhaps a farewell kiss.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Depression  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Review of Depression

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good perception of the extremely serious disease of depression. What you can accomplish on one day is suddenly impossible the next. I have suffered for 60 years fighting each day to keep my head up and see my life being managed.


SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I appreciated the inclusion of scripture at the end of this poem.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of A MEMOIR  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of A Memoir

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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A memory which could have been a horror story because of mistaken identity.
That is why the place-cards at airports are more beneficial.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I think that this story is beneficial for all travellers.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of A new mother  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of A New Mother

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Realizing the possibilites that one's spouse might be a potentially good mother.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Free verse.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Review of Are You Threatening Me

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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A husband and wife are in the middle of a heated argument.

PLOT AND CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT:

Tom and Donna are both ready to fight and are even throwing things and making negative comments.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

It was interesting that even the cat is retreating.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (3.0)



Review of Skelton on a Pushbike

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Short free verse poem.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Haiku

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Query Letter

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I presume this is a sample letter to express the style of a business query.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

It seems straight forward and direct to me. Straight-forward but boring.

FINAL THOUGHTS:


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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of Her Eyes

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A deep poem that depicts the wellness and overall health of a loved one by looking into their eyes.
It is the change in health that is reflected in those eyes. I understand exactly because I have unfortunately had the experience.

POETRY INFORMATION:

While the entire poem is free verse and it has deep meaning.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

The depth that the eyes portray the mind can only begin to realize.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Rated: ASR | (4.0)



Review of User-Friendly

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work. I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I guess the message of this story is to treat your robots the way you want to be treated.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Simon does just that.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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