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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very elegant writing style and provides a lot of food for thought.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Poems  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've certainly felt my fair share of pain from love. Did you know it's possible to orgasm from crying? Human bodies are so strange.

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Review of Infinite Isekais  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a fun take on the isekai genre. It strikes me as a parody on how these things usually go.

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Review of Her Body  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I needed this. My husband has been obsessed with my hair lately, and there are other things I'd rather do with my time because I don't get much time to myself while taking care of our toddler. It's a struggle to floss and brush my teeth every day, and I've got to brush the kid's teeth and hair on top of that.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! I recommend using quotation marks to format your dialogue. Alternatively, you could use a colon before someone speaks, as seen in script format for plays.

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Review of Night Bird  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review of Know Yourself  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is beautiful! I was the student who carried scantrons and blue books at all times. I stayed on top of my reading and assignments so I wouldn't have to panic at the last minute. Also, I loved learning for the sake of learning. I was annoyed with the few professors who took attendance because that meant the lecture hall would be crowded and noisy. I was never afraid of tests, merely annoyed by them.

My middle school and high school gave out organizational notebooks every year, and I grew accustomed to using them. They gave us one for free my first year of university, but I had to buy it at the bookstore every year after that. These days, I get a 2-year planner at the dollar store as needed. These days, I mostly write down when my son poops to make sure he's not constipated and vaccine appointments.

There is also beauty in admitting that we don't know what tomorrow will bring and planning for flexibility. I plan on breastfeeding my son until he's at least 3 years old. I'd like to keep it up until he's 5 since our species evolved to breastfeed for 5 years, but I know that societal pressure might cause me to cave in.

I used to not be bothered by the lack of pockets in female clothing because I could keep wallet, keys, and phone in my purse, and I would never leave home without my purse. Now, my purse slips precariously off my shoulder when I am preventing my toddler from running into the street or otherwise restraining him from dangerous activities. I can use a jacket for pockets, but then I get too hot. I may need to switch to a backpack for the next few years, but the backpack is also a heat trap.

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Review of The In-between  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

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Review of Sample Writing  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

That was certainly an adventure. It felt like a dream. The part about the old man and innocent young girl felt too stereotypical for my taste.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review of A Life's Story  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Felgraven Castle  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Keep it up, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This makes a lot of sense. My dad was recently telling me about a new scientific finding about how we need 400 repetitions to form a new neural connection without play but merely 10 repetitions with play.

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Review of She  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an interesting personification poem. Personally, I don't drive, but I can relate with how I feel about my bicycles.

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Review of Ordinary  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was soothing to my soul. I'm going through some things.

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Review of Sad Happy Smiles  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

If you or someone you know needs therapy, one way to get it is to reach out to your school counselor. If they are not too busy, they can listen. If they are too busy, they can refer you to another resource.

As an adult, if you don't have enough money for therapy, you can contact your local social services offices. I've called a mental health crisis line. It's not JUST for people who are suicidal. You can talk to them about anything you are going through.

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Review of noite de natal  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

There's not much to go on yet, but this seems like a good start.

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Review of Triumph o'er joy  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of You are art.  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a delightful poem! It reminds me a little bit of this "Painted Colors" song my friend wrote:

https://www.reverbnation.com/mjlm/songs

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Review of Aflame  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a lovely premise. Keep it up, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review of A Cruel World  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. As they say, change is the one constant in life.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. I've had problems with my weight, but I can't call the mirror a liar when my doctors agree.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is progressing very smoothly. The characters have clear personalities and intentions.

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Review of False facade  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a sweet story and a great start. From the "many girls" mentioned in the description, it sounds like you have more to write. Keep going, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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